Inexorable Chaos

(as of chapter 27)

In 'Inexorable Chaos', Quasi is a professional Hero that is summoned to any world where one is needed and thus he has lots of experience with that. His newest "job" is to destroy a world as it has turned out faulty.

Style: The story is told in present tense from the point of view of multiple people. Sometimes it's not easy to notice who's POV it is.

Story: While the concept of the story is interesting and the story is nice to read, I feel it is a bit lacking in suspense because Quasi succeeds too easily. There are also a bit too many different points of view.

Grammar: A significant number of plural-s/possesive-s errors and some homophone errors, in addition to punctuation errors. Also often there are clunky sentences.

Characters: There is not too much depth to the characters. For Quasi everything easily works out and the others don't have really narrow situations either. Most of the characters are "nice to know about" but none are overly captivating.

The story overall is amazing. It gives just enough to make the characters endearing and character building, and yet leaves out enough cause speculation and suprises along the way.

-The style is unique. It gives off the feeling of fantasy, yet not the awestruck fantasy as usually (thought it does have those moments) it gives the view of a proffesional who is just making his job as enjoyable as possible. Getting paid while he's at it.

- The story overall is amazing. It gives just enough to make the characters endearing and character building, and yet leaves out enough cause speculation and suprises along the way.

-The characters have so many paths they can go down for building. While the MC seems like a clear cut guy, we don't know enough about him for it to seem boring. I won't really talk about other characters too much for spoilers sakes but the other ones either aren't as clear cut as you originally think or they follow the trope in their own unique twist.

-I catch a few spelling mistakes here and there and maybe a word in the wrong place every once in a while, but not bad. If wanted, just msg me and I can do an edit check on the entire book.

Overall score 3 five stars and one four star. Since I don't count grammer nearly as important the entire thing gets a five star. Congrats! *confetii*

This is a decent story with a semi original plot and likeable, if somewhat idiotic characters. The non-summoned characters might technically be people but they act like NPCs.

Now to the massive con: THE SYNTAX IS ATROCIOUS!!! Seriously, the most glaring error was instead of writing "Franky's" you wrote "Frankies". Unless you have many people called Franky you never write the plural of a name. 

What's slightly irritating is the sexual stuff in the story. I don't mind NSFW stuff but it's done terribly here. I don't know why you added it at all. It's jarring and annoying. If you have such raunchy characters, don't make fade to black sex scenes, it doesn't fit thematically.

The flashbacks should be made obvious. You should at the least make headers that say: 2 months earlier or something because it takes a few sentences to understand that we're somewhere completely different in the narrative.

And to my final criticism: It's laudable that you cleaned up your syntax somewhat in chapter 18 but you must edit the rest of your chapters. Take a day off from writing and edit properly. I guarantee you'll go up by a couple hundred in the rankings if you do. I almost stopped reading because it was so awful. 

Otherwise, well done and I hope to read more.

I’m loving this story so far, it grew on me very quickly. At first I was wary as I was thinking it would turn into another OP MC story right away. Sure the MC is looking to become extremely powerful but it’s not like the normal OP MC where they can never be beat and can shoot laser beams that kill gods with ease or something. This MC survives by using knowledge litterally gained from countless lifetimes worth of personal experience and by being as quick witted as he is strong also with some occasional outright bluffs thrown in for good measure. I highly recommend this story. 

One issue that you tend to have when you read a LARGE amount of story's like I do is that you tend to get tired of same old same old happening. You really only can stand reading about a certain trope happening so many times before you can pretty much give an almost verbatim explination as to what a story's plot is going to be when you find their trope. A perfect example of an overdone trope that pretty much everyone knows by now is the "summoned hero" trope which either is "kill the demon king" or "your summoner's are @ssholes" but after reading this I can say with a great deal of excitement that this has NOTHING to do with those tropes, infact I am quite pleased to say that I have little idea of what's gonna happen and I excitedly looking forward to it.:)

Okay, I'm gonna say first off that I really like the story in general. The 'feel' of the entire thing as it's put together really keeps me reading, and I like the characters (despite the changing POVs being a bit flow-breaking for me). Setting also has nice touches and doesn't pull punches in regards to things like slavery and whatnot.

