Golden Fox with System

by Lucas Cristian

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Theo volts, um brasileiro de 18 anos, morreu a caminho de casa atingido por um raio. Ao acordar, ele descobre que não era mais humano, mas uma raposa vermelha. Além disso, ele também descobriu que era dotado de um sistema milagroso.

Derrotando monstros e animais frenéticos, Theo subiu em seu cultivo, se transformou em uma raposa dourada e conquistou uma vila Goblin. 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Ranking Information ago
Chapter 1: New life. ago
Chapter 2: Skills ago
Chapter 3: Buying a Pill. ago
Chapter 4: Helping the Red Fox. ago
Chapter 5: Impurities ago
Chapter 6: Creation of the Magic Core. ago
Chapter 7: Beginner Pack ago
Chapter 8: Cultivation Technique ago
Chapter 9: Compressed stone of Mana. ago
Chapter 10: Advancing to 6th Layer of the Apprentice Kingdom. ago
Chapter 11: Fighting against Wolves. ago
Chapter 12: Advancing to the Student Kingdom. ago
Chapter 13: Lord Goblin. ago
Chapter 14: Finding a Village ago
Chapter 15: Mental Energy ago
Chapter 16: Leaving the Ang Village. ago
Chapter 17: Dragon ago
Chapter 18: Dragon's Egg ago
Chapter 19: Cultivation Duo? ago
Chapter 20: Lineage ago
Chapter 21: Golden Flames. ago
Chapter 22: Elementary Pills. ago
Chapter 23: Yuki Lineage ago
Chapter 24: Training with Yuki. ago
Chapter 25: 10th Tier of the Student Kingdom ago
Chapter 26: Mei Zong ago
Chapter 27: Island of the Falling Star ago
Chapter 28: Fighting Black Wolves: Part 1 ago
Chapter 29: Fighting Black Wolves: Part 2 ago
Chapter 30: Demi Humana Shina. ago
Chapter 31: Moving to Vila. ago
Chapter 32 ago
Chapter 33: New technique. ago
Chapter 34: forge ago
Chapter 35 ago
Chapter 36 ago
Chapter 37 ago
Chapter 38 ago
Chapter 39: Shina vs Goblins ago
Chapter 40: Human form ago
Chapter 41: Feelings of Yuki ago
Chapter 42 ago
Chapter 43 ago
Chapter 44 ago
Chapter 45 ago
Chapter 46: Battle field. ago
Chapter 47 ago
Chapter 48 ago
Chapter 49 ago
Chapter 50 ago
Chapter 51: M-My daughter and Theo ?? ago
Chapter 52: Going to sleep with Yuki ago
Chapter 53: [Status] ago
Chapter 54: Dark Wolf ago
Chapter 55: Wolf Zaira ago
Chapter 56: Helping the Crimson Wolf, Zaika. ago
Chapter 57: A...A lineage? !! Seriously? ago
Chapter 58: Services? What kind of Services? ago
Chapter 59: A Mission Has Appeared ago
Chapter 60: White Lion King's Tomb Part 1 ago
Chapter 61: White Lion Kin's Tomb Part 2 ago
Chapter 62: White Lion Kin's Tomb Part 3 ago
Chapter 63: White Lion Kin's Tomb Part 4 ago
Chapter 64 White Lion King's Totem ago
Chapter 65: Secret Room. ago
Chapter 66: Level 5 Armor ago
Chapter 67: New Shina and Yuki cultivation Techniques. ago
Chapter 68: <Nine-Tailed Fox Divine Practice> ago
Chapter 69: Obtained 81,150,451 System Points. ago
Chapter 70: 6th Layer of the Higher Student Kingdom. ago
Chapter 71: My Hero! ago
Chapter 72: Are you… the Golden Fox? ago
Chapter 73: Young Master of the Ming Family ago
Chapter 74: Death of Young Master Alex. ago
Chapter 75: Panic Interview! ago
Chapter 76: Precious Stones Sisters. ago
Chapter 77: Entering Ang Village ago
Chapter 78: Barbecue at Jka’s House Part 1 ago
Chapter 79: Barbecue at Jka's House Part 2 ago
Chapter 80: Auction Part 1 ago
Chapter 81: Auction Part 2 ago
Chapter 82: 2nd Layer of the Apprentice Wizard Kingdom ago
Chapter 83: You Are Zing Lin Ming! ago
Chapter 84: Daddy, Yui is cheering for you! ago
Chapter 85: Teleport Scroll ago
Chapter 86: Leaving for Ravena City. ago
Chapter 87: Used as Bait? ago
Chapter 88: This Time, I Will Cheer for You! ago
Chapter 89: Little Yui’s Transformation ago
