Withstanding: Arrival

by Clandestine

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark High Fantasy Magic Non-Human lead Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

 

 In the desolation of a world governed by a select, rich, few, impoverished millions toil for little. All the while, segregation, greed, injustice, and corruption run rampant within the walls of the great city of Eden.

All the struggles that lay within the current remnants of society were for naught.

A war that has been raging in the comsos for a millennia has finally reached Earth.

Doom Sayers of the 21st century were right. The world would end. 

The clock is ticking, and with every passing second,  both Earth and the universe at large, are quickly heading towards destruction. 

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This is the story about Montear, a young man that would discover his true destiny and purpose in this world; and his decision on whether or not he will allow it to come to fruition. 

*re-written as of 6/5/19*

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A beginning with potential.

Since the beginning of the rewrite has begun, this review has to be changed.

You have done some parts well that other authors fail to do, to put in the MC's name with logic, and placed the divine origins inside of him, the other musical aspect is still a bit rough, but functional nonetheless.

Beginning of chapter goes Hototo at the start of every sentence, giving him a brutish outlook at first before he grew into the [ Redacted for the sake of future readers ].

Story has a decent premise. The brutality of the tribe gives a softer landing into the possible future of a dystopian empire *Wink*.

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Finally.

This... this has finally been fixed.

My past grievances about Monty are forgiven.

Look below for more specific but spoiler like stuff.

Spoiler: Spoiler

Clandestine, you've made large improvements to your craft, and I shall watch closely for how this story turns out!