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Saskia thought her life was finally getting back on track after the accident. Then she got trolled.

Now she's up a tree the size of a planet, and all who meet her either run screaming or attack on sight. If everyone would just calm down and stop trying to kill her for one moment, she might get a chance to explain that this has all been a horrible misunderstanding.

Contains light GameLit/LitRPG elements, but no number crunching.

Chapters average around 4500 words / 16 pages. Updated weekly.

Cover art by MrZombie.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1, Chapter 1: Threads ago
Book 1, Chapter 2: Trolled ago
Book 1, Chapter 3: Pincushion ago
Book 1, Chapter 4: Telegraphing ago
Book 1, Chapter 5: Home ago
Book 1, Chapter 6: Greenhand ago
Book 1, Chapter 7: Adorribles ago
Book 1, Chapter 8: Alchemy ago
Book 1, Chapter 9: Ruhildi ago
Book 1, Chapter 10: Necrourgist ago
Book 1, Chapter 11: Oracles ago
Book 1, Chapter 12: Skellingtons ago
Book 1, Chapter 13: Demon ago
Book 1, Chapter 14: Chosen ago
Book 1, Chapter 15: Descent ago
Book 1, Chapter 16: Arborcaede ago
Book 1, Chapter 17: Arbordeus ago
Book 1, Chapter 18: Trowbane ago
End of Book 1: Character Survey ago
Book 2, Chapter 1: Disarmed ago
Book 2, Chapter 2: Questions ago
Book 2, Chapter 3: Hollow ago
Book 2, Chapter 4: Worms ago
Book 2, Chapter 5: Saskia ago
Book 2, Chapter 6: Split ago
Book 2, Chapter 7: Focus ago
Book 2, Chapter 8: Killer ago
Book 2, Chapter 9: Shapers ago
Book 2, Chapter 10: Underneath ago
Book 2, Chapter 11: Fork ago
Book 2, Chapter 12: Pit ago
Book 2, Chapter 13: Vindica ago
Book 2, Chapter 14: Bastion ago
Book 2, Chapter 15: Funnelling ago
Book 2, Chapter 16: Screaming ago
Book 2, Chapter 17: Coming ago
Book 2, Chapter 18: Gathering ago
Book 2, Chapter 19: Fallback ago
Book 2, Chapter 20: Inferno ago
Book 2, Chapter 21: Vassal ago
Book 2, Chapter 22: Shattered ago
Book 2, Chapter 23: Icing ago
Book 2, Chapter 24: Yona ago
End of Book 2: Character Survey ago
Book 3, Chapter 1: Eraser ago
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Kartho
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Undermind is unique. It is. That is unfortunately uncommon these days but I, a longtime lurker on many stories, feel like it would be a disservice to this fiction, and to other readers to not leave a review. With that grandstanding introduction, I give you:

UNDERMIND

Style

Undermind is a third person narrative with two point-of-view characters, which allows for greater detail and scene descriptions while maintaining the character's tone and perspective. We have our friendly neighborhood troll, and the formerly magical and now buff elf. Yes. That is right. The author has managed an approxomately 1:3 division of screen time, with the majority going to Saskia. They don't get bogged down in detail, maintain a consistent use of tense, tone and voice. I wouldn't say that the style is excellent, or ground breaking, but in my reading it never screwed up. In my opinion, the author handles multiple narrators well, chosing them carefully and giving each a different feel for the reader.

Story

Often, I come across fictions one after another that feel like they came from the same mold. Undermind doesn't. Undermind manages to integrate some seeming LitRPG elements, yet doesn't overdoes. Isekai? Somewhat. While our protagonist does appear to have jumped worlds, there is no unfair advantage, no 'hero' class, no overarching big bad to quest towards. Undermind is a pleasent mix of genres and tropes that don't feel overused in concert:

  • Lovecraftian Horror
  • LitRPG
  • Isekai ("Another World")
  • Tolkien
  • A Hodgepodge of mythology.

It meshes together nicely, and moves along at a pace appropriate for the circumstances. To avoid giving actual spoilers, the story leaves you with a lot of questions, but ones that you are excited to try to anser.

Grammer

I don't have much to say here. I am a native speaker of English that if I can toot my own horn a bit is quite well read. I noticed no grammatical errors in the entirety of the fiction. That is not to say there aren't any, but in reading none inhibited my experiance.

Character

There is a well rounded cast so far, but the author is able to distinguish between their main cast and the supporting characters. In total, there are only around six recurring character and their associates. These characters aren't paper mache either, they are developed and clearly individuals. An unfortunate reviewer critisizes a few inital acts of our beloved mobile mountain, but clearly feels themselves a cold blooded efficient machine of reason. I cannot empathize. Each character has their own goals, morals, strengths, weaknesses, backgrounds and motivations, and as such feels real. I would not recommend this should you dear reader prefer self insert novels where the protagonist works off some obscure utility function without a shred of humanity, because Undermind is not that. There is room for improvement, there always is, but Undermind's characters are well developed and show the potential for growth and change.

