I don't want to be the Hive Queen
Marcus is a young man that had a very bad day at work.
First, he had a horrible customer during his shift. Then he got fired by his boss. And after that, he got shot to death during a robbery.
And to top it all of, he awakened with the body of a weak and strange creature in a fantasy world full of deadly monsters.
And that's just Monday!
Now Marcus will have to find a way to survive as a Vex Queen, but to do so his bravery and determination are not enough. He needs to build a hive that will protect him, as it won't be just monsters that he'll have to face...
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I absolutely, wholeheartedly, and completely love this story. I also have a fair chunk of complaints about it.
This is one of my favorite stories on the site and I always look forward to updates. I recently binged through a heavy chunk of chapters that I hadn't caught up on for a while, and it was immensely enjoyable. But I am, fundamentally, very biased. I really love gender bender, I really love isekai, and I really love hive minds... and this is a gender bender isekai about hive minds. It could be half as good, and I would devour it.
Thankfully, it happens to be good. The writer has a solid grasp of grammatical rules and there are no glaring errors anywhere in the story. But there is a prevailing sense of... I'm not really sure a good way to put it. Motivational simplicity?
Characters seem to lack nuance. They have trait X and therefore perform Y action in situation Z. It feels like the author comes up with things they want to happen, and then finds a way to use character traits or introduce character traits that make things happen that way. And yes, that is a perfectly normal and reasonable thing for authors to do... but I, as the reader, shouldn't be feeling like the author is doing that. I want to feel like the characters are deep, complex, living people. If I were to give advice to the author regarding this, it would be to stop explaining the play-by-play of each character's logic so often: the "that made sense, so they did this" explanation is much less compelling than just describing how characters feel, how they react, and showing the results of that logic. Letting us infer the thought process behind it ourselves, don't just list it out unless it's particularly essential to do so.
The next main thing I find disappointing in the story is how the internal conflict of the main character's sex change impacts the narrative: which is to say, not really at all. This isn't entirely unreasonable: Marcus remarks multiple times that he has far more pressing issues to worry about than his genitals, and he arguably does, having so far been in a constant fight for survival. But there is downtime, and even when it is brought up directly, it... isn't really. Marcus's attitude is very "go with the flow" regarding gender, enabling the author to put him in amusing situations where he feels dysphoric but unable to comment or correct others about it. It's following classic gender bender tropes to a T, which (to genre-savvy readers) makes it seem inevitable that he will one day alter how he identifies to match his body, as such stories usually end up. There's nothing wrong with that, but it does take the anticipation out of the whole internal conflict thing. It would be nice to have a more nuanced approach to the idea of gender dysphoria than "haha, boy is in dress" but it is what it is. I also wish Marcus would have less of a foul mouth when it comes to his newfound biology... he seems quite disrespectful towards himself in ways that would be very worrying in a real person, and I find them painful to read. That said, I can't deny a propensity for crude language is a well-established trait of his.
Despite these gripes, I still love this story. It, as the title says, hits my jam zones, and it hits them hard. While it could be improved, it is at the end of the day solid story about many things I love mashed together into the most delicious of word soups. I am overjoyed to have this story in my life, and look forward to more of it!
I should clarify. There have been a lot of chapters recently going into the human companions the MC has picked up. I think that's fine, break it up every so often, but it has felt like the MC's relation with humans has subsumed - what I expected, anyway - a story about a chimera factory dealing with a hostile fantasy world while coming to terms with female, bug and female bug issues.
Sorry, I don't want to give the impression I dislike this story. I really do like it, can't wait for the next chapter and I think in a few months this story could really take off. I hope it does. But I fear it could get bogged down before it has a chance to explore this richly built world.
i think i wanted to like the story more than i actually liked the story? i like both the setting/world creation and the premise. it might not be absolutely "original" but it is novel enough to be worth acne attempt. i even managed to tolerated the extended flip flopped POV. but MC remained consistently whiny and idiotic. (i mean,credit for consistency? i guess?) but, for me, i'd like just a little intelligence from my MC? i mean, i can accept/understand the initial shock. but eventually, i'd like some progress.
that said, though, while it isn't for me, i do recommend giving it a whirl. you might not be the cranky and whiny asshole i am and be able to accept MC's faults better. because if you can, i think there's a worthwhile story here.
This isn't a story that "just keeps getting better" this is a story that has very clearly improved in writing quality over time.
My biggest gripe with this story when I first started was the tonal mismatch. Horrible things were happening to the main character, but the writing just felt... casual? It was like the main character was not in a strange new world struggling to eat, bur rather upset because their fridge was empty. It felt wrong and I can happily say it has gotten better. There is less suffering, but the tone is closer to what it feels like it should be. Maybe it could be argued that the reason for the tone is just the main characters psyche and initial shock, but if so it was not conveyed clearly.