Chapter 90: End of the Fight Against the Green Birds. ago
Chapter 91: Entering Ravena City. ago
Chapter 92: Seafood of the Gods ago
Chapter 93: Humiliated. ago
Chapter 94: Are You the Prince of This Book? ago
Chapter 95: I Don’t Care About Being Second! ago
Chapter 96: Theo, you, what do you think about Shina? ago
Chapter 97: Newborn Soul Five Years Old; Changed to Six Years Old ago
Chapter 98: Buying Pills ago
Chapter 99: Consuming Pills ago
Chapter 100: I’m Dad’s adopted daughter, and I love him more than anything in the world! ago
Chapter 101: Is Daddy Naughty? ago
Chapter 102: Going to an Orc Village ago
Chapter 103: Star Magic Formation ago
Chapter 104: Theo Volts Vs Goblins and Orcs Part 1 ago
Chapter 105: Theo Volts Vs Goblins and Orcs Part 2 ago
Chapter 106: Theo Volts Vs Goblins and Orcs End ago
Chapter 107: Back to the Orphanage ago
Chapter 108: Shina and Zaira Lineages ago
Chapter 109: Wanting to Open a Gun Shop ago
Chapter 110: Going to Buy a Store. ago
Chapter 111: Buying a Store ago
Chapter 112: Husband, this level of power and speed… ago
Chapter 113: Don’t worry! I’ll take care of it, okay? ago
Chapter 114: Advancing to the Apprentice Wizard Kingdom ago
Chapter 115: Advance of Yuki and Yui ago
Chapter 116: Opening the Weapon Shop ago
Chapter 117: Selling Weapons Part 1 ago
Chapter 118: Selling Weapons Part 2 ago
Chapter 119: Beautiful Name! Lovely! ago
Chapter 120: Sparring Part 1 ago
Chapter 121: Sparring Part 2 ago
Chapter 122: Sparring Part 3 ago
Chapter 123: Little Girl Bomb ago
Chapter 124: Self-Destruction ago
Chapter 125: Soul-Control Leech ago
Chapter 126: My Name Is Number 141 ago
Chapter 127: Even if Someone Wants to Hurt You… ago
Chapter 128: Don’t worry! He won’t be alive much longer. ago
Chapter 129: I love you so much, Theo…! ago
Chapter 130: Panic Interview 2 - Part 1 ago
Chapter 131: Panic Interview 2 - Part 2 ago
Chapter 132: Finally Someone Left ago
Chapter 133: Mauro Kenedy ago
Chapter 134: Talisman ago
Chapter 135: Self-Help ago
Chapter 136: Eight Years Old ago
Chapter 137: Zaika’s Human Form ago
Chapter 138: <Primordial Black Thunder Vibration> ago
Chapter 139: Wow! This place is so mystical! ago
Chapter 140: The Town Lord’s Mansion ago
Chapter 141: 2nd Layer of the Apprentice Wizard Kingdom ago
Chapter 142: You didn’t just come to chat, did you mean to tell me something? ago
Chapter 143: Forging a total of 127 weapons ago
Chapter 144: <Illusion of the Nine Heavens> has reached Level 6 ago
Chapter 145: I want to go, too! ago
Chapter 146: Royal Lineage ago
Chapter 147: Is this some kind of new prank? ago
Chapter 148: Heavenly Tribulation ago
Chapter 149: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 1 ago
Chapter 150: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 2 ago
Chapter 151: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 3 ago
Chapter 152: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 4 ago
Chapter 153: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 5 ago
Chapter 154: Going Through the Heavenly Tribulation Part 6 ago
Chapter 155: Arriving at the Wizard Kingdom ago
Chapter 156: Pillars of Energy ago
Chapter 157: Royal Lineage Level 6 ago
Chapter 158: May I Join You? ago
Chapter 159: You could say that we’re very close to each other ago
Chapter 160: It was a pleasure doing business with you ago
Chapter 161: Let’s See If I Can’t Fix Your Mouth (R-18) ago
Chapter 162: Their First Kiss ago
Chapter 163: The Human King ago
Chapter 164: An Unforgettable Day Part 1 (R-18) ago
Chapter 165: An Unforgettable Day Part 2 End (R-18) ago
Chapter 166: Shina, you’re mean! ago