The style is....'weird'. I don't even really know how to describe it. It's partly like the author is making up things as he goes along and partly like he knows exactly what he's doing. Whatever is going on there, I like it. It sticks out from other stuff even if it can kind of throw me off at times. A major issue I have with it however is that the author switches back and forth from third-person to first person, sometimes even within the same chapter. That is legitimately annoying to me as it's not consistent much of the time.

The grammar could use work. There's a bunch of typos and things that need fixing, and some tense-stuff that could also use work. What really annoys me is how the author uses 'utilize' wrong. Basically you just say 'use' instead of 'utilize' for each time he uses the word. Other general things involving grammar are solid though and don't throw me out of immersion.

The story itself isn't very fast-paced, but that isn't bad. It has layers which hint to something bigger going on in the background, and there are moments that do pay off in respect to the power progression of the characters or overarching story. The multiple POVs can get a bit tiring though, as we suddenly jump to different characters and plotlines that I personally am less invested in than others, but they do progress the plot in either terms of character growth or just more interesting stuff happening.

Characters are good. There's 3 primary POV-characters with wildly different backgrounds and personalities, and the side-characters aren't anything to scoff at either in terms of those things. The funniest part is the 'main' character's narcissism and general 'whatever' attitude toward everything around him. But there is also genuine growth and perspective into the world in the other characters' eyes as well. I think the author did a very good job with getting readers to care about them despite the 'unrelated-to-primary-POV' issue.

Overall, great job. Could use some work, but great nonetheless

I am loving the story.  This story takes a tried and true concept of hero summoning and game boxes and manages to still be fresh and entertaining.

i was a little confused at first with the perspective shifting to different MC’s or viewpoints.  If the story had ended on one of those when I first started reading it would have been horrible.  Luckily I started reading after 18 chapters were done and I can see how the viewpoint shift is going to enhance and make the story better.

My only complaint as ever when I finally find a great story is that I want more immediately.  That being said I would rather the author take their time and continue to put out a high quality product than face speed and a decline in quality.

Keep up the great work and ignore any of those haters that only bring negativity to any situation.

I really like the story. I've read all so far published chapters (23).

Good points:

• Fresh storyline concept, very much to my liking
• Funny engaging characters
• Fucking isn't taboo and is a normal part of the story
• Fully exposed mature content, no sugarcoating the shown reality
• Fantasy setting and RPG elements
• Future potential of the story; empire building, heroes confrontations, epic battles, uncovering secrets of the world, god of trickery, slice of life scenes helping in world background exposition, etc. 

To be improved points:

• Realese rate - from my experience on RR stories with regular, say every 3 days, realeses maintain high popularity and ratings. I believe that in time author will grow in experience and confidence which would let him write the story faster. 
• Some chapters are little too short, some chapters are just long enough but don't have enough story progression or world exposition to be satisfied (like chapter 23) 
• Not enough of the main character, the guy is funny, his hilarity mainly comes from the contrast of a guy who wants to have fun and is laid back while in life or death struggles , side chars. are obviously important in the world building, but aren't as entertaining 
• Quickly improving editorial level of the story
• I suspect the Author doesn't have sketched up the overall main or side story plots yet, same with this and the next arcs in more detail, potential story lines of high and low level of importance for the total story development have grate potential to intertwine and expand on each other in the future but without the anchor points in plot thought out in advance the storyline cohesion will suffer along with the overall quality of the product. 

In short great potential both for the story and the Author. 

Cheers

Review made with chapter 19 being the latest.

A narcissistic hero for hire signs a contract with an insane god to destroy a world.

The thing this story does really well is making me like the main character. Other stories that have "old" characters portray them as being aloof or distant, having an air around them that screams "I HAVE SEEN IT ALL BEFORE". This mc does not. He just has the right amount of arrogance for his mental age.

The pacing is pretty good, the side characters get decent development and the grammar is on point (after commenters point out the mistakes and the writer fixes them).

The only thing i find lacking is the worldbuilding, but the story hasn't developed enough yet for it to be relevant.

All in all a great fantasy.