Deeper Darker

The story had a superb beginning, but -just- like with The Good Student, it has pacing and exposition issues. And just like The Good Student, while I loved and pretty much adored the beginning and had high expectations, it got to such a boring point that I dropped it and lowered my initial rating. First, the author has issues with dragging out unimportant scenes that don't add anything much to the plot, because the same 'stuff' was shown in the same general sense just a chapter or two ago, and the comedy gets old pretty fast. This concerns Ubik in particular, and while I'll avoid spoilers, I'll be honest and tell you that by the chapter 80+-, he feels like an entirely one-dimensional character with no prospects for development. To be frank I have yet to see any character development in any of the author's works. It feels like he's focusing on the narrative so much he forgets that characters are the centre of a good fiction. And credit where credit is due, aside from missing that one singular pillar of a good story, it's pretty damn good. I'm just kinda salty at a second missed opportunity for a great story written by the same guy. Not counting How To Avoid Death On Daily Basis because I stopped with that one too soon for my own liking because of the same issues. I think I'll revisit it at some point, just because how interesting the worldbuilding can be.

Reviewing this as of chapter 28 and while there may not be much to review as concerns the content,I have to say that the grammar,style and general premise is quite good, we haven't gotten to the main dungeon diving and mad adventure yet,but the world building and character introductions have been interesting, heck even me that doesn't really enjoy multiple povs all that much is interested in reading about these character's...atleast for now.

But what I would like to know is why the author refuses to engage his readers on what is obviously a logical inconsistency in his world building?, I don't really expect you to change *your* story because of your readers but atleast clarifying something that seems to be baffling people isn't too much is it. An author shouldn't have to spoon feed the readers every bit of information, sometimes you drop hints and tips then let us draw up conclusions about the story by ourselves, for me that's like half the fun of a good story, but when things in your story just aren't adding up it really kills any immersion that you have built up and yes I'm referring to the Seneca corps, how exactly are they able to carry out mass genocide and the entire galactic community is just there watching them? How can they at will decide to deploy biological weapons against an entire gender and again people just allow them,they don't corporate with the rest of the galactic community and yet they allowed to roam free and haven't been hunted down to the ends of the galaxy? It's not like there are no alliances, you made mention of some kind of treaty that other nations seem to be a part of but which the Seneca corps proudly state that they are not a signatory,that's all good..nobody is forcing them to sign but why are they still allowed into other planets airspace?...the power and threat levels you are doling out to this group doesn't make sense and we don't exactly understand why the rest of the human race aren't pushing back, this people can literally walk up and murder an entire generation of people and the populace would just nod their head like sheep and accept it, are you sure we are still talking about humans?

These are my thoughts 28 chapters in,all said so far it's a good story and would be better if this plot hole in the world building can be addressed. 

I made it to Chapter 80 before tapping out.

The beginning was really promising.  I'm normally not a fan of multi-lead character fics, but the setting was sufficiently interesting that I was willing to extend some trust that everything would pay off.

Even from the beginning, though, the designated thief character sent up a bunch of warning sides, as being walking plot armor with convoluted plans that worked perfectly... and, in the end, he was indeed the character that made me walk away.

What was mildly amusing at the start just stopped becoming funny over time, and my suspension of disbelief just eventually gave up.

Beyond hitting the point where I would have been okay seeing Ubik die horribly, the dark humor of the setting (corporations filled with punchcard villains committing atrocities, but they keep their high customer service ratings because 99.5% of the time they don't kill their customers) eventually stopped working for me, as did the juxtaposition of 'This is a deeply serious serious situation that is also completely wacky and ridiculous'.

I thought there were some really interesting background elements here; it's just a shame that I had to cut my losses before I saw any payoff from the setup.

Lets just say that a certain arc is one big clusterfuck of plot armor with barely any sight over the situation. Give us a flow chart of the happenings. This is getting too complicated. At this point most people are just accepting this flow of logic because they dont want to reread 30 chapters to confirm its logical or not.  

This review is current as of chapter 10.

Three protagonists, a techie gutter thief, a wealthy aristo, and a calculating fighter type.  Each is from a different portion of the galaxy. 

So far the author is just laying background.  So far the setting is rich and complex, the characters interesting. I will be following this story closely. 

<Review As of chapter 86> It is interesting no doubt and the Ubik chapters are definitely more than worth it but the plot holes still exist.Still I would recommend it as it is quite interesting.

<Very minor spoilers ahead>

Firstly the big flaws-There is no explanation for Seneca Corps at all and even Vendx corporation is only marginally more believable as many of their seemingly cost-saving measures don't acually reduce cost in the long run and with heavy automation in the stellar human civilization with all it entails of course the few human employees should be idk... better.

       The world building is excellent and it is more character driven rather than having some serious scientific jargon that is very popular in some sci-fi fictions(i.e it is a non-hardcore sci-fi).There are three main POVs and the author implements it very nicely.Of course, the star attraction and the most interesting POV here is that of Ubik and he just gets better and better.It is probably the only reason why I could so easily ignore the few fallacies shere

When I first read the description and the fellow comments about this novel, I knew one thing that could possibly make me stop reading this novel was the authors execution of the various point of view. And l have to say that I was blown away by how perfect he/she executed it.

The characters managed to retain their personalities, there wasn’t any bleeding and mixing of thought processes between the characters.  The point of views changed constantly, whether it was from chapter to chapter or within the chapter itself. And yet I knew as a reader which character view was currently being presented.

The world this author has built for his/her characters is a breath of fresh air. They match and yet don’t at the same time. And just when I think that the world has been explained enough, I found out that nope it hasn’t at all. The authors has maybe only shown the tip of the iceberg that is this world.

When I reached the most current chapter (the last one of book 1: origin) I immediately join the discord and bookedmarked the authors personal site. Plus the RRl equivalents.

I’m glad that I managed to start reading this book after that chapter was published. Because I would probably loss sleep like I am about another book on this site (not that it doesn’t update daily, it’s just I need more than one chapter a day!). Anyways..... I wish the author the best and hope to see book 2 soon (Sept 24th 2019 is the date I believe)

My review is current as of Chapter 20.

This book is a thrill ride with pleasant additions of humor. It is action packed and exciting, I could binge this for a long time anywhere, the hooks make the readers crave for more. I certainly dislike the multiple POVs though as character development would be limited here. However, Deeper Darker is brilliant book with excellent grammar and an exciting, developing plot, what more could you ask for?

I'm a big fan of Moodie's other story The Good Student and I followed a link from that to get here. I had pretty high expectations going in and I was't disapointed in the slightest, only 14 chapters released at the moment and it's all the opening moves so far but I'm already seeing the bones of a great story here. Loving the three primary characters so far and as always reading Moodie's dialog is a true joy, can't wait to see them interact with each other.

The writing is good, characters have some actual depth. More importantly, they are all completely unique and so very quirky. Especially, Ubick. Every time I read a new chapter, I pretty much always laugh at his shenanigans, not to mention the digs at everything else. worth a read.