by David Musk
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Aeons once ruled the world with a power called Ethermancy. They reigned for centuries until a human faction called the Templars overthrew them. Now, their empire lays in ruin, and the survivors hide in every corner of the world.
Nahlia is a librarian’s apprentice who’s obsessed with Aeon lore. Until now, she had only read of their powers. But when the Templars attack her family, Nahlia is forced to infiltrate a secret academy and rise beyond everything she’s ever known.
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Really well written and poetic. I really enjoyed following Nahlia throughout her journey. Aeconica is really fleshed out and its clear the author has put a lot of work into making sure the story is of the highest quality.
My one complain is about the characters other than Nahlia and her immediate family. They seem a bit bland to me despite still enjoying them.
Really looking forward to the second book!
Enjoy the worldbuilding here and a mythos that doesn't automatically assume that someone having faith is the boogieman. There is a very human story being told here about tolerance and family bonds.
Personal Enjoyment Score - 6/10
~Or in other words, my own biased opinion as a xuanhuan writer and fantasy fan~ Do take this part of my reviews with a grain of salt since it’s completely subjective. If in the long run you find yourself to have a similar taste to mine, it will be a good guide for you. If not, simply omit it.~
While this novel is indeed good, it doesn’t really capture the ‘action’ part of its genre well enough for my liking. Sure a lot is happening almost all the time, but I never truly bonded with any of MC’s relationships - either by design or by MC’s own choices to push those relationships away. Throughout the whole story, there were certain interactions which I enjoyed, but they were short-lived.
Also, while I realize it’s fully intentional by the author, the hypocrisy on part of some characters and the annoying world-power setup which borders on the theme of ancient tragic comedy simply annoys me. Doomed if you do doomed if you don’t, the ‘fate’ has already chosen for you.
Finally, I couldn’t care less about any of the characters’ lives and deaths because of two reasons.
For once, we never bonded with those characters. Had this story taken 1000 pages to describe those same events more thoroughly, it would have achieved much better effect. Alas, something written as a book - or so I assume - can’t have all the advantages that online novels boast.
As for the second reason, some of the events felt forced just for the sake of following a theme which was set from the beginning. Hey look you did X which the ‘fate’ deems as a baddy-baddy act, so fate punishes you for it - this one would be the one which annoyed me the most. Won’t go into details, but for those who had read the story it should be obvious which event I’m referring to.
It’s enough to pique my interest, so that’s good. On the plus side it also gives hints as to what kind of a fantasy setting your story is using. However, it could be a little more clear about the ‘hunted race’. Does both MC and the Prince-ally belong to the same race or two separate races? I’m sure it will become clear very quickly in the story itself, but I’d suggest you to tweak the description a little. Moreover, compared to the level of language the story itself displays, the description seems sad and forgotten. I would have never expected what I ended up finding in the chapters just by reading the description, be it at the overall introduction-feel or the description’s language level.
Overall Impression & Story
I enjoyed the beginning of the first chapter greatly. I was also positively impressed with the variety of words used for all the descriptions. MC’s first impression was very likable and interesting. However, the events MC was thrust into felt rushed. It might be because I’m used to stories spanning thousands of pages at the very least, but I would have liked to see some more long-term character interactions instead of jumping from one place to the other every dozen chapters. That being said, what casual scenes this novel/book had time for were very enjoyable to read through.
The next thing I paid attention to while reading was the appeal MC’s personality had to me. I sometimes really liked her choices and was very much looking forward to seeing how she would improve in this direction, only to be disappointed when she would change her mind. I was also waiting for some plot-twist to happen, but since I spotted no hints while reading, I wasn’t in high-hopes and everything ended pretty much as one can expect after reading the story description. Really, do change this story description! It takes away much from the book’s enjoyment.
Now for the concept of powers and factions in the created world. The factions are plentiful and the scheming and secrets between the major players presented throughout the novel keep you invested. Yet, the ‘concept of fate’ present in the story makes what could have been great and surprising… well, once again predictable. Character development is my favorite thing in the world, but I’d rather it be influenced by character’s own actions and those action’s consequences rather than the inevitable force of biased fate under which the world seems to operate merely in order to make a point. I wouldn’t have complained if the consequences were more logical and set-up in a more thorough way, but with one main glaring event I have in mind, it just feels forced.
In the same way, the main concept of Ethermancy is both interesting and infuriating at the same time. Without spoiling anything - sure, it’s an easy plot-tool to use later on, but it plays into the predictability which I mentioned before. I could randomly pick up a fantast book from my local store and I’d find something at a comparable level. Is it good for a lazy afternoon read when you’ve got nothing better to do? Yes. Is it a story I’ll remember in two weeks? Unlikely.
In other words, there are two ways to make a great story. Go with the tropes and pull them off perfectly - or innovate and self-create a main point of appeal to your story. In case of The Lost Redeemer, there was neither of those. As I said, is it an above-average fantasy book? I’d say that yes, it is. However, does it have something that pulls me straight into the story and makes me want to keep turning pages over and over just to see what happens? Not really.
The cast is well-made. The character are unique and don’t play into one-dimensional plot-tools too much. Had they been less constricted by the invisible bounds put onto them by the world’s setting, this cast had potential to uplift this story into greatness. Alas, good cast can only do so much if writing doesn’t allow them to shine (hello GOT S8).