Chapter 167: Expansion of the Dimensional Room ago
Chapter 168: Buying Magic Cores Over the Internet ago
Chapter 169: Desires Part 1 (R-18) ago
Chapter 170: Desires Part 2 (R-18) ago
Chapter 171: Desires Part 3 End (R-18) ago
Chapter 172: What Are You Doing This Weekend? ago
Chapter 173: In the Kenedy Clan ago
Chapter 174: Opening the Safe ago
Chapter 175: Come Out! The Great Me Wants to Ask You Some Questions! ago
Chapter 176: Breaking into the Enemy Base Part 1 ago
Chapter 177: Breaking into the Enemy Base Part 2 ago
Chapter 178: Breaking into the Enemy Base Part 3 ago
Chapter 179: Theo, where, where is my mother? ago
Chapter 180: Forest Insects ago
Chapter 181: Please Stand! ago
Chapter 182: Don’t Worry, Nya, they are at an Awkward Age ago
Chapter 183: Wind Affinity ago
Chapter 184: Is it Better than Chocolate? ago
Chapter 185: Totem Awakening ago
Chapter 186: The Brilliant Klin ago
Chapter 187: If Anyone Should be Thankful, it’s Me! ago
Chapter 188: Really? Really really? ago
Chapter 189: I’m Going to Have Bitter Coffee from Now On, so Let’s Kiss? ago
Chapter 190: Better Days ago
Chapter 191: Black Gold Rank ago
Chapter 192: Metal Affinity ago
Chapter 193: Generating System Points ago
Chapter 194: Far from It! It’s Handsome and Manly! ago
Chapter 195: Thereza ago
Chapter 196: What’s it like? Did you like it? ago
Chapter 197: Panic Interview Danisan Part 1 ago
Chapter 198: Panic Interview Danisan Part 2 ago
Chapter 199: An Abominable Family Part 1 ago
Chapter 200: An Abominable Family Part 2 ago
Chapter 201: Panic Interview Mauricio Kenedy Part 1 ago
Chapter 202: Panic Interview Mauricio Kenedy Part 2 ago
Chapter 203: Was the Kenedy Clan Destroyed? ago
Chapter 204: A School? What Do You Mean? I’m Confused ago
Chapter 205: Arrival of Thereza’s Mother ago
Chapter 206: What a pure lineage! ago
Chapter 207: False Spiritualist? ago
Chapter 208: Shall we train together? ago
Chapter 209: Little Yui versus Lilith. ago
Chapter 210: Someone stole Shina. ago
Chapter 211: Going out on a date with Ariana - Part 1 ago
Chapter 212: Going out on a date with Ariana - Part 2 ago
Chapter 213: Going out on a date with Ariana - Part 3 ago
Chapter 214: Going out on a date with Ariana - Part 4 ago
Chapter 215: Going Out on a Date with Ariana - Part 5 ago
Chapter 216: Our feelings are mutual. ago
Spoilers ago
Chapter 217: She's beautiful and cute, isn't she?! ago
Chapter 218: Chasing Jordan Wiz. ago
Chapter 219: Banquet Part 1 ago
Chapter 220: Banquet Part 2. ago
Chapter 221: Jordan Wiz arrives in Ravenna City. ago
Chapter 222: After totally devouring Jordan Wiz ago
Chapter 223: There any buns in the oven yet? ago
Chapter 224: Arriving in the City Volts. ago
Chapter 225: Kissing queue. ago
Chapter 226: Meat pie. ago
Chapter 227: What exactly is this pie made of? ago
Chapter 228: It is not fair. Daddy, bully! ago
Chapter 229: Nightmare. ago
Chapter 230: The most beautiful, just like her mother. ago
Chapter 231: It was better than apple pie. ago
Chapter 232: Ahh, shut up, shut up, shut up, if not, you drive me crazy!! ago
Chapter 233: Cleaning up waste. ago
Chapter 234: Zaira's Affliction - Part 1 ago
Chapter 235: Zaira's Affliction - Part 2 ago
Chapter 236: Children versus Soldiers – Part 1 ago
Chapter 237: Children versus Soldiers - Part 2 ago
Chapter 238: Children versus Soldiers - Part 3 ago
Chapter 239: My little girl was amazing! ago
Chapter 240: Royal Lineage Reaches Level 8. ago
Chapter 241: The Spring of Yuki Has Arrived. ago
Chapter 242: The seducer Yuki. ago
Chapter 243: You look beautiful so horny - R18 ago
Chapter 244: Did You Have a Vision? ago