 Overall:

Undermind is a good novel. It's not on the scale or level of Brandon Sanderson nor Isaac Asimov, but it doesn't have to be. I enjoyed the content currently published, and wish you an nice evening with this well thought out and unique read.

Lost Carcosa
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Read up till chapter 9 so far. I have to say that this is probably the best story I've read so far on Royal Road (which doesn't include many, to be fair. I'm fairly new.) The chapters are the perfect length -- at 3-5 thousand words I'm neither bogged down or bored -- and the characters are interesting. I especially like the worldbuilding. At times, I feel that there are a few too many made-up words for fairly standard fantasy creatures, but the concept alone -- of a world made from a giant tree -- is just awesome. And there is more to the world than just what we've seen. There's mention of interesting locations that the characters may or may not visit, and that have certainly captured my interest. Great job, Seal!

HoloSol
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Might not be a literary masterpiece, but it sure does something right. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this; I only regret not waiting a bit longer to binge. I will probably pick it up again in 6~ months when there will (hopefully) be a plethora of chapters. Seriously though, 5/5 for enjoyment

K_Pak
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When you read many stories, eventually you see plots getting repeated and in the end you see same fantasy/adventure story over and over again. This is NOT one of those! I'll definitelly be comming back for more. :D

Astra19
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Style Score - The story's style allows for the reader to understand who is talking, what events are unfolding and what the characters are reading. SealJohnson also changes the text style to apply meaning to the affected text. 4.5 star because I want quicker releases and I need to have a negative occurrence somewhere.

Grammer Score - I'm not gonna say I'm perfect with english grammer so I won't notice the correct place to input a semicolon in stead of a comma but I do notice simple mistakes such as the usage of "your and you're", "Though and Thought" and other similar occurrences. So yes 5 star simply because I can't notice any of the story's mistake through a simple read through.

Story Score - The story seems to be an adventure story where you follow a women who woke up in a new world in the body of a troll. Her first meeting with sentientent beings end with a spear in her gut with them yelling in a foreign language.

Character Score - Some might find the MC responce to flee from a spear in the gut to be unrealistic however she has never fought before, she's in a monster's body which has a higher pain threshold than her human one and her body would be affecting her mentaility as well.

What I do find strange is one of her companions has been through decades of torture and seems to adjust to quickly to her current situation. (Though I do agree that having a catatonic companion would hurt the overall story).

TL;DR

The story is good with around ten pages per chapter and with what seems to be weekly release. If you're looking for a wish fulfillment or an edgelord type MC this story doesn't seem to be for you.

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Long Review is Long. Good Story is Good.

Let me start off by saing that Undermind is a brilliant story. It started off a bit slow, but picked up quickly and developed a unique plot that continues to hold my attention and leaves me checking for new chapters several times a day.

The plot begins with the oft-repeated portal fantasy trope and a strange, eldritch subplot as our main character, Saskia, finds herself in another, somewhat familiar, world that resembles the Yggdrasil of ancient Norse mythology. While her appearance drives a good portion of the natives to fear and revile her, she does end up finding a companion in a similarly ostracized, if somewhat diminuitive, dwarven woman.

This description is purposfully vague, so as not to spoil too much of the story. If you want a more accurate description, I'd suggest you read it yourself.

Analysis and final thoughts:

I think the main character's appearance is a solid handicap, and it's made for some very interesting interactions with other characters.

The somewhat-eldritch subplot is a fantastic addition, and really helps this work stand out from the rest. What little we know about the character's unique origins leave me incredibly curious about the direction this story is heading, while not being so obtrusive as to detract attention from the main story.

The writing is done well, with errors and misspellings virtually nonexistant. This helps the reader focus on what the author is saying as opposed to how they're saying it. Personally, reading something that has been poorly written gives me a terrible headache, and all but ensures that I'll abandon it sooner rather than later. A poorly written tale is one that has been butchered in its infancy.

I will say that some of the earlier perspective swaps and dream sequences had me somewhat confused, but that soon cleared up. Each character stands out as their own person, with individual opinions and attitudes.

That's about all I have for you. If you read this whole thing, have a cookie. If you didn't, read the TL;DR.

 

TL;DR: Read the story. It's good.

Serendipital
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Very nice, overall! I love how the world is being slowly revealed to us. All the lore is really very interesting! The latest character as of this reading is really excellent as well. I'm glad they've been introduced relatively early long, because I love seeing them and MC interact with each other. I recommend reading this, for sure.

voice of reason
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Definitely one of the best stories I've read on this site. The pacing is excellent in my opinion and grammar is near pefect. The world building is very unique and wonderfully creative as well. All in all I really liked it and I definitely recommend giving this a go.

Bombbastik
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wonderful start to a creative story

The story is truly wonderful, from the update speed, the characters, the world building, and he general special powers. All of these come together in a wonderful hodgepodge of a story.

CyclopsSlayer
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It started a bit slow, but has rapidly grown on me. Chapter 11 now. Truly a fun story so far. Even if our pair-up with a certain someone seemed obvious to me from the moment we saw them. LOL

Well worth the read.