Reaper of the Martial World
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"You're too arrogant."
To Dyon, it seemed as though these words were heard all the time.
However, how could these people possibly know of all his hard work? Of the fact that sleep was but a distant relative of his. How could they know that he never had a single moment to rest.
And yet, despite their ignorance, they still said, "you're too arrogant..."
But where were those people when a five-year-old Dyon's eyes shone looking at a computer screen filled with code? Where were those people when an eight-year-old Dyon played his piano and plucked his guitar strings until his fingers bled... needing to vent his feelings about his lost mother without bothering his fatigued father? Where were those people when Dyon sat alone at ten-years-old… when his parents were gone, and the only thing left was a room filled with inventions and computers?
Dyon's arrogance wasn't borne of thin air. It was his hard work. It was his shield. And he wasn't willing to give it up...
Now alone, he left his home behind.
He was no longer the boy genius who changed the human mortal realm. He was now nothing but a commoner, a bug noble families saw fit to step on. An insignificant existence.
And yet, Dyon was still the same unchanging person. Standing tall, his eyes firm and his will indomitable.
This so-called Martial World would come to understand the meaning behind his existence...
"You're quite bold for a girl who's almost been recluse for her whole life you know," Dyon said chuckling.
"Little sister Delia and Meiying probably think so too, but you've been in my heart since the opening ceremony. Maybe not exactly in this way… But sometimes a foot in the door for a long time leads to a fully open one, no?"
Dyon smiled, 'it seems like she's been watching from afar for a long time… it must be lonely being in that room with Libro all the time.'
Dyon felt a delicate hand playing with his collar, "the truth is that I'm always playing the gentle big sister role, mostly because I have no idea how much longer I'll have the chance to…"
The vulnerability in her voice made Dyon tremble. Madeleine was so strong, yet it seemed even martial artists had their weaknesses too.
RMW happens to be the very first novel I've ever written. I have to admit that the first volume requires a lot of work. However, from the second volume onward I am confident in saying that it becomes a ride just as enjoyable as some of the best wuxia novels available. If you happen to read that far, and disagree, feel free to join our discord and call me an idiot for wasting your time, LMAO. I hope you guys stick it out to the end <3
3-4 chapters a day, everyday.
***this story has NO NTR. Nor will it ever have NTR... ***
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***this story of mine has also been uploaded to webnovel as well (in the description of webnovel (at the end), there is proof of this).
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Our child protagonist who is smarter, more determined, more attractive, etc. meets people who want to kill him and he kills them instead. Every imaginable trope related to Mary Sues is present. Enjoyable for some light reading, but gets boring fast.
Writing this after reading 200+ chapters of this... the premise is good, but the lack of detail in the character/plot development is slightly painful.
The cultivation style coupled with ‘will/intent’ comprehension is relatively unique, however the description as to how Dyon develops his understanding of ‘will’ is superficial and doesn’t convey any sense of wonder/profoundness beyond the first few chapters. By expanding on how ‘will’ manifestations interact with reality, it would make Dyon’s choice to enter conflict with others have more impact - it feels like this is poorly explained so that the author free reign to let him Mary Sue his way out of pretty much any situation.
The reason why Dyon doesn’t cultivate in the essence gathering system is only clear after the role of faith seeds/God constitutions in maturing meridians is explained (around chapter 190) - nothing would have been lost in explaining this earlier in the novel when he decides to focus on will comprehension and soul cultivation.
Honestly the way characters are introduced and interact with eachother are disappointing. Dyon’s convictions are thrown out far too suddenly - there’s not need to declare that he’s going to protect the girls he loves/his friends from any threat before he actually develops a meaningful relationship with them or encounters a source of danger? He’s not had a #tragicbackstory or other discernable motivation explained enough to show why he gets so rapidly attached to complete strangers to the detriment of himself.
The factions/pillars of the academy initially have the potential to be a sufficient source of intrigue/plot development, but the way in which they’re dismissed to being “branches” of much bigger clans that are in contention for control of their universe/others is poorly done - there’s no showing of the power disparity between branch/core factions and the way Dyon can act with relative impunity to both of these very early on in the story is ridiculous.
I think this story could be vastly improved if there was more effort put into giving characters substance as opposed to making them race towards a grand stage where celestial beings are in conflict...
(All of that being said, I binge read this far in less than a day so obviously something was in the story that stopped me from putting it down...)
I don't know where to start... I was caught up to the chapters until june/2020, but my meds kicked in and I couldn't take it anymore. Let's do this in sections:
Grammar and narrative - Author keeps breaking the fourth wall by interjecting his own voice, forcing himself on the narrator's shoes out of nowhere, for no reason. A minimal grasp on grammar would be necessary to pull it off, but the author's grasp on it is as loose as Miley Cyrus' tongue is from her mouth. He even managed to put spoilers on the author notes, and said "spoiler alert" only a few good lines after.
