WARZONE: Modern Warfare in a Fantasy World

by Tempest Wizard

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead GameLit High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Reincarnation Ruling Class Strong Lead War and Military
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Connor, a teenager in the 21st century who enjoys spending time playing military and strategy games. He is now looking forward to a VRMMO game called "Warzone" that mirrors Earth where the players start as an ordinary soldier in one of two factions, Federation or The Empire, then rise through the ranks and manage their own armies. Connor, who was looking forward to playing Warzone, put on his VR helmet. Although unbeknownst to him, where he was sent to was not... Warzone.

This is the story of Supreme Commander Connor Ironheart.

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octonus
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Poorly thought out concept

Lets get the pros out of the way: the writing is good, and I can't say anything negative about the characters/worldbuilding so far. But the setup is too unfair. I can't imagine the protagonist ever losing, so there is no suspense or excitement.

How I imagine having a conversation with the author:
Author: Our protagonist gets dumped into a medieval game world, except he has modern weapons/equipment.
Me: Oh, so it will be about how he can scrounge/craft ammunition and tools to keep his weapons working?
Author: No. Everything works perfectly, and ammo/fuel can be purchased at will.
Me: Ok, so the suspense will come from trying to find reliable friends/allies.
Author: No. Once he kills enough people the protagonist will get be able to summon perfectly trained, loyal allies.
Me: Maybe other people will reverse engineer his weapons and use them against him?
Author: No. The bad guys are too dumb for that.
Me: So how could he possibly lose?
Author: He won't.

neon11234
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Clear and easy reading. No glaring errors. Video game start 

Spoiler: Spoiler

Hopefully the author doesn't get bogged down with becoming too OP, perhaps empire/world building can help prevent the story from becoming stale, introducing military fortifications/FOBs etc, some military battles with good strategy would be interesting. Recruiting "real" people as subordinates to the MC's units, would be a way to deal with any refugees fleeing from nearby war(s), high unemployment and explain away personel requirements to run things like kitchens, farming, manufacturing, guard patrols. MC needs military intellegance officers & Engineers at some point to help secure food, shelter, water, power, etc so they're not 100% dependent on his abilities, assuming his force expands, the author may want to keep things small and lean for the forseeable future.

Maybe increasing the military docturine would add to the story. Wish list aside, enjoyable read, for those looking for modern warfighters in a fanatasy setting. Will be following the story closely. Potental love interest (long way into the future, if ever) not enough to even consider tagging, no haram nosense, pretty good.

The battles/fights have been pretty point and click, I'd like to see buzzsaw supressing machine gun fire, and shock and awe, blitzkrieg, kill zones, ambushes. I'd suggest the author reads some short descriptions(wiki will do) of US civil war, zulu war, US vs Red Indians, European wars in the 1800s. This will help shape how effective simple cannons and muskets were against primative weapon wielding hostiles, even the manga/anime "GATE: Where the JSDF Fought" could provide inspiration of how devistating the technological gap is (the magic/mage element does close the gap). The Rhodesian war and Fin-Russian could provide inspiration for fighting and winning against superior numbers (enviromental and training/strategy factors played a part)

Yinko
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Thinks he's in an FPS, doesn't kill the guys that he thinks are arresting him.  Creates a faction called Sentinal (which, obviously relates to the concept of watchful protectors), which does not bode well. 

 

Not the absolute dumbest stuff I've ever read, but I have no interest in where it's going. 

Jester13
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Average story-semi interesting premise

Always been interested in this kind of world/setting (becoming a commander and summoning people to fight for you) so I'm mildly biased, but I'd say that as of chapter 22, this is a decent story. Not amazing but not bad either, worth a read for sure! 

HamsterDesTodes
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The story has so far not been impressive. A Teenager who thinks he starts playing an FPS game shoots his way through a fantasy world, just like the title promised. Unfortunately, this tale combines the things I dislike about fantasy settings (ie arrogant "masters" and cringing subordinates) with the boredom of written FPS fights (bang! he's dead. +10 fame repeat 20 times, fight finished) and not much of a story.

Some people might get off on lists of gun names and military equipment but for me, a bunch of acronyms+numbers are not a replacement for an actual plotline.

Throw in an at times strange acting MC without much of a supporting cast and the story is plain boring. Your mileage may vary of course.

On the positive side, there aren't many typos or glaring grammar errors and the pace is quite fast.

SauceGodPluto
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Will do a better review later. Seems good so far hope it has more world building and lore.

Yggdrasil360
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I feel the story has a lot of potential and I can't wait to see where you take it I hope you continue with the story

dante7555
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The concept of the story while not wildly overdone, it can still be found if you look for it, FPS VR gamer gets transported into Isekai world, blah blah.

The style is shit. I'm very spoiled when it comes to novels so to me this is shit. Not as bad as some fanfic but it's still bad. Very obvious things are constantly pointed out by mob character and the MC's thoughts. Which in turn makes the Story's point of view weird and awkward. Knowing exactly what other characters think is quite retarded, that with the short and nonsensical thoughts itself makes a perfect combo.

There's no problem with the Grammar from a first glance so it's good enough.

The Main Character while having room to develop seems to be too... average. Why read a story if it's about an Average guy? There's no source of an interesting and surprising development, it's boring to read cause there's no character that acts as a hook to keep reading nor is there an interesting out of the norm story aspect.

The only reason I read this far was because I saw a comment the author made about how he hated harems, the character blushing for no reasons, and naive saint main characters. Kinda got my hopes up not gonna lie, but even if what was said is true, the writing itself is too shit to go anywhere.

Edit: seems like it caters to Chinese Webnovel and Wuxia readers. Meaning quantity over quality. With the majority of the novel being the mob character and the "antagonists" (not really antagonists if they can't contend with the OP MC) being in awe of the things the MC can do (wanking off the MC's self-esteem), even worst instead of just writing that they looked embarrassed, angry, or something, it's replaced by a complete 100% accuracy of what that character thinks in some single quotation marks.

I mean if you like this kind of thing... you do you, I guess.

ImMrMeeseeks
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Just needs some editing and fixing

Very good story. Love these kinds of novels hope u get better and keep the releases up.

ianisomega
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If this novel keeps going at the rate that it is and keeps up the quality then I can forsee only one of two outcomes.
Either the author gets burned out or the novel ends up being one of my go-to novels to read.

And it is already one of my favorites.

It has better content than I expected and has a decent amount of chapters, my only gripe is the word count for each chapter, but that can be overlooked due to the visible effort that went into the novel. I assume the word count is low to make sure that the author doesn't burn out and can release a consistent string of chapters, but as I am not the author I cannot be sure.

I will give this a 4 Stars, mostly because I like the release rate, the quality and the premise. I dock one star due to word count, but that can be changed later.

Greatly looking forward to seeing this continue, and hope that the author doesn't burn out trying to push tons of releases.