Phoenix Rising

by Vertrex

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Harem Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation

A new baby is born into a fantasy world. The story follows the baby, Lakshman Chand, as he grows, and embarks on a journey to uncover mysteries and discover his destiny.


Currently, because there had been a lotof negative reception for this story, I decoded to do my best to improve the story's overall beginning and do a better story telling by rewriting from scratch a different version of the original. You can find it here in the link below to that story. So, I'll be continuing to write this story, and write the alternative at pretty much the same time.

The Life of the Phoenix Titan.


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
ARC 01 (Start): Prologue - Birth of a Hero [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 1 - Daily Life [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 2 - Seeking Help [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 3 - Recognised Potential [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 4 - Learning [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 5 - Controlling the Force [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 6 - Monster Attack [v2] ago
ARC 01: Chapter 7 - Exploring the Forest [v2] ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 8 - Slave Spirit [v2] ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 9 - Day with Ondine [v2] ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 10 - Monster Dungeon Mission (Start) ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 11 - Monster Dungeon Mission (Middle) ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 12 - Monster Dungeon Mission (End) ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 13 - Mother History ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 14 - Diet ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 15 - Punishment of Ondine (Questioned) ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 16 - Punishment of Ondine (Accepted) ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 17 - Being Stubborn ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 18 - Energy Charge ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 19 - Sparring Match ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 20 - Breaking the Sword ago
[Arc 01] Chapter 21 - Explosive Victory ago
[Arc 01 End] Chapter 22 - Explosive Boy ago
[Arc 02 Start] Chapter 23 - Sumara’s and Ondine’s Disagreement ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 24 - Advanced North Sword ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 25 - Failure Leads to Success ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 26 - Indra vs. Lakshman ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 27 - Phoenix Emperor ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 28 - Master of the Ladies ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 29 - Friend’s Talk, Surprise and Advice ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 30 - Breakfast Troubles ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 31 - Minding Business ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 32 - Forest Pranksters ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 33 - Resolving Strange Occurrences ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 34 - Voiceless Incantation ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 35 - Oblivious Trouble ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 36 - Forgetful Age ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 37 - Danger ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 38 - Healing Burst ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 39 - Chase The Killers ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 40 - The Trouble Increases ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 41 - Fight Right ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 42 - Decide Who Fights Who ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 43 - Two down and one to go ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 44 - Regenerating Problems ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 45 - Felix vs. Monster ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 46 - Fight to protect without dying ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 47 - Final Attack ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 48 - Three Days Later ago
[Arc 02] Chapter 49 - Experiments of War ago
[Arc 02 End] Chapter 50 - Departure and Determination ago
[Arc 03 Start] Chapter 51 - Scary Man ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 52 - Training Plans ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 53 - Train to Surpass the Strong ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 54 - Worse than Monkeys ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 55 - Training Plan for Kids ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 56 - You are their Instructor ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 57 - Training Starts ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 58 - Start the Race ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 59 - Ongoing Training ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 60 - Demonstrations and Planning ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 61 - Don't mess with Explosion Boy ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 62 - Conquering Nervousness ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 63 - Test Day Arrives ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 64 - Saint Magic Test (Start) ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 65 - Saint Magic Test (Middle) ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 66 - Saint Magic Test (End) ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 67 - Birthday and Departure ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 68 - A Change in Routine ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 69 - Enter the Dungeon ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 70 - Dungeon Trouble ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 71 - Trapped ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 72 - Dungeon Crawlers ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 73 - Differences of Ondine and Tetra ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 74 - Ondine in Trouble ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 75 - Running out of Time ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 76 - Saviour in the sky ago
[Arc 03] Chapter 77 - Waking Up ago
[Arc 03 End] Chapter 78 - Full Recovery ago
[Arc 04 Start] Chapter 79 - Letter Trouble ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 80 - Friend of Friend is Friend ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 81 - Challenge Accepted ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 82 - Indra vs. Lakshman (Start) ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 83 - Indra vs. Lakshman (Middle) ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 84 - Indra vs. Lakshman (End) ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 85 - Journey into the Outer World ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 86 - Nine Pillars of Power ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 87 - Messenger of Death ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 88 - Shocking Revelation ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 89 - Revelation of Choice ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 90 - Mumble is Humble ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 91 - Heart of Courage ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 92 - Balancing Strength ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 93 - Mumble is Rumble ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 94 - From broken to pass ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 95 - Morning of Bickering ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 96 - Secret Enhancement ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 97 - Month of Training ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 97.5 - Planning Vengeance ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 98 - Three Kings ago
