Another World's Homunculus
Ellis Murrin died an unexpected death, but before he could experience the sweet bliss of eternal rest, a God-like being whisked him away. The God told a tale of another world in grave jeopardy and the need for a hero (or several heroes) to go there and save the people. It was looking to be a typical story of transmigration when suddenly, something unexpected happened.
Now, he finds himself standing in the middle of an ancient tomb, with a lineage that wasn’t exactly normal and a body that wasn’t entirely human.
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From chapter 4-36 only 3 things of note happen.
1. MC gets a female fox
2. MC gets a wolf pack with a female wolf leader
3. MC meets a witch(female)
Between all of that is the MC being OP and killing Monsters. There is some minor foreshadowing but this story is closer to 50 chapters than it is to 20 at this point and the plot hasn't really advanced much. Things shouldn't be rushed of course, but things are only now seeing some kind of advancement due to the MC finding another living "human," the witch. But the witch has been in 4 chapters now a nothing of note has happed and it took 4 chapters just to reach the witch's home. During that time, hardly anything has been said between the two characters. I get that it has been 6 years since the MC last spoke to another person, but it is very disappointing.
There is also the fact that the MC is a Homunculus. Despite being non-human, or an artificial human, in 36 chapters this has almost zero relevance to the plot. In other stories, there are plenty of humans with the same powers the MC has shown thus far. Which makes the MC's Homunculus status feel arbitrary. I don't expect this to stay arbitrary, but that is how it is at the moment. Part of the issue is that there have been no other humans in the story for the MC to compare himself to so you can only compare him to humans from other novels. One thing that would have really made a difference was if the MC was never a human from earth. If the MC was born a Homunculus. Because right now, the MC is just a strong human, in a Homunculus body that has all the functions of a natural human body, including libido. The only thing that marks him as non-human is the author declaring he isn't. The MC has a unique eye and hair color, which is supposed to mark him as something other than human, but with no other humans around those two points are currently irrelevant. So, if it wasn't for the author telling us he wasn't a natural human, the reader would have never known.
I did say there was some foreshadowing of events to come. You hear a bit about the other humans that were sent to the new world along with the MC, some religious corruption, and a faraway maiden. It doesn't amount to much at the moment, and those issues are so far off that it almost has no relevance to the MC's travels. So, there isn't much for the reader to concern themselves about in this regard.
There are a few chapters that aren't from the MC's perspective. Of those chapters, there are three chapters that are from the perspective of a member of the wolf pack. Two chapters follow the Wolf Pack's leader, Wight, and the other is a more comical chapter involving Plush, the biggest(fattest?) wolf of the pack. These are the best of the chapters that aren't from the MC's perspective, and I look forward to other chapters from the perspective of a member of the pack, and especially one from the young fox, Ena.
I have a fear that this novel will never reach a point of where things really start moving. Where something actually noteworthy happens in this world the author has created. This is mainly due to the fact that the author has two other fictions that have been abandoned at the posting of this review.
Despite this review sounding mostly negative, I have mostly enjoyed what I have read. Even with my few frustrations, I have a desire to keep reading as it is updated.
For now at least.
It starts out okay, guy gets reborn in an op body, etc, there are some monsters and wilderness survival...
But it never progresses from there. After what feels like ages he finally meets a person, and instead of heading for civilization which was his original goal, he takes a colossal detour of...
Wait for it...
The same old wilderness survival. There's no plot progression and most of the characters are literally animals...
It failed to evolve from a premise to a story, 50 chapters and it feels like nothing really important has happened besides at the very start where some fox was born.
To make matters worse, the author has the gall to make interludes about what's going on in the human kingdoms when he obviously has no intention of ever letting the protagonist go there (I mean seriously, the story will almost definitely be dropped by then. The heroes will be dead from old age by the time he gets there at his pace...)
It might not be that bad, but it's slower than it has any right to be and teases potential plots via interludes that hold literally no meaning because there is no plot progression.
I wouldn't mind the Japanese type of writing so much, but the lack of common sense is jarring. 6 feet high person holding a 50 feet high troll in sleeper hold and similar shit.
Even if you want to throw physics out of the window because isekai/he is too strong, the basic proportions still apply.
Mc has intelligence of a litteral brick. Bitching about lack of clothing for 5 years in the middle of a forest, but cant be arsed to even try to skin anything after killing shit or making a basic leaf skirt.
Stays in place for 1,5 years, goes travelimg for 2 and after staying somewhere for few days he mentions this is the first time ever he stayed in one place.
Just stupid shit over and over and over.
5 fucking years of daily battles and he still doesn't know basic shit about fighting or survival.
Writting style and world building are nice.
