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Disclaimer: This is a low-fantasy, soft-sci-fi genre. In fact, it's a variety of genres, so don't be too put off by the tags

The third millennia, a time of change and evolution. An era, where people, through countless generations, have evolved strange powers and abilities.

Through several centuries of selective breeding, these beings, known as mages, have become part of the very foundations of society. However, some refused to change or adapt. They believed in purity and refused to interbreed with magikind. Known as the manush, they were a rarity among society.

Now, in the fifth millennia, the manush are thought extinct. With magikind ruling the world, a three-way war grips society. In these uncertain times, a manush called Gin will herald a new era for all Magikind.
 
A story of how man could realistically evolve while still pushing boundaries.



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Note: This is a rewrite of this: Magikind [Original] and a good number of people have read what I've done so far beforehand (patreon, beta readers etc, not to mentions old fans of the original etc. I've written 35 chapters so far for this rewrite), so don't be alarmed by any early reviews or ratings.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: A Simple Test ago
Chapter 2: Recovery ago
Chapter 3: Battalion Leader ago
Chapter 4: Identities ago
Chapter 5: The Low-Ranked ago
Chapter 6: Wontiferus Poxim ago
Chapter 7: The Next Phase ago
Chapter 8: Preparations for War ago
Chapter 9: Xernim Gauntlets ago
Chapter 10: Escape ago
Chapter 11: The Mentality of the Mages ago
Chapter 12: Successor ago
Chapter 13: The Prisoner ago
Chapter 14: Battalion Training ago
Chapter 15: Making the Useless Useful ago
Chapter 16: Colosseum ago
Chapter 17: Meeting Between Battalion Leaders ago
Chapter 18: Departure ago
Chapter 19: Dunes, Duties and Dreams ago
CHapter 20: Resources ago
Chapter 21: The Forest ago
Chapter 22: Predator ago
Chapter 23: Whispers from the Unknown ago
Chapter 24: That Which Divides All ago
Chapter 25: A Leader's Decision ago
Chapter 26: Gin's Resolve ago
Chapter 27: Investigation ago
[Not a chapter] Some artwork ago
[Not a chapter] Made it onto Top Web Fiction ago
Chapter 28: The Deserters ago
Chapter 29: Calm Before the Storm ago
Chapter 30: Maiden Battle Part 1 ago
Chapter 31: Maiden Battle Part 2 ago
Chapter 32: Maiden Battle Part 3 ago
Chapter 33: Maiden Battle Part 4 ago
Chapter 34: Maiden Battle (Final Part) ago
Chapter 35: Aftermath [End of Book 1] ago
Future Plans and Readers' AMA Chapter ago
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l nimbus
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Not a Beta reader. Love it anyway.

 

Ya'll can go and make a new sub-genre now. I'm serious.

I remember a discussion on a serious writing forum a few days ago. When someone asked if it had all been done already. If everything we wrote had already been done by someone else. My first thought was Magikind.

Because it HASN'T been done before. It's a new story, a new setting, a new take. It doesn't fit into any of the regular genres, any of the regular ideas. It's new and bold, and well done.

Story:

Earth got magic. And lost common sense. That's all I can describe it as. But was it intentional? Was it engineered to keep people in line, under control? Without them realizing it? That's a question I've been asking myself throughout the entire series. There have been some hints at that here and there, some teasing, even a surprise.

As it's explained early on, mages now dominate the earth with magicless humans, called the manush, going extinct years ago. This story follows Gin, one such manush, as he joins the Eurasian army. Applying in a division of misfits and cast-offs, he's determined to make something of himself, with his outsider's perspective and different way of thinking.

The world here is brutal, one where power determines a person's place in life. Lives have little no worth in this brutal world, and death lurks at every corner. The world building is great, showing a futures earth that's both advanced and has reveted from out own standards long ago. Technology has been replaced by magic, a change that cuts both ways. War is ever present, and above it all looms the MBP.

The mysterious Mage Breeding Program. THAT, is an entire enigma unto itself. No spoiling. What i will say though, that what they have wrought just might be something to contemplate on.

You get power. You get everything set to 'easy' for you. You want to be one of the lucky ones. One of the people that can make a difference. But what are you willing to give for it?

You can turn out powerful, but at what expense? Other's live? Your moral? Common Sense? What happens when children are raised from childhood to believe a preset set of ideals. Every child in the world. And there's no one to tell them otherwise? When it's so deeply engrained in their DNA that they'll never even think of acting otherwise.

That is one chilling question.

Style:

I never have much to say on style, so I'll just cruise on through. It gets the job done at at times, even feels like a professional writer's work. At other times, it becomes obvious the author is still learning, like us.

