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Portals have opened throughout the world, their depths containing untold wonders. There are those who plumb the Deeps searching for treasure, Skills, or even Spells. These people are Delvers, the elite of Earth who come from the most common origins to the highest echlons of power. The world is witnessing the rise of those who are more than human, their actions, words, and deeds becomming legends that will be passed down through the Ages.

Unfortunately, Eve Smith missed out on all that fun since she was transported away from Earth right as the portals opened.

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darkseven
Overall

Enjoyable but a little too easy

Reviewed at: 3.1

All in all if you're looking for an OP Female Lead this might be a decent choice.

The protagonist comes across as smart, driven and pragmatic. Those are all definitely traits I enjoy.

The biggest downside to me is unfortunately a spoiler:

At one point its revealed all the protagonists success come because the system is massively cheating in her favor to protect itself from her brother. Her accomplishments came easy so they already felt kind of cheap, but the fact that they're all due to family favor makes them feel extremely cheap which really hampers my enjoyment.

Adding insult to injury is every line where the brother gives essentially perfect advice for every given situation allowing the MC to avoid any thinking. This robs her of agency and further cheapens her accomplishments. Its less "female MC is smart and powerful" and more "female MC is given every possible advantage including exact steps to divine power by her OP brother"

Despite that major frustration, the story still warranted four stars though I may dock it down to 3 if the MC doesn't start standing on her own.

Stillness
Overall

I'd describe this story as an ever escalating power wank, which is a shame because I thought parts of it were well done. The powers and abilities the MC develops are actually pretty cool, but they don't feel earned. Everything is made as smooth and easy for the MC as posible. 

The system and how it works don't feel very fleshed out. For something that important the author simply can't change rules on the fly. 

The story is based around gaining power which, while a tried and true Royal Road classic, I find myself bored of. 

Mirreski
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Dislike the plot.

Reviewed at: 2.0b

The synopsis was interesting and drew me in. Sadly, a lot of points in the plot was just disappointing once they were revealed. Made the story too easy and just meh in my opinion.

Slight Spoilers?

The books from her brother, way too specific, and she is like oh just gotta follow it easy. Made it too easy. 

Secondly her brothers identity is just wow overpowered. It just felt so boring. And with the system actually being scared of her brother just makes the story feel too silly.

Overall I would have prefered the brother just being a normal human and writing a more generic smaller book than the overpowered plot point he currently is. If that was the case I might have liked the story more.

But then the dog? inhabitants came and it kinda just felt more silly.

Dont review often so not too good at reviewing. 

Techman
Overall

First off, looks like the author had an older story they had discontinued, then deleted it all and started posting this story in the same space. As such, you'll see half the reviews are from years ago and talking about hiatus, when this story was first posted 4 days ago.

On to the plot! Eve seems like a fairly normal person who ends up transported (along with her whole house) to a world with a system. Luckily for her, in her weeb/prepper brother's room she finds the best possible thing...a survival guide for being transported to another world, complete with tips on how to exploit loopholes in the system and become OP. And OP she does indeed become. At least I think. She hasn't met any other humans yet for comparison, but she is quite literally exponentially more powerful than when she arrived. 

Usually I don't like crazy OP MC stories, but I find this one interesting.

BurnNote
Overall

Such edge, much grimdark

Reviewed at: 3.0c

This story starts pretty nice, but the more I read, the less I like.

Others have listed some problems, like the fact that she gets forcefed power because of her brother, or that there's no real personality (apperantly she really likes Origami, which we learn ten chapters in while she gets paper powers two chapters. Can't be that important to her, then, eh?).

 

But for me, the worst was the attitude. It's got all the worst parts of Xianxia. The protagonist gets repeatedly, incessantly, told to act like a complete psycho. Murder everyone who knows about you, including the nonsentient ferrets (but not the wolves, those are apperantly cool?)! Kill people and everyone connected to the 13th generation (that's a thing that happens). Torture anyone you need.

It's childish edgeyness, Hard Men Making Hard Decisions While Hard.

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Mary Sue Power Trip, Author is alergic to conflict

Reviewed at: 5.4

This started out fine, but the more I read the more I dislike it.

The starting premise was fun, and even the early powerups due to the brother figure were an interesting take.

But, NOTHING. EVER. HAPPENS. This is a power fantasy without conflict, there is no adversity, and there are no opportunities to show off all the awesome powers the MC bullshitted her way into.

That the MC devolved (and continues to devolve) into a increasingly duller psychotic nameless Xianxia side character is also incredibly frustating, and makes Eve even harder to relate to and root for. It feels like a badly written "grey" character that comes as more edgy than anything.

And don't even get me started on this Mind Controlling Succubus Wannabe lady that she "adopts" for no fucking reason when she was pratically murdering anything and everything that moved or not in a paranoid frenzy.(and that her other companions also apparently had a huge grudge for her family but its okay apparently?)

 

If anything this story should have villainous lead tag, there is only so much "rational decisions" (which are not rational at all but always somehow work out in a benefitial way) you can shove under being in a Xianxia world.

Overall it feels very discordant in what the story wants to acconplish, its a power fantasy where the MC doesn't get to show off and all potential interesting problems are resolved off screen.

123whothatbe
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It has an interesting idea, great grammar and good writing but there is absolutely nothing pushing the plot forward or anything that captures the readers attention other than unbelievably OP powers given for no reason every few chapters.  Its pure power fantasy with a thin veneer of world building over the top to disguise it for a while. In terms of conflict and power levels, its already obviously going to be unbalanced and boring with little tension involved at all. There was alot of potential in exploring some of the mysteries involved in the story like how does her brother know this stuff? What is the system? Why has it arrived now? But she doesnt even seem to care at all until its literally spelt out later on.

It could have been really good, its got a lot of elements that i enjoy and the writings good but there is nothing at all interesting other than the fact she gets arbitrarily stronger when she's already strong enougn to be essentially invincible in her current situation. Maybe it changes later on but it doesn't seem to be heading in an interesting direction so im not sticking around to find out.

dada11dada22
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overpowered hero genre is boring

Reviewed at: 4.1a

Spoilers be warned.

So her brothers is a veritable god and one of the top ones. He leaves his sister books that give her increadble powers. The main character is OP does not experience any difficulty whatsoever. The first tens of chapters are a boring infodump and character creation process.

Honestly many of the 3 stars and 4 star rated litrpgs are better than this.

 

This book bores me

floug472
Overall

This story has everything i like in theory, in practice however, it's really hard to take seriously, it's bland, nothing happens outside of getting and upgrading abilities, it's not building up to anything, the main and only character (so far) has no personality.

The whole thing is a system soup, where the MC pats herself on the back for getting all of these god-like abilities with no effort or logical explanations.

So far it's hard to read, but there aren't that many chapters yet so that may be subject to change.

Ondine
Overall

Weird but Enjoyable

Reviewed at: 2.0a

This is a basic system leveling story. Logic is tossed out the window pretty early on in favor of massive cheats (there's absolutely going to be issues later with power creep). Also, the MC is a ridiculous crazy psychopath who doesn't realize she's a ridiculous crazy psychopath and it's like watching a (hilarious) trainwreck.

Unfortunately, the MC doesn't seem to exhibit much independant thought or drive and she mostly relies on the people around her to tell her a) things to do and b) how to do them. It's fun to read right now, but I seriously question the sustainability of this character. As a result of this issue, there's a pretty distinct lack of stakes. How can you create tension when the MC has no real goal beyond survival and the only consequence is death (which we know wouldn't really happen)?

Overall, a fun power-leveling story that dips into "so bad it's good" territory in the best of ways with limited long-term viability.