by David Musk
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Aeons once ruled the world with a power called Ethermancy. They reigned for centuries until a human faction called the Templars overthrew them. Now, their empire lays in ruin, and the survivors hide in every corner of the world.
Nahlia is a librarian’s apprentice who’s obsessed with Aeon lore. Until now, she had only read of their powers. But when the Templars attack her family, Nahlia is forced to infiltrate a secret academy and rise beyond everything she’s ever known.
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This is part of a series of reviews where I read the first 50 pages of the book and give a verdict on if I wish to continue reading.
Aeonica is a expertly written book. Lacking many of the frustrating spelling and grammar mistakes that often plague so many web novels. Stylistically as well, I found the writing to have an excellent flow. Unfortunately, 50 pages in and it failed to capture my attention, though not for lack of trying.
As highlighted above, the quality of the prose is excellent. There was not a single instance were I was forced to pause by an awkward turn of phrase or a grammatical error. Instead I cruised through my 50 pages quite pleasantly.
The pacing of the individual chapters is also excellent, with many of the chapters leaving you with something that induces you to flip to the next.
I'll also give an honourable mention to the world building. Aeonica has a number of unique races, and you can tell a great deal of attention has been paid to crafting its lore. Which is distributed in delightful nuggets throughout the story rather than thrust upon you all at once.
Ulimately the experience was so smooth, and well written I was left scratching my head trying to figure out why I had no desire to continue. Too some noodling but I think I managed to figure it out.
Least Favourite Part:
The Characters: At 50 pages in I've yet to feel like any of the characters have depth. Despite following along with Nahlia and experiencing her thoughts and feelings. I rarely felt like she was a real person. Avoiding specifics, so as not to spoil the events of the story. I often felt like she acted in particular ways because that was what the story required of her.
More egregiously, I was left feeling as if her past was only barely there.
Despite being on the run from the Templar's her entire life, Nahlia apparently doesn't have a concrete idea of what the Templar's look like, or what she's going to do if they're closing in on her position.
Furthermore, while I enjoy the world building of having a character curse by Aegon, you later show that temples to him have been destroyed by the Templar's. If Nahlia is going to curse by the name of one of the Aeon's I think you need to have more of the oridinary character's doing so as well. To explain why she feels like its safe to evoke him, without blowing her cover.
The other issue was, despite the well crafted prose, I rarely felt the emotions you tell us Nahlia is feeling with any intensity.
In the end I think that despite being a technically excellent story, its flaws keep it from being a story that draws me in and leaves me hoping for more.
But for readers who can look past the weaknesses with the characters (at least in the first 50 pages), there are hints of an intriguing plot coupled with masterful prose.
Thus, those of you who it grabs are surely in for an stellar ride.
Disclosure: I reviewed this as part of a review swap
I started off struggling with this story. I felt the premise was going to be boring. I was wrong. :D
The first few paragraphs of chapter 1 start off really slow, but I pushed on and by the end of the chapter I was hooked.
So far I am very engaged with the fate of the main character and curious about the world the author is creating.
as of chapter 6, the story seems to be progressing well.
I have some concerns right now with character motivation, there is a degree of luck without which the main character would surely be dead and she has yet to really show us her potential as a character.
But, considering I have over 800 chapters to go... im faairly sure said things will develop :P
Thanks for the great story, once you get past the first 3 paragraphs of chapter 1, its great!
Warning for minor spoilers in the review!
For a fantasy story to engage a non-fantasy reader, Aeonica is certainly doing something right.
The first book quickly hooks you with an excellent description of its setting and characters, and the writing style is very pleasant to read. Sentence structure and word choices are great, and although similes and metaphors are used as descriptors quite prevalently, they're still done at an appropriate level and only serve to enhance the reading experience. While the pace of the first handful of chapters leaves little time for us to get close to Nahlia and her world due to the plot, I think it's done on the fly quite well. Plus, I'm only an eighth done the first book; with how it's been handled so far, I'm confident we'll have lots of time to become perfectly accustomed to the setting and characters.
Also, many of the action-packed or suspenseful chapters leave you with tense cliffhangers, urging you to turn the page so you can find out what happens next. I had a hard time putting the story down because of that; not only does the story hook you well, it keeps you interested for the long haul.
However, one thing that stood out to me was Nahlia's lack of reaction to a couple of the more traumatic events that happened early on in the story. It is mentioned in the story how she's been on the run for a long time, which tells the reader that Nahlia has probably steeled herself quite a lot by this point, but I was still a bit surprised to see a lack of emotional response to such events.
I also did see a fairly noticeable number of typos and minor errors throughout the first half dozen chapters, but the author quickly fixed them when pointed out (props!). For now, consider the grammar score tentative until I've read more.
I'm still very impressed with what Aeonica has to offer. I imagine the story is only going to get more spicy from here!
"Please just give me a chance I promise I'll do whatever it takes to fight for our race"....
Intriguing. That's one word to describe the entirety of this book. I read it in two days which is itself a recommendation for the story. I especially enjoyed the evolution of the female lead from intrinsic unrefined naivety to true artfulness. The even pace, the suspense and the intricate weaving of the plot was a huge turn on for me.
All in all, it was a good read!
Overall: The story is good, massive bonus points for it being finished.
The setting makes sense, and the characters got to have more depth and character development in 60 chapters than some do in the entire story for other fictions on this site. The plot is well rounded and you can empathise with most characters' motivations.
The only problem with the story I have is that the "even greater evil" was kind of tacked on in my opinion for the sole intention of creating a sequal. Not to say it was bad, but introducing a new antagonist 6 chapters before the book is over doesn't feel right to me...
Grammar/Spelling is by far the worst part of this story, nothing that makes it impossible to understand what is going on, but just annoying to make it difficult to parse what is being written. The worst offenders are random " marks that make you search for when the character started/stopped speaking and mistaking 'sparing' with 'sparring' in a couple of places.
Overall, enjoyable read and well worth your time!
Read up to chapter 30 but never really got into the story. If you are upto chapter 4 - 5 and not enjoying it, this is likely not for you either.