[Arc 04] Chapter 99 - Power of Phoenix and Madness ago
[Arc 04 End] Chapter 100 - Time to Go ago
[Arc 05 Start] Chapter 101 - Morning Bickering... Again! ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 102 - Armour Maker ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 103 - Meat Hunters ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 104 - Reasoning Hunters ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 105 - Reaching the Monsters ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 106 - Challenging Battle ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 107 - Truth behind the Attack ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 108 - Routine Change ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 109 - Impending Danger ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 110 - Charging into Danger ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 111 - Arrival of Death ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 112 - Victory by Death ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 113 - Addition of Death ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 114 - Training with Death ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 115 - Strengthening Motivation ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 116 - Shifting Positions ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 117 - Monkey King vs. Death Titan (Start) ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 118 - Monkey King vs. Death Titan (Middle) ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 119 - Monkey King vs. Death Titan (End) ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 120 - After Fight ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 121 - Forest of Fog ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 122 - Wolfenstine ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 123 - Racial Attack ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 124 - Twisted Shadows ago
[Arc 05] Chapter 125 - Shocking Discovery ago
[Arc 05 End] Chapter 126 - Turning Point ago
[Arc 06 Start] Chapter 127 - Developing Age ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 128 - Forming a Party ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 129 - Labyrinth ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 130 - Peaceful Adventurer ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 131 - Rescue Effort ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 132 - Slave Seal & Treatmenet ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 133 - Depravity ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 134 - Necromancy in the Darkness ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 135 - Rising Change ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 136 - Phoenix Armour ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 137 - Clash of Powers ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 138 - Beliefs ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 139 - Decisive Player & Innocent Player ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 140 - Felix Freedom Faction ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 141 - Calling Assistance ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 142 - Rescue & Apprehend ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 143 - Turn of Events ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 144 - Acceptance ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 145 - Morning Training ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 146 - Reality ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 147 - Result ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 148 - Feelings ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 149 - Realisation ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 150 - Falling Down ago
[Arc 06] Chapter 151 - Blade of Light ago
[Arc 06 End] Chapter 152 - Destiny Decided ago
[Arc 07 Start] Chapter 153 - Planning ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 154 - Testing & Exercising ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 155 - Aggressive and Defensive ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 156 - Power Surge ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 157 - Parental Letter ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 158 - Purification of a Dark Spirit ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 159 - Reassuring Presence ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 160 - Energy Barrier ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 161 - Final Test ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 162 - Battle of Prematria ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 163 - Destruction Round ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 164 - Deathly Carnival ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 165 - Zoremar ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 166 - Demon Emperor ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 167 - Unsealing ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 168 - Surge of Power ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 169 - Destrucrive Power ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 170 - Unbelievable Power ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 171 - Reward ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 172 - Important People ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 173 - Return Home ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 174 - Crystal Clock ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 175 - Finally Home ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 176 - Informing the Situation ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 177 - God Talk ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 178 - Life Festival ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 179 - Cat Surprise ago
[Arc 07] Chapter 180 - Morning Problems ago
[Arc 07 End] Chapter 181 - Resolution ago