There is no grammatical structuring whatsoever... punctuation is thrown all around, and the author is a textbook example of the phrase "I don't think X means what you think it means". So many expressions that don't make sense, so many bad examples of sounding out words or just not bothering to check if they even exist, and loads of typos. There is a lot to be said about the grammatical issues on this piece... If you get even the slightest bit uncomfortable with bad grammar, stay away from this. I spent half the time skipping entire paragraphs due to the schizophrenic-esque writing.
Story - there is none. It just floats around the author's moods, sometimes narrowly avoiding a head-on collision with a rock, and sometimes going down a narrow, dark cave full of nasty creatures. There is some foreshadowing in a couple of places, but it is mostly 'mc beats someone, then someone else goes and find an idiotic reason to fight with him'. There are a few places throughout where Chekhov's metaphorical Gun is nicely placed. Most others are either placed for the suspense and to never again be seen or heard of, or for purposes of Deus ex Machinae, the most reinforced and bulletproof of plot armors. "I spent my remaining soul force to save you, I won't be able to help you anymore, forever" *proceeds to save the protagonist multiple other times from fatal encounters because just kidding, I still had some left. But this time I'm all out, true story. Hahaha got you*. The story is a power fantasy, exaggerated even by xianxia standards. Imagine if One Punch Man just kept on becoming exponentially more "One Punch Man"-y. First with his soul, then his body, then his energy. Sometimes the evolution makes sense and you can actually feel like the mc is putting in work, while the rest is just gratuitous. "He worked hard, so he was able to do it", and just like that, after a single short paragraph, mc has new powers. Also, I won't make this a separate section, but the cultivation system is incredibly confusing, to the point of making it seem like even the author doesn't get it sometimes. "Okay, I need to be a saint to do this, but I'm not a saint yet, except I am, but not really, and my body should have exploded if I weren't, but plot armor"
Characters - one dimensional, mostly. The majority exist to serve a single purpose and be tossed away, or to join the ever-growing, promised-never-to-happen harem. The mc, especially, is as shallow as a children's pool. "Mom told me to always be honest and hit on pretty ladies". Even when being a complete pervert, it's explained away as "his eyes remained pure, so she knew it came from his heart".
The last part I will talk about, as this is one of the hardest things to endure for me, is that the author depicts, in sometimes heavy detail, sexual intercourse between 13~14 year olds (mc and his "wifes"). I understand this is a work of fiction, but when an author writes a very graphic scene about a teenager being raped by a bad guy "to give credibility to her plight" (now removed from the chapter), and has the main character go around, in explicit detail, masturbating every other girl he finds, then proceeding to bang a few of them, once again in sordid detail, I tend to draw a line. Even when the mc gets older and only has adult partners, it still manages to perturb due to the large number of chapters detailing the sexual escapades of the plot-armored mc. The story in general feels like plain wish fulfillment, and some psychoanalyst or another would find that this trend proves disturbing when you consider the sheer amount of sex scenes are depicted involving minors.
I can honestly say I regret having spent so much time of my quarantine reading this. This manages to give Azarinth Healer a run for its money... at least, apart from the grammar, AH gets better later on.
I got to chapter 17 or so before I just couldn't go on.
On the surface this novel is a generic power fantasy/ wish fulfillment Xanxia novel.
The novel is quite entertaining if you can get over the fact that the Mc is only 13 years old, but is somehow better at everything than everyone he meets. For example he learns incredibly advanced skills in a couple hours. Skills that take so called "geniuses" years to learn even the foundations of. The kid (Mc) is simply too unrealistic and "perfect" for me to become invested in his character.
That's all well and good, and if that was the only problem I have with this novel I would probably still be reading it, using it as a relaxing break where I can zone out and not think too much.
Unfortunately the author made that impossible.
The Mc is only 13 he's constantly flirting and sexually attracted to every beautiful female character that he meets, which is every female character. The young girls in this novel are always depicted in quite the sexual manner ( 13- 15 year olds) and every single conversation the young boy of an Mc has with these girls is in someway about getting together with them.
I'm a man in my late 20s. I might like a good coming of age story or young adult novels a little more than I'd like to admit, but this was impossible for me.
I don't want to be picturing young girls in a sexual manner. This novel had slight promise, but the only thought I have after reading almost 20 chapters is how uncomfortable this novel made me feel.
Written at Ch.315
Let's just get right into this.
The writing style makes me think it's an amateur chinese translation with all the overly detailed paragraphs that, more often than not, repeat things to the nth degree and treat the readers like five-year-olds that can't remember what happened ten minutes ago. Can't remember how overpowered the mc is compared to everyone around him? No worries, almost other every other chapter that involves the mc and an opponent will go into excrutiating detail about that very fact.
