Original HIATUS Action Adventure Historical Romance Female Lead Multiple Lead Characters

After the death of her father, Marion finds herself taking over the captaincy of the Irish Lady. She is now not only responsible for her crew but also responsible for keeping her father dream alive: keeping their secrete island free and safe. But when the Royal Navy threats to eradicate all pirates, would she be able to keep that dream alive?

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J P Koenig
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This review was written after Chapter Two was posted. 

The Good:

This story has a strong start, leaping right into the action and setting the stage for the story to come.  The author did an excellent job of introducing the main characters without doing a lot of expository info dumping.  The action sequence in the first chapter flowed smoothly, and I had no trouble following what was happening.  Dialogue was strong, and the main character is already fleshing out into a complex person.

The Bad:

Not much bad.  There were a few minor grammatical errors (mostly run-on sentences) in the first chapter.  Second chapter needs a line edit.  I spotted a bunch of grammar errors that would be an easy fix.  None of them were bad enough to pull me out of the story.

TL;DR

Strong writing, good start to the story.  Worth adding a bookmark to follow!

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Came here from your thread. There's not enough for an advanced review but I'll follow the format.

Grammar, good overall, only saw two mistakes both on chapter two, he saw her approached-> approach. And where they knew they will-> would.

Style. Good, consistent perspective, decent descriptions of places and events, and I think you show emotions pretty well.

Characters. Too short to tell, but for now the MC seems well developed.

Story. Way too short to tell.