If I had to point out one thing, it's that the dialogue towards the current chapters feels a tad weaker than the one at the start and middle. Just something to think about.

Grammar:

Good, very good. Mistakes are few, far between, and exterminated with extreme prejudice. At least by my standards. Not that mine are particuarly high to begin with.

Moving on...

Characters:

Starts small, grows quickly, vibrant, colourful and deep. That's how I describe the cast.

Gin is a surprisingly good protagonist, carefully avoiding the stereotypes that you'd expect from someone in his situation. He's careful, calulating, quick on his feet and with his thinking.

There are many others here. The likeable/hateable Wo, the mysterious ( Yandere? ) Sam. Brim, a fire user Gin befriends. Joan, who was the effect of handing Gin his reality checks when she's not busy being his nurse.

Even side characters like Jack and Esper make impressions on you. All in all, I feel the cast is well done, but lacking some of the polish it needs to be truly memorable.

What gets me, is the author is so aware of these characters, their flaws, even what we'd call some plot holes. Hell, at one point, he has another character bring them up, IN THE STORY, to confront Gin with. His own failings, shortcomings, things readers might see and comment on.

I love that.

Conclusion:

It's new. It's well written. It might not be for everyone, but it's here to stay. So far, it's been flying under the radar, but it's one of the stories that I hope gets some well deserved publicity. Because, really, this is the kind of story that will be an inspiration to others.

The one that might just launch a new vein of stories in settings like these.

Is that a good thing? We'll find out.

 

Lucifer, the Morning Star
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I am a Beta Reader, meaning I've read all the written chapters/critiqued them since nearly the beginning, so I've seen a lot more content than what is available.

In a world of genetic modification and mages, mighty beasts in humanoid form and men of flames, a mysterious person shows up out of the aether, lacking any form of power but wielding technology the likes of which has never been seen...

I would like to preface my review saying that I find Gin (the "MC") to be a nearly unbearable character. I find him flat, disinteresting, and hard to direct any of my attention to.

However, the setting of the story and the other characters vastly make up for that small blemish. Characters like Wo, Jack, and the host of supporting cast members bring depth to the story that the lacklustre MC fails to add. It diverges pretty heavily from other stories of its genre, and manages to do it well.

The writing can feel shallow at times, but the authour has improved tremendously with time, so if you can get through the first few chapters it is all worth it.The style is decent too, it doesn't detract from the story and flows well.

I cannot emphasize enough how good the plot itself is, it will leave you wondering what is next.

I also cannot stress enough just how much I despise Gin. Not everyone feels the way I do, but if you read the first chapter and decide you can't stand anymore of the drywall in human form, I urge you to keep reading. You will find characters worth reading for. Like candy in a wrapper, sometimes you have to deal with trash before you can reach the sweetness within. I personally love Jack, but I'm sure anyone will find a character they'll like.

Overall, I give it a 4.5/5, I highly suggest reading.

Nishant Muralidharan
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Excellent Universe. Lovely Characters

Hello, everyone!

I'm glad I have the opportunity to write this review here. Magikind is a novel I slipped into due to a recommendation from a friend, and to be honest, I really enjoyed it from the get go.

I'll stick to a basic review due to the fact that I've actually only read about 10 chapters, one more than what's been released, thanks to Mr. Baker being kind enough to share some of his chapters with me.

Onto the review:

1. The Universe: It's been built with a lot of detail. Class specifications are interesting to look at, of course. However, what I loved the most is how the world has a foot at each end of the threshold. It blends technology into a somewhat medieval world, and does it without making it look like a mess. I'd love to read more and understand the finer details - the politics of things, rules, laws, and more.

2. Characters: Early on, you're introduced to a character that somewhat takes on the second most important role in the story - Alder. I won't divulge much, but his interactions with the MC are nice and fun to go through. He appears to be well fleshed out, and looks poised to be a relevant part of the story. I don't know how well he transitions past the tenth chapter, but that's for you and me to find out.

There is a little about two spies in a foreign country. To be honest, those chapters - I enjoyed the most. I won't break into too much of the story. That's for all of you to enjoy.

Now, you may have noticed that I didn't talk a whole lot about the MC. Well, to be honest, he feels a little off? In a world where the author has put a ton of detail and love into, including its side characters, the MC falls a little flat. Don't get me wrong, put him in any other novel on this website, and he might come off as a good enough protagonist, but in this world - he feels a little neglected, especially given his unique position and circumstance. I would love to see if this changes in future chapters.