Chapter 245: Is Ang village in danger? ago
Chapter 246: It would be a waste just to kill them. ago
Chapter 247: Fighting red dragons - Part 1. ago
Chapter 248: Fighting red dragons - Part 2. ago
Chapter 249: 6th Layer of the Wizard Kingdom. ago
Chapter 250: Buying a level 6 artifact. ago
Chapter 251: What exactly is going on? ago
Chapter 252: Blood contract. ago
Chapter 253: This is incredible! ago
Chapter 254: Red Dragon Clan. ago
Chapter 255: Reward of 1 million gold coins. ago
Chapter 256: Forming a contract with the female red dragon part 1. ago
Chapter 257: Forming a contract with the female red dragon part 2. ago
Chapter 258: Forming a contract with the female red dragon part 3. ago
Chapter 259: Forming a contract with the female red dragon part 4. ago
Chapter 260: Shina's Birthday - Part 1. ago
Chapter 261: Shina's Birthday - Part 2. ago
Chapter 262: Hunting Insects - Part 1 ago
Chapter 263: Hunting Insects - Part 2. ago
Chapter 264: Hunting Insects - Part 3. ago
Chapter 265: Hunting Insects - Part 4. ago
Chapter 266: I am... ago
Chapter 267: What right do you have to judge us? ago
Chapter 268: Baby, I'm sorry... Mommy, she wasn't strong enough to protect you! ago
Chapter 269: The fun things are just beginning. ago
Chapter 270: Farewell Part 1. ago
Chapter 271: Farewell, Part 2. ago
Chapter 272: Who is this person? ago
Chapter 273: Mizuki. ago
Chapter 274: Grandma!! ago
Chapter 275: Illusions. ago
Chapter 276: General Miller ago
Chapter 277: Group of Theo versus General Miller and his soldiers - Part 1 ago
Chapter 278: Theo’s group versus General Miller and his soldiers - Part 2 ago
Chapter 279: Theo's group versus General Miller and his soldiers - Part 3 ago
Chapter 280: Theo's group versus General Miller And his soldiers - Part 4 ago
Chapter 281: Theo Versus General Miller? ago
Chapter 282: POV Miranda. ago
Chapter 283: Be my girlfriend! ago
Chapter 284: Entering the Spiritual Kingdom. ago
Chapter 285: Did Zaika like bitter coffee too? ago
Chapter 286: Do you want to do this again? ago
Chapter 287: 4th Layer of the Superior Wizard Kingdom. ago
Chapter 288: Isis. ago
Chapter 289: 6th Layer of Superior Wizard Kingdom. ago
Chapter 290: Let's destroy the entire Red Dragon Clan!! ago
Chapter 291: Pills [Blood Essence Nutrition] ago
Chapter 292: Foolish fox. I will not harm you. ago
Chapter 293: Lineage of Ariana. ago
Chapter 294: Elemental Emperor. ago
Chapter 295: 12th Wizard Superior Layer ago
Chapter 296: Mizuki is back. ago
Chapter 297: Am I yummy? ago
Chapter 298: Using <Devour> on a corpse in the Spiritual Realm. ago
Chapter 299: [Immortal Pill] ago
Chapter 300: Shina, you are very cute, embarrassed. ago
Chapter 301: Ariana's first time - (R-18). ago
Chapter 302: Shiatsu Spiritual Massage. ago
Chapter 303: Bebel, we've made progress! ago
Chapter 304: Heavenly Tribulation. ago
Chapter 305: Going through the Celestial Tribulation - Part 1. ago
Chapter 306: Going through the Celestial Tribulation – Part 2. ago
Chapter 307: Going through the Celestial Tribulation – Part 3. ago
Chapter 308: Going through the Celestial Tribulation - Part 4. ago
Chapter 309: Going through the Celestial Tribulation - Part 5. ago
Chapter 310: Going through the Celestial Tribulation - Part 6. ago
Chapter 311: Going through the Celestial Tribulation - End. ago
Chapter 312: 1st layer of the Spiritual Realm. ago
Chapter 313: Kuro, Kin, and Roiyaruse. ago
Chapter 314: Spiritual Wind Coffin. ago
Chapter 315: Fighting some human cultivators – Part 1. ago
Chapter 316: Death of Elder Kainu Amorim. ago
Chapter 317: Do you want help? ago
Chapter 318: Have we met before? ago
