Re: Sword Emperor

by kazumi

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Psychological Magic Male Lead Reincarnation Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

In the largest virtual reality game in history, Mark was a king. His team? Unstoppable. They were heroes even among other pros. But the game changed. The government—for their own political gains—made a mess of everything Team Black Moon worked so hard to perfect. Ten years of their lives were spent playing Ashes of God. Still, Mark and his friends found themselves obsolete—forgotten.

Then time itself forgot. Mark wakes up, 10 years ago. 

He’s never met his lover. He’s never played Ashes of God. Mark’s friends don’t even know his face. But he’ll find them. With his knowledge and skills, they’ll rise higher than ever. Mark will not be forgotten.

This time, they’ll be the ones who change the game.

 

PS: This synopsis had been made by S.D. Mills, please check out his works.

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Lord Zaika
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Has potential, needs proofreading.

The author appears to have a lot of world building to draw from, and has a good sense of where the story should be heading. The first cruicial chapter has a large amount of new and confusing  info dumping going on that doesn't immediately add to the story, but instead detracts from it. The casters' dialogue feels somewhat contrived. Many of the emotions are meladramatic and are often told instead of shown. Some of the word choices to describe scenes or actions are off mark, leaving me wondering what the author meant. 

It's a good draft, but needs polish. The begining needs to be more engaging and less info dumping so as to hook the reader. Maybe start in medias res.

Jester13
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Twist on the common reincarnation theme

This is a decent twist on the classic reincarnation theme, MC gets to go back in time to when the game he is a pro in is just being released. Only OP bit is the knowledge he's gained through years of playing, so if you're looking for a non OP character, this is the best of both worlds. 

Overall, I think this has good potential and I'm excited to see where it goes.

I should also note that this does seem to be a rewrite and I have only read the rewrite and therefore have no idea if it's better or not than the original. 

theworld
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Good potential need more chapters

Just finished reading all the current chapters has great potential gave fivestars on everything keep it up author. I just wish there was more chapters and I feel like the chapters could either be labeled into arcs like the rebirth Arc and character creation ark in tutorial ark or they could be combined into big chapters later on when you get further chapters released