by Cliff Hanger
- Sexual Content
- Traumatising content
What happens when a summoned hero completes their task given by those from up above? When a summoned hero returns back to earth after having saved the world, do they still get to live a normal life?
The answer is actually yes, they usually do. They get married to the one they love, have kids, and then death takes them away.
Of course, that is only usually. There are a select few who choose not to... think the same way.
Some of them find such a life boring, dull even.
They want to taste for adventure once more, feed their drive for exploration! Power, wealth, another life, they want it all. So, what do they do? Why, they do what Quasi does...
They sell themselves to the gods.
This story will contain 2 and 3-dimensional characters.
Sex/ Drama/ Love/ Harem
Constantly Changing POV's
Multiple Main characters.
Messed up shit-- You have been warned.
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The author needs to take some friggin' notes, and then refer back to them while writing.
Is the skill called Bone Renewal or Skeletal Renewal? Are the lizard people Gejada, Gejan or Gajan? The head honcho of Odin's church, is he a Counselor or a Chancelor? Is Mule's name capitalized or not? Who knows! All those things change all the time, sometimes within the same chapter. Or what about that one time the MC decides his Advanced Mana Sense is going to be called Greater Mana Sense? Just the one time, then it goes back.
It is seriously driving me crazy.
This is a decent story with a semi original plot and likeable, if somewhat idiotic characters. The non-summoned characters might technically be people but they act like NPCs.
Now to the massive con: THE SYNTAX IS ATROCIOUS!!! Seriously, the most glaring error was instead of writing "Franky's" you wrote "Frankies". Unless you have many people called Franky you never write the plural of a name.
What's slightly irritating is the sexual stuff in the story. I don't mind NSFW stuff but it's done terribly here. I don't know why you added it at all. It's jarring and annoying. If you have such raunchy characters, don't make fade to black sex scenes, it doesn't fit thematically.
The flashbacks should be made obvious. You should at the least make headers that say: 2 months earlier or something because it takes a few sentences to understand that we're somewhere completely different in the narrative.
And to my final criticism: It's laudable that you cleaned up your syntax somewhat in chapter 18 but you must edit the rest of your chapters. Take a day off from writing and edit properly. I guarantee you'll go up by a couple hundred in the rankings if you do. I almost stopped reading because it was so awful.
Otherwise, well done and I hope to read more.
(updated as of chapter 150; the old review was from April 2019 at chapter 27)
In 'Inexorable Chaos', Quasi is a professional Hero who is regularly summoned by gods to any world where one is needed and thus he has lots of experience with that. His newest "job" is from Loki and the goal is to destroy a world that has turned out faulty/broken.
Style: The story is told in present tense from the point of view of multiple people, with a handful of regular ones. Sometimes it's not easy to notice whose POV it is in the earlier chapters. LitRPG elements are done mostly in the form of levels, Classes and use of Skills. Blue boxes are for system messages and when somebody is Appraised or getting a new class.
Story: While the concept of the story is interesting and the story is nice to read, I feel it is a bit lacking in suspense because Quasi succeeds too easily. Whenever there is an obstacle, there is not even a little doubt that it will be overcome with little struggle. There are also a bit too many different points of view, to the point of confusion. The pacing is more on the slow side, with many deviations from the main storyline.
Grammar: The early chapters are bad but still readable (2.5 stars) with a significant number of plural-s/possessive-s errors and some homophone errors, in addition to punctuation errors. Also often there are clunky sentences. After a few dozen chapters it gets much better but it's still not great.
Characters: Quasi might be the MC but to me he reads like an immature and boring comic relief. Most readers like that but I don't. Concerning "boring": He's massively, massively overpowered and that takes away all the suspense. Everything easily works out for him, the biggest obstacles he has to overcome is when something only works out to 99%, e.g. he's getting blood on his clothes from blowing up some boss monster 10 times his level. Concerning "comic relief": Quasi is an obnoxious, attention-seeking drama queen, a significant part of his actions are loud and overdramatic theatrics. Concerning "immature": In addition to the presentation of the former trait and the simple jokes played all the time, another significant part of the story is the repetitive emphasis on his sexual desirablity and prowess. Every female, regardless of species, is constantly lusting for him. We later learn that this is because of a hidden trait. It made me chuckle the first few times but later on it became just another boring repetition wasting space in the chapters.