Chapter 319: Status of girls. ago
Chapter 320: Am I not attractive? ago
Chapter 321: Shina's first time - (R18) ago
Chapter 322: Who are these two mysterious women? ago
Chapter 323: Rasu and Feni. ago
Chapter 324: Inhabitants of Hell ago
Chapter 325: Dog from Hell. ago
Chapter 326: Acting mysteriously with me? ago
Chapter 327: Blue Oni Aomi. ago
Chapter 328: Other Red Onis appeared. ago
Chapter 329: Let me be your subordinate and follow you! ago
Chapter 330: New hellish beings appear. ago
Chapter 331: Isis recovered her energy. ago
Chapter 332: Arriving at the Naga Empire. ago
Chapter 333: Don’t you love him? ago
Capítulo 334: Confusion at the clothing store? ago
Chapter 335: Miranda sends someone to capture Little Yui and Yuki. ago
Chapter 336: Schutz Restaurant. ago
Chapter 337: Eat. ago
Chapter 338: Forcing eating. ago
Chapter 339: Yes, I am! ago
Chapter 340: Klin and Jka in danger. ago
Chapter 341: Falling into the trap. ago
Chapter 342: Is it going to work out the way they want it to? ago
Chapter 343: Your whole family is a stinky bitch! ago
Chapter 344: Arranged marriage. ago
Chapter 345: Guests who are, always welcome. ago
Chapter 346: A maiden in love? ago
Chapter 347: Finding love... ago
Chapter 348: but they are all men! ago
Chapter 349: In the village of Mizuki. ago
Chapter 350: You have been a very bad boy~ ago
Chapter 351: Premonition - Part 1. ago
Chapter 352: Premonition - Part 2. ago
Chapter 353: Proposal. ago
Chapter 354: Yui knows daddy can do it! ago
Chapter 355: Elementary Pills. ago
Chapter 356: Five pills at the same time. ago
Chapter 357: State of Illumination. ago
Chapter 358: You have successfully reached level 1. ago
Chapter 359: Soul Crystal. ago
Chapter 360: Small realm. ago
Chapter 361: Going to the Red Dragon Clan again. ago
Chapter 362: Illusions of the Nine Heavens have advanced to Level 10! ago
Chapter 363: Interview with Panic - Part 1. ago
Chapter 364: Interview with Panic - Part 2. ago
Chapter 365: Interview with Panic - Part 3. ago
Chapter 366: Interview with Panic - Part 4. ago
Chapter 367: Interview with Panic - Part 5. ago
Chapter 368: Interview with Panic (End). ago
Chapter 369: Let’s see who is planning against whom. ago
Chapter 370: A great pervert. ago
Chapter 371: Shut up, you insects! ago
Chapter 372: Who is this being? ago
Chapter 373: New mission. ago
Chapter 374: Zast appeared. ago
Chapter 375: Heavenly Fire Affinity Level 1; changed to Level 2. ago
Chapter 376: Daddy, you're the best! ago
Chapter 377: Manuela Smith. ago
Chapter 378: Grandpa... Someone tried to take my innocence today... ago
Chapter 379: 'Kill him! ago
Chapter 380: The assessment will begin. ago
Chapter 381: Beginning of tests. ago
Chapter 382: The three screams. ago
Chapter 383: This group of the Silver Dragon Clan is insane! ago
Chapter 384: Seeking death. ago
Chapter 385: End of tests. ago
Chapter 386: A futile attempt. ago
Chapter 387: I will not run away, I never go back on my word. ago
Chapter 388: Massage. ago
Chapter 389: I want to have your child! (R-18) ago
Chapter 390: Second day of the tournament evaluation. ago
Chapter 391: Kneel down! ago
Chapter 392: Lots of information. ago
Chapter 393: Technique: <Art of Spiritual Path Inscription> reached the 4th Stage. ago
Chapter 394: Villain! You only know how to provoke me! ago
Chapter 395: Who is arguing? ago
Chapter 396: First stage tournament (Part 1). ago
Chapter 397: Little Yui ashamed. ago
Chapter 398: Are you pregnant? ago
Chapter 399: Going to Karmot City. ago
Chapter 400: Things that are better to forget forever. ago
Chapter 401: What Meref feared has happened. ago

