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by Reonaissance

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CamChow
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Grammar and Style, disregard story and char

Grammar is meh.  About average for translated LN.  Author can speak english but it is clearly as a second language.  There are often grammatical errors in verb tense but that isn't the worst thing about the work.  I gave up after the first two chapters so sue me, but the style of writing needs work as well. Like i said, author is ESL.  The flow between sentences doesn't exist at all, word usage is questionable. The story reads as individual sentences- He did this, he looks like this, he is this, he smelled this. 

Characters, cant really comment on.  Sister is classic anime waifu- blushing, puffing out cheeks.  if you're into that kinda thing then read on, if you're into actual writing, you'll probably get annoyed at it.  

Story, don't know enough about it yet.  

All in all, I'd say it's okay for a brainstorm where you plot out what you want to happen/say, poor for a rough draft, terrible for a final draft.  

Things to work on: verb tense and story flow. read books and learn how they go from sentence to sentence without disjointing the thoughts.  @author, message me if you ever clean it up and i'll try again to read it

Agp05
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If you’re hard into certain manga tropes this books for you. While the story isn’t for me other may enjoy it. One issue is the grammar of the story, so author chuck that sumbitch through grammerly or ask some one to edit.

stay blessed 

Silv
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Interesting premise

Not my style as i'm not a fan of tamer type stories that often. The setting can be worked on a little but

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 The grammar is okay and I think that people who like taming and Monster invasion stories will enjoy this LN. One characteristic the author should work on is just formatting your chapters a lot of random space between each line. Including seperating the same concept.

Ynis Tempest
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Yet another piece of work to watch out for

First off, the overall review:
The novel itself was a breath of fresh air from all the game-inspired novels that were currently overpopulating rrl. Honestly, even I got sick at all the VR/reincarnation/isekai novel tags these days. In the contrary, this novel was off to a great start. 

Style: Although I cannnot say much about the author's style, I have no qualms about the chapter length and the paragraph construction. 

Grammar: It was superb. Rarely the case that I see an original novel this polished before. 5 chapters in and I haven't seen any grammatical error, syntax error, or any error. The sentence structures are easy to read and digest. Informations are also given at the right time, not just dumping it carelessly like the others just for the sake of word count. 

Story: I like the fact that the author instantly gave us a big piece of mystery. I mean, yeah sure the parents-missing-trope is frequently used but for this novel, I can say that it sure gave me a little anticipation. There are other elements as well (which I would rather not divulge so read it yourself) that was particularly hidden. You would definitely miss something if you just read without processing the hidden context. The story is not fast-paced (seriously, it was more in the slower-paced one), but it was not to the point of waiting for a chapter just to see pointless stuffs. I don't feel like there are any filler paragraphs at all, because the story so far only justifies and build-up their personalities. Even the comedy part gives me a chuckle or two.

Character: Omygosh, what can I say? I love the sister. The sister was very cute! I mean, can't I just have a sister like that?!? 
The twins have a very cute relationship. I also like the fact that the male lead is a very rational thinker. Besides the fact that they overly loved each other, it feels like an ordinary siblings relationship. The male lead is also not perfect at the start, so there's more room for growth. Welp, they are only the two characters that are introduced (as of Ch.5) yet, so Imma sit back here and watch how the author introduces 'society' to them. 

Conclusion: Honestly, I am anticipating a lot from this novel (is that bad?). I cannot say that I can recommend this to a friend yet as the chapters are too few, but I am certainly enjoying it. I hope the author doesn't drop this (pleeeease). 

KuroKohai
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 New appocalypse sounding novel, hoping for something to read over time. dont disapoint me 👍