[Arc 08 Start] Chapter 182 - Birthday Surprise ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 183 - Departure ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 184 - Hiding Identity ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 185 - Accidental Trouble ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 186 - Shocking Conclusion to Trouble ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 187 - Deciding Classes ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 188 - Types of Lessons ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 189 - First Lesson ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 190 - Comfort of Companions ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 191 - Energy Theory [Part I] ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 192 - Energy Theory [Part II] ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 193 - Energy Theory [End] ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 194 - Ghost Story ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 195 - Morning Clarification ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 196 - Deathly Disappearance (Start) ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 197 - Deathly Disappearance (End) ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 198 - Discovery of Plan ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 199 - Joint Lesson ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 200 - Total Comeback ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 201 - Protocol Annoyance ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 202 - Resolving Calendar Ideas ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 203 - Nobility Ranking System ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 204 - Identity Danger ago
[Arc 08] Chapter 205 - Political Marriage ago
[Arc 08 End] Chapter 206 - Lovely Resolution ago
[Arc 09 Start] Chapter 207 - Past Nobility ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 208 - Ugly Coup ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 209 - Devastating Loss ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 210 - Realising Darkness ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 211 - Painful Lesson ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 212 - Womanly Compassion ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 213 - Suppression Rings ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 214 - Berserker Crusher ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 215 - War Sign ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 216 - Horrifying Torture ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 217 - War Commences ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 218 - The Truth ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 219 - Shocking Trap ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 220 - Lakshman vs. Crystallised Monster ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 221 - Suicidal Attack ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 222 - Lakshman vs. Demon Slayer ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 223 - Bursting Forces ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 224 - Sensibility ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 225 - Arriving Danger ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 226 - Reassuring Feelings ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 227 - Contract in Danger ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 228 - Lakshman vs. Two Dragon Kings ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 229 - Sword Titan ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 230 - End of Razzel ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 231 - Chaotic War ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 232 - Death by Destruction ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 233 - Death of a King ago
[Arc 09] Chapter 234 - End of War ago
[Arc 09 End] Chapter 235 - Departure for Training ago
Arc 09: Extra ago
[Arc 10 Start] Chapter 236 - Graduation ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 237 - Action Hero ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 238 - Training Results ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 239 - Lovely Reunion ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 240 - For the Future ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 241 - Parental Blessing ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 242 - Engineering the Future ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 243 - Freedom & Justice ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 243 - Special Marriage: Lakshman & Venezuela ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 243 - Special Marriage: Lakshman & 7 Destiny Queens ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 244 - Soldier Training ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 245 - Slavemancer's Party ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 246 - Clash of Opinions ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 247 - Affection ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 248 - God Explanation ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 249 - Abolishment of Slavery ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 250 - Lakshman vs. Dominic (Start) ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 251 - Lakshman vs. Dominic (Finish) ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 252 - Takedown of Religion ago
[Arc 10] Special - Meeting Whamana ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 253 - Counterattack ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 254 - Kidnapped Love ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 255 - Lakshman vs. Slavemancer ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 256 - Descending Calamity ago
[Arc 10] Chapter 257 - Hero Destruction ago
[Arc 10 End] Chapter 258 - Calamity Ruler ago
[Arc 11 Start] Chapter 259 - Survived Phoenix ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 260 - Passed Time ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 261 - Insect Trouble ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 262 - Focus Energy ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 263 - False Image ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 264 - Enemy Attack ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 265 - Lakshman vs. Enemies ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 266 - Magic Titan ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 267 - Believed Weakness ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 268 - Illusionary Battle ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 268.5 - Demon Pursuit ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 269 - Reborn Phoenix ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 270 - Meteor Problem ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 271 - Global Realisation ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 272 - Mystery Box ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 273 - Mystery Orb ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 274 - Lakshman vs. Orb ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 275 - Emotional Wives ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 276 - Threatening Message ago
[Arc 11] Chapter 277 - Future Power ago
[Arc 11 End] Chapter 278 - Strenghtening ago
[Arc 12 Start] Chapter 279 - Training Pressure ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 280 - Shopping Trouble ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 281 - Thieves Attack (Ondine) ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 282 - Thieves Attack (Lakshman) ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 283 - Rivals of Love ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 284 - Cracking ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 285 - Future Change ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 286 - Ordering Compliments ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 287 - Changing Attitude ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 288 - Two Spirits ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 289 - Ondine the Water Spirit ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 290 - Together Forever ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 291 - Memory Chaos ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 292 - Painful Memory ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 293 - Demon Lord Army ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 294 - Demon Lord War ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 295 - Lakshman battles Orb ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 296 - Darkness Trouble ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 297 - Dark Destruction ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 298 - End of Demon Lord War ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 298.5 - Evil Gods ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 299 - Escaping Continents ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 300 - Lovely Addition ago
