The No Names: Calforn Chronicles (Reborn)

by Falbelo

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Horror Sci-fi GameLit Grimdark LitRPG Male Lead Space Opera Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

With the world in a senseless haze, the Forgotten and the Digits live under the thumb of the Government and Bankers.

After an alien command center is discovered on the moon, shadowy organisations are set in motion. The allure of infinite opportunities too strong to resist.

One engineer from the lower classes breaks through the societal mold. Unprecedented repercussions follow for Digit 36589900. The chain of events his incarceration began will affect the entire solar system, if not the universe.

 

 **This Story is a Revamped Version of my Original TNN**

Cover Image by Harkale Linai
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Cover Emblem by Kellerica
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DanielPrince
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Promises to be an incredible remake

I was reading through the original TNN, so part of my review is based on that.

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Falbelo's writing style is descriptive without being overly flowery. It's kinda like perfectly cooked spaghetti. It ain't fancy, but boy is it satisfying. (And I really like spaghetti)

Story

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It's an interesting concept, and from what I've been told directly by the author on how he's revamped the progression system, I genuinely think it's going to be one of the more original and interesting takes on the genre.

 

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This author always does a fat edit before he uploads, you can expect quality from him. (His grammar and spelling is much better than mine!)

 

Character

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Each character has a distinctive voice, some stories I read they all feel the same. Not here, you can tell these are characters that the author truly cares about.

 

Overall?

The original was a great story and this one is gonna be even better. Go read it.

Alex M
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An upgrade from the Original

This is a great sci-fi with a dark look at the future. Look forward to aliens, a cool upgrade system and a badass maincharacter. 

The original was already a well polished book, but Falbelo has gone and improved on that further, adding a lot of depth and neat abilities. 

Cloudless Night
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 It's the first time I've read any of Falbelo's works, and I quite enjoyed it, going ahead to read some more.

The Mad King
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Style 4,5/5

It's still the author's biggest shortcoming, but the rewrite has helped. Weird phrasing sometimes hinders the flow of the story. Sometimes.

Character 4,5/5

Unique and relatable, if somewhat one-sided. Rational thoughts and responses, as well as solid and consistent characters overall.

Story 5/5

Easily the strongest aspect of this story and the reason it earns its 5 stars overall. A unique sci-fi tale in an original yet realistic universe that could satisfy even the most demanding fans of the genre. A dystopian tale that will tickle you in all the right places then slap you across the face. A fantasy world so far from the real that reveals so much about human nature.

Grammar 5/5

No mistakes I could spot with my limited knowledge. Praise the Javvs.

 

Tarksteezle
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An Improvement on His Past Works

Although this book has nothing to do with his previous series, the author's writing has clearly evolved from his first book. He has a firm grasp of the story he wants to tell and how to tell it.

Havoc the Younger
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Didn't read the first, so I can't compare. However, I can say I did binge read it, very well written and makes you want to keep hoping for the next button to be highlighted. 

Everlosst
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Get you some survival in a frozen hellscape

Disclaimers:  Part of a review swap and valid through chapter 12 pt 3.

A grim take on the future and featuring a rather bleak enviroment?  Yeah, it is.  But it's still a fun read.  Calforn is a little bit of a lot of thing.  A little dystopian, a little adventure, a little bit GameLit, base builder and just a dash of horror.  It's all presented with rock solid writing.

Style:  I'm taking notes from this guy on how to clean up my own prose.  For realz.  You get a real sense of the enviroment and creatures without the prose ever bogging down.  It is clear and concise, but without being dry.

Story:  Overall, it's a good, engaging read.  It moves along at a nice clip, niether dragging nor rushing.  In addition, there are very light GameLit type mechanics, and they fit in quite nicely.  My only real problem is there are some elements that are hinted and teased pretty heavily pre-drop and are then ignored.  Like in the characters below, that may be something that is expanded on later, but as it is now, I think either too much or too little is said.

Grammar:  I found about a half dozen errors in the 215 pages.  It's quite readable.

Character:  It took a few chapters for the secondary characters to really come into their own, but, once they do, they are solid, believable people.  They feel distinct.  Alpha is more fleshed out, though I would like to see some of the threads from chapter 1 followed up more.  That may be a thing that is followed up on either later, or in a sequel.

Overall:  I don't want anyone reading this to take four stars the wrong way.  Five stars, for me, are the books that I'm hounding my family and friends to read.  The ones I bring up to near strangers and embark on missionary trips to convert people to the fandom.  This isn't quite that.  It is really good though.  It is a fun read, with an interesting premise and some different angles on GameLit.

NONNE
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Boi I’m only at the beginning but it’s good.

jpuntuned
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Daym son, give Frank a bigger cookie

I am a sucker for sci-fi, and this story ticks my boxes. The narrative is deep and the author knows how to maintain an engaging flow in his prose.

Advanced Review incoming once I get in deeper.