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A thousand spells in your pocket, for a price.

So the email told Mathias, a creative teenager dreaming of freedom on a conquered Earth where magic is a resource to fight over, and a dragon despot rules the stars. The mysterious Magik website offers him the chance to purchase magical powers online, so long as he fulfills the requests of hidden benefactors. He accepts.

Now embroiled in a power game he barely understands, Mathias decides to do the only sensible thing: build a crack team of magicians, monsters, and would-be knights to take down their oppressive dictatorship. An easy Quest, right?

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1: My Magical App ago
2: Pay to Win ago
3: Skill Tree A ago
3 Skill Tree B ago
4: Season Pass A ago
4: Season Pass B ago
5: Boss Battle ago
6: DLC: Hunter's Moon ago
7: New Kid in Town ago
8: Setting up the Hideout ago
9: Heist Planning ago
10: Sword and Sorcery, Part 1 ago
10: Sword and Sorcery, Part 2 ago
11: The Raid, Part 1 ago
12: The Raid, Part 2 ago
13: Aftermath ago
14: DLC: The Dragon General ago
15: Beach Party ago
16: Doomed Plans ago
17: DLC: The Day it all came down ago
18: The Turning Point ago
19: Captured A ago
19: Captured B ago
20: DLC: Meet the Party ago
21: DLC: The Rogue ago
22: Jailbreak ago
23: Dragonslayer ago
24: End of the Beginning ago
25: Volume I Epilogue: The Panopticon ago
26: Dreams of the Crimson King ago
27: The Shadow Queen ago
28: Corpse Party ago
29: The Soul Casino ago
30: The King's Conquest, I ago
31: The King's Conquest, II ago
32: DLC: Beware the Hunters ago
33: Modded Feature ago
34: Get Smashed! ago
35: Meet the Medic ago
36: Pitch Black ago
37: DLC: Imp Story ago
38: DLC: The Fog of War ago
39: The Night of the Seven ago
40: DLC: Requiem for Earth ago
Book I on Kindle - Not a Chapter ago
41: Gathering Shadows ago
42: Lost in the Save ago
43: Heart of Blue ago
44: The Concordian Gambit ago
45: Before the Lair ago
46: DLC: Odyssey ago
47: Into the Dungeon ago
48: Random Encounter ago
49: Draw Aggro ago
50: Campers ago
51: Speech Check ago
52: DLC: The Ace in the Hole ago
53: The Caged Sun ago
54: Coordinators ago
55: The Strongest Zodiac ago
56: Raid Boss ago
57: The Trap ago
58: DLC: The First Sponsor ago
59: Inner Conflict ago
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kgy121
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I passed over this one a few times, but turns out it's actually about a person using magic. The game thing from the first chapter is quickly rendered irrelevant by plot introducing itself, and the true setting is revealed.

Bit of bait and switch I could have done without, but that's fine.

So far it's been a basic revenge story on 'system gives quests to do exactly what you're already doing' rails, but the metaplot about what is actually going on with all the magic is interesting, if as of yet not gotten to. (Ch 15)

Haven't gotten enraged by typos yet either, so that's a plus.

However, most of the introduced characters have been somewhat 2d; the ones that couldn't be described by an adjective in short order become noun-noun-nouns; ie cyborg knight priest. Hopefully they gain a bit more character development as the story progresses beyond 'this is how I gain this noun', as currently the ones I like best are minor characters.

Berserker Gargoyle Mercenary ftw.

Beyogi
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Magic returned and then the dragon empire invaded

This is a story that plays in a post magic apocalypse setting. When magic returned to Earth it didn't come with a magic system, but an invasion from an interstellar draconic empire. Humanity didn't stand a chance and was conquered and annexed.

The story starts years after said apocalypse following the life of a teenage game developer who's got a worrying affinity with using illegal AI. This very tendency aroused the interest of an unknown sponsor, giving him access to magic and allowing him to do more than just petty sabotage against his alien overlords.

