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Gods are, generally speaking, not fans of directly putting their fingers on the scale. This is for a variety of reasons, ranging from cautioun to amusement, but is generally because after a few hundred millennia and enough prayers to fill a hollow Earth, you're bound to learn the art of delegation. Luckily, among the unwashed masses, there exist the exceptional, the gifted, those with the potential to become Heroes.
Thus, the Gods adopted a more laissez-faire policy.
Quasi Eludo has been a Hero. He did the whole "save the world” rigmarole, came home, and mulled over his magical journey. It was amazing! A whole lifetime as the destined savior, with magic and monsters, love and adventure, lifelong friendships and heartfelt goodbyes. There was so much, and yet, gone so soon.
It wasn’t enough. It was never enough. He wanted to do it again. And where wants coincide, there's a market, so he sold his services to the lazy, wanton Gods.
Quasi Eludo, Hero for Hire. [No world too big, no quest too small]
Now, after countless subjective centuries of Hero-ing, and several awkward conversations with the IRS, an odd God has come to Quasi with a unique request: Destroy a world, minimum payment of several million dollars on completion.
Quasi sees no reason not to accept.
*$50,000 USD minimum charge plus expenses for all fetch quests. Extermination requests subject to environmental review.
Parental Warning: Contains descriptions of nudity and lizard sex. No eldritch abominations were molested in the writing of this novel.
All characters are fictional. Any resemblance to actual Gods, Deities, or Discord server members is purely coincidental regardless of how accurately they are described.
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The author needs to take some friggin' notes, and then refer back to them while writing.
Is the skill called Bone Renewal or Skeletal Renewal? Are the lizard people Gejada, Gejan or Gajan? The head honcho of Odin's church, is he a Counselor or a Chancelor? Is Mule's name capitalized or not? Who knows! All those things change all the time, sometimes within the same chapter. Or what about that one time the MC decides his Advanced Mana Sense is going to be called Greater Mana Sense? Just the one time, then it goes back.
It is seriously driving me crazy.
This is a decent story with a semi original plot and likeable, if somewhat idiotic characters. The non-summoned characters might technically be people but they act like NPCs.
Now to the massive con: THE SYNTAX IS ATROCIOUS!!! Seriously, the most glaring error was instead of writing "Franky's" you wrote "Frankies". Unless you have many people called Franky you never write the plural of a name.
What's slightly irritating is the sexual stuff in the story. I don't mind NSFW stuff but it's done terribly here. I don't know why you added it at all. It's jarring and annoying. If you have such raunchy characters, don't make fade to black sex scenes, it doesn't fit thematically.
The flashbacks should be made obvious. You should at the least make headers that say: 2 months earlier or something because it takes a few sentences to understand that we're somewhere completely different in the narrative.
And to my final criticism: It's laudable that you cleaned up your syntax somewhat in chapter 18 but you must edit the rest of your chapters. Take a day off from writing and edit properly. I guarantee you'll go up by a couple hundred in the rankings if you do. I almost stopped reading because it was so awful.
Otherwise, well done and I hope to read more.
(updated as of chapter 150; the old review was from April 2019 at chapter 27)
In 'Inexorable Chaos', Quasi is a professional Hero who is regularly summoned by gods to any world where one is needed and thus he has lots of experience with that. His newest "job" is from Loki and the goal is to destroy a world that has turned out faulty/broken.
Style: The story is told in present tense from the point of view of multiple people, with a handful of regular ones. Sometimes it's not easy to notice whose POV it is in the earlier chapters. LitRPG elements are done mostly in the form of levels, Classes and use of Skills. Blue boxes are for system messages and when somebody is Appraised or getting a new class.
Story: While the concept of the story is interesting and the story is nice to read, I feel it is a bit lacking in suspense because Quasi succeeds too easily. Whenever there is an obstacle, there is not even a little doubt that it will be overcome with little struggle. There are also a bit too many different points of view, to the point of confusion. The pacing is more on the slow side, with many deviations from the main storyline.
Grammar: The early chapters are bad but still readable (2.5 stars) with a significant number of plural-s/possessive-s errors and some homophone errors, in addition to punctuation errors. Also often there are clunky sentences. After a few dozen chapters it gets much better but it's still not great.
Characters: Quasi might be the MC but to me he reads like an immature and boring comic relief. Most readers like that but I don't. Concerning "boring": He's massively, massively overpowered and that takes away all the suspense. Everything easily works out for him, the biggest obstacles he has to overcome is when something only works out to 99%, e.g. he's getting blood on his clothes from blowing up some boss monster 10 times his level. Concerning "comic relief": Quasi is an obnoxious, attention-seeking drama queen, a significant part of his actions are loud and overdramatic theatrics. Concerning "immature": In addition to the presentation of the former trait and the simple jokes played all the time, another significant part of the story is the repetitive emphasis on his sexual desirablity and prowess. Every female, regardless of species, is constantly lusting for him. We later learn that this is because of a hidden trait. It made me chuckle the first few times but later on it became just another boring repetition wasting space in the chapters.
In the other characters, there is not too much depth either, but at least it is not so blatant. They have a nice variety of personalities, but there are a lot of them and sometimes it's difficult to remember who was who. Most are "nice to know about" but few are very captivating. Personally, I like the chapters with the side characters Franky, Rathos and Artyom best, although the latter is a very simple man.
