(Dropped) Crown of the martyr and martyr of the Crown.

If you want people to  actually open the first chapter and read your story, you need to have something better than an edgy picture and some generic worthless quote that doesn't say anything about what and how the story is.

In a website as saturated at this one, no one will take the chance to read a story to figure out what the hell it's about, when other stories spell it out in the description.

As for the story itself, its fine. 

 Author uses great foreshadowing and hides just enough information to keep the reader interested (proper use of "show, don't tell"). 

Unfortunately, there are some inconsistencies that don't sit too well with me and forced what I thought a solid 4 star to a 3.

There are books that make you love reading, books that you devour voraciously and at rapid pace.

This is one of those books, and it's excellent. Granted, there are a decent amount of spelling/grammar errors, but they don't deter me one bit.

The story itself is interesting, and the backstory of the main character is well-developed & shrouded in mystery that is slowly revealed over time.

Like some other reviews said, I agree that if you liked Forgotten Conqueror, you will probably like this too (even though they're very different books).

👍👍

Im lazy af, so just gonna say: forgotten conqueror 2.0.

(it isnt a copy, its its own thin)

Amazing world-building.

MC is very, very OP. Which tends to detract from the story in my opinion. But by using his knowledge to train/develop his team/minions/sidekicks the story manages to, mostly, avoid the trap of 'overpowered MC smashes everything in his path'.

Worth reading for sure just for the world-building alone.

Hoping our MC is challenged for real soon, or else it'll become too easy ya know.

Thanks for the story sarvashaktimaan!

very nice, i greatly enjoyed it and its unique concept both caught my attention and held it, said concept is hinted at, revealed abit, but not fully, leaving me desperate to finished the puzzle (in a good way). story is a very good example of  'show don't tell' !

only complaints are that the system is a bit weird, but considering what he is it makes sense and is fine, and that mispelled words and missing letters occur around everyother chapter.

9.5/10 would recommend

I didn't have any expectations when I first started reading this, but damn if I didn't say that the story got me good.

tldr;

Came for the cliché.

Stayed for the plot.

I really liked the style as well as the storyline. The plot on its own is already quite entertaining. Add to that the author's style and it's enough to warrant a review and a favorite.

The grammar could be better but the errors are almost negligent if you're not too sensitive towards grammatical mistakes.

The characters are very developed in a sense that each one of them has a reason for the things that they do. I might even say that the history of the characters (lore) drives the story forward.

Let’s get this out of the way. This is a op Mc reincarnation story. Yes, the Mc will always be the strongest person in the room. Uncharacteristically 

The characters are all interesting and some tend to be more interesting then Irwyn at times. Also, Irwyn does feel like he is ancient, unlike other MCs that are incredibly old yet still act like teenagers at some point. 

As of chapter 34 (2-29) there isn’t a super clear goal as to what’s intended for the future, however the pace of things so far is in a nice jog -not too fast and not too slow- which makes reading this a pleasure.

Best of all I think, is that the quality is almost at the point that I could easily see being sold on Kindle.

 Edit: I just saw IHATEEVERYTHING’s “lazy” review and completely agree in his amazing review this story is Forgotten Conquerer 2: Electric Boogaloo. It’s not a copy of FC but they do share similarities in their overall tone. If you liked Forgotten Conquerer even a little, then you should check this story out

So, this could be a subpar Andur story. You have an OP MC with an OP potential romantic interest and it's an isekai story. 

It's slightly different though because it's far more flawed. There are elements of xianxia in this and sadly the writing style and tropes of that genre bleed over. To intricately describe one's plans to a rival while they're alive is retarded. It doesn't matter if you're the son of the creator, it's stupid. 

The style is bad, the grammar needs work. I'm interested in the story and in the characters. 

To the author: After you've finished book 1 rewrite this. Obviously, we're alpha readers but we're not enough. Either hire a decent editor or, if you can't afford one, use some editing software.

With regret I must change my initial assessment of this story. The writing itself is fine, there aren't too many errors that I have noticed. The concept of the story is also very interesting. The issue is, whatever the  main character motivations are, it's ambiguous at best.  He seems to always have a plan, to always come out ahead and without any effort that the reader can discern. All the planning happens in a void and the readers are left with the results. I do not suggest to be given information in minutiae ad nauseum, however, small details that show ingenuity are elements that make a story, plans and results more believable.

Challenges are removed from the MC because he seems to get himself in situations that are out of his depth, but for which he always come through. Because he was given an escape button, and though it does have a draw back, it is wholly not significant. 

I had initially given a review very early and that error was all mine. I do not mean to discourage the author or to suggest his writing is bad. Creating anything is difficult. However, a story is only interesting to read long term if one can be invested in the characters, their struggles , their failures and their successes. As the story is now, I'm not invested and thus this review.