The mc is the average cookie-cutter Gary Stue that manages to get himself out of any situation so there's no sense of panic or trepidation, stress or even worry. He advances in all fields faster than anyone else in the story, steps on everyone he meets that he doesn't immediately take a liking to and pretty much ignores everyone stronger than him. Can't say I blame him since the combination of his plot armor and the fact that everyone else, that don't play a pivotal role in the story, are complete idiots anyway, so there's nothing really for him, and readers, to worry about.
The characters' personalities are flatter than a tsundere's chest and about as 2D as that snake game you used to play on your phone as a kid (90s kids will know what I'm talking about)
This is about as anime and cliche as you can get in a story so if you like that kind of thing, then this is right up your alley.
But hey, the fighting scenes aren't half bad and the grammar isn't very cringe-worthy so there's that at least?
1 star = BOTH dropped and actively disliked the novel. Two stars would be just dropped because it was boring.
Awful. One of the worst in the genre. I've read a ton of translations and most of them are way better than this. MC learns everything in 1 hour, falls in love in a week and fights the entire world for one lady, is arrogant and attention getting as can be for no reason other than to satisfy his own ego, skips training arcs because "they're dumb" and then MC pops out with a ton of new abilities at random times. At least most face slapping novels make sense.
Disclaimer: I only made it ~35 chapters, maybe it gets better but it's so bad so far it's not worth finding out.
I'm mad I wasted a half hour. Chapters 1-5 were legitimately intriguing and then I was subjected to the worst kind of power fantasy self masturbatory display I've ever actually seen in chapters 6-7. I've got whiplash.
Poor attempt at a fiction that displays a depth of reading that halts at the level of basic anime. Full of stereotypes; overdone, terrible dialogue, and all of the social awareness of a 13-year-old child. Surprisingly good control of grammar, though. Every stupid adolescent fantasy rolled into one, with an author far too in love with the sound of his own voice - he can't even leave the reader in peace, but continues to interject himself via author's notes to try to control the reader's opinions, rather than simply relying on the power of his own writing.
If you've ever read a wuxia novel then this book won't suprise you in any way. It has relatively unique concepts but they are explained in such a vague way that whenever something new happens you just have to say ''ok, that's a thing now."
The mc's motivations for doing the things that he does are quite odd, the mc will often times attach himself to random characters for no good reason other than for plot progression. The dialogues feel rather dull whenever generic evil person number 2835 starts monologuing about how the mc shall be killed/face his doom/face their wrath/etc.. Subsequently failing and then being slapped in the face by the Mc's gigantic co...powers.
The world building is quite generic as it does the same thing that every other wuxia novel does.
The grammar's fine but could use some cleanup.
Binged 380 chapters, was insanely hyped until chapter 380, then coughed blood
The mc keeps having these inner monologues about him being a good person and not wanting to hurt his loved ones and friends, but always ends up doing the complete opposite.
So yeah the story kicks off with a friend of the mc getting raped (yeah yeah you want to prove that the mc's friends aren't untouchable, but was anal rape necessary? you can have them getting crippled on a fight, losing their cultivation, a limb or being overwhelmed by beasts to the point of half-death, but this? just pointless edge)
After that arc the mc goes to hide in the elven land and finds some orphans in the wild, so he builds an orphanage for them and hires a nanny to handle the kids, of course thanks to his later actions, the nanny gets tortured to death
(probably even raped considering her disfigured corpse was hanged naked)
But yeah let's change the topic, what about his cultivation?
Welll there's no surprises here, of course he's OP and it makes sense considering he absorbed the Qilin/Deer/Sage essences as a kid, the explanation for his perfect aurora was kinda insane though and the meridian thing.. well let's not talk about it.
I loved everything about the gates, the potential for cross-universe wars and invasions was amazing and really hyped me for the future, but i couldn't go past that chapter where the mc hands over a girl (the first girl he met after traveling to the martial world, who he clearly knows has feelings for him, Delia) to his """friend""" (a weakling he met on his early academy days, who moved his heart just because he didn't kneel down to his bullies! no i'm not joking)
So yeah dropped here
You might think "Hey, you're ignoring the rape and the torture parts,
but you're dropping the book just because of the mc being a cuck?"
I mean, even though the rape and torture part was complete unnecessary and trash, there wasn't anything the mc could do, yes setting up the story just for that to happen was terrible, but still the mc wasn't there to prevent it, but with Delia? he himself saw how she felt back when he was under the trial's illusion, he even promised Madeleine that he wouldn't ignore the feelings of the girls around him!
His actions go against the promise he did to Madeleine! so much for "muh Madeleine".
Just for the sake of the future readers please add the tag "Cuck" to the book, this way newer readers avoid wasting their time reading 380 chapters just to find out the mc is a cuck.
I'm done man, i'm done AND gone.