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Yinko
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Not planned out at all

The start of it works rather well actually, he focuses on building his foundations by getting skills and hunting animals that pose zero risk.  He avoids civilization and trains his skills up over time. 

 

The problems arrive once that first period ends.  The way the author uses the system changes via plot device to move a bunch of skills under the singular heading of a lineage, his cultivation also gets merged into that lineage.  This would have been a good idea to start with but makes no sense half way through the story.  He also bought all the skills he could at the lowest cultivation rank but never bought any more.  This seems mostly just like the author got lazy about keeping up with skill advances.  His system also allows him to gain essence from killing things, but he quickly gets so many other ways to do the same thing that this becomes redundant and is never really used again. 

 

The next big problem is one shared by a lot of stories, the introduction of new characters via methods that make little sense.  First a dragon's egg falls into their laps, and is then used as a plot device to make the main love interest a special-snow-flake.  Then a betrayed and abandoned little demi-human shows up who he immediately spends a rediculous amount of points on, in the process revealing the secret of his system to a complete unknown.  Followed by moving into civilization for no actual reason. 

 

I feel that if the author had planned out the system and the plot it might have been good. 

HammieTheHamster
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It reads like a very, very young author wrote it, and im saying pre-teens here. If that is the case, then its a pretty decent story for that age and they should keep at it. If not, then the story is woefully lacking in nearly all areas possible, and the author needs a LOT of practice.

Character interactions are painfully simplistic, the author gets hung up on cultivation far too much, and even devoted half a dozen chapters in a row to their daily routine of cultivation, making several breakthroughs, leaving the cave to fix food, then re-entering to cultivate.

Romance is at about the level of an 7 year old's first innocent puppy love for the majority of the story, the equivalent of constantly thinking the other's cute, and lots of smiling dumbly. A kiss is finally thrown upon the MC's cheeks after 100 chapters of this. and then weirdly enough, when they finally arrive in town a random girl starts demanding to have the MC's kids simply because she fell in love with him at first sight.

Outside of encountering a dragon early on, the MC faces little difficulties, and is able to power through all fights, even those where he and his companion are severely outnumbered 100:1.

There is very little details being put into the world around the MC, and the MC almost never observes their environment. This supposedly dangerous forest full of beasts and monsters is essentially treated with the same familiarity as the MC's own backyard, with little need to learn anything about it. There's no real sense of 'danger' or 'unfamiliarity' despite having been reincarnated into it.

The grammar is about the only thing i can see as being pretty spot on most of the time. Few mistakes here and there, but hardly noticeable.

Overall, the story needs a lot of work.

mio
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the idea is fine, but the story is not very welldeveloped, and grammar is hellish to get through.

there's a ton of mistakes, most just pure bad use of words. example: "Oh, I've never seen you before, is this the first time here in [Ang Village]?" He asked Theo a red (Dog), who was 1.40m in height.

 

mistake is underlined; it's not clear, but it's the red dog asking theo a question, not the other way around. Even if it had been Theo asking the question, it still would've been wrong.

mistakes like these are aplenty, and the plot feels very rushed and random as well. There's signs that the author is trying to add the clishé drama romance, the cliché 'cool' mc 'look-at-me', and a lot more. sadly, they're not very well done, and oh so obvious.

To the point where i cringe each time the lines pass.

it does have a nice power system, but also comes with a System that solves all problems very conveniently and makes the story very linear. there's basically 2 things; he gets powerful, he gets admired.  that's it.

2_L33T_2_LIFT
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Fuck guns I hate whenever guns and high tech stuff are added to fantasy story's later on and this is to tell other like minded people that this happens in this book

kingsfun
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I can’t go on reading

Reviewed at: Chapter 37

I can’t continue reading the concept is good but character and story development seem like an afterthought to describing powers the main character gets through mindless killings. I got to chapter 37 before I gave up it may get better that’s why I didn’t go lower.

PaulTB
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I just can't get past the writing style

Reviewed at: Chapter 2: Skills

Paul: "I can't get past the way all thought and speech is shown with Name: at the start."

