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A slime randomly falls into existence. Sapient and born with the ability to recreate parts of the things it preys upon, the highly confused drop of primordial soup decides that the only real thing it can do is become the being at the top of the food chain. A task of longevity in the leaves of the Omniverse.
Cover Art by Chris Cold.
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At the beginning we have a unique and very interesting take on how a monster evolves in its biome. But after he leaves the first environment the characters become kind of flat. Whenever a new character is introduced, it is literally a small description like "he is old, he needs a walkingt stick and has age spots and loose skin". You always tell us, you don't show us.
On the first meetings with girls he also always notices how sexy they are. Literally still a slime-blob, and when he meets Reysha, the first thought our puddle of slime has:
"Helped that she was sexy to boot. [...] she had a killer body as well. Apexus just wanted to wrap around her and slide into her reproductive organs."
Interesting setting, but the characters and their interaction is definetly a weak point.
The story follows the adventures of a unique slime as he learns what it is to be alive. It's a fun read with relatively frequent updates. The cast of crew is memorable but small at the moment. The perspective of the slime is refreshing and captivating. It shows all of the curiosity, bravery, and ignorance of a newborn slime, and the author does a good job conveying this.
The writing style is solid and easy to read with solid descriptions. The worldbuilding is fairly shallow at the moment, but is not the focus of the story yet, and leaves room for expansion in future chapters. The story so far is focused mostly on growth and survival so far, but not in the grindy style of typical litrpgs. There is also a secondary focus on relationships and smut that builds on the relationships.
At first this is a fun story about a slime learning the world and slowly getting stronger.
However despite being born from oblivion with no shape and only basic animal instincts the shapeless, asexual (as in having no sex) slime blob is attracted to humanoid women. This makes no sense and serves no purpose. At one point this leads to a scene with slime & human sex which is quite terrible and completely sunk the story in my opinion.
Other than that I would say the characters are the weakest element of this story. Motivations are not well explained nor sufficiently explored.
The story starts with about 80 chapters of fluff and adventure; they're not the best but mistakes can be forgiven because of the story's light tone. Then the story takes a sharp turn into about 40 chapters of tragedy. And not just any tragedy, the kind of tragedy that's easily avoided if people just talk to each other but obviously evil enemies can only tell lies. It's not quite so contrived as to feel contrived, because the characters have established flaws and motivations that can justify refusing to listen, but it's uninteresting.
I don't know what's beyond the ~40 chapters of tragedy because I've tried 4 different times now to push through it, hoping it returns to being good. Every time I conclude it's simply not worth it, the tragedy section is too tired and tiring to push through, especially without any guarantee the story ever returns to its good elements (and even if it gets good again, how long will it stay there?). Better for me to put that effort into exploring a new story.
So as of right now we have several hundred pages of fluffy adventure, followed by hundreds of pages of mediocre tragedy, followed by a few hundred more pages. That means the tragedy section is at a minimum half the length of the fluffy adventure section, and 1/3 of book one. I simply cannot recommend it unless you enjoy tragedy and are willing to wait a long time to get to it.
the style's great, until the end.
the grammar's great, doesn't save the ending as of the "epilogue"
the story's great, until the end.
the characters are great, until the end.
the story isn't over, but "book one" is. and it's so bad, i'd need a thesauras, an AI assistant, and a prescription of anti-depessants to sit here and make up new words to explain how bad it is. I'd have to do make up new words because the ones that already exist are insufficient.
the ending of book one should have happened at the beginning, or near the middle, in order to catalyze the plucky band of heroes into evolving into the next stage of their heros journey.
instead, i can't even explain why it's bad, becuase it's impossible to explain without spoilers, which are apparently only allowed for positive reviews.
maybe it'll redeem itself in future chapters, but i'm not crossing my fingers for it.
Just finished reading up to the latest chapter (Safe leaf 6)
And I really am liking the way you introduced a system for the mc to gain in power without it feeling too rushed or undeserved. Your world building and lore is very captivating and enjoyable to read and think about, and the characters seem fleshed out and feel real and relateable.
All in all, I'm really enjoying it so far and can't wait to read more!
The first arc is done. The review, therefore, is for this part of the story.
The beginning doesn´t tell one much but shows a lot and it grows with the MC that starts as a slime but doesn´t stay that way. We accompany them on their journey to understand and learn from their environment, acquire new skills, and even companions.
The wonder and misunderstandings of how the world functions and their will to thrive and go on making it not only entertaining and fun to read but also forms a connection with the character.
At the end of the first arc, the main character and their party have grown and even if the end of the first arc isn't all sunshine and roses with a fair share of salt it was really enjoyable and I'm looking forward to what this story will grow into.
The characters are well made, not flat or shallow, and their motivations are understandable and reasonable. It is quite heartwarming sometimes to watch the MC grow and wonder about the customs of society and nature with the nature of an intellectual that tries to find out how something works and is at the same time still a child due to their unique situation. Even for the side characters that don´t seem so important, we get them described and shown as full characters not just as the function they serve for the story or seem to have.
The salt at the end is the reason for 4.5 in story score but knowing other works of the author this will be used as fuel for more character growth. Therefore I'm really looking forward to the next arc of this story.
The world seems to be a mixture of a Terry Pratchett- aesque, real-world and Game-world´s. It has strange and hilarious creatures, mundane animals and its fair share of magic and wonder.
I really enjoyed this story and am sad to see that I am caught up. For stories that get posted frequently (like this and The Gamer for example), I usually read it and then don't continue even when there're updates. I enjoyed this so much, I think I will continue reading it when you update it, it's just really good.
While the concept isn't original in the slightest, you do it really well with many twists and turns to the formula. The characters are believable and likable (or unlikable) with good motivation and goals. You have set it up well to be able to continue for a long time to come and with such an interesting story I can see it going far. The sex is much more tame and it is more of a story with the occasional erotic moments instead of an erotica with a good story. All in all, I really enjoy this and am looking forward to seeing what you do with it. :)
A beautiful story about love and learning. The relationship between the MC and the main heroine is well established and cute(
it developes gradually from him just enjoying her presence to deciding his gender in order to match with her and commenting that he might have developed differently if she didn't look like a girl
The way the world works and is structured is very interesting and unlike anything I've seen.
One issue it has is that the arguing in tree dungeon came out of nowhere without any hint(that I noticed at least) that one of them had such strong opinions about morality and such.
the author does a great job of putting enough details to paint a picture, without overloading the reader with unneeded details. world building gets intruduced fairly evenly throughout, with few immuration breaking info dumps. i look forward to the seeing how the story continues and evolves.