Planetary Brawl

by halowenjo

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Warning This fiction contains:
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What good was victory when so much had been lost. A party of over a hundred, reduced to less than twenty, the last remaining members of the human race. There was a chance to go back, to start from the opening of Dos, but only one member of the party could go back.

And he was dead.

Dustin found himself waking up to a head filled with memories he did not remember, a life lived, and ended, without his consent.


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Welcome to Dos 001 - The Taste of Ash ago
Welcome to Dos 002 - Countdown to Insanity ago
Welcome to Dos 003 - Dread and Relief ago
Welcome to Dos 004 - Trail of Green ago
Welcome to Dos 005 - Welcome back Dusty ago
Welcome to Dos 006 - A sucker for sales ago
Welcome to Dos 06.5 - Ymma's Diary Entries 1 to 3 ago
Welcome to Dos 007 - A girl and her bike ago
Welcome to Dos 008 - The devil is in the details ago
Welcome to Dos 009 - City of the Dead ago
Welcome to Dos 010 - Secret Quest in Progress ago
Welcome to Dos 011 - Memory, or premonition? ago
Welcome to Dos 012 – Breaking the stalemate ago
Welcome to Dos 013 – The Antsing Queen ago
Welcome to Dos 014 – A poor reminder ago
Welcome to Dos 015 – Picky Eater ago
Welcome to Dos 016 – Exterminator ago
Welcome to Dos 017 – Power of the Rich ago
Welcome to Dos 018 – Intelligence Gathering ago
Welcome to Dos 019 – Windy Fields ago
Welcome to Dos 020 – Sting Operation ago
Welcome to Dos 021 – Family Meeting ago
Welcome to Dos 021.5 – Ymma’s Diary: 4-6 ago
Welcome to Dos 022 – Entering the Big Stage ago
Welcome to Dos 023 – The gears of change ago
Welcome to Dos 024 – Killen them softly ago
Welcome to Dos 025 - A leaders folly ago
Welcome to Dos 026 - Tumultuous Goodbyes ago
Welcome to Dos 027 - Can't Catch Me ago
Chapter Edits - Change Log ago
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Jester13
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Extremely worth a read!

So far (as of chapter 26) I have loved this story and am so excited to read more as the author continues to write. 

As for the nitty gritty- the concept is similar to a few other recent new stories, in that a group of humans finally beat the "final boss" *for this story, it seems likely that the "final boss" isn't quite the final boss, but we'll see* but all of them die, except for one who gets sent back in time to just before the events that start the whole process of getting to that boss. He then tries his best to better prepare humanity for the upcoming events. 

This concept is not new, but there are a few plot points that make this particular story very much worth a look at.

There are a few grammar things (wrong words, weird sentence breaks and what not) but overall it's well written.

starfyre7
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System apocalypse story with a small twist

This is a generally enjoyable story, a system apocalypse story where the apocalypse gets introduced in stages. However, the grammar is somewhat lacking, regularly using the plural form("-es") instead of possession "'s" and mixing up words like "there" and "their". These do detract somewhat from the reading experience, but are not big enough deterrents to make me stop reading. If this story were to get an editor to address these issues, it could easily compete for being one of the top stories currently being serialized on RoyalRoad.  

Lord farquad
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It's good but some jarring mistakes

Just so everyone knows this is my first review

 

 

First off let me start this by saying it's really really good. Great now that that's out of the way let me tell you were it goes wrong. First the biggest problem with this story is it's inconsistency. As an example the main character mentions that his friend was murdered in the past but then one chapter later he says he has no idea what happened to his freind. This is just one of them there are like 3 or 4 more. 

The grammars kinda off as well with a few aquardly worded sentences and misspelled words. But overall it's readable.

The style and uniqueness is on point and better than most of the same genre. But his opness is also pretty blatant although he hasn't bloomed into roflstomp territory this looks like where it's heading.

dan kirkby
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This series is well written and well executed, but it runs into the same problem that so many other LitRpgs do, Magic = numbers, and this trap can be deadly, it sucks the fantasy out of it, reducing it to a status screen and a skill window, some series escape this trap, Randidly Ghosthound and Arcane Emporer. I hope you can too.

EleMentalPhoenix
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At least thats what I have here with 3 Chapters out  ^^

I live the setting and the story seems to be good enough to stand on its own. 

I'll recommend reading and I will continue to support. ^^

So: Keep up the work, Author. :D

Stephen Lewis
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Enjoyable read so far not bad setting 

Worth a try to see if you will like it

duveng1
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A dark opening that makes you want more

I'm not usually one for the whole "life is a video game" genre as the plot never feels like it has any substance to keep me coming back. The beginning of Planetary Brawl really forces you to feel the gravity of the situation. I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes, and I'm really hoping it keeps it's dark and desperate theme that initially drew me in.

namesarehard
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This is slowly turning into one of my favorite system stories. The main character is interesting and, rather than the confusion and aimlessness of most system stories,  their is a clear goal from the begginning! 

CakeOrrDeath
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Well Tred Concept, Adeptly Crafted

The story is far from unique. Apocalyptic system driven event ends in disaster and our hero after facing defeat travells back in time to try again and save humanity. I must have read dozens of stories with this concept and dropped 90% shortly after because they were terrible. This one isn’t.

 

The writting is solid and easy to read. Dialogue feels natural and realistic. The pacing is good and the characters likeable. Strongly anticipating the love interest and people to help him on his quest entering the frey. The side characters introduced thus far are mixed in quality. Bizarrely the ones closest to the mc, his best friend, step sister and mother seem the least engaging and complex. Whilst the intrepid reporter, snooty butler and government agent are all facinating and well fleshed out, despite their likely lesser roles. 

 

This story, whilst familiar, is well worth your time.

Pabloypablo
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Very good plot line.  Hangs together quite nicely.