3. The Writing: It's simple, clean, easy-to-understand. I'm not a huge fan of how the combat works in this novel, but that's "my" personal preference. Seriously. Give it a read, and you might love it. I haven't found too many issues, but even with those minor issues, I find that RR is a platform for improvement. The author appears to be bent on becoming better, and I'm here to encourage that.

Overall: 4.5.

It might go higher, it might go lower, but from what I've read so far, it's got a lot of potential. Potential enough to become an MVP-type story. I hope it does!

Good luck, mate. :)

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My-oh-my, where do I even begin?

I am hittin’ my head at the desk in a desperate attempt to come up with something to write, a review of sorts, that’s short and precise but does it justice. And yet, every word I shall put here will be barren and pale in comparison to the actual work. This fiction has driven me and my best friend, Kamilla, to insanity and as such, I hope that what I am about to say will reflect on the future readership base that might stream in for Magikind.

 

Let me begin with the genre that is set for us — a classic “Sci-Fi” that has more than the eye meets in it. Yes, the world is our mother earth, set some three to five thousand years into the future. It is the world filled with genetically modified humans who are referred to as mages. The manush are their lesser counterparts who are underdeveloped and physically weaker. Their life expectancy is shorter, their physiques are smaller, and their race is thought to be in every way, form, and shape — inferior to that of a Mage.

Enter the main character, Gin, who is exactly that – a Manush. Call him bland, uninteresting, stupid, or what have you but the fact remains as is: He is the main character. This champion here, who some might love, a few won’t mind, and most will probably hate definitively has qualities, backstory, and other features that make him a good main character that gets revealed as we progress through the story. Please tolerate him as his character is far more complex than what is shown.

Aside from the protagonist, we have a whole list of supporting characters that play essential roles to worldbuilding, developing the plot, setting the atmosphere and the mood, or overall showing the mentality and where the world has come to from, occasionally, their very own point of view.

I won’t provide the names; however, suffice to say that these characters live and breath in the magnificent world that is created by the author – Sir George Bakerson.

There is something crucial I would like to note right from the getgo before I move into style: DO NOT, UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCE, SKIM THROUGH THE CHAPTERS. READ IT AT LEAST THREE TIMES!

With that out of the way, yes. The style used for this fiction is intriguing as it is rather simplistic. Point of view or POV changes occasionally happens to provide suspense, create tension, and show the thought process of the other party. The writing overall is minimalistic and intended for even children to be able to read. But don’t let my words about simplicity imply “Foolish,” “Barebones,” or “Jarring,” for this work is instead – Sophisticated.

Character’s backgrounds are slowly revealed and get interesting, intriguing, and begin to force you (the reader) question the ongoing of the entire world such as who are the mages and how they came to be. A lot of thinking has to be done with the given information as you won’t get the answers without thorough, coherent brainstorming, and analysis of the given words and their meanings within a chapter. You then are forced to go back to the previous sections with the attained knowledge to discover something unique and new. This back and forth play is quite magnificent and a fun exercise for the brain.

There is not much I can say about the plot of the first book. It does what it should do, and gets more in-depth and complicated as it reaches its conclusion. Other than “Marvelous” you shall not get a word more from this review.  Combined with the excellent and nearly flawless editorial level grammar, I doubt you will have a rough time reading and understanding the plot or the rest of the magikind in that regard.

 

This concludes my “Brief” review without writing at least one or two chapters worth of content. This fiction is a great read and certainly deserves the audience it is intended for.

Dear readers welcome to magikind. I sincerely hope that you will enjoy reading this marvelous piece of work and that its views on life, hidden messages, and intrigues alongside the many philosophies imprinted and embedded within the fiction will get your mind to boggle and smile. I hope that you will get the same amount of value that I did from reading this for three months now as a Beta Reader.

P.S: As for you, dear author, I hope you the best in the pursuit of your dreams. I’m here to support you, and I am genuinely excited to read the second book.

Much love,

Amanda Baker.

 

 

Kamilla
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[Beta Reader] Kamilla's thoughts

Well, hi there everyone! Kamilla here.

Disclaimer: I am a beta reader. This means that I have read the entire book while it was in development and was being released for non-public consumption both here, on royalroad, and on CRN (Creative Novels). Regardless of your platform of choice, my words will be one and the same (once I get time to review it on CRN).

 

The format of this review will be... somewhat different from what others did, as I won't go over much and keep it as minimalistic as possible.

 

To readers and potential readers who are interested in peeking: The story is written in a simplistic style and is in itself, simplistic. Hoowever, this is where fun ends. You are reading a book that has multiple double meanings and requirements of "Out of the Box" thinking. No hand-holding or "Plot Feeding" can be found in this novel, that is currently book 1 of the multiple book series named "Magikind."

