Adventures in Planus

by Sadros

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Mal finds himself trapped in a VRMMORPG and must make his way forward and through this dangerous land.  What friends and enemies will he find?  Will he find a way out and ever see his family again?

An LitRPG or GameLit story about a young man and his Adventures in the game world Planus.

[additional tags= village,kingdom,empire building  once you get deep enough in]

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Character Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Total Views :
  • 11,090
  • Average Views :
  • 584
  • Followers :
  • 125
  • Favorites :
  • 28
  • Ratings :
  • 33
  • Pages :
  • 242
Advertisement
Remove
Reviews

Leave a review

BritishBob
  • Overall Score

11 Chapters In - A Solid LitRPG

One Line review: A Solid Addition to the LitRPG with space to grow and expand, well worth a read. 

I've read all 11 released chapters currently available. Sadros has noted that these were his pre-written chapters so quality and release schedules may change after these 11.

So my opinions after these 11 chapters? It's a solid LitRPG, it hasn't yet done anything out of the ordanary. That being said it's well written, I haven't spotted any grammar issues and the chapters are of a decent length. 

The story so far is a fairly typical LitRG, however there's plenty of space for both the charaters, story and World building. I like the point of interest with the NPCs and the way there is possible progression there.

 

At the moment it's well witten with plenty of promise and I look forward to seeing where it goes.

jojmist
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

First of all, after reading the other reviews for this novel, its tough to believe that they are real since one of them even states that 'there are no grammatical mistakes'. HA!

I've read a lot of stories on RR, but unfortunately this one is more of a wish-fulling fanatasy. A tall, dark, good looking, athletic/sporty, wealthy (implied with the VR system bought by his parents and that his friends don't have) protagonist that also loves D&D and other related media? And starts off the game with EVERY base state enhanced, some by up to 2x greater than starting base stats per random chance, and a cool ability? Not to mention that the the plot is essentially Sword Art Online.

As for the grammar, there are many run-on sentences and other grammatical (spelling, extra or missing words) that somewhat ruin the flow of the story, but is otherwise average-below average compared to what I have seen from other RR novelists. One thing that really irks me to no end though is when the author, instead of just using the character's name, will use 'the level 1 player jumped off the tree' or 'the starkissed human did this', or even 'the resting human resolved to save his points' or similar. Just use his name!

For style, the author should learn how to use those blue boxes that you see in other RR LitRPG novels.

All in all, I don't think this novel is nearly as great as its current rating.