Paul: "It just really bugs me."

Paul: "I didn't get past the first chapter."

NastySquire
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The grammar is bad and the dialogue (which is just the MC talking to himself sofar) is even worse. The idea is interesting but the ability of the writer is lacking. I would not recommend this story just based on the bad grammar and strange OPness MC. (strange b/c he basically power levels without actually doing anything that would make sense) Perhaps this is a first try. In that case I hope they continue to learn and improve.

ILeaveAReviewWhenIDropIt
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The system used in the story is very basic. No innovation. Some of the basic function didn't even exist (skills due to special action, stats, innate skills, species specific skills)
And system shop? The be all, end all, ex dues machina of all. I smell buying antidote for some super ultra god killing poison from miles away.

Power system is unnecessarily mouthful. Just make it levels damnit and make distinction if you want to make 'realms'.
No world building. I don't even know what tier is average human. Or if talking animals is normal and how f*ck-up the world if it is.
The solution for being a humaniod is so anti-climactic. It made me drop this.
System that he gets without explanation is suppose to be his payment for being animal, but yeah, author can't wait any longer so that the MC can f*ck without incurring disgust to the non-bestiality reader.
Annoying system interaction.

Saying what's he gonna do and make the system repeat it is annoying.
Over explanation about trivial things, and have no intention to explain the big picture.

Waltzoid
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(UPDATED 10/16/2019 after reading 15 chapters)

I initially stopped to post a short review of this story after reading six chapters and watching the main character transform into the titular Golden Fox. The repetitive dialogue, constant (parenthesizing) and [bracketing] of words every paragraph, and our hero's singular obsession with power-leveling for "cultivation" and "System Points" in lieu of coherent worldbuilding and character development turned me off from reading any further. Why pick it up again? To see if that was just an unfortunate start to the story and things improve in the later chapters. (Short answers: it was, and they don't.)

15 chapters in, and the plot still largely hinges around Theo's personal quest to become the most powerful...something-or-other. He gains lots of new abilities and passes on some of the mana he's harvested to the other red fox who saved him, and then she transforms into an ice-elemental fox and continues to sit in the background while Theo does all the cool-looking stuff. After all that, he evolves and learns how to talk, and the two magic foxes discover a village with a bunch of other animals in it, but even as the village leader is trying to teach him about his village and the world surrounding him, all Theo seems to care about is his training. This, despite nothing being able to do any serious lasting harm to Theo, thanks to his "System's" ability to create healing and power-up items out of thin air almost at will.

The basic writing problems that bogged down the first several chapters still haven't gone away. The narration and dialogue continue to repeat themselves (Theo: "A [Village]? Are there humans living in the forest?" Not far from where they were, Theo and Yuki spotted a (Village).). There's still that weird mixture of prose-style and script-style dialogue tags whenever a character thinks or speaks (Theo: "It's really good!" Theo answered honestly.) The only good thing I can say is that the spelling and terminology errors seem to have diminished a bit.

Despite not being labeled a "LitRPG", the presence of the do-anything "System" and the author casually throwing around numbers, status screens, "System Point" notifications, and standard fantasy items like health and mana potions (and curiously mentioning percentage increases and decreases in stats without offering any comparisons) suggest that Golden Fox wants to be a LitRPG without actually saying it is, or may have been so at some early stage in development before the talking animals and mysticism elements were added.

There isn't much of anything I can recommend in this story. It doesn't work very well as an adventure tale, the action scenes are too short to be exciting (save for one ridiculous scene where Theo attacks a wolf with a lightning bolt powerful enough to create a twenty-meter-wide crater without damaging any of the surrounding forest), and the only thing that sets the pseudo-RPG "System" apart is its use of flowery titles for its levels and tiers when numbers would have worked just as well. You could enjoy it as a power fantasy, but even that starts to get old after scene after scene of inconsequential battles - even the narrative eventually skips over them to dole out experience and shop points just to get on with it. Me? I think I'll pass.

Gompman
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Let me start off by saying that I really enjoyed the story. Even though the style and grammar wasn't very good, I still found it very enjoyable.

The story is very cliche, and the system makes him OP without him having to lift a finger (paw).

The power-system and world is interesting, but major issues with power-balancing and main story.

Still recommend trying it out, because the concept is so fun.