The plot follows Gin, a man who harbors a secret inside a society that is comprised of genetically modified Mages - Manush or Human-like people that can use magic system that is backed by science.

Several examples of such mages are those belonging to the artillery group that fire fireballs volley and require oil to function. Those that have beast-like claws and agility or strength. Those that can blend in with the environment like a chameleon. Etc. All sorts of goodies!

With this in mind, Gin is attempting to find a purpose for his existence. There is a dark, horrible story being slowly revealed to us as readers, but if you are smart enough and follow the many subtle hints from chapter to chapter and think throughout the book, you will enjoy it immensely and perhaps figure out the ongoings and culprits before they are even revealed in next few books!

I for one, haven't figured out everything yet, but it is why I re-read this book at least once a week to ensure I am caught up or that I did not overlook a clue.

 

Many side characters comprise magikind from the Squadron W that Gin gets assigned to. These characters then are fleshed out as we get to see their Point of View in some chapters before jumping back to Gin who shows his perspective and the difference in thought and analysis process between the groups: Mages and Manush, hence the characters belong to the former, while Gin belongs to the latter.

This said, I hope you enjoy reading and finding clues in this book as much as I did, do, and will.

Sir Baker, I am looking forward to book 2 and the ships you described!

To readers: Much love and hope you have fun time!

Love,

Kam.

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Oh wow, so I got into reading this due to doing a review swap but I must say here and now that I really like this book and will be sticking around to read more, so please, feed my addiction, will you?

 

Overall: Quite excellent I must say, there are a few things I will say i didn't care for but they pale in comparison to the world setting and story as well as some sublime world building and the like.  I'll address this all in the categories as they become relevant. 

 

Style: its quite good, I was never one to like lots of fluff, I mean yeah sure its good at helping people visualize but it always seems to me that people always put to much fluff in it and it is hard to get at the meat and potatoes of the thing, well I am happy to say that is not the case here, here you get the meat, and the potatoes and even some asparagus that had been pan seared in butter and salt(I might be a little hungry atm lol) what I am trying to say is it is good, simple and wholesome letting you know what is going on without obscuring it with any unnecessary fluff.

 

Grammar: real good, I must say and by far one of the better on this site, so bravo!

 

Story: I love the concept of magic through science, it is such a rather backward way of looking at it that it is just genius, really.  The saying is everything sufficiently advanced would seem to be magic to those who don't understand(I probably butchered that one) and I just love the concept that magic this illogical sort of unscientific way of living is well from something like science.  Also, the world is quite believable, with all the realistic sort of haves and have nots and it is great.

Characters:  good, well I should say all the supporting cast is amazing and the Main Character is good.  I just don't care for Gin as much as I do for the supporting cast, which is not to insult the MC but rather to complement what George has done with the supporting cast.  And as for not caring for the MC I still love him just not as much as say jack.  Gin comes across as a little more of a flat character, easy to slip into and experience the story from his perspective, which s not a bad thing, he just isnt my shoe size...

 

All in All amazing, so thanks for giving me a new fic to follow, I really am looking forward to reading more!

J P Koenig
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Classic ScFi with Antihero

This sotry is very much a classic sci-fi adventure, set in a wildly different time where the world is unrecognizable, it is so different.  I came into this review unsure of what to expect, and received exactly that.

Overall, the story is interesting and well described.  There are no major flaws or illusion-breakers that ruin the story.  I had some issues with characterization, which I'll describe, but overall the story is good, the plot is solid and the world is imaginative and interesting.

The Good

The style of the story is excellent, and consistent.  It is described in a clean, well-desribed manner that is easy to follow - similar to my own writing style.  If you're looking for chapter-long descriptions or pages of text before anything happens, this isn't the right place for you.  If you like a story that moves you along and makes you eager for the next paragraph, this is a good fit. There are no grammar issues, definitely one of the better authors on RR for that.

The Bad

The supporting cast is amazing.  Well thought out and interesting, with clear motives and aspirations.  I struggled with the main character.  I found him to be a bit of an anti-hero with a huge chip on his shoulder.  However, the author doesn't do much to explain where he's from, what he's been through, or why he is doing what he is doing.  For chapter after chapter, we see the MC annoying/angering/combatting other characters, but we have no idea why he is the way he is.  That leaves him a bit one-note.  The frustrating part is that you can tell the character has some amazing backstory just waiting to be revealed, but we don't even get clues.  

