Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Sci-fi LitRPG Super Heroes

Nothing's ever easy.  Especially if you're a lowly henchman who has a tendency of being in the wrong place at the wrong time.  Gus has always been a letdown to his superhero family, having just a single skill that really doesn't amount to much. That is, until he becomes marooned on an island after the orbital station he was working on crashed.  While there, he soon discovers how all supers have obtained their powers, and takes advantage in an attempt to change his fate.  He isn't alone on the island, and he is most definitely not welcome.  

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1:1 - Free Falling ago
Chapter 1:2 - Crash into Me ago
Chapter 1:3 - Thnks fr th Mmrs ago
Chapter 1:4 - Island in the Sun ago
Chapter 1:5 - I Will Survive ago
Chapter 1:6 - Basket Case ago
Chapter 1:7 - Sweet Dreams Are Made of This ago
Chapter 1:8 - Sensible Shoes ago
Chapter 1:9 - History ago
Chapter 1:10 - Dressed for Success ago
Chapter 1:11 - Re: Your Brains ago
Chapter 1:12 - Somewhere on a Beach ago
Chapter 1:13 - Connected ago
Chapter 13: Building, a Mystery ago
Chapter 14: Monsters of Rock ago
Chapter 15: Room at the Top ago
Chapter 16: ...Baby One More Time ago
Chapter 17: Welcome to the Jungle ago
Chapter 18: Take the Long Way Home ago
Chapter 19: Try This ago
Chapter 20:Back in Time ago
Chapter 21: Jump ago
 Chapter 22: Runaround ago
Chapter 23: Weapon of Choice ago
Chapter 24: Electric Slide ago
Chapter 25: If Only ago
Chapter 26: I Keep on Rising Up ago
Chapter 27: Float On ago
Chapter 28: The Riddle ago
Chapter 29: Doomsday ago
Chapter 30: Breakdown ago
Chapter 31: The General ago
Chapter 32 - Rocky Mountain High ago
Chapter 33: Don’t Threaten Me With a Good Time ago
Chapter 34: Papa’s Got a Brand New Bag ago
Chapter 35: I Get By With A Little Help From My Friends ago
Chapter 36: Paranoimia ago
Chapter 37 : Glitter Freeze ago
Chapter 38 : Below the surface ago
Chapter 39 : Sabotage ago
Chapter 40 : Ain't No Rest For The Wicked ago
Chapter 41: The Final Countdown ago
Chapter 42 : Final Boss ago
Chapter 43: Runnin’ With the Devil ago
Glossary ago
Chapter 44:  Dream On/Epilogue ago
BOOK 2 START! Chapter 2:1 - Start Over ago
Chapter 2:2 - Ship of Fools ago
Chapter 2:3 - Aurora ago
Chapter 2:4 - State of the Heart ago
Chapter 2:5 - Tempest ago
Chapter 2:6 -  Around the Bend ago
Chapter 2:7 - You’re My Best Friend ago
Chapter 2:8 - Incredibad ago
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The Vale
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Flawed, needs improvement.

Two characters in an isolated location. One character only exists in the mind of the other (effectively). World building is all done through infodump, character building is done by anecdotal recollections and both seem irrelevant because the characters aren't interacting with other characters or moving through the wider world, they are operating inside a box and only interacting with themselves. As of chapter 35 the isolation seemingly continues (it should be noted that I started skipping and skimming over parts simply to check how the story would develop after chapter 12 as I noticed certain trends. I saw little to contradict anything in this review other than mention of a single antagonist character)

On the rpg elements - I feel it's poorly constructed, high tech plus magic solution that is overexplained to its detriment, leaving holes in the mechanics and making it feel slapdash. 

Motivationally the MC seems to solely be a vessel to progress within the system of the rpg elements with no other goal, with a side of base building.

Owlish
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Not sure how this qualifies for the Fan Fiction tag. Writing this at chapter 16. The story is well crafted, I haven't been pulled out by any weird grammar errors yet. Several different mysteries exist, but for now the main character is just trying to survive. Don't know if this is going to be an amazingly great book, but for now it's decent.

RafMereC
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Great story.

Slow progress from the beginning, building up to a nice finish.

The idea of using a unique power up such as the Nth is an innovative idea. 

 

The execution of the power up was believable.

The loneliness of being on your own, on a deserted island was a nice setting.

 

Congratulations on the completion of your book.

 

It was a fun read.

Raf

Jangofet54
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Enjoying this series so far hope it continues. 

Johnsontaiwo57
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What's with these overblown ratings, this fic barely and I mean barely better than average..

The main characters isn't too the interesting, the whole nanite powerups are partially nonsensical.. the island kinda makes sense but the house/mansion and the power up it grants make no sense

The Alfred voice simulator is the only good thing this fic has going for it... the Dark nanite concept is ludicrous.

 

 

gary0044187
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Great concept, enjoyable follow through.

Concept is quite interesting.  the follow through is also quite good.  looking forward to seeing where this goes.