Now onto the main characters pysche. Call me a liberal, but another thing that was bugging me (hah) for the longest time is the lack of addressing the characters gender identity. Male reincarnated as a female. The main character is very casual in how they view themself and have others adress them. Mind you that's perfectly fine. I'm super casual about my own gender and I'm sure plenty of others are. I'm a dude theres all there is to it. But my issue lies with how the plot relevant aspect of it comes into play. Their natural instinct throughout the story and more so in recent chapters has been a sort of antagonistic force. Potentially even a seperate entity in subconscious thought. Whenever they are referred to it's a she rather than a he. And it feels like this should have been started sooner in the story. Theres a few points where the main character somewhat jokingly thinks about the topic, and I wish there had been a serious usage of the subconscious she in the humors place. Perhaps it's taken so long due to biological development, or just due to recent plot development and the main characters state of being, but even then I still feel like there would have been some good points to use it earlier on.
Stepping away from that my only other real criticism is on the characters. Outside of the 3 main perspectives seen thus far the other characters are a bit too flat. They aren't bad and the story could continue as is, but it could be improved in this area.
For the most part, I like this story, however there are many little problems that turn this from an enjoyable read to a chore.
I really like the concept of having a zerg-like character, working to build their own hive, and actually having a good relationship with nearby human settlements. It was a joy to see them figure out their abilities, and use them to fight off the goblins.
The main character's way of cursing is my biggest recuring pain. I'm perfectly fine with a character cursing, but every time Marcus curses, which is frequent, he makes up his own curses and they sound stupid (Craptastic hell, diggitly damnity).
There are times where a character's dialogue sounds unrealistic or unnatural. This generally happens when something needs to be explained, like an ability or a plan. They sound like a bad anime villian, using overly grandiose language to explain something in paragraphs, when all it neads is a sentence or two.
The level of incompetance shown by a group when they are meant to lose a battle was annoying, and this was frequently exacerbated by the losing group saying something like "what could possible go wrong" beforehand. This most often happened to the human side when fighting the goblins. In once sentence they state that goblins can be a real danger if given the chance to evolve, then proceed to think the goblins are pushovers after learning that they have thousands of evolved goblins. Then there's the goblins who thought that the best way to warn the humans about a larger threat was to attack them.
Overall, most of this story is decent, it just lacks the polish to make it really good.
The idea that being human is not important as long as he acts humanistically towards sentient life does not come to him with his limited mind.
The MC emphasizes in the story of himself not to consider himself an idiot, only to then act like one all the time. In short, the MC is a standard isekai which considers itself to be particularly male, which only makes it more strenuous. Apart from that he mostly irrationally bases his actions on negative emotions.
Apparently he has no vigilance towards people either. He should know that humans can be the most mendacious and evil creature of all. When he is spied on in his own house without prior permission, he feels no resentment towards people. When you consider that there are regular violent racist attacks even in our supposed civilized world, I don't want to know how disgusting people would be towards a non-100% human life form. So we can add naivety as a character trait to the MC.
Otherwise I am completely "what me exclamation mark" opinion of the novel is otherwise really great. I can hardly bear the MC but that is probably due to personal preferences on my part. Such a story with an MC who has a strong rational personality would be incredibly great.
It is so sad how much potential is burned here in isekai hell.
(Please excuse my bad english)
Well the story was good for the first arc but the main character has seen no real growth, development, or meaningful gains since the start of more recent arcs. mostly boring meaningless tripe. this, combined with the slow updates, means that i'm bored of the story and will be dropping it.
It's too soon to give a detailed review, but I will state facts about the story with a tittle for each:
-The characters have certain behaviors explained by their past, personalities, and objectives, making them more fleshed out, even a name in the background has rumors about them.
-The story has a fantasy setting with, for now, more races, and animals than elves and dragons.
-The Author tries to make the story consistent, whether by filling plotholes, or by giving more information of the world.
-There has been no system to quantify any kind of skill, making this story stand out among the rest.
PD: If anyone ask what I like about the story, it's having a sci fi alien (zerg, tyranid or xenomorph) in a fantasy world.
Has some potential same old reincarnation story with a interesting idea hopefully the author can make the hive queen concept be more then just a sidelined idea the MC has to deal with and more a fouces point that drives the story. We will just have to wait and see where the author gose with it hopefully he expands on the concept and turns it into a good story.
i like the concept so far it is something i haven't seen like this before, im interested in seeing more, there is alot of potential :) please keep it up