I struggled hard with that, because the only thing we had to work with - the MC's interactions with others - left me really disliking him.  Also, his best friend, although we don't learn they are best friends until much later in the story.  The author could have revealed bits and pieces of the MC's past, his motivations, and his goals, even if the MC didn't share with other characters.  This would have gone a long way with the likability/sympathy factor from the reader.  I'm really hopeful the author works on this soon.

TL;DR

Highly imaginative scenario, solid story and plot, great grammar, solid characterizations.  Some issues with how the MC is presented, but absolutely recommend that it be read.

Zalex and Entelechy
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This story was really interesting with an excellent flow. The amount of thought put into the worldbuilding is astounding as almost every plot hole you can conceive is properly addressed.

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Easy to envision world, good writing, slow action

Style:

Easy to read, clearly written with enough detail to flesh out the settings and world. The only detraction was the switching of POVs. It was a little jarring to me, and I couldn't figure out the flow of events from reading the first time around. Although it's good to separate POV by chapter, the shifts every few chapters made the sequence of events less fluid.

The whole double or single quotes thing doesn't really bother me. It did take some time to get used to, and I realize that in other countries it's taught differently. I guess it would only really matter if the story were to be published into a physical book and sold in the U.S. But meh, a small issue overall. But just for reference (unless you already know and I'm just repeating, my bad), single quotes are for quoting things inside double quotes which are for dialogue; single quotes are also used for emphasis/calling into question the veracity or definition of something like, what is real 'beauty.' The only reason why single quotes are used for thoughts sometimes instead of italics is because some writing sites don't have the ability to italicize (which is stupid *cough* not saying names). This is all based on what I know from what I was taught anyway.

Grammar:

Really nothing to say here. There were a few mistakes, possibly typos that were overlooked--nothing that some proofreading could fix, and nothing major that most novels don't usually have (considering editing is either self-done or by a friend/acquaintance).

Story:

I can see how this would be more of a personal perference than anything inherently wrong with the story. Based on the synopsis, I expected an action-based story where the MC makes ripples through the magikind society based on victories in the setting of the three-way war. Instead, it took until chapter 29 for the first real battle. Now, there were frequent duels and shows of Gin's leadership, strategic abilities, and successful, unorthodox ways as well as the deer hunting that turned into unsuccessful mutiny for a short bit, but overall, the action was sorely lacking. Although battle strength and intelligence can be gained and earned through the squadron and battalion training and such, this felt more like a military school/camp of sorts where Gin rose up to become leader not through actual battles, but through duels and unique ideas. Considering a war is supposedly gripping the country, I never quite felt that imperative of a war-stricken state. All together, the story largely reminded me of a slice of life where the life was in a low magical-sci-fi setting. Much of the events and interactions were between characters rather than physical/action based events. This isn't necessarily bad, and I'll touch upon the heavy story focus of the characters later, but it does make for some slow progression based on the given settings and war imperative. Perhaps it's because I'm too used to the idea of progression through action in any kind of fighting or war & military stories, but the lack of it stood out to me a lot. After some initial training and boot camp, 'soldiers' are sent out on missions if not deployment, so I thought this was going to occur after Gin creates a foothold for himself against those who thought him weak.

 

Character:

The characters are actually pretty well done. And as mentioned earlier, the story heavily focuses on their interactions, especially with Gin, the MC. They're also believable which is a great, often lacking aspect of stories. With that said, I found that there were a few too many characters. Each character would be fleshed out enough to gain an idea of their specific personality, but beyond that there weren't really any backstories or view into their minds such as motivations, fears, beliefs, values, and inspirations. The deeper, emotional side was often missing. We saw a little of it when Nasir died and Syndra mourned, but the build up to their relationship was missing. Yes, it's a bird, her life-long partner, and there was a snippet of their interactions before the death, but the emotional connection of the two should've been demonstrated in previous chapters beforehand as to really instill a sense of real loss when Nasir died. It's 'showing' (as opposed to 'telling' they're close) a little too late. This shortcoming is due to the numerous cast and shortness of the story. I imagine, as this is only the first book, that this can be easily solved with more chapters which go into their backstories. But because this was missing, the characters didn't fully come alive. As for Gin, though, we did see more into his thoughts. He's just missing a backstory since it was confusing to me why he was surprised by magikind ways/types in the beginning. Was he isolated in a village? How come he's the only (or one of the only) manush left? How'd he surive, and why are his abilities as they are and why try to join the squadron?

 

Overall:

You have a great ability to craft many distinguisable characters, but the important ones need more fleshing out in their history and inner motivations. The story has easy to understand and well-paced world building, but the tone of the story is rather humdrum as it focuses on daily interactions and life of the characters rather than the war/battle. Still, it is written well with an easily to envision world.