Kingdom of Stars

by Just a Rookie

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Female Lead Grimdark Martial Arts Strategy
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Every year, the King of Morningstar host a tournament. Whoever wins will receive riches beyond imagination. Catherine, a demihuman who dreams of escaping from the slums, decides to enter the tournament, unaware that there's more at stake than prize money.

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MrAzE
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I must be honest, the setting of the story has a really nice and appealing charm.

It shows a lot of promise and potential. Where it shines, though, is the characters. True, they need a bit of fleshing out, but three chapters in, they show potential.

The part that breaks it all is the grammer and punctuation. Ok... It's not as bad as it sounds. Overall those two components are good, however, and this is a big HOWEVER, the chapters are in need of some edditing. There are a few places sentences can get confusing, more so in the beginning of the story.

Overall, it is a good read. Looking forward to seeing where the story goes.

 

PS: I know it's not the best score, you as an author are hoping for, but it's an honest one. Hope it helps you :)