In the other characters, there is not too much depth either, but at least it is not so blatant. They have a nice variety of personalities, but there are a lot of them and sometimes it's difficult to remember who was who. Most are "nice to know about" but few are very captivating. Personally, I like the chapters with the side characters Franky, Rathos and Artyom best, although the latter is a very simple man.
All in all, this story is great if you're a fan of absolutely overpowered MCs. It's still an okay read if you're not, but with the suspense reduced by that you won't get the same enjoyment out of it IMHO.
It's a power fantasy meaning the main character as no opposition, for a few moments he seems in danger but he is not really, wich is unfortunate. He never has set back, yes some thing don't happen the way he wants them to, but every thing seems to happen in a way that is beneficial to him.He is a 13 year old with a genius brain in a indestructible body (there are several times where he is damage but nothing that has consequences).That makes him extremely boring there is no tension and I even think the main character drages this story down. The main character is trapped in a isolated dungeon where every single thing in there is dumb as bricks but the floors are interesting and the side character are alright. Outside is where the interesting things happen the side characters there have motives reasons that make sense they are interesting intelligent and they are not whores for the main character, also the worldbuilding is very good. I'm not sure why the author decided to make such a perverted main character but it is not that bad, meaning the mc actually tries to do something about it and it's not entirely his fault, what I don't like is every other female inside the dungeon is a nympho, accepted the priest who made a vow and even her seams in love.
In conclusion the worldbuilding is great, the story is interesting the side characters are from good to alright and the mc is a meh.
In this review : one thing i like and one i dont
The secondary characters in this novel are great, (russian, big Lady, general... ) they have interesting personalities and story and it's fabulous.
As of chapter 50-ish the main plot in the dungeon is really being stretched out, the characters is the only thing keeping me reading, the pace is way too slow/repetitive with Quasi.
The early chapters were enjoyable but a bit rough to the point of immersion/entertainment breaking, but it does improve a lot after around chapter 60+
When I say "improve", I mean that the tone and story becomes tighter, it's still the same story but the immersion breaking stuff isn't really present anymore or at least not to an extent that makes your brows furrow. He's still OP MC but now he doesn't show too much imcompetence and what lack of planning and thinking can just be chalked up to him being primarily bored and cocky.
Very entertaining story, prose, pace, syntax, all of that good shit too.
I'd rather have a truly OP MC and just have the tension elsewhere in the story, somewhat similar to One Punch Man where all the tension is with the great side characters. It's not because I particularly like OP MCs, it's more like everytime something bad happens to the MC, it's usually because he did something dumb or made a bad call. Normally this would be normal, but MC is supposed to be a 7000 year-old Isekai expert. So yeah, I don't get it. Everytime he makes a bad call it just takes me out of the experience making me ask why he acted so idiotically.
One can argue that that's just because he's cocky, but then when he gets out of a situation because of luck and not of competence then it's just plot armor and not the MC actually being competent.
This is one of those mixed bag stories, where the good is really good and the bad is really bad. Could've been better at least for me and people like me if the MC is just an expert, but not sold as "the ultimate expert" or something like that. At least there's some wiggle room with that, or maybe if he gets out of situations through competence and not luck then that's also decent. As it is it's like everyone is saying that he's amazing when he's above average at best.
Quick review: good, read past 50
Long: Lit rpg goodness with a slightly insane lead. And awesome humor. The sheer random makes the story fun and exciting to read. Lead hero is odd, crazy, a bit op, but has his weaknesses. More believeable then your normal op lead. Supporting chars are diverse and grow well over time. Occasional pov skips that sometimes seem odd, till those little skips start to merge into a deeper plot. And the almost broken interactions between the lead and the system are very amusing.
