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Seventeen-year-old Nahlia Cole is a member of a hunted race, forced to come out of hiding to infiltrate a secret northern academy.

Nahlia's race has a mysterious ability known as Ethermancy—the skill to enter others' dreams and to bring that power to the physical realm. This is the reason her race is hunted, and Nahlia does everything she can to unravel its secrets. Scouring the ancient library for missing books, and proving herself to the old masters for training.

Now, the human armies are marching north. War is inevitable, hostages are taken, and traitors exist on both sides. As the intentions of her enemy become clearer, Nahlia is forced to choose between her family and the future of her entire race.
 

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Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1 - Chapter 1: No Place for Aeons ago
Book 1 - Chapter 2: The Templars ago
Book 1 - Chapter 3: The Ethereal ago
Book 1 - Chapter 4: Burning Inside ago
Book 1 - Chapter 5: Flesh and Blood ago
Book 1 - Chapter 6: Golden-Eyed ago
Book 1 - Chapter 7: The Nature of Dreams ago
Book 1 - Chapter 8: City of Steel ago
Book 1 - Chapter 9: The Prince of Dragonshard ago
Book 1 - Chapter 10: Dwindling Flames ago
Book 1 - Chapter 11: Guest Clothes ago
Book 1 - Chapter 12: One of Them ago
Book 1 - Chapter 13: The Brink of War ago
Book 1 - Chapter 14: Blindfolded ago
Book 1 - Chapter 15: The White Council ago
Book 1 - Chapter 16: The Warrior's Calling ago
Book 1 - Chapter 17: Fire From the Sky ago
Book 1 - Chapter 18: Wolfe Clan ago
Book 1 - Chapter 19: No Sweeter Sound ago
Book 1 - Chapter 20: A City Never Conquered ago
Book 1 - Chapter 21: Half-Blood ago
Book 1 - Chapter 22: A Light in the Darkness ago
Book 1 - Chapter 23: Sunform ago
Book 1 - Chapter 24: Raiden's Blade ago
Book 1 - Chapter 25: A Forest in the Night ago
Book 1 - Chapter 26: Master of Dreams ago
Book 1 - Chapter 27: To Kill an Army ago
Book 1 - Chapter 28: Priceless ago
Book 1 - Chapter 29: Shards of Ethereum ago
Book 1 - Chapter 30: A Forbidden Oasis ago
Book 1 - Chapter 31: The Testament of Virtue ago
Book 1 - Chapter 32: Betrayal ago
Book 1 - Chapter 33: Opportunity ago
Book 1 - Chapter 34: The Faintest Scar ago
Book 1 - Chapter 35: In a Heartbeat ago
Book 1 - Chapter 36: A Different World ago
Book 1 - Chapter 37: Merciless ago
Book 1 - Chapter 38: One Mistake ago
Book 1 - Chapter 39: Just a Boy ago
Book 1 - Chapter 40: True Clarity ago
Book 1 - Chapter 41: Playing with Fire ago
Book 1 - Chapter 42: Fear, Loss, or Pain ago
Book 1 - Chapter 43: A Story Untold ago
Book 1 - Chapter 44: The Heirloom ago
Book 1 - Chapter 45: Without War ago
Book 1 - Chapter 46: Black by Flame ago
Book 1 - Chapter 47: Treason ago
Book 1 - Chapter 48: Expendable ago
Book 1 - Chapter 49: By the Laws of Aegon ago
Book 1 - Chapter 50: Risen from Legend ago
Book 1 - Chapter 51: The Power to Destroy ago
Book 1 - Chapter 52: Justice ago
Book 1 - Chapter 53: Tonight ago
Book 1 - Chapter 54: For Whitecliff ago
Book 1 - Chapter 55: A New Reason to Live ago
Book 1 - Chapter 56: Into the Caves ago
Book 1 - Chapter 57: Sabotage ago
Book 1 - Chapter 58: The Front Lines ago
Book 1 - Chapter 59: Buried Alive ago
Book 1 - Chapter 60: Ascendancy ago
Book 1 - Chapter 61: The Codex ago
Book 1 - Chapter 62: Chain of Deceit ago
Book 1 - Chapter 63: Knight Commander ago
Book 1 - Chapter 64: Strength and Fortitude ago
Book 1 - Chapter 65: To Preserve and Protect ago
Book 1 - Chapter 66: A Unified Realm ago
Book 1 - Chapter 67: A Chance for Redemption ago
Book 1 - Appendix: Characters ago
Book 2 - Chapter 1: A New Emperor ago
Book 2 - Chapter 2: The Moonstone ago
Book 2 - Chapter 3: The Words of Raiden ago
Book 2 - Chapter 4: Kings and Pawns ago
Book 2 - Chapter 5: A New Reason to Fight ago
Book 2 - Chapter 6: Assassins ago
Book 2 - Chapter 7: Torn Between Worlds ago
Book 2 - Chapter 8: To Starglade ago
Book 2 - Chapter 9: Shattered Chains ago
Book 2 - Chapter 10: Moonform ago
Book 2 - Chapter 11: Strength of Will ago
Book 2 - Chapter 12: The Gates of Eternity ago
Book 2 - Chapter 13: A Way Inside ago
Book 2 - Chapter 14: Alone ago
Book 2 - Chapter 15: Sanctuary ago
Book 2 - Chapter 16: The Codex ago
Book 2 - Chapter 17: Nightbridge ago
Book 2 - Chapter 18: Brass Bloods ago
Book 2 - Chapter 19: The Age of Archaeons ago
Book 2 - Chapter 20: A Taste of Pain ago
Book 2 - Chapter 21: The Onyx Company ago
Book 2 - Chapter 22: No Middle Ground ago
Book 2 - Chapter 23: Around One Hearth ago
Book 2 - Chapter 24: Empathy ago
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l nimbus
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What is this doing on RoyalRoad?

