Player reached the Top

by Rick Scar

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Mystery GameLit LitRPG Magic Martial Arts Ruling Class Virtual Reality
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Two Thousand Forty-Four. The world of games changed long ago.

"Ascension" has become one of the most popular VRMMO games. It is a huge world divided into a hundred Floors, with each Floor a boundless location with its own countries, tribes, and millions of players.

The object of the game is to unlock all the gates and conquer the top.

Having joined the game, Will Thomson doesn't realize that he is all by himself. Then he accepts the first quest ...

Cursed Rat: level 46 ...

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Jazehiah
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Show, don't tell.

I couldn't get into this story

The first chapter was a bit of an info dump, but there were a few good parts, so I kept reading. The second chapter was another exposition dump that reinforced the idea that the main character would be a money-obsessed loser. The third chapter wasn't much better and has a bit of awkward dialogue about the VR game.

Three dull chapters of bland info and awkward dialoge? I'm sorry, but it's not for me.

Varkt
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Great start! Currently at Chapter 30

So far I’m really enjoying it.  It’s very different that other novels in this genre, but it’s still very good.  I like the story progresion.  It’s easy to follow and it’s very entertaining.  Barely any grammatical mistakes too.  Keep up the good work!  Love to see more!

Barret16
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I Liked it enough at Ch. 30 to pre-order it.

A small bit of info dump at the start, but realistically, the character is getting informed before jumping into things. which is the intelligent thing to do. Once things kick off its quite enjoyable.

I saw the author is putting this book onto Amazon, and i immediately went to buy it... unfortunately its a bit over a month away from release... darn it.

Domini
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To break it down.

Style 3.5

I like these types of stories, its my personal preference. Style is Naritive.

Grammer 3.5

There are few errors  that I spotted so far. You can totally get what the author is trying to say however every now and then you come across a sentence that makes no sense.

Story Score 3

It needs a lot more substance. There are only 4 chapters out so far but I like the genre and premise sounds good.

Character score 2

The characters including the main character have limited depth so far. The story speaks of few motivations but gives no inclination as to what motivated the MC to really be convinced that gaming would be a reasonably viable method for him to begin with considering from chapter 1 he knows next to nothing about gaming or the gaming industry. Second there is some backwards logic in character progression towards gaming.

Yes it makes sense for a character to know about things like botting/ToS expoits ect. However, the method of making money from games that it is made to sound like he wants to commit to is Video Blogging his time spent in game.

Most competitive gamers I would say view people who exploit disdainfully. This is especially true of whenever RL twitch streamers get caught exploiting. There are many negitive perceptions. I mean. Who wants to play with a person who they know is going to beat them via cheating? Most people play games as a form of entertainment, is it entertaining to lose to someone when you come to the realization that you never had chance to begin with?

Anyways. ^^ I may evaluate again after more chapters are released.

Have a g'day and thanks for reading my review.

 

kellmaster
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reasonable premise, similar to Moonlight Sculptor, guy joins online game to make money to support his sister.

however: quite noticable grammatical errors and odd speech patterns. most likely author is english as a second language
chapters are quite short and pacing seems very fast

NoDragons
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Light, Mediocre Story

Oh hey it's Legendary Moonlight Sculptor. Again.

 

From the first lines it's apparent that this story is going to be shameless in following LMS' script, and hey, maybe that's what you want. Maybe this story is for you. For me, the bland prose, the vast amounts of time wasted on minutia, the cardboard characters, all that adds up to a single conclusion; this story is less fun than just playing an MMO yourself.