300th Special - Author's POV ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 301 - Returned King ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 302 - Friendly Reunion and Talk ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 303 - Family Despair ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 304 - Phoenix Fury ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 305 - Forbidden Technique ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 306 - Calamity Titan vs. Phoenix Destroyer ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 307 - Phoenix Eruption ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 308 - Destiny Lock ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 309 - Supporting Hope ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 310 - Pure vs. Twisted ago
[Arc 12] Chapter 311 - Memories Obtained ago
[Arc 12 End] Chapter 312 - Issued Challenge ago
[Arc 13 Start] Chapter 313 - Funeral March ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 314 - Angel Demand ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 315 - Angel Trickery ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 316 - Angel Transport {Rewritten} ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 317 - Angel Rudeness ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 318 - Angel Injustice ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 318.5 - Angel Love ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 319 - Unwelcome Discovery ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 320 - Bloody Revenge ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 321 - Surprise Entrance ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 322 - Lakshman vs. Transformed Monster ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 323 - Suspicious Memory ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 324 - Lovely Relationships ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 325 - Chaotic Absence ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 325.5 - Location Search ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 326 - Explosive Wakeup ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 327 - Sword Titan vs. Air Dragon King ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 328 - Phoenix Funeral ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 329 - Dragon Trickery ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 330 - Dragon Chaser ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 331 - Phoenix Confidence ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 332 - Angel Forcefulness ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 333 - Furious Phoenix ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 334 - Dark Plan ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 335 - Destiny Queens Battle ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 336 - Godfather Request ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 337 - Clash of Wills ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 338 - Crash In ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 339 - Chase Down ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 340 - Lakshman vs. Godfather ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 341 - Enraged Phoenix ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 342 - Dynamic Phoenix ago
[Arc 13] Chapter 343 - New Angel King ago
[Arc 13 End] Chapter 344 - Moving On ago
[Arc 14 Start] Chapter 345 - Provocation ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 346 - Wild Course ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 347 - War Titan ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 348 - Sword Down ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 349 - Sword Life (Part 1) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 350 - Sword Life (End) ago
Chapter 350.5 - Author's POV ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 351 - Sword Titan vs. War Titan (Start) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 352 - Sword Titan vs. War Titan (Middle) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 353 - Sword Titan vs. War Titan (End) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 354 - Siblings' Future ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 355 - Dragon Alliance ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 356 - Dragon Gate ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 357 - Reunion of Rivals ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 358 - Lakshman vs. Lagron ago
(CIR) Lagron ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 359 - Phoenix Titan vs. Dragon Titan ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 360 - Concerned Wives ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 361 - Phoenix Titan vs. Dragon Titan (Re-battle) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 362 - Phoenix Titan vs. Dragon Titan (Conclusion) ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 363 - Dimension Roar ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 364 - Dragon Truth ago
(Later) [FIXING MISTAKES] Plan to correct past chapters ago
[ANNOUNCEMENT] Started Phoenix Rising v2 ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 365 - Tempered Arrogance ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 366 - Three Kings Meeting ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 367 - Dragon Past ago
[ANNOUNCEMENT] Weekly Chapters ago
[Arc 14] Chapter 368 - Reunion & Battle ago
ARC 14: Chapter 369 - Lakshman vs. Ash ago
ARC 14: Chapter 370 - Exhausted ago
ARC 14: Chapter 370.5 - God Realm ago
ARC 14: Chapter 371 War & Dragon ago
ARC 14: Chapter 372 - God Entry ago
[POLL] Want me to write Phoenix Rising: The Beginning? ago
ARC 14: Chapter 373 - Spirit Realm ago
ARC 14 (End): Chapter 374 - Each Side ago
ARC 15 (Start): Chapter 375 - Demon Start ago
ARC 15: Chapter 376 - War Arrangements ago
ARC 15: Chapter 377 - War Start ago
[ANNOUNCEMENT] Started writing Phoenix Rising: The Beginning ago
ARC 15: Chapter 378 - Phoenix Calamity War (Part 1) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 379 - Phoenix Calamity War (Part 2) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 380 - Interlude to War ago
ARC 15: Chapter 381 - Angel Army ago
ARC 15: Chapter 382 - Casual Calamity ago
ARC 15: Chapter 383 - Angel King vs. Calamity Titan ago
ARC 15: Chapter 384 - Deciding Time ago
ARC 15: Chapter 385 - Monster Time ago
ARC 15: Chapter 386 - Monstrous Despair ago
ARC 15: Chapter 387 - Training World ago
ARC 15: Chapter 388 - A Warrior's Death ago
ARC 15: Chapter 389 - Ready ago
ARC 15: Chapter 390 - Pillars Retaliation (Death) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 391 - Pillars Retaliation (Dragon) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 392 - Interlude to War 2 ago
ARC 15: Chapter 393 - Monkey and Demon ago
