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SGK8
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The first few chapters came and went like any other character development portion of a story, which was fine. Until all of those points kept repeating themselves endlessly into the first dozen-and-a-half chapters... After getting into the story and the game itself, things finally picked up and were more than arguing or complaining or threatening.

Nurr
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Interesting premise

I'm intrigued at where this is going. That is if I've got it correct. If nothing else it might serve to remind people to read the game quick start before playing. 

 

It will be interesting watching the author pull this off. I hope he does.

shykarn
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Decent but needs work (spoilers)

The story is ok. MC is trying to get revenge on mega corp that is able to trigger a kill switch in the VR technology somehow. Grammar is excellent. I made it to chapter 18 or so but couldn't really go any farther. My main issue is the constant references to WoW, DaoC, etc. throughout the story in what can only be a dystopian future where people live in ?Megacities? or whatever. Honestly that's the biggest turn off. Second, the MC, who is a strategist and planner who dives into games to find exploits refuses to look at the forums on this new game  that is supposed to be the greatest ever?...Its the protagonists defining characteristic.

gnarlytreeman
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Decent story, underrated title. Almost no spellcasting by chapter 32.  Its not so much the awesome mastermind gamer story as it is young teenager story. Fun read anyway.  

gary0044187
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Story so far is pretty good.  Up til now it follows several tropes of the genre.  Nevertheless, there is a glimmer of something unique here in the attitude the MC has towards use of exploits and whatnot and of course, the MC doesn't have the personality of a troll that so many similar stories from Korea tend to have.  Hope it maintains its uniqueness. 

Mammoth321
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Pretty interesting so far the mc seems like one that'd be worth reading about, plot so far looks like itll be fun. Didn't see any grammar mistakes, although I'm not an English teacher or anything so there might be? All in all I say give it a shot.