Be warned, its a slow start. DO NOT let that stop you. Author seems to have been evolving his style a bit in the beginning. Grammer, dialoge, pacing, plot improve greatly as chapters continue. I read too much, but i can almost count on one hand the number of times ive had to stop reading due to laughing so hard my ribs hurt. And, it isnt that frequent that i skip sleep to keep binge reading. Truly delightful, and i look forward to more. Read it. Give it a little time to grow on you.
First off, this isn't the story of an experienced hero getting hired on a bunch of jobs and solving them quickly, it's one big tough job.
Overall it's a good story, well written, a good world, an interesting plot, fun characters. But while the overall ideas are good, they're not portrayed as well as they could be.
- Good descriptive writing
- Good grammar, with only a few errors that don't interfere with flow.
- The summoned heroes have great personalities.
- Most characters given any significant screen time are fairly well rounded.
- 3 fairly consistent main plotlines.
- MC is backed by the Gods of trickery, which always makes things interesting.
- Viewpoints switch constantly. By the current chapter (27) it's rare to get a whole chapter from one person's point of view, let alone two in a row. This makes it difficultto actually show any of the well crafted personalities.
- The MC hasn't actually used much trickery yet. He was unpredictable and chaotic in the first few chapters, but since then he has either facepunched or sent minions to solve all his problems with ease.
- It doesn't seem likely that the 3 plotlines will converge any time in the first book's worth.
Overall, this is a great story with a whole bunch of good ideas, which is having trouble developing any one of them.
It feels like I'm reading 5 different books, cause the character in the books description, is only in like 1/3 of the book, MAYBE, were told line 9 ish people's stories all at the same time, and by the time they're actually relevant in any way to the actual story, the author will have to repeat half the shit since there's no way people will remember 9 stories information, it's to the point where I see a pov and I'm like, is this a new one? One I've seen before? They all just mush together. And then we're told the same situation from different pov, and none of them are part of the MCs story. It's just too much. I like world building, but fuck me at least have 50% of the book on the MC, i can't see myself reading more than 5 more chapters.
I have to say that I have been enjoying this story, although the author's spelling is often atrocious, with hilariously misused words popping up when there are homophones available ("of coarse" instead of "of course", relevant instead of reverent, etc.).
My issues with the story are twofold. First, the way the author jumps POV is too disjointed. I have no problem with the number of POV shifts that are being attempted, but the cuts are done in unfortunate places. For example, in the Rathos arc, the author cuts just before the culmination of a large battle and then leaves to not return. If this is important enough to take us away from the main story line, then the arc needs to finish. In the Franky arc, we see the "race" to be highest level, then the Franky arc is dropped, as if this is not relevant anymore. There are also some continuity issues with the POV shifts (Franky and Quasi are mentioned as being 1 and 2, then later it is mentioned that there were a couple of amazon trained heroes that were 1 and 2, Zeek's granddaughter is introduced as a level 57 barmaid, then later gains a rank to get to level 50).
My second quibble is with the immaturity of the MC. I understand that he is being played up for laughs, but you have a character who is quite ruthless and experienced doing stupid sophomoric stuff for slapstick reasons. The dichotomy is pretty jarring. One of the reasons why Necromancers are usually reviled is that they have the ability to trap and torment the souls of the dead creature. Quasi seems to have avoided this so far by his selection of the type of undead he creates, but he has not faced the inevitable dilemna of the Necromancer as of yet, power or morality?
All that said, it sounds like I don't like the story, but that is not true. The world building is nice, the setting is fresh and most of the characters portrayed are done very well. I can't say that I am a huge fan of the MC as written, although I find myself rooting for his so that he can keep the other characters that I like more safe. This emotional engagement by the reader shows that the author is succeeding.