ARC 15: chapter 394 - Pillars Retaliation (War) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 395 - Pillars Retaliation (Demon) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 396 - War is Emotional ago
ARC 15: Chapter 397 - Nine Towers ago
ARC 15: Chapter 398 - Ancient Revelation ago
ARC 15; Chapter 399 - Rage of Hatred ago
ARC 15: Chapter 400 - The Reason ago
[INFO] Chapter 400th Special - Alzard World Arc Trailer v1 ago
[ANNOUNCEMENT] Follow me on Discord ago
ARC 15: Chapter 401 - The Death Struggle ago
ARC 15: Chapter 402 - Death Warrior (Part 1) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 403 - Death Warrior (Part 2) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 404 - Death Warrior (End) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 405 - Dragon and War ago
[INFO] Alzard World Arc - Information ago
ARC 15: Chapter 406 - Towers Break ago
ARC 15: Chapter 407 - Warriors Dispersion ago
ARC 15: Chapter 407.5 - Erza's Worries ago
ARC 15: Chapter 408 - Lakshman's Decision ago
ARC 15: Chapter 409 - I am... ago
ARC 15: Chapter 410 - Sword Justice (Part 1) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 411 - Sword Justice (Part 2) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 412 - Sword Justice (End) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 413 - War Hammer ago
ARC 15: Chapter 414 - Pillars vs. Testaments (Start) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 415 - Pillars vs. Testaments (Middle) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 416 - Pillars vs. Testaments (Middle Part 2) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 417 - Pillars vs. Testaments (End) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 418 - Pillars vs. Testaments (End Part 2) ago
ARC 15: Chapter 419 - Phoenix Titan vs. Calamity Titan ago
ARC 15: Chapter 420 - Nine Pillars Unite ago
ARC 15: Chapter 421 - Calamity vs Pillars – Part 1 ago
ARC 15: Chapter 422 - Calamity vs Pillars – Part 2 ago
ARC 15: Chapter 423 - Hope fom Within ago
ARC 15: Chapter 424 - Final Form ago
ARC 15: Chapter 424.5 - Sisters ago
ARC 15: Chapter 425 - War between Brothers ago
ARC 15: Chapter 426 - Evil from Within ago
ARC 15: Chapter 427 - Ancestral Background ago
ARC 15 END: Chapter 428 - To Beyond ago
ARC 16 START: Chapter 429 - Calamity Leaving ago
ARC 16: Chapter 430 - The Summoning ago
ARC 16: Chapter 431 - The Introductions ago
ARC 16: Chapter 432 - Head Out ago
Alzard World Arc - Information v2 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 433 - Heroes Head Out ago
ARC 16: Chapter 434 - Burst In ago
ARC 16: Chapter 435 - Weaponised ago
ARC 16: Chapter 436 - Gathering ago
ARC 16: Chapter 437 - Appearance ago
ARC 16: Chapter 438 - Otherworld Audience ago
ARC 16: Chapter 439 - Attempted Return ago
ARC 16: Chapter 440 - A Night Party ago
ARC 16: Chapter 441 - Party Crasher ago
ARC 16: Chapter 442 - The Order ago
ARC 16: Chapter 443 - The Hospital ago
ARC 16: Chapter 444 - Alistair and Lakshman ago
ARC 16: Chapter 445 - Hero Academy - Part 1 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 446 - Hero Academy - Part 2 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 447 - Hero Academy - Part 3 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 448 - Lakshman vs. Gram ago
ARC 16: Chapter 449 - The Heroes Move - Part 1 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 450 - The Heroes Move - Part 2 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 451 - Hero vs. Alien - Part 1 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 452 - Hero vs. Alien - Part 2 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 453 - Hero vs. Alien - Part 3 ago
ARC 16: Chapter 454 - Recovery at the Hospital ago
ARC 16: Chapter 455 - Awards and Punishment ago
ARC 16 END: Chapter 456 - King from Another World ago
ARC 17 START: Chapter 457 - About the World ago
ARC 17: Chapter 458 - Going Around ago
ARC 17: Chapter 459 - Rapid Transit Network ago
ARC 17: Chapter 460 - Unsuspected Rescue ago
ARC 17: Chapter 461 - Prince Hard ago
ARC 17: Chapter 462 - Heroes Sparring Match ago
ARC 17: Chapter 463 - Hero Restoration Process ago
ARC 17: Chapter 464 - Stranger Attack ago
ARC 17: Chapter 465 - Training Session - Part 1 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 466 - Training Session - Part 2 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 467 - Training Session - Part 3 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 468 - Revelation Time ago
ARC 17: Chapter 469 - Alien Masquerade ago
ARC 17: Chapter 470 - Bath Talk ago
ARC 17: Chapter 471 - Night Out - Part 1 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 472 - Night Out - Part 2 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 473 - Night Out - Part 3 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 474 - Prophecy ago
ARC 17: Chapter 475 - Everyday Life - Part 1 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 476 - Everyday Life - Part 2 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 477 - Relatives from the Past - Part 1 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 478 - Relatives from the Past - Part 2 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 479 - Everyday Life - Part 3 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 480 - Uninvited Guests ago
ARC 17: Chapter 481 - Everyday Life - Part 4 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 482 - Uninvited Intruders ago
ARC 17: Chapter 483 - For The Sisters ago
ARC 17: Chapter 484 - Magic Fail ago
ARC 17: Chapter 485 - Night Shopping ago
ARC 17: Chapter 486 - Astral Form ago
ARC 17: Chapter 487 - Rage of Familiars ago
ARC 17: Chapter 488 - Arrogant Dragon ago
ARC 17: Chapter 489 - Ocean of Abyss ago
ARC 17: Chapter 490 - Dine Out ago
ARC 17: Chapter 491 - Talk & Rage ago
ARC 17: Chapter 492 - Rage & Strike ago
[Announcement] Nanowrimo ago
ARC 17: Chapter 493 - Scheming ago
ARC 17: Chapter 494 - The Downsized Familiars ago
ARC 17: Chapter 495 - Boring Time ago
ARC 17: Chapter 496 - Inner Training ago
ARC 17: Chapter 497 - Alien Musing – Part 1 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 498 - Alien Musing - Part 2 ago
ARC 17: Chapter 499 - The Vision ago
ARC 17: Chapter 500 - Ideal and Choice ago
ARC 17: Chapter 501 - Identities ago
ARC 17: Chapter 502 - Lack of a Priority ago
ARC 17: Chapter 503 - Infinity Hero History ago
ARC 17: Chapter 504 - Ability of Truth ago
ARC 17: Chapter 505 - Distressful Situation ago
ARC 17: Chapter 506 - Unyielding Principles ago
ARC 17: Chapter 507 - Caged Bird ago
ARC 17: Chapter 508 - Four in One ago
ARC 17: Chapter 509 - Return & Meeting ago
ARC 17: Chapter 510 - The Plan ago
ARC 17: Chapter 511 - The Perspectives ago
ARC 17: Chapter 512 - The Moving Sides ago
ARC 17: Chapter 513 - The Urgency ago
ARC 17: Chapter 514 - The Explosion ago
ARC 17: Chapter 515 - Attempt to Escape ago
ARC 17: Chapter 516 - Lakshman vs. Bruton ago
ARC 17: Chapter 517 - Drop In ago
ARC 17: Chapter 518 - Natsu vs. Bruton ago
ARC 17: Chapter 519 - Sacrificial Crusade ago
ARC 17: Chapter 520 - The Overlord Attacks ago
ARC 17: Chapter 521 - Lakshman vs. Overlord ago
ARC 17: Chapter 522 - The Decision Time ago
ARC 17: Chapter 523 - Battle of Powers ago
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ARC 17: Chapter 530 - The Discovery ago
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ARC 17: Chapter 534 - Conversation Between Gods ago
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ARC 17: Chapter 545 - A Little Rest ago
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Luneth
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Potential but has many obvious flaws