Grammar & Style
Very enjoyable read in terms of spacing, word usage, richness of the language and of course, grammar. There were a few mistakes here and there, but nothing noticeable.
The only issue was… this. Can you see the problem if you keep using this to empathize which word the reader should pay attention to? Let us imagine those scenes on our own, including tones of characters. Using this once per 10 chapters is fine and all, but not in the number it’s present in this novel. It drove me so mad that I was about to drop reading at a few points just because of it.
This is just a very solid fantasy . Writing style is pretty simple and enjoyable not too heavy on descriptions. Dialogues are very well written. Plot is pretty good it manages to grab your attention and keeps you intrigued. It is fast paced and doesn't waste time at all . So far I haven't found any logical plot holes or things that don't make sense . No problems with grammar at all. My only complaint is that characters are a bit bland but it doesn't ruin the story at least their decisions make sense so far.
Overall this is pretty good if you like fantasy you should at least try this out.
This is a great story, with a perfect blend of prose and character. I think it's a very well-written story, good enough that you'd probably expect to see it in hardback rather than the internet, and so far - the story has been a wonderful ride. I have no hesitation in offering a five-star review for this work, though as some of the other reviewers not, there are some occasional grammatical issues. Otherwise, it's a near perfect work of fantasy fiction - and hopefully someday I'll be able to walk into a bookstore and see it on the shelves where it belongs.
I read this book when it had first been released to the public, I immediately fell in love and have followed it ever since. It’s a thrilling story, with a very imaginative world and plot line. When you read the book it’s as if you’re being pulled into Aeonica itself and that is hard to pull off.
Note: Read only the first 4 or so chapters. So long term things can't really be assessed.
Gripping work, right from the start
Action, pacing, grips my heart
Our character in turmoil, oh help Aegon!
The pressure for her, does it pile on
One of the strongest, starts on the site
Everything solid, nothing trite
Read further in, I'm sure I will
No words wasted, all a thrill
My only critique, would be how
The name of your town, reminds me of WoW
It slightly pulled me from your world
But such weak trifle cannot be hurled
While you world you built doth thrive
A place of history and scope we dive
Plot and character, foremost drive
For these reasons, I give stars, five
Perplexingly, this novel starts slow and a little laden with lore. Don't let that slow you down. It quickly speeds up into the tale of a young girl thrown into a magical world that she struggles to understand. It IS written more like a traditional novel than a light novel, but I consider that to be an asset rather than a fault. Just be aware that it flows a bit differently than what you'd expect.
It is well written and enjoyable. Perhaps a little slower to get rolling than I'd like and with a little bit of lead footedness near the beginning but it quickly picks up into a well written and enjoyable read.
I didn't notice anything so very good.
The world is dense with lore and the author does a good job of introducing it without exposition dumping. It feels like a well planned out and lived in world rather than one invented on the fly. The story feels epic in scope so be prepared to buckle in.
My biggest weakness is that I have a hard time identifying with the MC and the other POV character. She is well written as a girl scared and alone in a terrifying world, but I'm not sure I'm interested in that. In short, the characterization is good but a bit different than I would be looking for on Royal Road.
This is young adult fiction but well written. Much better written than most things on Royal Road (and frankly better written than many of the young adult stories turned into movies). It is easily worth reading if you enjoy the genre.
This isn't the normal, find a theme, find a trope, and fill in the gaps for your steriotypical story. This is a full, well edited, and imersive tale. A history and an adventure. Every instance the author keeps you trapped deep down into his writing and doesn't waste a word.
This has the feel of a book that has been edited and re-drafted until everything fits together perfectly.
Stylewise this isn't an area I can judge. It feels familiar, and it works for the story the author is telling. It does well to avoid tropes and predictability.
As far as grammar, I can find no faults in any of it. This is well edited and the author and readers have clearly gone over this with a fine tooth comb and picked out and corrected any obvious mistakes. Just for laughs I plugged in a couple chapters into grammarly and the only things it preceived as mistakes were the names specific to the story.
The story is complex and rich. Everyone is right in their own eyes. Each action taken has some deeper impact at a later time. I can and will keep you hooked and pull you further in by each line.
All of the characters have their own distinctive personallities, histories, and quirks. Each relationship is complete and real.
If I walked into a bookstore and pulled this off of a shelf I would be a very happy reader indeed. This is a well-polished, beautifully constructed piece of literature, and I mean literature.
The flow is perfect, the writing is immersive, the descriptions are detailed and the plot rivals some of the greats.
This is almost a flawless, full marks from me, but I do find that there are some convenient moments in the story that don't always logically follow, and seeing characters act irrationally when they have been nicely set up can be a bit jarring.
The characters themselves are great, and a lot of personality is injected into them in a very short amount of time. It's economical writing, and very effective. The tradeoff is that I am yet to see multiple facets from any one character, but I will happily update this if that changes.
I spotted a few typos along the way but nothing glaring at all, and the author has generally fixed them within two minutes of me pointing them out! David Musk is clearly committed to his creation and I always love to see that.
The grammar and style are really spot on, and it makes for easy reading. There's not much to say on this matter, because really it is as good as it gets.
I had to review this at some point, and my review comes earlier than I would like. If the fiction carries on at this standard, and I suspect it will, then I imagine it will be one of the best fantasies I've read in recent years. My comments above may appear critical but I'm really pointing out tiny blemishes on an otherwise absolute gem.
I will be coming back to this, and I fully anticipate more of the same great quality, and perhaps even better!