Los

I'd describe this story as an ever escalating power wank, which is a shame because I thought parts of it were well done. The powers and abilities the MC develops are actually pretty cool, but they don't feel earned. Everything is made as smooth and easy for the MC as posible. 

The system and how it works don't feel very fleshed out. For something that important the author simply can't change rules on the fly. 

The story is based around gaining power which, while a tried and true Royal Road classic, I find myself bored of. 

This started out fine, but the more I read the more I dislike it.

The starting premise was fun, and even the early powerups due to the brother figure were an interesting take.

But, NOTHING. EVER. HAPPENS. This is a power fantasy without conflict, there is no adversity, and there are no opportunities to show off all the awesome powers the MC bullshitted her way into.

That the MC devolved (and continues to devolve) into a increasingly duller psychotic nameless Xianxia side character is also incredibly frustating, and makes Eve even harder to relate to and root for. It feels like a badly written "grey" character that comes as more edgy than anything.

If anything this story should have villainous lead tag, there is only so much "rational decisions" (which are not rational at all but always somehow work out in a benefitial way) you can shove under being in a Xianxia world.

Overall it feels very discordant in what the story wants to acconplish, its a power fantasy where the MC doesn't get to show off and all potential interesting problems are resolved off screen.

All in all if you're looking for an OP Female Lead this might be a decent choice.

The protagonist comes across as smart, driven and pragmatic. Those are all definitely traits I enjoy.

The biggest downside to me is unfortunately a spoiler:

Despite that major frustration, the story still warranted four stars though I may dock it down to 3 if the MC doesn't start standing on her own.

The synopsis was interesting and drew me in. Sadly, a lot of points in the plot was just disappointing once they were revealed. Made the story too easy and just meh in my opinion.

Slight Spoilers?

Dont review often so not too good at reviewing. 

This story starts pretty nice, but the more I read, the less I like.

Others have listed some problems, like the fact that she gets forcefed power because of her brother, or that there's no real personality (apperantly she really likes Origami, which we learn ten chapters in while she gets paper powers two chapters. Can't be that important to her, then, eh?).

But for me, the worst was the attitude. It's got all the worst parts of Xianxia. The protagonist gets repeatedly, incessantly, told to act like a complete psycho. Murder everyone who knows about you, including the nonsentient ferrets (but not the wolves, those are apperantly cool?)! Kill people and everyone connected to the 13th generation (that's a thing that happens). Torture anyone you need.

It's childish edgeyness, Hard Men Making Hard Decisions While Hard.

It has an interesting idea, great grammar and good writing but there is absolutely nothing pushing the plot forward or anything that captures the readers attention other than unbelievably OP powers given for no reason every few chapters.  Its pure power fantasy with a thin veneer of world building over the top to disguise it for a while. In terms of conflict and power levels, its already obviously going to be unbalanced and boring with little tension involved at all. There was alot of potential in exploring some of the mysteries involved in the story like how does her brother know this stuff? What is the system? Why has it arrived now? But she doesnt even seem to care at all until its literally spelt out later on.

It could have been really good, its got a lot of elements that i enjoy and the writings good but there is nothing at all interesting other than the fact she gets arbitrarily stronger when she's already strong enougn to be essentially invincible in her current situation. Maybe it changes later on but it doesn't seem to be heading in an interesting direction so im not sticking around to find out.

This is not great.  A lot of the other reviewers have accurately captured many of the issues involving the protagonist's power level, and how that works into her as a character and how it affects the plot.  And, by and large, there is little plot, though now RR is trailing far behind where the author has written out to.  I don't really see where there is going and, so far, it's largely be a seriatim case of the protagonist encountering new people or environs and just steamrolling them. 

That said, I am still reading it. So it has something going for it, but I don't know what.  Probably regular updates. But I can't really recommend it to anyone else unless I know they have a niche fetish for this kind of thing.

Written after reading chapter 5.0

Style: The story starts out with a solid premise, and continues to build that premise as the story continues. The POV change chapters aren't infrequent, but are not sudden or intrusive, and hep build other characters beside the MC and their interactions. The power system is simple, however the MC gets rather overly powerful and competent too quickly for a progression based story in my opinion. 
The style of the authors writing that bothers me most is how much they focus on female characters bodies and their sexuality. In a world where anyone can grow to inhuman levels of strength, having Charm and Water (in universe Water is seen as a good element to retain beauty) skills be the majority way to gain power as a woman seems, well, ridiculous. 

Story: Although not written poorly, the story of this fiction (as of 5.0) is rather inconsequential. After a few chapters of exposition, the MC's only goal is basically to get stronger. There are minor objectives in order to accomplish this, but no overarching plot has been introduced. There is worldbuilding yes, but little of it impacts the MC. We have our MC hero, and her companions, but no antagonist or reason to follow her adventures. The story gets the Call to Adventure, and then seems to just continuously repeat the Meet the Mentor step of the Hero's journey.

Grammar: This novel needs some editing. Not a lot, most of the story is properly written. However about 5-10% of paragraphs have grammatical errors. Missing commas, run on sentences, places where it looks like the author wrote half a sentence and then wrote half of another sentence. Easily fixable but rather jarring. There are no spelling errors that I could see.

Character: I try not to be too critical on writing. It's hard! But the characters in this story (as of chapter 5.0) need to figure out their morals, get some backstory, and find a few more character traits. Spoilers for chapters past the first 10 or so.

The MC herself is written better. She has a history, and a character, with traits to go alongside that. But what exactly that character IS is used when it's convenient and when it's not? Skipped past in order to make numbers go up. 

Overall, the MC's moral judgements seem to be whatever the writer feels is convenient, and changes when there isn't even a reason or need to. 

The final issue I have with characters is the quantity. The author introduces way too many companion characters way too quickly, and hardly fleshes any of them out. The POV chapters do a decent job, but not enough. 

This is all my opinion of course. To others, the experience may be significantly more enjoyable. However I personally don't recommend Los.

This story has everything i like in theory, in practice however, it's really hard to take seriously, it's bland, nothing happens outside of getting and upgrading abilities, it's not building up to anything, the main and only character (so far) has no personality.

The whole thing is a system soup, where the MC pats herself on the back for getting all of these god-like abilities with no effort or logical explanations.

So far it's hard to read, but there aren't that many chapters yet so that may be subject to change.

This used to be on Scribblehub, before the author deleated it and dissappeared. Great to know it's still around.

Overall, it's not the best of stories, but if you want a differnt western litRPG and need something to read. This one is great.

I will say though that this novel might not be for everyone. It certainly fits the crowed over on Scribblehub more than over here. This is an OP, female main charicter.