A man, reincarnated into a magic world, fought his way to the very top, only to have to start again after an accident. He find's himself turned into a dungeon core and now he has to do it all over again. Maybe this time, he can even rise higher than he climbed before.
On his side he has his trusted partner Luna - a dungeon fairy, for him she was more like a deus ex machina.
The story is written in the third person and contains multiple points of view. At the moment this would be the mc, Luna and a young starting adventurer.
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Intresting back story, but nothing exceptional as of chap 6, I have high Hopes that by chapter 10 it will deserve 5 stars
This story is pretty good for the first dozen or so chapters, but escalates far too much too quickly afterward. It's good that there's such limited points of view, keeping the story focused where it should be, but there's spelling issues all over the place, which can be distracting and diminish readability.
The major problem that the fic has besides the spelling and escalation though, is that it includes the worst, most annoying, moronic world element ever imagined; cultivation. It's barely a thing that's mentioned early on, thankfully, but as the story continues, it becomes more and more prominent, talked about near constantly by several characters.
I knew I was in for a bumpy ride from the first pages. Despite the sometimes jarring grammar and the often speech-like dialog, I found myself interested in the story. So I read it all the way to the end.
If grammar is an issue for you, you should probably pass on this one. Likewise, if character development and natural dialog are important to you, keep moving on.
However, if you can overlook these basic storytelling elements, the author's tale of what an immensely powerful wizard with memories from his modern society beginnings does to cope with being accidentally absorbed by a fresh dungeon core can most certainly work for you.
Unfortunately, the reading process is hampered by missing words, duplicate words, incorrect words, and incorrect tense.
These errors are consistent throughout the chapters, and become very annoying, ruining the flow of the story for the reader while he/she is immersed in the story.
Although there are many editing issues, I've listed below consistent errors that occur repeatidly throughout chapters up to where I stopped reading (chapter 49):
"sight" --> sigh
"sighted" --> sighed
"hit" --> had
"the" --> they
Overall, I like the story...but become very annoyed by the constant errors that could be easily remedied if the auther proof read (aloud) the chapters before posting. I also checked the math used in the mana regeneration throughout the chapters, and to the authors credit, it's correct.