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Your average Reborn Game System story, similar to The Gamer and Solo Leveling. Written for fun rather than novilization like the others, so it is smaller and less intense. It is set in an AU Warhammer (based on a slightly modified version of Warhammer Fantasy's End Times. (Modified because the real setting was a catastrophe. There will be no exploding moons or beating the God Of Indulgence because they overindulged, and no Slaans fucking off to space. People shall use their brains and not just "lol cuz I can" bs like Todbringer thinking the end of the fucking world was the best time to go persue you interracial Yaoi rivalry with a Beastlord). So you might notice names and events but don't expect it all to go the same way. And the Main Character is not the only Player in this game~

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Chapter 43 (New Arc!) ago
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BurnNote
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Jumps the shark with seriously creepy relationship

For the first twentyfive or so chapters, it's a an entertaining and fun story. Not high art, but a good way to spend some time. Then it goes bad.

(Warning: There's going to be more and more spoilers as from now on)

 

A new character introduced. From they way they behave, you'd think it was the arc villain, who'd get they're comeuppance. Nope, after a lot of slavery and at best dubious consent (or realistically: repeated rape), they are the love interest. I have no idea why they didn't get a blade between the ribs. I also have no idea why they decided from one chapter to the next that marriage would be wonderful. Ugh. (A note: There's a right way and a wrong way to do bondage. Doing it well, so that even someone who doesn't enjoy, like me, gets why someone might, is hard. I've only seen one fic do that. Getting a 'oh whatever' is a good deal easier. This fic is more in the direction of 'S&M is sick and twisted', which is not nice.)

Then, Malekith gets toppled in like a chapter, and he's killed in a paragraph by the love interest. What?! (Minor quibble: How does the love interest keep pace level-wise if the MC spends all her time in the arena murdering nasty things? She starts at a higher level too, I thing. That's dumb.)

The MC also completly forgets about Ulric, and becomes the chosen of Khaine. So that's a thing. And the rapey dark elve is apperantly the chosen of Ulric. Ok.

There's also some minor other things, but those wouldn't really hurt my enjoyment of it. My recommendation: Once you reache the Druchii arc, seriously consider just stopping there. The way there is solid, and would get a 4-4.5, but the parts after can be downright unpleasent.

Ratti
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Good Start - hate the direction it went

Enjoyed the story  - well the start anyway.

But i feel the author has lost the MC direction as they progressed, and from a MC that was entertaining to read about and enjoyable to see in action to a MC that doesnt seem to relate back to the story from the start. (as of Chap 27)

Ill hope that it gets better but wont read from here on in.

Landi
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The beginning was ok. Then out of the blue someone hits the light out of you, and you end up reading another novel for all it's worth.

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 The protagonist ends up in love with her rapist and slaver. Cuz`

Stockholm Syndrome? Brainwashing? Hey your tormentor has feelings too! And i'm sure she feels the same way. Cuz` who wouldn't love a pet?! Only psychopaths and demon worshipers wouldn't. 

Enough with the rant. Truly my fault for reading a FanFiction, but you can't gliss on worldbuilding and lore so much. 

Korst
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Cuz I em Rertaurderderid

I really want to like this, but I can't. Just reading this gives me a headache. "Lol bcuz I cn" is a pretty accurate description for the Warhammer end times, and for this as well. Honestly it's not even the game system that annoys me, it's just kinda really super annoying to see an author blather on about stuff for the entire "prologue" and every now and then in chunks each chapter afterward that makes absolutely no sense to someone unfamiliar with warhammer, and then expect people to follow along. You might as well have been speaking another language there for all the sense it made, if I'm being honest. Then again I'm just complaining because I'm in a bad mood so screw me.

Anyway, there are issues with formating here as well. Those could be easilly fixed but have been left to fester for the lulz or someting? Nurgle and all that, let it rot and grandpa will take care of it or something. It's still really annoying to try and read through when the dialog is all bunched up and the paragraphs are spread out with double spacing for whatever reason.

This is probably pretty good, but the formating and unfriendliness to readers that aren't familiar with a truck load of Warhammer Lore that doesn't even matter anymore is what kills it for me.

roceil
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Just read till chapter 26 then consider dropping.

MC kills someone then becomes a slave, not the best way to do a transition.

tonybo312
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If you like reading about someone who gets raped into stolkholm syndrome and the author makes the rapist a positive love interest read this. Otherwise stop at chapter 24 or 25 before the severe drop in quality to creepy porn.

Jangofet54
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Looking forward to where this goes. Enjoying it so far (as of Chapter 10) keep it up.

Shy Giggling
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Interesting, the same but still original

At chapter 11 currently, (chapter 8 is a dud fyi).

LitRPG type yet isn't like the others LitRPG type. It's just original, and even more better, it's set in a Warhammer setting (I'm a fan), so in my book, that gives it a 4 star already. I love the MC, a somewhat normal surely-soon-to-be eccentric woman in the military playing with something she barely understands just for our entertainment.

 

+1 for me. O// O// O//

Techman
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Apparently the system is based off of the Warhammer games. I've never done anything with them and I still really enjoy this story. 

Well written with engaging style, interesting characters, and good grammar and spelling. MC is on their way to becoming OP, but it's an enjoyable ride rather than boring steamrolling of everything. I recommend.

Chillingbear
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Tons of Potential, look forward to more!

There are never enough Warhammer fics in my opinion. It is a gritty world filled with some of the most badass heroes I have ever read. 

The MC is pretty cool, I like her. There isn't much fleshed out about her yet, but she is likeable and she is rather smart. 

The story is pretty great so far and very warhammer like filled with minor battles and major so far which is very realistic of warhammer. 

My one issue with this novel though is how disjoined I sometimes feel about the gaming system. The MC somteimes refers to it as a gaming system, but she shouldn't know about it. 

Let me repeat though "sometimes", for the most part it flows in really well, but I wish the MC would stop thinking of this as a game. She was rezzed and givin the system but still is a warhammer citizen-born-and-raised. She would probably view this as a blessing (in my opinoin, but as a game? Idk it is weird for me to see a warhammer person reacting like one of us to the system).

We are speeding through and already the MC is fairly strong and she is grinding like a boss with exp. However this is gotta make some questions soon. In warhammer everyone is suspcious as hell about weird powers and with bodies being stripped of loot automatically it will def draw some questions along with MC's epic items that she has.