Nyx - The Shadow Princess

by Skada88

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Female Lead Gender Bender Magic Male Lead Reincarnation Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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For some, death is not the end but only the beginning.

These unlucky few are forced to call the endless abyss, a space between time and dimensions, home as they infiltrate the physical plains to gain substance and strength.

Here we find the self-named Nyx, a being that has recently gained his freedom from a tyrannical summoner in a cultivation based world.

Free at last, Nyx is more than content to reside in the void for the rest of his existence.

However, it seems fate doesn't agree, and Nyx soon finds himself back inside a mortal body.

Yet, much to Nyx's delight, it seems those that have summoned him this time have done so in ignorance.

Something that they, as well as those who had long thought him dead, will come to regret.

** WARNING**

This story will contain dark elements as well as lighter/more positive arcs. There will be many instances of mature themes/descriptive scenes and so is recommended as an 18+. Read at your own discretion.

This story also includes many scenes/actions and behaviours that some will find offensive and/or unpleasant. These include, but are not limited to cannibalism, slavery, sex, rape, murder, betrayal etc. If you find these subjects unpleasant to read, please do not read this story.

 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - The Void Between Worlds ago
A1:C1 - Defiled::Part 1 ago
A1:C1 - Defiled::Part 2 ago
A1:C2 - From the Ashes::Part 1 ago
A1:C2 - From the Ashes::Part 2 ago
A1:C2 - From the Ashes::Part 3 ago
A1:C3 - The long road that is cultivation::Part 1 ago
A1:C3 - The long road that is cultivation::Part 2 ago
A1:C3 - The long road that is cultivation::Part 3 ago
A1:C3 - The long road that is cultivation::Part 4 ago
A1:C4 - A mundane existence::Part 1 ago
A1:C4 - A mundane existence::Part 2 ago
A1:C4 - A mundane existence::Part 3 ago
A1:C5 - Darkness Rising::Part 1 ago
A1:C5 - Darkness Rising::Part 2 ago
A1:C5 - Darkness Rising::Part 3 ago
A1:C6 - Demoness of Shadows::Part 1 ago
A1:C6 - Demoness of Shadows::Part 2 ago
A1:C6 - Demoness of Shadows::Part 3 ago
A1:C7 - Doing what's right, for the wrong reasons::Part 1 ago
A1:C7 - Doing what's right, for the wrong reasons::Part 2 ago
A1:C8 - An old Enemy ago
A1:C9 - Smash and Grab::Part One ago
A1:C9 - Smash and Grab::Part Two ago
A1:C9 - Smash and Grab::Part Three ago
A1:C10 - Return of the Princess::Part One ago
A1:C10 - Return of the Princess::Part Two ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part One ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part Two ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part Three ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part Four ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part Five ago
A1:C11 - The Masked Princess::Part Six ago
A1:C12 - The Darkness with many faces::Part One ago
A1:C12 - The Darkness with many faces::Part Two ago
A1:C12 - The Darkness with many faces::Part Three ago
A1:C12 - The Darkness with many faces::Part Four ago
A1:C13 - An Untimely Coincidence::Part One ago
A1:C13 - An Untimely Coincidence::Part Two ago
A1:C14 - Ambush in the Capital::Part One ago
A1:C14 - Ambush in the Capital::Part Two ago
A1:C14 - Ambush in the Capital::Part Three ago
A1:C15 - Still not dead::Part One ago
A1:C15 - Still not dead::Part Two ago
A1:C15 - Still not dead::Part Three ago
A1:C15 - Still not dead::Part Four ago
A1:C15 - Still not dead::Part Five ago
A1:C16 - To the Darkness, I shall return :: Part One ago
A1:C16 - To the Darkness, I shall return :: Part Two ago
A1:C17 - The Fundamental Laws ago
A1:C18 - Elemental Royalty :: Part One ago
A1:C18 - Elemental Royalty :: Part Two ago
A1:C18 - Elemental Royalty :: Part Three ago
A1:C18 - Elemental Royalty :: Part Four ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part One ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Two ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Three ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Four ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Five ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Six ago
A2:C1 - Return of Nyx :: Part Seven [Edit-Note] ago
A2:C2 - Birth of the Shadow Princess ago
A2:C3 - The creation of an urban legend ago
A2:C4 - Last one out, gets the lights ago
A2:C5 - Leaving by the back door ago
A2:C6 - The desire to turn one's legend to myth ago
A2:C7 - Where there is smoke ago
A2:C8 - There is fire - Edited ago
A2:C9 - Overconfidence ago
Feedback|Testing the waters ago
A2:C10 - Overthinking can be as bad as not thinking at all ago
A2:C11 - Passing the first hurdle ago
NAC: Release Schedule Update ago
A2:C12 - There is no pill for regret ago
A2:C13 - A deal of convenience or one with the devil? ago
A2:C14 - A tentative beginning ago
A2:C15 - Leaving Tibel Forest ago
A2:C16 - The mirror that is interpretation ago
A2:C17 - On the road again ago
A2:C18 - Allergies ago
A2:C19 - Trust Issues ago
A2:C20 - Nightmare ago
A2:C21 - A tentative bond ago
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Overlord Mea
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TL:DR It is a good story(though with a heavy, dark accent at the start).

