Vastmire and the Planet Longan

Vastmire and the Planet Longan

by Viridian

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  • Profanity

Seasons have passed, and the countries around the Tamarind Sea have enjoyed the longest stretch of peace they've ever experienced. If you ask anyone, they'll say this was due to the work of Prince Mint, but they won't know the details. Instead, they'll spread tired rumors, peddling lies as if they were truths, immortalizing Mint as something he's not, someone he knows he never was.

The knowledge eats away at him.

Unable to take it anymore, he's begun writing a journal with the full intent to discuss everything that happened to him all those seasons ago, dispelling his old feelings of being an imposter in his own body. But will people still think he was a hero after reading it? Or will it be dismissed as the work of a liar, a senile old man lost in his own past?

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motthi
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This story is lovely. Though it's not my cup of tea, I can recognize that it can become something great. I can tell a lot of love and planning went into this story. I just know this would be one of those books with a lovely map of the world. 

 

I just wish I could love it as much as it deserves. Though I can't, I know that someone else can and I hope this review gets this story in front of such people! It deserves it.

Kraafty
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I'm intrigued. Good start, good grammar, intriguing setup. Looks like this won't start out with an OP MC. He seems weak but might have a good head on him. Why the foody names though, little confused about that. 

 

Will keep reading if you go off of hiatus.