New to Magic

by Ron Arnold

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   A science-fantasy story about a nine-year-old girl who doesn't quite fit in.  She's too slow, too smart and too shy.  She dreams of magic that she doesn't know exist.  One day her life changes and she becomes an OP character.  The story follows the young girl through her childhood until shs's a young adult.  

  P.S   I'm not a great writer and I make lots of mistakes.  But I love to make up stories and want to share some.  Please forgive any mistake and any advice is welcome.  Right now I have 400,000 words written but not edited.  Any help with editing will be welcome.  Most of all enjoy or find another story you will.  Thank you.   There is some gore and Traumatising content but not much of either

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter one In Space a Future Brews ago
Chapter two A Fight with Spiders for Freedom. ago
Chapter Three Savours and Friends from Space ago
Chapter Four A New Start and Something New ago
Chapter Five Questions and Unexpected Answers ago
Chapter Six Sky’s Curious Nature Shows Through and A Reason She Needs Schooling ago
Chapter Seven Space and its Battles ago
Chapter Eight The Magic of the New Crew (Part one) Some of Sky's past ago
Chapter Eight The Magic of the New Crew (Part Two) Impossible Sky ago
Chapter Eight The Magic of the New Crew (Part Three) Sky, you're too much ago
Chapter Nine Sky Joins a Mission ago
Chapter Ten First Flight to a New Beginning ago
Chapter Eleven Fred and Joe’s Friendship ago
Chapter Twelve Sky learns Magic and Martial Arts ago
Chapter Thirteen What Am I? (Part one) The Story Begins ago
Chapter Thirteen What Am I? (Part Two) ago
Chapter Thirteen What Am I? (Part Three) With An Emergency Pause ago
Chapter Thirteen What Am I? (Part Four) How We Got Here ago
Chapter Fourteen New Crew In Coming ago
Volume Two Chapter One New Crew ago
Chapter Two Enter the Aliens ago
Chapter Three The New Crew Trying Out The Enhanced Training Room ago
Chapter Four The mission Briefing and a Bold Solution ago
Chapter Five Hanging Out ago
Chapter Six Trying to Build Something Different ago
Chapter Seven Mission Problems ago
Chapter Eight (part one) Getting Ready to Building a Ship ago
Chapter Eight (part two) Getting Ready to Building a Ship. Jane a Spy?? ago
Chapter Nine Building a Spaceship in Three Days ago
Chapter Ten Prepping For Battle ago
Chapter Eleven Taking a Break and a Little Bonding ago
Chapter Twelve Knowing One Place and Weakness ago
Chapter Thirteen Sky Falls Apart ago
Chapter Fourteen Fred Joins the Fight ago
Chapter Fifteen The New Ship ago
Chapter Sixteen A Supper Before the Storm ago
Chapter Seventeen Sky's Gift to Her New Family ago
Chapter Seventeen Part Two Prepping for War and Reason to Fight ago
Chapter Eighteen Testing the Limits ago
Chapter Nineteen Combating The Rogue Mages and Their Chaos Magic ago
Chapter Twenty ago
Chapter twenty one The Three Skys are Everywhere ago
Chapter Twenty-Two The Tranis Part One ago
Chapter Twenty-Three The Tranis Part Two ago
Chapter twenty-four The End of One and a Beginning of Another ago
Chapter twenty-five ago
Chapter Twenty-six The Battle with Love and Hate ago
Chapter Twenty-seven The Final Battle ago

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fanvaron
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I like the story in general, I'm really interested to find out how this is going to play out and if there is a greater story arc in the future. 
I'm honestly not sure if the story will actually go anywhere or if it will just taper of cause the MC is too op. The plan right now was Magic academy, but the fact that she is already revolutionizing magic makes this story progression rather unlikely, so its wait and see for now.

Now the Grammar and writing skills... well how do I say it, it is definitely not so bad that it greatly impacts the reading experience, but its not good by any stretch of the imagination.
There are basically no typos but there is frequently a missing or wrong word, but the worst is the format.
The ", denoting spoken words are totally unreliable, they are placed about haphazardly and basically never come in pairs, only ever opening or closing the dialog.

The spacing is equally as bad, there are huge chunks of text and no space between scenes or actions, both in the text and in the story.
One sentence describes some inner monologue and then without any real indication the next sentence describes the real world again, its really jarring and together with the unreliable " makes for quite some effort to clue together the current situation. This is especially bad with the story her dad is telling, you basically can't differentiate between what the character is describing of the past and what the Author is describing of the present (both in third person)

With all that said, I still think the story is good and worth reading, I only hope that the author has some actual plans for the story going forward and it won't just suddenly end as it happens with so many stories having a strong MC

Duckfero
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This story definitely deserve more than the current average rating. It's pretty good, well written and original.

It's about a 9 years old girl who lived with her parents on a certain planet with a lot of gravity. Then some allien arrive and she goes back with them with her parents. She is using magic casually but doesn't know that what she does is magic, so she thinks that it doesn't exist (even though she is the strongest in the universe).

MC is OP (magically, physically and learning speed) but I like it that way. She still has a few flaw especially her age (9 years old) which make her a bit immature, dense and ignorant.

However, what make me drop this novel is the pace. It's way too slow. I have read for at least 6-7 hours but not much happened. The author keep saying the same things again and again. The story became a bit of a slice of life where everything is detailed, like what she eats, when she goes to the shower, when she trains, etc.

Overall, it's not bad if you want an original story with OP female MC from the start and with a very slow pace.