The 1.000 year Great Sage

by krushandkill

Original ONGOING Adventure Comedy Fantasy High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Reincarnation School Life Strong Lead

History says that each 1.000 years, a Great Sage is born. One that can control amazing amounts of Magic.
And in this world with so many different races, that Great Sage will defend, rule or help one of those races to advance and evolve faster than any of the other races. At least, it used to be like that for the past 5.000 years. But then, I was born.

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If anyone wants to know more:
https://samurai-world.com/sakamoto-ryoma/
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sakamoto_Ry%C5%8Dma
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bushido_Code
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Crop_rotation
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Three_Sisters_(agriculture)

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter1 – 15 years before ago
Chapter 2 ago
Chapter 3 ago
Chapter 4 – 5 years later ago
Side Story: Meeting the Elfians By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Chapter 5 – 3 years later ago
Chapter 6 – 2 years later ago
Chapter 7 - Emergency at the Palace ago
Chapter 8 ago
Chapter 9 ago
Chapter 10 ago
Side Story: Visiting the Princess By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Side Story: The life of a Princess By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Chapter 11 -> The Denar'an Trials ago
Chapter 12 ago
Chapter 13 ago
Chapter 14 ago
Chapter 15 ago
Side Story: Enter the Dragonoid! By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Side story: Hunting in the Eternal Forest By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Chapter 16 –> 5 years after, meeting in the Palace ago
Chapter 17 ago
Chapter 18 ago
Side Story: The Death of a Fallen God! By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Report 19 -> Going to Magic School - Beginning the Report of Examiner Tilia ago
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Report 22 – New friends ago
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Side story: World History of Ariansyl By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
Report 28 – Problems in class ago
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Report 30 – New teacher ago
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Report 32 – Compressed Dimension for everyone ago
Report 33 - New student ago
Report 34 - More trouble in class ago
Side Story: Character Profile ago
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Report 37 - Girls are scary ago
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Report 40 - John, the boyfriend! ago
Report 41 -> Beginning of the War ago
Side Story: Social, Economics and Politics ago
Side story: The bodyguard, by Titania ago
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Report 44 - Aftermath ago
Report 45 - Endorsement trouble ago
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Report 47 - Visiting the new domain ago
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Report 50 - More changes ago
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Report 55 - Gateway for everyone ago
Side Story: The misadventures of Rolland Hinamoto, by Aria, the Goddess of Creation ago
Report 56 - Meeting at the Institute of Magic ago
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Report 59-» Back to School ago
Side story: A caravan for all, By Aria, The Goddess of Creation ago
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Side Story: The Secret Travels of Seya Hinamoto, Dwarfs edition, by Aria, the Goddess of Creation ago
Report 61 - Visiting the domain ago
Side Story: The Secret Travels of Seya Hinamoto, Dragonoids edition, by Aria ago
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Side Story: The Secret Travels of Seya Hinamoto, LizardKind edition, by Aria ago
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Side Story: Xenya, the Warrior Maiden, by Xenya ago
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Side Story: The Secret Travels of Seya Hinamoto, BeastKind edition, by Aria, the Goddess of Creation ago
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Side Story: The Secret Travels of Seya Hinamoto, Mermaids edition, by Aria, the Goddess of Creation ago
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Report 71 – Fun at the domain ago
Side Story: Social, Economics and Politics ago
Chapter 72 ago
Chapter 73 ago
Side Story: Character Profile ago
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Side Story: Travelling with my son, by Anna Hinamoto ago
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Report 88 – Power Up! ago
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Report 103 – Party! ago
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Report 110 – Quitting school ago
Report 111 – Demonoid training ago
Report 112 – Another Teacher ago
Report 113 – Graduation ago
Report 114 – Meeting in the Human Conclave ago
Report 115 – Floating Mountain ago
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Report 117 - Gaya’s birth! ago
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Report 128 – Meeting Professor Albeyrt! ago
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Report 130 – Visit of Clan Chief Myneko Ywasaky ago
Report 131 – The Hangover ago
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Ciaina
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Format is.... Just no

Good ideas, but your writing style... Let's just say that whoever compared it to a script nailed it. 

Prefacing every bit of dialogue with the name of who is talking is jarring, and destroys the flow. Not a problem in a script, but pretty glaring in a novel. 

Obviously someone downvoted that review, because constructive criticism is bad  right?

Wayne
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Has potential but many flaws

It's a passable story so far in the form of concept. However it suffers from a lot of problems.

Generic reincarnation isekai tale where the main character gain OP abilities & is adored, gets to know all the super important people super quickly. There's no real sense of conflict, though I'm only at chapter 15, maybe the author will introduce some actual antagonists that pose a threat later. Females dominate all relationships because of course they do.