Your story has potential and it is good with out a doubt better then some works of fiction on this site. However I find your characters for the vast majority difficult to like they all are either to simplistic or unrelatable ( a good example is Indra who is the embodiment of a masochistic, stubborn brute who is a borderline abusive husband. He often dismisses his wife’s opinion and humiliate/ make her depressed until she agrees with him or stops talking) I don’t know if u purposefully made him this way or not however it is but one of your characters natures that make the reading displeasing. Another a obvitous character is lakshmi who is very week willed and allows her husband to bully her, she lacks assertiveness. Even your mc is lacking he comes across as extremely naïf and tbh at times even dumb, he often disregards instructions and ignores others and makes to many idiotic choices, during his 1st spar he was very passive and did not use either his energy or weapon force, even though Sumara had just given explicit instructions on what was aloud during the duel. The fact that your mc is essentially stupid and often annoying in his daily interactions does little to help your story. Other obvious issues are lack of character development, and your lack of explaining your magic and power systems properly. Also why does lakshman never use magic or appear to train in it? There is no mention of him improving his magic. You briefly explored his use of magic when his tutor magically appeared at the start of the story and then completely forgot about it for the following 20 chapters not to even mention the fact that his magic tutor is apparently supervising him in a duel with no magic…. Why?
The other major issue is that at the start of the story you chose to copy mushoku tensei ( by that I mean all the major plot development hell even the demon race names appears to be your attempt to use the same story while mispelling the demon race names… I mean u even Had the exact same scene where rudeus meets slyvie just that you chose to switch sylvie for some random boy never to be mentioned again. Why bother putting this in your story?) however your plot then started to diverge from mushoku tensei’s plot this has created inconsistencies and contradictions in your story.
i hope you realise I am trying to be constructive in my criticism and I suggest you focus on world building (the largest issue with ur world building aside from the lack there of is the historical background of your world ex. How did they have factual/accurate records of the illusive Phoenix titans amazing sacrifice despite no one ever saying what he really did and how, aside from his amazing sacrifice, remember this is a medieval world sure they have magic but why 8000 years ago why not 1000-2000 ?)(also the racism present in your story needs to be explained u just say shi t happened 8000 years ago and we hate each other but no one knows why (obviously racism isn’t logical but I’m just saying in mushoku it was because of the colour of their hair and the negative history linked to demons I mean u copied most of mushoku’s plot why not copy something that would work well/improve ur story…)  and developing/explaining your magic and power system ( you mentioned chant less invocation then forgot about it and lucky training in it…also you focused on his swordmenship but haven’t explained the techniques he is taught or what he has practiced as far as I’m concerned he just spent 5 years of his life swinging his sword… And finally u copied the names from mushoku for the styles then didn’t explain their aspects/differences oh and u forgot to mention the 3rd style or what style lucky is training in… Do you not see this as a issue? Finally concerning Indra in his duel he isn’t using his sword style( I think u forgot he is supposed to be passive/ defensive in heavy armour all description of him in battle is him jumping over his oponent s ( a stupid move as u can’t control ur movement in the air and him being agile/fast u need to address this.) finally please work on your characters and try not to make them such stereotypes and mor likeable I mean just look at the house hold:
– Indra- father, abusive brute who is completely idiotic ( also how does any adventurer not see the value In Magic what so ever and despises it in a fantasy world for no apparent reason other then I’m a idiot who like hitting shit with awesome sword)
-Lakshmi – the submissive mother that does what ever her husband tells her too
-undine- tsundere harem member
-sumara- magic teacher who lives with them for 5 years but doesn’t seem to teach much magic and obvious prospective harem member( in case u didn’t notice she’s a bad copy of roxy from mushoku)
and of course our dense mc that is a idiot who blows himself up 15 times without hurting himself also he has to be told what to do as he can’t think for himself
sadly all my commentary here appears to be pointless as u appear to have pre written everything before posting and as such the flaws In your ff shall never be addressed unless you improved your writing on your own while writing your story