Like was mentioned, while I aprecciate the depth of the characters interactions the plot progression is horrible, it's like watching a race between a slug and a parapletic turtle, thousands of words and dozens upon dozens of chapters and feels like nothing happened.
I can barely judge the MC development 'cause all we had is he walking in the forest with a group of animals, no decisions that defines his personality and life long goals.
The story is fairly good but the concepts that make it interesting are largely absent for over 30 chapters. The author wanted to the MC as OP as well as show growth, it's very good as showing the journey from powerful to overpowered for his crew but the MCs place in the world, his interaction with it and the world's reaction to him feel like the most compelling party of the story and yet he's complete isolated from the world. I'll be honest I was ready to stop it in place but the thought "what will happen when he reaches civilization?" kept me reading.
Style & Grammar: Nothing too bad about grammar. Occasional small mistakes. Style is alright, too. Chapters' length, splitting text into paragraphs, nothing to complain about.
Story: It's a shame though, that I cannot say the same about the story. MC got reincarnated by a god of another world together with eight other randomly chosen individuals, but in the process got kidnapped by a former demon king who for no reason packed him into a powerful artificial body (homunculus, mindless slave dolls) far from civilization.
The problem is, the mindlessness of the body seems to have got into our protagonist. He finds a dying pregnant fox so he waits over a year guarding it against monsters. Time skip, nine-tailed OP fox pet. Then he started traveling along the river FOR SIX YEARS. Meanwhile, he got a few weak (become OP after breakthrough arc) wolves and old (but beatiful ofc.) witch. So what did they do?
They spent the next few years traveling along the river. That's all the novel is about. They hunt some Calamity-class, world-endangering monster and MC is happy because they are tasty. Killing monsters and traveling firstly without any target, later toward the maybe-existing-maybe-not world tree. Stretched into 600 pages.
Few chapters were used to paint some background, but nothing specific. Other eight humans got reincarnated. Third POV that shows that MC is ridiculously strong. A bit of mythology.
And to specify. It's not a slice-of-life. There is no human interactions, daily life description (excluding constant eating dragons' body parts) or that sort of atmosphere.
Characters: They are scarce and sparsely described.
A naive, somewhat stupid, extremely powerful but inadequately aware of it, meek Japanese protagonist.
His ambitions - none, his target - go this way, his reasoning - I shall act on my whim.
A fox, that uses magic and bullies wolves. Loves MC and is jealous when wolves' leader nuzzle him.
Wolves each with single unique characteristic (fat, splits poison, fast, etc.) lead by a she-wolf who loves MC.
A witch. Likes MC, plenty of teasing and awkward cringe-worthy scenes. Uses alchemy.
A village of scantily-clothed girls (men went somewhere else) with squirrel ears and tails. Barely important for the plot. One of them was a guide for a few chapters, which led to another boring fight with another Calamity-class monster.
The author doesn't check or even think over things he writes. Sometimes he states that our superhuman MC travels 3 miles per day (he walks all day long), other time some contradicting statement about power levels.
TL;DR: There are no human interactions, reliable world building, contact with civilization or character development. But well, he has come a long way along the river. Give him a medal or something.
I really like the story. the progression is a bit slow, but it's intersting so I didn't really mind. The characters are fun. The writing style is good, without any grammer mistakes as far as I can see.
I really recommend reading it!
This story is basically 50 chapters (thats where I got up to) of walking and stupidity. The MC is barely more sentient than the average rabbit, and I just can't read anymore. was a bit interesting at first, but the premise got quite bland after a couple chapters. How I made it to 50 is a question I must ponder for the next few days.
Title: Another World's Homunculus
Genre: Action, Fantasy
Protagonist: a homunculus with an earthling's soul. strength maybe S rank. current powers: super strength, super regeneration
Setting: a fantasy world with magic and monsters
Tension Level: low-medium. mostly low.
Basic Premise: the protagonist, along with 8 other earthlings (probably earthlings) are sent to a different world called lull. but the demon king kidnapped the protagonist before they arrived, and the demon king gave the protagonist the body of a homunculus he made himself that have his blood. the demon king died right after that. his only request is to have a lot of descendant.
Chapter Content: how the protag travel in the forest, fight the monsters, meet a certain monster/beast that became his companion, use precious material to cook etc. right now he is still in the forest, so there is still some time until he meet other people.
Chapter Reached: 24
Personal Opinion: I like OP MC. so I like this novel. also, I like that the pace is neither too slow nor too fast. I think it's on the faster side, but I like fast pacing. although, if it's too fast there will be problems.
Is good, the time skips aren't as noticable as the other reviews would suggest. And the writing is pretty awesome. One of the few novels here I'm really excited for more chapters. Keep it up dude!