Reaper of the Martial World

by Awespec

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Mystery Romance Harem Male Lead Martial Arts Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural Wuxia
Warning This fiction contains:
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"You're too arrogant."

To Dyon, it seemed as though these words were heard all the time.

However, how could these people possibly know of all his hard work? Of the fact that sleep was but a distant relative of his. How could they know that he never had a single moment to rest.

And yet, despite their ignorance, they still said, "you're too arrogant..."

But where were those people when a five-year-old Dyon's eyes shone looking at a computer screen filled with code? Where were those people when an eight-year-old Dyon played his piano and plucked his guitar strings until his fingers bled... needing to vent his feelings about his lost mother without bothering his fatigued father? Where were those people when Dyon sat alone at ten-years-old… when his parents were gone, and the only thing left was a room filled with inventions and computers?

Dyon's arrogance wasn't borne of thin air. It was his hard work. It was his shield. And he wasn't willing to give it up...

Now alone, he left his home behind.

He was no longer the boy genius who changed the human mortal realm. He was now nothing but a commoner, a bug noble families saw fit to step on. An insignificant existence.

And yet, Dyon was still the same unchanging person. Standing tall, his eyes firm and his will indomitable.

This so-called Martial World would come to understand the meaning behind his existence...

 

**Excerpt**
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"You're quite bold for a girl who's almost been recluse for her whole life you know," Dyon said chuckling.

"Little sister Delia and Meiying probably think so too, but you've been in my heart since the opening ceremony. Maybe not exactly in this way… But sometimes a foot in the door for a long time leads to a fully open one, no?"

Dyon smiled, 'it seems like she's been watching from afar for a long time… it must be lonely being in that room with Libro all the time.'

Dyon felt a delicate hand playing with his collar, "the truth is that I'm always playing the gentle big sister role, mostly because I have no idea how much longer I'll have the chance to…"

The vulnerability in her voice made Dyon tremble. Madeleine was so strong, yet it seemed even martial artists had their weaknesses too.

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RMW happens to be the very first novel I've ever written. I have to admit that the first volume requires a lot of work. However, from the second volume onward I am confident in saying that it becomes a ride just as enjoyable as some of the best wuxia novels available. If you happen to read that far, and disagree, feel free to join our discord and call me an idiot for wasting your time, LMAO. I hope you guys stick it out to the end <3


3-4 chapters a day, everyday.

***this story has NO NTR. Nor will it ever have NTR... ***
***I've begun posting pictures of what some characters of Focus look like on my twitter. So, check out @Awespec if you're interested***

 

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***this story of mine has also been uploaded to webnovel as well (in the description of webnovel (at the end), there is proof of this).

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The Naked Boy ago
Delia ago
Fooled? ago
The Library ago
The Opening Ceremony ago
Domineering ago
Splash ago
Heads Meet ago
FUCK ago
What an Idiot ago
Ava ago
What it Means to be a Genius ago
Heaven's Chimes ago
Savior ago
Madeleine ago
Goddess' Disposition ago
Bet ago
The Banquet ago
Femme Fatale ago
... ago
The Celestial Woman ago
Rallying ago
Central Pillar Opening ago
A Brewing Storm ago
Rage ago
The Wedding ago
Celestial Deer Sect Successor ago
Behind the Scenes (1) ago
Behind the Scenes (2) ago
Behind the Scenes (3) ago
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Entertainment (3) ago
God Clan Young Masters (1) ago
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Forever and Always (1) ago
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Legacy World Opening (1) ago
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Agp05
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This story is perfect if you wish to be entertained. It’ll suck you straight in. 

Cognoscere
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Once polished will be a diamond

This is an unpolished diamond that if the grammer and formating mistakes were dealt with would warrant a read for any fan of the xuanhuna genre.

The author seems to have no idea how to properly format dialogue and some chapters became exposition dumps from said author writing himself into a bit of a mini-corner but the story gets you more and more emotionally invested and you can find yourself actually surprised by the plot twists instead of seeing them coming from miles away.

Once this thing is polished up it'll be one of the best harem novels on this site.

Calavente
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make the effort to read at least 20 chapters...

That's all there is to say.

it then became one of my favorited novels here.

but I agree that the 20 (or 50?) early chapters seems a bit cringy or wish-fullfillement... until it makes sense, and that you understand more the lore, the world, and why he behaves like that.

 

take my cue on that: 

the early behavior of the MC is because he comes from the mortal world, and did there so many impossible things that he reacts as any 13yo reacts when having encountered heavy success... 

and he can do that... why ? because spoiler... 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

nugy
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Good stuff, love the MC just wish he trained more or sth and finally started cultivating, also hopes he evolves to sth demonic because of the blood hehehehee

aedes
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BOOM!! - Who knows how high the heaven is?

Others may be bothered but I like it. I rarely read wuxia but I find this one entertaining and enjoyable binge reading.  For now I can't connect much with that many "booms" happening and some wuxian expressions but I love what I'm learning from this fiction. 

Voidwolf
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This story has blown all reservations. It doesn't use over used story plots. it uses a style that says "fuck it". the training phase was a perfect length for me, not too short and just long enough for it to suit the MC's attriubes.  The Plot started with something simple and expanded to something great. I haven't see any obvious gramer mistakes so good on Awespec.

 

Cookie41
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I could be a beggar on the streets and if one day someone came to me with a completed version of this story, I'd be content and move to the woods where I'll live in a stick hut and spend the rest of my years rereading this.

stetyson
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Funny. Attention sucking. Great writing. Good pace too. Keep it up!

kao
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RAW LARGE Diamond. Just needs Polishing.

A good story. Good good. 

The only reason I gave such a midiocre grammar score is due to the many, oh so many dialogue issues of no capitals when starting a dialogue : 

 

he said, "i don't wanna do that." (Capital needed on that I)

she said, "why you lookin' at me funny?" (Capital needed on that Why)

they all said, "we don't think your kind is wanted here." (Capital needed on that We) 

 

If you can ignore that issue with lack of caps on dialogue like that, then you should be golden. The overall story, characters, world building is very entertaining. I actually got so grabbed by the story, I stayed up way too late over the weekend reading it. 

 

Give it a shot. Just...be aware the damage of the lack of caps on dialogue, "i warned you. Don't cry if you see this happen alot." 

Author, I love you. Ok. Maybe NOT that way, but you know what I mean....

 

 

Wille1412
  • Overall Score

Try it, what's the worst that can happen?

I'm no pro reviewer, maybe there are obvious flaws, but fuck it. I'm enjoying this novel, I don't know what drags me to this one, I just genuenly like this novel a lot.

I'd say give it a try, you will probably be quick to find out if you enjoy this novel or not.