Mwis
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Well I dont really want to give a bad review or anything like that and i think its great to be able to write a FF/story of over 100+ chapter in itself BUT this story places all of its money/hopes on the future chapter like 100+ andthe  author even tells us this himself it would  have been fine if the story only starts at 100+ chapters but I at least cant bear to torture myself with this kind of MC. I know you gave a reason for why he is so damm retard at the start of the story but if i have to read 100+ chapter until he stops being a retard with mental problems then it simply aint worth it.

Well that was all I had to say. I say good luck with your story and again i mean it when i say that its great to have a long FF/story but not if it tortures your readers or if they have to read over 100 chapter to get into it.

DevilAsura
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Sadly it is to similar...

Hey here my criticism and my opinion

 

At first i thought the story seems really nice but after i finished reading some chapters i realized:

The story resembles mushoku tensei to much!

I mean the complete beginning is almost the same you have the swordsmen father the mother, maid and unexpectly you have a magic teacher girl from the demon race with blue hair....(like roxy)

At this point i thought maybe the story is just with the family similar but sadly the story progressed almost the same:

He starts training and chooses the sword and magic just like in mushoku tensei.

The father teaches him swordmanship and the magician girl teaches him magic...(mushoku tensei )

He saves his first friend from a mud ball fight against other kids (like Sylphiette only this time a boy)

The only difference i found clearly was the personality of each individual, since your characters seem to simple and you cant find the good jokes of mushoku tensei  :/

 

And sadly after some chapters i couldn´t continue with your story, since i always had the feeling iam reading mushoku tensei anew without the funny characters.

But i have also a good point! I think it is good that you are trying your best at writing a story with such a length, since not everyone has the will to continue writing such a long story

 

 

zenmaster123
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I felt like it had potential, I read the first few chapters, but it didn't hook me in. I still continued reading as I wanted to see something out of the fanfic, but I decided to stop at chapter 60. At this point, everything seemed bad. The entire plot sounds really exaggerated to me, the characters are popping up conveniently here and there. Don't get me wrong, other stories do that too, its just that it's too obvious with this fanfic. The pace is also freaking insane. Everything progresses too slowly in my opinion, making it feel very hard for me to read on. Even if it gets better later on, this fanfic fails because it is meant to grab the readers attention and hook them early on. The only things I like are the title and the cover, that was seriously the only thing pushing me to read 60 chapters, or else I would have given up a long time ago.

mousefu
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It has a nice cover

With all due respect I would reccommend you scrap the enire story and start again from scratch.