 This is not enough. I want the next book, now. The lost Redeemer shattered my expectations and tossed them aside, giving me one of the more satisfying reads I've had this year. I thoroughly enjoyed it, even through some of it's flaws. This isn't RoyalRoad's usual fare. This is a quality work I expect to see behind an Amazon paywall, and rightfully so. It promises quality, and it more than delivers.

 It takes a premise I thought was standard and carves a truly good story from it. With amazing worldbuilding and characterization, not to mention great dialogue and the author's uncanny ability to make you envision the scenes he's telling you, The Lost Redeemer is a book to be enjoyed. It held many small delights, subverted expectations when I believed myself foolish enough to predict plotlines, and gave a memorable story.

 I've read many fantasy books, believe me, but this one stood out for me. Not just in the storytelling, but in the actual way it was told. How it presented information for me to judge, and how fascinating it actually made it 'magic' system. It took concepts you might expect a lesser author to flub, and pulled through. David Musk has proven that he's not only competent, but can deliver quality without pause.

 I commend him for this.

Story:

 The first few pages of the book had me believing this would be a standard, if somewhat good fantasy story. Better than a lot of reads on RoyalRoad, but nothing I hadn't seen before. That was promptly proven wrong over the next few chapters. Shoved into the shoes of a girl who's entire race is in hiding after having ruled most of the world twenty years ago, The Lost Redeemer surprised and delighted at nearly every step. Not just with it's quality writing, and it's refusal to let characters fall into standrad fantasy tropes and predictable plot traps we'd seen before, but with how it was layered.

 Right from the very first chapter, it builds to the ending reveal, without you even knowing. Setting the plot, the history, the events, politics. This is one of the many reasons I so liked the story.

 Take for example, how it compares to the fantasy genre at large. In common fantasy book A, so and so event occurs. Character has so and so reaction to it, and so and so avoidable event happens because characters A and B forgot details, didn't read into it deep enough, blindly trusted someone and was set up for a betrayal we saw coming a mile away, did something. stupid for so and so reason. The list goes on and on. This story subverted the shit out of those tropes.

 The characters knew what they were getting into, didn't get tripped up by actual stupid, avoidable things. Instead, they knew their actions and the consequences, and had damn good reasons for acting the way they did. This is, in my mind, much better writing than many stories I've read.

 The author also doesn't bias you towards one side or another. Oh yes, what the Templars have done is unforgivable, but he shows the story from all angles. How the Aeons are fighting back against the genocide of their race. How the humans were led the rebellion and then further riled by lies being spread and stories exaggerated. Not weak, outlandish lies either, but ones carefully crafted to seem as real as possible. A level of depth and care is shown here, one that takes thought and dedication on the author's part.
 
 This large, overall plot is meshed together with Nahlia's journeys, slowly unfolding to the readers. At no point in the story did I feel bored, although some parts were less gripping than others. The ball was always kept moving at a good pace, and the stakes were always visible to the reader.

 Oh, it had a few bumps and hiccups here and there, like Nahlia suddenly knowing the Templars weren't going to execute her father despite not contacting Thane, but for the most part, it stayed very good and consistent.