 

Style. It is written in a third person perspective, despite that, there is a connectinon between reader and the protagonist. It is not overly descriptive, nor overabundant on details, striking a good balance between the two.

Story. Story is interesting, though at times a bit predictable. Nonetheless it is a good story. One needs to be cautious as there are heavy, dark undertones at the start, that might turn down many. I personally was able to not mind them too much, but I can easily imagine some people being turned down by that. Personally I liked it as the tool of character developement.

Character. Despite having a "developed protagonist" the story still shows that character's journey is not over - showcasing further developement despite starting at a fairly advanced stage. My only gripe is with a bit heavy handed approach on "preventing protagonist from turning bakc to his old ways". Overall I find the protagonist interesting. As to the side characters they weren't badly written, but at the same time weren't all that much memorable(bear in mind im writting this review at A1:C11).

 

Grammar. It is good, but not perfect. The overall cadence and sentence structure is good, though there are still occassional errors and misspellings - luckily not nearly enough to break the immersion. Overall I would rate it at 4 - good to read, but still leaving an occasional error.

Celinor
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Lot of potential but 2 obvious points to improve

Even if the story is good, there is an obvious way it could get better: there is just too much introspection. We can see that the character progression of Nyx is important, but that much inner monologue hurts the flow of the story regardless. I hope that in the next chapters we will see more characters interaction, mitigating this flaw, in an otherwise nice read.

And in these dialogues, beware the repetitions! Sometimes it just feels like rambling (particularly the villainous speech of the master-angel, but also in a lesser measure for the groups : the Eastern Sect cultivators are too transparent exposition devices during the manhunt, and even the Heaven Twilight elders feel contrived)

In fact, those are the two obstacles to make the story stand out : the inner monologues and the dialogues, because the rest is great.

Seth Jakill
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One Theme change to far.

Starts off well with a Great call to adventure setup, 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 At chaper 2a1c i dropped this novel as it compleats its genre change to full wuxian cultivator novel. 

hawlol
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A Betrayal of the Initial Setting.

The initial part of the novel is great. A grimdark 18+ fantasy. The story makes us uncomfortable with the violence, the MC is an old monster reborn, created by continual torture and abuse, and although ruthless and violent, is not necessaryly evil. 

The Author manages to portrait the scary and horror parts without being too edgy or with unnecessary gore. And it goes really well. I got angry at the villains, cheered for the MC, there was challenge, she was strong and cool while not being too overpowered. It was a really well written and entertaining first part!

Then, after the firt prison arc, when she gets to the kingdom, everything falls apart. The dark fantasy is replaced by a regular transmigration setting. The MC is suddenly weak, incredibly immature and incompetent, while also immediately having 'Fuzzy Feeelings' for the family of the body he/she/it took, feeling the 'warmth of family' in a few days at the hospital. The pacing also slows down to a crawl and several chapters could be cut in half with very little meaning in them.

In short, a completely overhall of the initial setting that will disapoint most, if not all. Had the author remained with his dark vengeance horror story it could become an amazing novel, but now the old monster gets its ass handed by everyone, freely gets a master to train her, will have to act as a princess for nobles and schemes while wearing cute dresses(and then a cultivation sect), while also making 'warm' friendships like with her loud mouth guard, hugs and cries at the shoulder of a newly met granny, etc.

My honest opinion is that the Author should scrap everything after the first prison arc and rewrite it, following the same atmosphere he had set for the initial arc. She being a lonely anti-hero that hunted the scum in a 'horror monster' kind of way would be a far better tale than what it turned into.

