Deeper Darker

This review is current as of chapter 10.

Three protagonists, a techie gutter thief, a wealthy aristo, and a calculating fighter type.  Each is from a different portion of the galaxy. 

So far the author is just laying background.  So far the setting is rich and complex, the characters interesting. I will be following this story closely. 

Reviewing this as of chapter 28 and while there may not be much to review as concerns the content,I have to say that the grammar,style and general premise is quite good, we haven't gotten to the main dungeon diving and mad adventure yet,but the world building and character introductions have been interesting, heck even me that doesn't really enjoy multiple povs all that much is interested in reading about these character's...atleast for now.

But what I would like to know is why the author refuses to engage his readers on what is obviously a logical inconsistency in his world building?, I don't really expect you to change *your* story because of your readers but atleast clarifying something that seems to be baffling people isn't too much is it. An author shouldn't have to spoon feed the readers every bit of information, sometimes you drop hints and tips then let us draw up conclusions about the story by ourselves, for me that's like half the fun of a good story, but when things in your story just aren't adding up it really kills any immersion that you have built up and yes I'm referring to the Seneca corps, how exactly are they able to carry out mass genocide and the entire galactic community is just there watching them? How can they at will decide to deploy biological weapons against an entire gender and again people just allow them,they don't corporate with the rest of the galactic community and yet they allowed to roam free and haven't been hunted down to the ends of the galaxy? It's not like there are no alliances, you made mention of some kind of treaty that other nations seem to be a part of but which the Seneca corps proudly state that they are not a signatory,that's all good..nobody is forcing them to sign but why are they still allowed into other planets airspace?...the power and threat levels you are doling out to this group doesn't make sense and we don't exactly understand why the rest of the human race aren't pushing back, this people can literally walk up and murder an entire generation of people and the populace would just nod their head like sheep and accept it, are you sure we are still talking about humans?

These are my thoughts 28 chapters in,all said so far it's a good story and would be better if this plot hole in the world building can be addressed. 

Was fairly interested in this story up until the introduction of the misandrist supersoldier space nazi amazons threatening genocide en masse for going against them. Even using those tactics as a form of intimidation against entire planets to capitulate to their demands in gross approximation of kangaroo courts with nearly planet wide sterilization on the line.

Yet rather than being viewed as the insane extremists they are they're depicted as a slightly fanatical police force of entire galactic societies.

Not sure if they're supposed to be some kind of commentary on feminism or something but I couldn't get past them.

I'm a big fan of Moodie's other story The Good Student and I followed a link from that to get here. I had pretty high expectations going in and I was't disapointed in the slightest, only 14 chapters released at the moment and it's all the opening moves so far but I'm already seeing the bones of a great story here. Loving the three primary characters so far and as always reading Moodie's dialog is a true joy, can't wait to see them interact with each other.

I was not expeting that when I started reading, didn't even see it was Mooderino who was writing this at first.

I usually think that the Sci fi story on this site don't hold up well or don't last long but with the world building you've done I can see it go far.

Your main three characters are really different from one another and really engaging, the fact that the chapters are usually split between them delays a bit the character building you can do but that's to be expected.

I have nothing bad to say about this story, it is absolutely amazing. It was love at first sight for me, as soon as the quirky Ubik made his entrance. 

Everything is great, be it story, grammar, flow, world building etc. It's a pure bliss to read it. The thing that really shines are the main characters. There is three of them, and they are all well rounded and interesting, and I hate no trouble engaging in them and their motivation.

If you are like me and generally avoid stories with multiple leads, don't worry! All three of them are handled superbly, even if Ubik shines a bit brighter than the other two.

You have to give this story a shot, otherwise you'll miss out on an amazing and unforgettable story.

It's a good free story. Great world building, fast fun action filled start with characters who make sensible choices, a true rarity on RR. GIVE IT A TRY! Also Reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee character limits

One of my favorite stories at the moment. Excelent characters and grammar, and the story is quite original, even if you consider it a mash-up of other concepts. It's also developing at quite a steady and pleasant pace; not too slow with useless parts, not too fast with rushed and unexplained scenes.

5/5 and even going Patreon for this.

The characters are interesting and full of personality. The world building is great as well. It feels very much like this will become a sort of "dungeon diver" type story, with the characters making up a traditional group. Still, the story is interesting and well written, and each character has their own motives/plans that make them feel like real people instead of a bunch of guys goi g along for the ride. 

This is shaping up to be Mooderino's best story yet. Each of the 3 main characters is well fleshed out and great in their own right, the world around them is engaging and everything you want from sci-fantasy, and the plot is promising and moving along at a good pace, like always.

As of chapter 55 the prologue and description haven't really been followed up on yet, though it seems like they will be in the next few chapters, not that the cast has been established. The story does start out with 3 characters in unrelated stories, but they quickly get together and start affecting each other, all done very well.

Give it a read.