Spending My Retirement In A Game

by Dice

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Follow Benjamin Joyce, an elderly man with a passion for blacksmithing who spent his life travelling the world and learning new things. Now, after helping out the developers of the first ever real VRMMO game, he gets the chance to play said game earlier than the majority of other people. 

Taking this chance to do what he loves now that his real body is slowly giving in to his old age and the profession he lives for is no longer as important as it used to be, he starts his journey to become this new world's greatest Craftsman!

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Lazy Giant
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Crafting is never fun to read (for me)

Edit: So, it was pointed out to me that this review seems like me hating on crafting genre. That is not the case. I like crafting. I like it a lot. I play mmorpgs and even have maxed out professions in both gathering and crafting types in some games. So, when I do get to read about said topic and realise how it neither matches reality nor your game style crafting it becomes an issue for me.

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Anyone who plays mmorpgs know that professions are a drag/grind. Never understood why people think a story focusing SOLELY on game style crafting would be fun.( Still looking for a story to prove me wrong.)

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The MC is literally playing the game on easiest difficulty possible. How? He is so called legend of crafting in real world, helps the game company come up with the crafting system and gets handed over the perfect race/species for crafting, a race that no other player can have, for his contribution.

Edit: I forgot to add he doesn't yet even has a class.

Now imagine this legandary crafter with his perfect crafting race practice crafting with a crafting system that is based on his crafting experience from real life.

So fun. 

Watching him breeze through one profession then another in exact same style and then another and then another... You get my point.

So fun.

That's what first 35 chapters contain.

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Should have taken the hint when so called pro player of multiple games logs into this one and acts like a complete noob that logic has left this story.

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I am being ruthless because I can't stand how every review before mine is praising the novel on the first 5-7 days of release with no down votes and then nothing. Seems fishy. Thought I would do everyone a favor and be the sound of reason.

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The style is bland, the characters are bland. I was on keto diet and my food had more excitement than this story.

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Edit: Old man part: I was wrong about this section. nvm.

Zorro362
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I normally don’t make reviews, but I could not stand the constant negative reviews. So please bear with me.

This is a good story, the characters are entertaining, and the grammar is some of the best I have seen in awhile. There’s little to no action yet, but it’s a crafting story and It’s still in the early phase, so that’s to be expected.

The most common complaint I have seen is that the the story is very very similar setup wise to age of gods.

So what if it is very similar to AOG? If that’s your main complaint, then don’t read it.

Both are good stories, and while much of the basic set up is indeed mostly the same, the actual details of the characters and their motivations, to say nothing of the worlds themselves, are completely different!

Not to mention the fact that both stories are only just getting started, and will most likely go in different directions. Like a path that splits at a fork in the road. Both paths start at the same place, but have different destinations.

Seriously Most stories that share multiple genres tend to start out very similar. 

I cant wait to see where both this story and age of gods takes us😉

 

Torffy
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A really great story. 

For the first time in my reading history the crafting skills aren't explained by saying that the protagonist/person of interest is a great prodigy. No this protagonist worked his whole life to achieve his level of mastery.

Furthermore, up to the time of this review, the author didn't try to make the protagonist too unrealistic. The main protagonist has legitimate reasons for playing this game, even in his advanced age, and his actions. Sadly the same can't be said about the rest of the characters. Despite this the author has managed, at least in my humble opinion, to make an intreguing story.

Moreover the plot is set at a leisure pace, meaning tat you don't get overwhelmed by details/ characters, allowing you to understand and easily follow the plot.

The grammar, as far as I can tell, is very good and easy on the eyes.

Concernig style I find it very welcoming, allowing one to take his time while reading it.

Overall a very enjoyable and promising story.

SammyStowes
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i stumbled into this story yesterday and i cant get enough of it! 
not many gamers tend to use the crafting features to its fullest, (instead uses the instant dungeon and what not) so im happy that your doing something thats fairly fresh and exciting 

see ya next week!

Theepicmonsta
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This is a fun, if plain read. The style and characters are simple but they aren't poorly written either (except the character in the prologue, that was just weird), the story isn't going anywhere very quickly but it's nice seeing the character progress, even if it comes to them quite easily (to be fair, it's set up that way).

This isn't a tense story, or one with high stakes or a fast pace. It feels more like a slice of life than anything else. If you're looking for a story to get blown away into another world by, this isn't it, but it is a lovely story to just sit down to and read.

I look forward to your future releases.
Thank you for this story, Dice!

Clay
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Pretty good so far 👍

 So far I really like it! The characters are likeable and I love the concept behind Eisen (MC). 

 He actually spent his life learning how to do shit like blacksmithing and worked in that field of work all his life, so it's justified that he can make amazing items right off the bat. Many other VRMMO crafting novels just randomly give their MCs the ability to be amazing crafters even though they never did something of the sort in their whole lifes.

I haven't found any major grammatical mistakes beside punctuation here and there, but nothing where it actually significantly changes the reading experience.

Author, keep going please. Excited to see where the story goes from here :) 

Willy_Wonka
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A new novel, a new chance

 I've just read the prologue and first two chapters and i am liking it so far but to be fair I can't judge it based on so little content. I hope this fiction will be as good as, if not better than the omnipotent wizard, which I liked a lot. I recommend giving it a chance because this will probably become something worth your time.

(Hey author if you're reading this I wish you good luck with your writing, cheers!)

123Dude
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 It's a lot of fun to read! It's super chill, and just casual. No hectic fight for power, just chill crafting! 

There've been a few smaller spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing too horrific, except in the prologue where the tenses seem to completely jump around

P.S. Bree is a cinnamon bun

Sky3Fall
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I can tell you really thought this through. Things like suspecting Eisen for not having a single level is something not all novels think to do. Keep it up!

Bandicoot
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Great start but needs to move along

The prologue was strange and jarring compared to the rest of the story. However, the intro to the actual setting was exceptionally well done; losing all one's XP and having only a single skill at the MC's apparent age would be noteworthy at the least.

The story then hits a a point, following the crafting.  It is important but really not that interesting... Compared to the enchanting section, the rest of the crafting grind is not that interesting.  The enchanting though has promise.

Need some hijinks to start the heart pounding!