Btw, if you want a redemption story with 'fuzzy feelings' don't be so descriptive with the violence/rape like you did . It doesn't match the tone of a redemption story.(but it does with a revenge tale)

maelos61
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Seems off to a decent start

I'll be getting to the individual parts shortly, but all-in-all this story seems to be one of the better ones on this website, at least in its current state. Maybe it'll all go downhill, maybe it'll droop off like many other stories, but I'm liking what I see now at the very least.

Grammar:

I'm a grammar-nazi. Good grammar is my thing and I can't stomach pages of reading Engrish, as many others seem to be able to do on this site. The grammar in this story is good. I didn't see any obvious/big mistakes and the vocab used is fitting. Nothing to complain about on this front.

Character:

The only real character to have gotten a personality yet, is the main character. Just the fact that this character has yet to become a total cliche edgelord already puts this story miles above the other 'dark' novels on this site. Here's to hoping that this doesn't happen. The other characters have yet to be truly introduced, so I can't say that much about them. I just hope the author is willing to take their time to work on these 'side characters' and not leave them like flat, forgettable pancakes as many other stories do. The biggest pitfall to writing a good story is having shitty characters. Everything else can be great, but if the characters are forgettable or even annoying you'll never be more than 'a decent-ish story I guess'.

Style:

I quite like the writing style. Maybe a bit exposition-heavy, but I'd rather have more than less exposition (and honestly, it's only exposition-heavy if compared with some of the meh-ier stories here). With exposition I don't mean storytelling, but descriptions. Most stories don't give enough descriptions (only having the 'look at this auburn haired, apple-shape faced, etc. female character that I am only describing to make you realise how beautiful she is and how lucky my wish-fullfilment MC is') which makes them a bland telling of events. A book is supposed to describe the world the character is seeing to you, while the writer has to find out where the line between too much description and just enough is. This author is doing this pretty well in my opinion. Maybe a bit more description, but that's just a personal thing.

Story:

Not much on that front yet. We have some goals, but the larger world itself is still an unknown and so are all the structures in it. We've glimpsed some of the players, but nothing too major yet. Some people might think: 'Nothing but some goals and a bit of story after 33 entries?!?' To them I say: yes, and that's perfect. It's easy to write an exposition filled (with exposition here meaning 'storytelling') story where nothing is organically discovered and the author does all the chewing for you and then barfs it all up into your mouth like a bird feeding its child. Having a story slowly unfold instead of a huge info dump is perfect. You present some goals at the start and then the story unfolds on its own.

 

Conclusion: I hope the author is planning on continuing this story as it would be a waste not to. You've got a decent recipe here and while only time will tell if it'll turn into a recipe for disaster, to me it seems like this is a very promising beginning.

WitchCraft
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Honestly a very interesting story, I am a big fam of the grim and dark. I look forward to seeing everything that happens in the story. Grammar and spelling are pretty good.

kaos95
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This is Great, I love the Dark

I'm a sucker for cultivation novels, at least Western cultivation novels.  I'm a big fan of really dark subject matter, and of those that can control the shadows.

 

So this story is hitting all the right notes for me, it's well written, and compelling, I saw it on "Latest Updates" when I went to check my bookmarks, and figured "Shadow Prnicess" that sounds like something I would like . . . less than 2 hours later here I am waiting for the next chapter like a junkie.

 

Well done sir, well done.

MrXerios
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This story has been a pretty good one so far. Still lacking emotion wise tho.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Capitão Caverna
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Its not that the novel is bad, it's not great but it is good enough, much better than some of the trash we find here in RR but i feel its lacking someyhing.

From the synopsis I was expecting a dark novel about a tortured soul and, in the beggining, that was what I read but, after nix broke free things seemed to have became just... normal, for a terrifying killer feared by all the underworld Nix just seems too average.

Reading his thoughts it feels like a soul that has just been summoned for the first time, sure he suffered and has became agressive but I don't feel like he is the tortured killer who went on countless suicidal missions.

I will continue reading this for a while longer to see if I feel better about it but at the moment I feel like I am reading about two different MCs, one is the one discribed by the autor, a terrifying existance while the second one is the one shown in the story, which feels... imature

Mikers992
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I'm not very creative when i'm making reviews for something but whatever.

 

This story is very interesting and i hope the creator keeps on going all the way to the end of the story.