Ironclad: Another world conquest with unbeatable technology

by Laty

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Cyberpunk Dungeon GameLit Harem High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Mythos Portal Fantasy / Isekai Ruling Class Strategy Strong Lead War and Military
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

UPDATE: Read the latest chapter ‘Fate of Ironclad’ for more details. Cover Art is taken down because of character appearance issues with the new book.

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An ordinary guy who has no reputation and recognition amongst his peers suddenly gets transported to another world along with his classmates to defeat the Demon Lord who terrorizes the world with his evil power and amongst us, three were only chosen as the world's Heroes.

Main Protagonist: Andrew Gerald who only has his immense height as his only redeeming feature received an ability that none could fathom the identity and only to find out later that it's an ability that allows him to reinforce, construct and summon weaponries...

Powerful weaponries from another world.

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Racue
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I thoroughly enjoy this

I typically dont post reviews but I really enjoy this story and want to see more of it. Each chapter you post has me going dang is there another one up after this. This is definitely a story I would recommend to others.

 

Keep up the good work and please keep providing me with my fix.

Ninjaxus
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was quite interesting with plenty to enjoy i hope to see more in the future. keep it up :)

ChillerXD
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Eyyyy...that's pretty good

The story is realy interesting and easy to read laughing

OrionEion 0
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It good but Grammer need improvement. I am looking forward to the future of this book.

Serallium
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Expecting more in the future, have a 5 star first

Like @Linipus mentioned, the story could be a good one if not for the horrible grammar of the author.

@Andre Galfand’s suggestion could do the story better but after I reread the whole new plot, it seems he have gained an editor.

I still enjoy this novel since it is quite unusual. The revise done this book well and lessened the bullshit revolving around the storyline.

Overall, the story is better than average if not because of the grammar. This could be even better than excellent.

 

meteorbang611
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This one needs A LOT of work.

Ugh... Where to start?

 

I guess I'll start by addressing the elephant in the room.

 

The grammar for the first four chapters is not bad, it's absolutely, undoubtly atrocious. Those chapters actually gave me a headache because I can't progress in a story as long as the paragraphs make no sense.

1 chapter takes around a whooping 20 minutes to read simply because I had to make sense of what was written, restructure sentences and completely undo terms and descriptors that didn't fit in the first place. There is so much going on that I couldn't and won't point it out, just know that the first chapters are bad, like, really bad.

I skimmed over the most recent chapters and they are actually very decently written; but those aren't the chapters the reader will read first, obviously, so please get back to your introductory chapters before it chases away anymore would-be readers.

 

Style consists of diction and structure of sentences and paragraphs, but because this is all a jumbled mess there really isn't any way to rate this. I did like the choice of using some German words though, so hey.

 

It's an Isekai, what else do I gotta say about the story? They are my weakness.

 

And onto the characters, we got a nerdy MC who, despite his well-built physique, is described as being unable to run more than 5km? What kinda contradiction is that even? What sense does that make to add? He also is just the biggest uber geek that takes his consoles to school and has zero social life or skills - cuz losers are sooooo kewl!

Then he gets humilated by his classmates whom he never had contact with, which makes their anger and spite at him all the more inexplicable. Therefore he swears revenge after being paraded around the capital as a fool, but revenge as in: "I will murder you all." Kinda extreme considering the circumstances, but allright, it can happen with a weak mentality.

Also, why did he get thrown out even? He got this unnamed mythical class skill, which only appears every thousand years or some such, and they throw him out because apparently it wasn't given by any of their Gods?

Imagine, you got this whole system thingy throughout your entire life and build your royalty and society around it, there comes along some dude who's like the Chuck Norris equivalent of their world, godly skills, could become a deciding factor in a war and stuff, and you insult, humilate and then kick him out, because no way could that come back to bite you in the ass later...... That's some lacking brain cells in action right there.

 

Gonna conclude my review at this point, author, please redo the first chapters, for your and any future readers' sake. I love OP Isekai's, but this really didn't start off good.

I'd say you try and give your MC some more backstory, why he is so socially inept, maybe not make him proud of the fact that he didn't have any social interaction in years, because that's just pitiful, and only hangs out with his figurines, and instead give him a reason why he does. Was he bullied because of his nationality, maybe some conflict with a friend's parents that stemmed from their grandparents prejudice against Germans, with WW2 and all that. Sounds stupid at first but you could really make a good motive out of this.

 

Anyway, cheers and good luck writing your story.

Mehx
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A little less shock and awe.

Well I don’t want to give a bad review since it’s only the start of the writing but here are a few things I dislike.

As the title says for me at least there’s too much emotion I get going to a new world and stuff is amazing or scary but why does he have to have a outburst at every twist and turn.I understand shock and awe is needed but when it’s too much the shock and awe loses it well SHOCK AND AWE(I sill try to stop saying shock and awe........sho-)

I might not get the full jest of his class or world even so when they got teleported to a different world and he’s powers were thought to be shit,every classmate talked down or was cursing at him.He might have been silent or strange(I think not sure maybe he was a dick)but it does not justify all that’s so fast too like it felt they just got there next second everyone’s is talking to him like shit.Its ok if it’s the inhabitants of the different world maybe they look at power only,maybe they hate the weak am not sure yet but his classmates just doing a 180 since he’s powers were shit is not realistic.

Lastly the grammer and way you lay out the chapter is a bit hard for me at least to read.One second he’s here next he’s doing that next he’s this next his doing that next he’s thinking next next next,it’s just the pacing seems a bit off but since it’s the beginning so not a huge deal.

Still in the end I find the mc(main character) is interesting and the idea is very interesting I really hope you will keep writing but just check a bit on the it is all I need.

Ann Clay
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Grammar, grammar, grammar, grammar!!

I just stumbled upon this Novel through sheer recommendation, and I JUST had to create an account just to subject you about your grammar.

The story is very promising and paced, don’t believe on that guy who reviewed this for being fast paced. It’s really understandable since it is only the BEGINNING.

It’s not like this book has passed twenty chapters... God.

Action paced as it what looks like, you could tell this novel is all about the revenge of the MC, and whether you believe it or not; The sentences that makes of the action are pretty straight and as good as the other action books in this website, if not, better than uncommon I believe.

Sentences are alright and straight, no fillers at all, quite good one.

Levant
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Keep publishing chapters!!

I love reading stories about japanese isekai that involves technological advancement. The title says it all! This is the story I would like to recommend to other people.

Every reviews speak of Author’s grammar, but for me who did not have english as native language. It’s pretty decent for a person who have other language as his first. 

Though if you are looking for novels to improve your grammar and style on, I don’t recommend this.

This story is much likely to be an entertainment one rather than a full-fledged novel.

Character development is quite at satisfactory rate, I am just hoping Author wouldn’t use magic to speed things up. Though magic happened at certain chapters, I didn’t heed on it anymore, considering he have a cheat ability that removes every disturbing crap inside his head.

Even though with those flaws,

One chapter per day won’t satisfy me!! Aaaa

And yes, THERE IS ONE FLAW I WOULDN’T DARE TO FORGIVE THE AUTHOR!

Spoiler: Spoiler

Keep up the good work! I gave 5 stars because it is deserving and all.

Linipus
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The story seems to have an interesting concept, that could have become a good story, but I can't honestly be sure of anything since the grammar is so terrible that I don't know what's going on half the time. And even when I think I know what's going on it's still hard to read.