Probably the most egregious part of this tale is that it's in desperate need of a proof reader as the grammar and spelling is painful in parts. The formatting of thought & speech & action is also troublesome. 

eddwineddie
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Give it a try it will surprise you

As of chapter 50 i have seen an huge improvment in the author from the start of th story. In the beginning the story read like a script and was lacking in description of places and was generlary hard to follow.

some things i like are

  • the characters are fun and interact like friends 
  • the magic system is growing and flushing out
  • op mc but he trained for it and didnt just wish to be op

some of the things i dislike or make reading annoying are

  • when the MC meats the king or refers to people with a rank he constantly refers to them as their position like every sentence. usualy a person of lower status will add a my lord on the end of a sentence and a higher ranked noble may add baron or just leave the title out.
  • the characters relationships feel rushed and just feel like something a child would do ie i see a perty girl and tell her he likes her after a few chapters and then they start talking about mariage like right after they start going out.
  • The magic system is said to be forgotten but there are ancient creatures that could have taught any newer race what they were doing wrong or how to improve
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this Story suffers in the plot department just because the plot is loose, the mc just needs to help the world develop, and there is alot glossed over or said only once

Spoiler: Spoiler

 overall even with the missing parts and the awkward style this story is good and as the reader i can see the author visably improve throughout the story and the story is slowly getting more flushed out. 

I generly like the story and that it isnt another one where the mc is just runing from fighe to fight getting stronger through plot armor or random powerups. i would sugest to the aurthor to redo the firsst few chapters eventualy and keep growing in what seems like his first work and use it to improve. 

kjoatmon
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Is this a book or a script?

The writer does things like:

Me - this and that

Mom - Bla, bla, bla.

This needs a lot of work to get it out of script form and into book form. Then it will be much easier to read.

Punthie
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This is an interesting grammatical train wreck. 

Edit: My review still stands, BUT, the author reached out and said that grammatic corrections were welcome and I'm happy that the author is willing to learn and let others assist. I have seen chapters where others have helped and the author has altered wording to update and fix errors. I can't wait to see what it looks like later, and hope others appreciate the efforts the author is going to.

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The story is written mostly in script style, leaving a fair amount to the imagination. Most characters have no more detail than gender and hair colour, but, you know what? I don't mind that. 

The author is at least consistent with characters, but seems to maybe over express with emotional reactions of characters. Reactions are usually a little over the top. 

The setting is intriguing to me. A person of the goddesses choosing, brought to her adopted world to help it progress, given a couple of gifts and a purpose. Main character learning about this world as he goes, even with a few year time skips rather than slogging through years of basically useless growth. Even the side characters are sometimes interesting and useful for plot or MC growth.

The main drawback I have as a reader is writing style, grammar, and to a degree, spelling. Being written in script style, it is primarily dialogue. This does detract from the world a bit, but, I'm still comfortable in being able to describe the world. 

The character interaction is mostly lighthearted and jovial, while the magic of the world is an interesting take on traditional magic genres.

The thing that makes me wince and want to stop reading is incorrect tenses (saw-see, my-me), and spelling (now-know). While the words are technically spelt correctly, they still jar a little when hitting them in a sentence. Another thing that gets me a bit is slang/dialogue. The world is supposed to be primarily Japanese inspired, but a lot of dialogue could be mistaken for modern English.

All that said, I am still, weirdly, enjoying the story. This is a world that i could see myself wanting to flesh out as a writer.

KaapstadMK
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Interesting premise...

I'll start off with the good:

You have an interesting concept and premise for your story and a very good introduction and initial chapters. I like what you're trying to do and what your goal is. Keep it up.

Where you fall flat is in the execution.

I understand English might not be your first language and I haven't seen a lot of chapter comments helping you with vocabulary and grammar. Nonetheless, that is definitely an area to work on, perhaps by finding a proofreader.

The other problems are in style and layout. For layout, the biggest problem is how you write your dialogue. Other commenters have likened it to the script for a play, and I partly agree. Things that will help are using quotation marks and periodically indicating who is speaking - especially if more than two people are involved in the dialogue.

From a stylistic standpoint, I'm not sure how to help you. It's not so much an issue of pacing, but of tone and maturity. This is something that is likely to develop over time, with age, practice, and exposure. So, don't give up. Keep reading and writing.

To sum up, this story has an enjoyable premise and a relatively original plot. It's worth the read if the reader can push past problems of style and grammar.

Tmq5521
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Interesting so far

This story is a nice light hearted somewhat comidic fantasy. The writing style is unique and somewhat unusual, however after reading several chapters I found it quite enjoyable.

MadKing
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Enjoyabul good start so far. Hes still a child as of chapter 5. not much has happend hes only been training. Not much is known about those around him.

ILeaveAReviewWhenIDropIt
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The format turns me off. Specially when I use text-to-speech app. And not really effective. 

Yes, its easier for the Author but not the readers. 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 The immersion is not there yet. More like a NPCs in a game.

 

Paulo Calado
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A fun and interesting story

The characters are very funny and are fleshed out very well instead of being only the MC's supporter's. The MC himself also develops at a good pace by getting stronger at a decent  and steady pace. The story is written like a script in the beginning but the style changes after the side story after chapter 18 becoming less scriptish.