Maybe centred around a Fantasy world where Indian mythological beings are real and incorporate your culture into the daily lives of the characters.

Create a story that is your own and have fun with it . If you have trouble writing in English then wriite in your native language or the language you're most fluent in then slowly translate it to English.

 

Hope this helps and goodluck with any original stories you decide to write.

firefoxpaws
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i am sorry i really do i did try to read, but it's just too much, the character are annoying the story is  diverging in not a good way if you're making an arc, at least don't change it suddenly, the protagonist is an idiot and his too dense is he mentally challenge or something why can't he listen too simple instruction he just disregard it.

affanx
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wasted potential

 

Tried really hard to like this story but just couldn’t get through the irritating characters and plot less chapters.  Like others have mentioned we deal with the obnoxious father, submissive mother, stubborn mentally challenged MC, and bratty slave character (most annoying little brat after the MC), and random Musoku Tenshi magic teacher.   I understand that the author is intending for there to be character development for the mc but making readers go through 100+ chapters with a dumb ass mc is just torture.  Also the author has clearly copied a lot of plot from musuki tenshi but it seems like he doesn’t know what to do with it….

 

You may ask, how 100+?!  The author has already written ahead of time and has mentioned that the MC does not grow until 180 chapters within the story and then supposedly the story will get a lot better and epic!  I guess time will only tell eh.  He’s also mentioned that the plot will mysteriously appear in around 100+ chapters lol.

 

Till then I have to give this fic a 2 star for the potential.  I will probably have to skip another 100 chapters and hope what is promised by the author gets delivered.

 

 

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I have unfortunately read up to chapter 220.  The author has not attempted in fixing his characters.  The MC is still a dumb ass little brat (16 years old but talks like he’s 6).  Worse off the secondary characters are still just as  annoying as before.  I basically had to skim past chapters 100-220 as predicted.  

 

Hope this review helps with others not wasting time.  If you guys want a long pointless story with mentally challenged MC, this story is just for you!

 

Dorfpest
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Common idea with bland storytelling

I think the whole thing could be improved by simply having the characters be more relatable, the MC is is an idiot for over 100 chapters with no growth except in the form of “energy” training. He doesn’t grow up at all during his 13 year time period. Simply making him act like an adult would increase the level of the story, not to mention his father who is simply a one sided character with no depth.

 

Like really, what 13 year old doesn’t know about love or pregnancy.

fib118
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I can't i just can't

 I am going to go off of what I read, first let me state for fairness' sake that i never made it to chapter 20. I didn't even get close to it and I don't think I ever will. I simply can't relate to the character. The story is subpar at best. the main problem with grammar is the fact that you drag it out too much .

For example

"The day started with the bright sun shining its light from the sky. There were only a few clouds to cover the clear blue sky. " (chapter one)

can be changed to something like

"The day begun with the sun shining brightly, through a almost cloudless day. "

this lets it sound far less like a ramble. 

 

the character i just have no idea where he is coming from or even mildly relate to him. He just seems so artificial almost like he was vat grown or just a robot disguising himself as a human. 

Reaperxmos
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Good except for the MC, too much talking and 19 straight chapters of no plot

So much talking. That's about all your fiction was. You can't just take a chapter or two to explain how fighting works and drop it. You have to spread it out across 20 chapters. I was interested until after chapter 6 then it started to get boring for me. I kept reading for the next 19 chapters to see if any plot would happen but it didn't. Couldn't force my self to read anymore after that.

 

The thing that pissed me off the most is that the MC is 12 but he is at the 5 year old level understanding in half of everything. Then you say he's too young to be told serious things even though he's 12. Bullshit he's too young at 12! It's almost like your MC is half mentally handicapped.

 

You took literally 5 chapters for one sparring match. She attacks, he defends, three through five lines of dialogue, she attacks, he defends, three through five lines of dialogue, she attacks, he defends, three through five lines of dialogue. This happens for 5 chapters straight with filled the MC's unjustified lack of confidence. This really broke the fiction for me.

 

Can't tell if the plot is good because it doesn't appear by chapter 25, the characters are all really good (except for the naice, half mentally handicapped, sheltered-from-life MC), very few grammatical errors.

 

All-in-all besides the crappy MC, way too much talking and no plot for chapters 7-25 it's pretty good. Keep righting for those who like you fiction but the 3 things I mentioned above are a deal breaker for me.