 So, the big question. Despite all this, did I enjoy the story and find it satisfying enough to have invested these hours into reading it? Fug yes I did.

Style:

 Good, great actually. I can't honestly claim you're my favorite or anything, but your style is easy on the eyes and good for immersion. Your knack for descriptions really puts the readers in the character's shoes or helps us envision a scene. I did notice a tendency to become more..vague in battle scenes, but there nothing strictly wrong with that, just my personal preference speaking.

 Your style also favors skipping the small stuff, I noticed. Again, nothing wrong, but can makes vital scenes lack some of the tension and impact you might have been aiming for.

 All in all, I quite like your style, and wouldn't terribly mind reading other works written the same way.

Grammar:

 Now, we arrive at grammar. And hoesntly, you could do better. Hold off on them pitchforks and let me explain. Your prose is good, words are spelled right, commas are in the right places, first words are capitalized, and you didn't mix up yer question and quotation marks. All very good.

 There are, however, mistakes. Two big ones I'll point out right below.

• Words are sometime missplelled: Okay, this happens more towards the middle of the book, and isn't noticeable in t evginning or end, but I've noticed times when words were misspelled or missed letters. Nothing too bad, mind you, bit still obvious mistakes.

• Uneeded quatation marks: Again, towards the middle of the book. I noticed several instances where quatation marks we're on a sentence without dialouge, we're on the start of a sentence but not the end, or were on a sentence multiple times, in one instance. Yes, editing is a beyatch, but I suggest tracking down and exterminating them with extreme prejudice.

 If it weren't for those two things above, you'd earn perfect marks in grammar from me. Oh, I'm sure someone could tear you a new one over sentence structure and all that, but I tend not to care for that in my reading.

Characters:

 Honestly, they weren't good. They were great. Really great. Far room the best, but high above the RoyalRoad average. A solid cast, one even paid authors would struggle to create. Everyone in the story has a role and purpose, even if the reader doesn't know it.

 What I liked most about the cast was, as I said above, how they subverted expectations. Not in the sense where they cast them aside completely, but they managed to often twist them, keep it new and fresh. Every character has thought and effort put into them, with each having unique feels and personalities. Oh, they aren't a bunch of wackball oddjobs like you'd expect from me, but any reader paying attention isn't going to mistake them for one another.

 Nahlia, again, proved my expectations wrong for a protagonist in this situation. Her growth and evolution over the series was handled very well, being done so subtly that it felt natural, with the one hickup I mentioned above. She dumped the expectations I had set for her early on(to be conned and used by Thane), and more than proved herself as the main character.

 The same with Thane. While he gets significantly less screentime than Nahlia, he was no less important to the story. Again, the author had me set expectations for this character in the first few meetings. He had me form ideas that I knew where Thane's plotline would go, and then prolly laughed is he proved me wrong.
 
 Even characters we've never seen on-screen leave powerful impressions in the story.

 Again, through the story, there are no clear 'evil' characters, even though everyone will likely be rooting against the Templars. Oh, some emerge in the finale, but for the most part, David presents sensible and well crafted reasons for either side of the conflict. It would have been easy to just demonize the humans and be done with it, giving his story no less pull, but he didn't. Instead, he gave each side clear, concise reasons for hating the other, and not some bullshit reason that could be solved by a "But peace in nice" argument, that, once again, seems so prevalent in many of RR's stories that follow this scope.

 There is one little thing I have to point out though. Too close to be a coincidence. Your naming sense, actually. Now, you might not be aware of these, and that's cool, but other people will be and you might catch some flak for it. But, your have one Star Wars emperor (Palatine, two letters off) and two Final Fantasy character names in your cast (Locke and Zidane). Just a heads-up.

Closing:

 It was actually hard for me to judge this story. There were two different standards I could have held it to, both of which would have resulted in different rating. If held against fantasy books in general, it would have gotten a lower rating in general, but still an extremely fair one. Seeing as this was clearly a professionally done book, with a quality cover and planning, this might have been what it should have been held to.

 However, the author did chose to publish it on RoyalRoad, and as such, I held it to RoyalRoad standards. Out there, it might not make the Top 100 Fantasy books of all time. Here, it definitely does. I have little to no critique I could give the author besides what I already have. If anything, I want to be able to write a plotlines as well as he does.

Cheers, L.