Overall this is a good story, I wouldn't call it realistic, but it demands far less suspension of disbelief than most other LITRPGs. There seems to have been significant effort in worldbuilding, making for interesting antagonists and protagonists. It also shows the ambiguity of a rebellion. Allying with people you'd otherwise rather not.

The MC is rather standard. Mother abducted by the aliens, so he's got reasons for a grudge, smarter than he's got any right to be, so he can pull off whatever he does. It's easy to empathise with him. Despite his teenage age, he's not an edgy anti-hero.

I'm honestly not sure what to think about the antogonists. The big bads seem to be walking clichées. The Evil Empire, the petty tyrant dragon, the Demon. On the other hand the lesser antagonists are far less so. The Imperial policeman trying to protect the locals from evils both demonic and subversive. I hope we'll see more of those. The nasty part of being a rebel is that good people are your worst enemies.

Overall I'd definitely recommend reading this. So far it's been a rather exciting read.

Humanprototype
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good but many plot holes

Well written with excellent pacing and good characters/dialogue but... it breaks my suspension of disbelief. Considering the monumental difference in power levels, that the mc gets away with some of the things he does without getting stomped like an overripe grape, is frankly unbelievable. Its incredibly convenient that lie detection or mind reading spells don't seem to exist. Not to mention magical detection/tracking spells conviently not working or not being used at all, I could keep going. All the ignored or hand-waved plot holes add up to me being continually pulled out of the story.

Zaerquin
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Concordia is Good

The story of a noble advanced dragon empire that mixes technology and magic to stand against evil. These dragons seek to protect all races from Genocidel maniacs, A.I. revolutions, psychopathic criminals, and ever consuming elementals.

Whoops actually it's about the humans that don't like being ruled by another race and want freedom for Earth, even though the dragons are probably the most merciful of the powers of the galaxy.

Fun story, call me unpatriotic but I'm hoping the dragons win. 

mikaelmarkus10
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Really great so far! The Magic system is very intresting and I like the characters so far! I hope this story gets more attention because it deserves it!

Andross Guile
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A world conquered by scifi dragons with the power to wield magic, a vast interstellar empire that grows continuously. The world is rich in wonder and intrigue. The characters are almost alive and they seem as of yet not to be shielded by plot armour. 

On the originality score it's top-notch. The world has an Orwellian feel to it with mysterious ministries vying for power and yet staying in harmony. The magitech reminds me of other stories yet with its own twist. It's deeper and more magical than the usual LitRPG fare. 

On the RoyalRoad stage I'd put this story in the top 5. On the world stage perhaps in the top 1000. There are syntax mistakes far and few between, such as writing "maring" instead of "marring", but nothing a small wince can cover. 

This is a fantastic story that needs only very little polish to be among the very best in its genre. 

ultimateknow
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Clickbait name. I love it

The fact that the words online and system are so overused that whenever you see them in the name of a title, the first thing that comes to mind are the stereotypes, if you can call them that. The simple fact that this novel just overturned what i expected makes it all the better. That and the writing is decent. I have no idea what this will turn into, but this is epic.

Pandalicious
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Nice job of a novel. Recommend checking this one out.

Cakeofdoom
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Well written, but I have a nit pick

I like this story, the writting is engaging the characters are engaging, the world is expansive, the magic system is good and the plot is moving forwards. Magik has all the major elements that get me to like a story, but the reason I'm writting this review is a nit pick that has been bugging me that I wanted to get off my chest.

Basicaly, the main character becomes a blue mage (basically this is information gathering and mental manipulation magic) and instead of doing the reasonable thing like staying hidden and bringing down the evil empire with subtle methods, he instead learns offensive magic and wins all his battles with physical force. This only works due to plot armour keeping him alive against superior enemies in battles he should have never gotten into in the first place.

Other than that there are a couple minor problems like some of the non human team mates being uniteresting and the MC being too reckless, but overall I'm realy enjoying the story and I would highly recomend it.

heteaho
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Good start, disappoints later

Interesting first 9 chapters, then it got sort of stupid. After chapter 9 the mc only breaths because the plot demands it, the baddies actively avoid killing him for ... reasons. The secret identity part also got done away after chapter 9. So I don't think the tag is earned.