Super Babes: A LitRPG Superhero Harem Adventure

by JeremyZenith

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Sci-fi GameLit Harem LitRPG Male Lead Secret Identity Strong Lead Super Heroes
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

All Ryan Walker wanted was to be a hero, and he gets his chance when the three heroes who protect Eros City are taken down. Now, thanks to a high-tech implant that uses RPG mechanics to unlock hidden powers, Ryan's become a real-life superhero. He's going to have to face the powerful supervillains that have taken over his city, but he'll have some sexy superheroines to help him along the way.

A revised and expanded version of the first three novels are now available on Amazon.

Note: This LitRPG story contains strong language, harem elements, and explicit adult situations.

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Ciaina
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No idea where the glowing reviews come from, but ... 

Let's start with the good :

Grammar is solid, as well as the general flow. A bit of effort went into world building. Not too much, but an effort is clearly there.

The debatable :

It is a superhero setting, with dastardly villains that are as gratuitously evil as they are childishly stupid. Silver era comic style? It is a staple, but if that is not your thing it will grate on you.

The BAD :

The characters. They are paper thin and generally unlikable.

The protagonist has only a superficial morality, but beside that is a creep. A complete, weak willed creep. All his motivations are a vehicle for self indulgence, be it attention or more basic desires. Beside " becoming a hero" ofc. THAT is motivated by not putting in any effort even if he has a pretty good life, that he wants to escape by "cheating" because he has the willpower of an unborn child, and screw all the consequences.

The girls, as they are written, are all WHORES. let me elaborate. Nothing wrong with having an open and promiscuous life-style. But they All open their legs with the same ease it takes to go for groceries. One thing is having multiple sex partners, another is thinking that a quick round of sex is a standard way of interacting with strangers. I get the Harem tag, but these girls feel more like ass and titties with a bit of backstory and a massive case of nymphomany.

That is pretty much it, it feels like a first attempt at writing (albeit with a decent grasp of grammar), giving the author ample space for improvement ( that I'm pretty sure will come if he perseveres). Depth, depth and depth. Don't just add trinkets to a car, open the engine compartment and get down and dirty.

 

On a personal note : the guy that called a review "trolling"? Stop using that word. Trolling means intentionally riling up people to get a reaction. What he did was just write something that you didn't agree with. Surprisingly, not everything that disagrees with you, or is negative in nature is an ATTACK.

Criticism doesn't mean free praise, and a diet of exclusively unearned pats on the back only breeds entitled, shallow results. Pretty sure mirrors are not a recent invention. 

yeangster
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Fun story, dubious characters

The story is fun, though things seem to come a bit too easily for the main character once he gets his super-powers. The grammar and style are fine, nothing that actively takes me out of the story at least.

The problem with the characters. Now I only started reading after some of the edits, but the comments by the author and readers make it seem like the main character was much more grating before. But right now, he's bland and inoffensive.

The problem is the rest of the characters, especially the women. They're not much characters, as much as vessels for wish fulfilment for readers who put themselves in the head of hte main character. The stripper character seems like she was written by a guy who got led on by a stripper, but fell afoul of 'no sex in the champagne room', and this is sort of a revenge fantasy. The superheroines are especially egregious. One's been sexually assaulted, tied up, repeatedly threatened with rape, and the first thing she does is jump on the bones of the main character with his magic penis? The reformed supervillainess's only sexual contact with men was being raped many time by her master, but the main character's magic penis turns the moment she's free?

And let's not even get into the adult women who's in the body of the child (sorta) but still has sexual urges.

Raph772
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MC is such a loser than I can find no other way to better describe him, I'm not even talking about physically as yeah he's weak and skinny but that's whatever I'm talking about his personality, it is so unsuited for being a hero outside of his need to save the city which doesn't fit at all with the rest of his character. Honestly speaking Geoffrey from Game of thrones would probably make for a better hero.

13lack12ose
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Harem novel with some fighting thrown in

Reviewed at: 3-Chapter 16

As the title says this is a Harem novel. Our MC collects women like candy and manages to get into everyone's pants within a few chapters.

Not my cup of tea but if you like that kinda thing then this novel is fairly well written and a good place to start.

 

The author is consistent with uploads which is a plus and is open to feedback.

Enjoy!

Wade
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All-Might is that you?

Scrawny dude sudenly becoms muscular handsome guy? Reminds me of Boku no Hero Academia.

Overall good story, little cliche but nice read so far.

gary0044187
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Fun story, look forward to part 2

MC is a total blockhead, love that he got the dunderhead build to go with it.  Hopefully he will become un-dumb over time.  Great story, still think Leviathan was a better pick.

Stultus
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Every true geeks wet dream, a story about an idealistic young man who is given superpowers and does his best to use them for the good of his city, whilst maybe picking up the odd chick here and there.

As I said before, itsi cliche, but it's cliche done well, good grammar, good characters and good setting.

The author has also proven that he can stick to a schedule too, at roughly two chapters a week, I feel this story could do really well and be worth the read.

NIZP
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Good plot and an interesting story, the only problem is protagonist because he is a muscle head, never thinks through his actions and is too self rightious. But overall, it is a good story, good job.

Sillysmiles4ever
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Grammar and flow are on point. Characters could use a little more substance.  Over all very good. 

MC seems to be evolving.  In book one he seemed like a jerk but not sure if that was intentional. MC seems a little more mature. 

MC is a man whore.  Not into the Harem thing. But I suppose men will like it. 

Motriga
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as the other reviewers have pointed out there is a lot of cliches in the story, but despite that the author manges to make them his own and give them a spin that makes them his own. sure the mc is kinda an  All Might rip off so far but that is subject to change in the future. the wimp that becomes a hero is a classic fantasy trope used in almost all books of the genre and the story should not be judge for making it clear that it is, what it is. 

all in all i recommend the story, the biggest problme i've run into with it is that the next chapter buttom seems to be greyed out too soon.