All in all, this story is great if you're a fan of absolutely overpowered MCs. It's still an okay read if you're not, but with the suspense reduced by that you won't get the same enjoyment out of it IMHO.
It feels like I'm reading 5 different books, cause the character in the books description, is only in like 1/3 of the book, MAYBE, were told line 9 ish people's stories all at the same time, and by the time they're actually relevant in any way to the actual story, the author will have to repeat half the shit since there's no way people will remember 9 stories information, it's to the point where I see a pov and I'm like, is this a new one? One I've seen before? They all just mush together. And then we're told the same situation from different pov, and none of them are part of the MCs story. It's just too much. I like world building, but fuck me at least have 50% of the book on the MC, i can't see myself reading more than 5 more chapters.
Writing at chap 165
So to start the overall Story is great, I like the Worldbuilding the way the World is structured and how every part of the world interacts with one another. The main charecter moves the plot in interesting ways, while most of the side charecters have their own agenda, but aren´t the main reason the plot moves. the sole problem I have with the story, is that I felt that it was at times slightly inconsistent, when it comes to leveling, but most of it gets explained at one point and the rest feels like it was more of a stylistic choice so I will critiqu it there.
The characters are in my opinion the Strongest part of the story, the Side Cast is somwhat unique, and the main charecter carries this story (mind you the main charecter singular). The charecters, that surround him are all great and have uniquze personalities and question their choices. The gods are quite well written and you can understand their motives and ways. The thing that I find a bit annoying, is that there are a lot of charecters, and iat is sometimes hard to keep track of all of them.
Now to my main complaint: There is to much hopping in the Perspectives in my opinion. I understand, it is mostly so we can understand the world, but there are so many chapters dedicated to other heroes, that feel more like filler than actual story. Sure we learn how different Countries work, but it is not like you are interested in that stuff, if it is moree than 100 chapters later, that the main cast an even meet one of the people involved. Also I personally felt like the 1st ark which is in the end mostly set up for the actual story, that is promised at the start takes way to long.
Grammer wise there ae some slight mistakes, but nothing game breaking for me.
Overall, if you like the main setup of he story and the main charecter I can recomend it, and would advise skipping some later chapters about distant charecters, then it is quite nice to read.
I rather enjoyed the story at the begiining and for the first hundred-odd chapters. The author's style, though, makes it harder for me to continue to find enjoyment in the story. I get it, the author goes by Cliff Hanger so there are going to be cliff hangers in the story. The author seems to enjoy celebrating this fact in the author's note for reasons that I do not understand. This is just a minor nuisance, but it feels like a sign of the change in the author's writting.
At the end of the day, it feels like the story tries to do too much and I have no idea how any of what the main character is doing fits into the overarching plot. There is an overarching plot, right? Ever since they left the dungeon...they're just drifting. Are they actually doing something? I couldn't begin to guess.
I don't mind slife of life stories, but this one just seems to be going nowhere and doing so in a very roundabout way. Perhaps the story will pick up again at some point, but I'm not sure I have the patience to wait for that day.
In this review : one thing i like and one i dont
The secondary characters in this novel are great, (russian, big Lady, general... ) they have interesting personalities and story and it's fabulous.
As of chapter 50-ish the main plot in the dungeon is really being stretched out, the characters is the only thing keeping me reading, the pace is way too slow/repetitive with Quasi.
I really like this type of story. Overpowered protagonist, but not too much that he cannot lose. Just enough that It still gives a sense of urgency of certain situations.
I like the writing style. Some may say that CliffHanger (author) has too many cliffhangers in the story, but I disagree. I think you have a perfect equilibrium there. (Almost) every chapter makes me want to come back and read more.
Thanks for the awesome story.
I’m loving this story so far, it grew on me very quickly. At first I was wary as I was thinking it would turn into another OP MC story right away. Sure the MC is looking to become extremely powerful but it’s not like the normal OP MC where they can never be beat and can shoot laser beams that kill gods with ease or something. This MC survives by using knowledge litterally gained from countless lifetimes worth of personal experience and by being as quick witted as he is strong also with some occasional outright bluffs thrown in for good measure. I highly recommend this story.
Inexorable Choas (IC) follows an isekaier for hire. Having lived for over 9000 years, Quasi is used to dealing with betrayal, non-humans, the hidden nature of gods, and systems of growth like magic. With his extensive history he ends up hired by Loki, the god of choas, who aims to bring change to his world through its destruction.
The enjoyable foundation is supported with a clearly planned out web of plots that are slowly intertwinned with shifting POVs which initially track three completely seperate groups. Unfortunately despite the clear consideration that has gone into these developments the story is left hamstrung by its grammar and style.
Written in present tense, the story lacks a certain flow which you may come to expect from other works. This unforttunately makes everything feel more stunted and simple. Characthers feel one dimensional as their strengths and weaknesses are explained rather then developed over time. Sex scenes are skipped with only post cotius discussions emphaising how great everyone was. Dangers are presented but feel incredibly distant with even death feeling hollow. This issue is further heightened by mutiple cases of poor grammar and spelling, as has been discussed extensively in other reviews.
Ultimately you get a work that reads like an incredible but very rough first draft. I would suggest to the author that they hit their next milestone and then review the intitial set of chapters. Consider changing the tense and what could be done to present each characthers strengths and personalities rather then telling them.