Stonemace
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Enjoy the worldbuilding here and a mythos that doesn't automatically assume that someone having faith is the boogieman. There is a very human story being told here about tolerance and family bonds.

Morgan Jaclyn
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This is definitely one of the best books I’ve ever read on Wattpad! The book was put together so well and the story just flowed the way through. So very well thought through! Amazing job! 

Zelemir
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Solid FINISHED Work

Overall: The story is good, massive bonus points for it being finished.

The setting makes sense, and the characters got to have more depth and character development in 60 chapters than some do in the entire story for other fictions on this site. The plot is well rounded and you can empathise with most characters' motivations.
The only problem with the story I have is that the "even greater evil" was kind of tacked on in my opinion for the sole intention of creating a sequal. Not to say it was bad, but introducing a new antagonist 6 chapters before the book is over doesn't feel right to me...

Grammar/Spelling is by far the worst part of this story, nothing that makes it impossible to understand what is going on, but just annoying to make it difficult to parse what is being written. The worst offenders are random " marks that make you search for when the character started/stopped speaking and mistaking 'sparing' with 'sparring' in a couple of places.

Overall, enjoyable read and well worth your time!

Tito Uyanna
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"Please just give me a chance I promise I'll do whatever it takes to fight for our race"....

Intriguing. That's one word to describe the entirety of this book. I read it in two days which is itself a recommendation for the story. I especially enjoyed the evolution of the female lead from intrinsic unrefined naivety to true artfulness. The even pace, the suspense and the intricate weaving of the plot was a huge turn on for me. 

All in all, it was a good read! 

Vitok
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Really well written and poetic. I really enjoyed following Nahlia throughout her journey. Aeconica is really fleshed out and its clear the author has put a lot of work into making sure the story is of the highest quality.

My one complain is about the characters other than Nahlia and her immediate family. They seem a bit bland to me despite still enjoying them. 

Really looking forward to the second book!

 

J P Koenig
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Great pacing, constant tension

This story is far and above the usual RoyalRoad level of quality.  The plot is complete, complex and well paced.  The grammar is perfect, or so close as to not notice.

Style:  This is a tough, gritty fantasy where the author sets the stakes high and keeps up the pressure on the characters.  It is very well executed.

Grammar: As I said above, the story is very polished from an editorial point of view.  There are no run-on sentences, the grammar is perfect, and everything is coherent.

Story/Characters:  The story is well executed and interesting.  The main characters are introduced in believable, sympathetic ways that immediately draws your interest.  Motivations are complex and realistic, and the entire story lives in the gray area.  There are no (at least to the point I've read so far) truly evil or flawlessly good characters.  Everyone acts according to what drives them, and do so in ways that fit the character.  This makes the story engaging and a joy to read.  I have noticed a lot of tropes, but the author immediately starts to subvert the tropes almost as soon as they are introduced.

I also enjoy that this fantasy is not using generic tolkien-esque races as shortcuts, and took the time to develop its own world with its own species.  At the same time, despite the differences in the species, their interactions and how they squabble and war with each other is all too human.  It gives the sense of wonder you would expect of fantasy, along with a fresh take on the genre.

From the worldbuilding, unique races and magic system, to the complex, flawed but believable characters, this story has kept me on the edge of my seat, chapter after chapter.  I have paused only long enough to write this, and I'll be going right back to reading.  I look forward to the journey the author is taking me on, and where it will go in the future!

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Great book! Worth the read

This was one of the best books I've read in a while. The story was a perfect high-fantasy one with no plot holes, (that I've noticed). The characters developed at the perfect pace and even had romance storylines too, (which were great, by the way.) It was perfectly described, and I could envision all the scenes and the looks of the characters. 

The only downside to the book, I think, would be that there were quite a few grammatical errors and repeat words. Most books have them, but this had a couple more than any I've ever read before.

Overall, this is definitely one of my favourite books, super well written, perfect descriptions and character, and even the world itself was intriguing and unique.

If this book ever gets published, I'd for sure buy a copy.

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RoyalRoad#101 (^.^) - Above-Average Fantasy Book.

Personal Enjoyment Score - 6/10

~Or in other words, my own biased opinion as a xuanhuan writer and fantasy fan~ Do take this part of my reviews with a grain of salt since it’s completely subjective. If in the long run you find yourself to have a similar taste to mine, it will be a good guide for you. If not, simply omit it.~

While this novel is indeed good, it doesn’t really capture the ‘action’ part of its genre well enough for my liking. Sure a lot is happening almost all the time, but I never truly bonded with any of MC’s relationships - either by design or by MC’s own choices to push those relationships away. Throughout the whole story, there were certain interactions which I enjoyed, but they were short-lived.

Also, while I realize it’s fully intentional by the author, the hypocrisy on part of some characters and the annoying world-power setup which borders on the theme of ancient tragic comedy simply annoys me. Doomed if you do doomed if you don’t, the ‘fate’ has already chosen for you.

Finally, I couldn’t care less about any of the characters’ lives and deaths because of two reasons.

For once, we never bonded with those characters. Had this story taken 1000 pages to describe those same events more thoroughly, it would have achieved much better effect. Alas, something written as a book - or so I assume - can’t have all the advantages that online novels boast.

As for the second reason, some of the events felt forced just for the sake of following a theme which was set from the beginning. Hey look you did X which the ‘fate’ deems as a baddy-baddy act, so fate punishes you for it - this one would be the one which annoyed me the most. Won’t go into details, but for those who had read the story it should be obvious which event I’m referring to.

Story Description

It’s enough to pique my interest, so that’s good. On the plus side it also gives hints as to what kind of a fantasy setting your story is using. However, it could be a little more clear about the ‘hunted race’. Does both MC and the Prince-ally belong to the same race or two separate races? I’m sure it will become clear very quickly in the story itself, but I’d suggest you to tweak the description a little. Moreover, compared to the level of language the story itself displays, the description seems sad and forgotten. I would have never expected what I ended up finding in the chapters just by reading the description, be it at the overall introduction-feel or the description’s language level.

Overall Impression & Story

I enjoyed the beginning of the first chapter greatly. I was also positively impressed with the variety of words used for all the descriptions. MC’s first impression was very likable and interesting. However, the events MC was thrust into felt rushed. It might be because I’m used to stories spanning thousands of pages at the very least, but I would have liked to see some more long-term character interactions instead of jumping from one place to the other every dozen chapters. That being said, what casual scenes this novel/book had time for were very enjoyable to read through.

The next thing I paid attention to while reading was the appeal MC’s personality had to me. I sometimes really liked her choices and was very much looking forward to seeing how she would improve in this direction, only to be disappointed when she would change her mind. I was also waiting for some plot-twist to happen, but since I spotted no hints while reading, I wasn’t in high-hopes and everything ended pretty much as one can expect after reading the story description. Really, do change this story description! It takes away much from the book’s enjoyment.

Now for the concept of powers and factions in the created world. The factions are plentiful and the scheming and secrets between the major players presented throughout the novel keep you invested. Yet, the ‘concept of fate’ present in the story makes what could have been great and surprising… well, once again predictable. Character development is my favorite thing in the world, but I’d rather it be influenced by character’s own actions and those action’s consequences rather than the inevitable force of biased fate under which the world seems to operate merely in order to make a point. I wouldn’t have complained if the consequences were more logical and set-up in a more thorough way, but with one main glaring event I have in mind, it just feels forced.

In the same way, the main concept of Ethermancy is both interesting and infuriating at the same time. Without spoiling anything - sure, it’s an easy plot-tool to use later on, but it plays into the predictability which I mentioned before. I could randomly pick up a fantast book from my local store and I’d find something at a comparable level. Is it good for a lazy afternoon read when you’ve got nothing better to do? Yes. Is it a story I’ll remember in two weeks? Unlikely.

In other words, there are two ways to make a great story. Go with the tropes and pull them off perfectly - or innovate and self-create a main point of appeal to your story. In case of The Lost Redeemer, there was neither of those. As I said, is it an above-average fantasy book? I’d say that yes, it is. However, does it have something that pulls me straight into the story and makes me want to keep turning pages over and over just to see what happens? Not really.

Characters

The cast is well-made. The character are unique and don’t play into one-dimensional plot-tools too much. Had they been less constricted by the invisible bounds put onto them by the world’s setting, this cast had potential to uplift this story into greatness. Alas, good cast can only do so much if writing doesn’t allow them to shine (hello GOT S8).

Grammar & Style

Very enjoyable read in terms of spacing, word usage, richness of the language and of course, grammar. There were a few mistakes here and there, but nothing noticeable.

The only issue was… this. Can you see the problem if you keep using this to empathize which word the reader should pay attention to? Let us imagine those scenes on our own, including tones of characters. Using this once per 10 chapters is fine and all, but not in the number it’s present in this novel. It drove me so mad that I was about to drop reading at a few points just because of it.