Towers of Heaven

by munxy

Original ONGOING Action Adventure LitRPG Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Reincarnation Strong Lead

The edited version of book 1 is available on Amazon!

https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B07QH93BMR

One day, six towers appear on Earth. Each one stands hundreds of stories tall, and are invulnerable to all attacks. At the base of each tower is a portal, welcoming in all who dare enter it.

All sorts of magical monsters can be found inside the towers. Even magic and superhuman strength can be acquired. Treasure, too. The problem is  that the towers aren't a friendly place. Even worse, the towers sometimes release waves of monsters to attack Earth.

In the year 2083, there are only a hundred survivors. All of them possess strength beyond normal. They challenge the final floor without regard for their lives. By some miracle, they manage to beat the final floor at the cost of their lives. There is only one survivor.

As a reward for clearing the tower, he is granted one wish. He decides to go back in time, to before the towers arrived. His goal? To prevent humanity from being wiped out.

 

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Contradiction
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Ehh...... updated as of chapter 20? Or something

It's still alright. Nothing to wow you. Noticeable improvement from the first draft, which I kind of shat on pretty hard. Seems a little more focused as of now, rather than trying to do a bit of everything from kindom building, rpg, second chance, dungeon crawling, etc.

The biggest issue I have right now, is there's nothing there. 20 something chapters in and we're still in the very beginning of the story. Mc has gone back in time, got his starter gear/skills, and recruited a companion. It's very bare bones as of now, which is why I'm confused the author asked me to come do a second review.

Verdict: This is better than the first draft. That being said, it's not because there's an amazing aspect of this story, but because the cringey parts from the first draft were cut out. Read if you wish to see an author grow as he writes more chapters, avoid if you are looking for that next binge. I'd say read when there's 40-60 chapters, as of 21? 22?, there's just so little actual content. Which is not to be confused with word count, although some chapters are noticeably shorter. More to do with the author figuring out how he wants to pace the story.

 

Thoughts: The first story was kind of all over with what it wanted to be, this has a more litrpg/xianxia feel. It's almost like the author's influenced by what he's reading at the time, which isn't all that uncommon. I worry though that instead of finishing his thoughts, his story, he'll continue to re-write the beginning non-stop like vikingstoryteller did. Which will give you a great beginning, but no middle or end. But maybe my fears are unfounded

Forgot123
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The MC's personality/decisions is too shallow either it's not well thought-out or the author just didn't give an f world setting is cool tho character  development is 2/5. He had a massive advandtage of being a time traveler but it was not utilized to its fullest...

Valeriana
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Lacks world building and character development

The premise of the story was ok but I couldn't help but notice the lack of detail. The story is going way too fast like 6 months went with a snap, just like that. Because of the too fast pacing there isn't much of a character development at all, even the main character feels like a side character they're all flat. Instead of reading a story it feels like I'm reading a summary like MC comes back in time->time skip of 6 months(were he hasn't prepared at all)->MC enters the tower levels up-> Goes outside cuz he was hungry(like why did you not preapare the food beforehand?)->Gets captured then goes back inside then etc.. But otherwise it's ok,it has the potential, the grammar is kind of in the middle(?) it's not horrendous nor is it amazing it's just OK. So just fix the pacing and spend some time in world building and character development cuz the story is way too vague(is that the word?) it lacks substance, it feels too 2 dimensional. Like we didn't get any further info about his(MC) life or the people around him and how he interacts with them, there isn't even a description of his features or how his house looks like. Is he ugly? is he rich? Is he some depressed lone wolf type of MC? you didn't even tell us the specific date the towers came to be. Little things like that can make a big difference. Overall it's a pretty ordinary novel but if it's tweaked a little it can be amazing.

argusthecat
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High Hopes, Low Delivery

So, as this story was wiped and rewritten, it seemed prudent to update my review as well.

It's interesting; in making the plot a little less clean cut, and the tower a little more... snarky... the author solved one of my main problems with the original draft.

See, originally, the main character has only themself to muse to.  It's all exposition and grinding.  Now, though, by the simple math of "the time travel didn't work all the way", we end up with a lot of other characters who are already in on the game, who act as allies, foils, and rivals to the protagoinst.  And it works a lot better!  Actually seeing his experience matter more than his experience points, watching his interactions with his previously idolized hero from a mentorship position, even just simple stuff like dealing with higher level assholes.  It makes him more human, by grounding him in humanity.

The rewrite is a lot better so far, even with the addition of some things that feel a little out of place.  But it keeps the plot moving along fast, so I don't mind too much.

 

 

 

 

Below follows my original review:

 

This one started out pretty good, with some actually quite evocative writing about the last holdout of humanity staging a desperate final assault against its doom.  Then, an honestly kind of interesting choice to start a time loop, and give everyone on Earth a second chance.

And then twenty chapters of grinding?

Everything that could have been interesting gets tossed aside in favor of just standard leveling, and the character is too shallow to really click with his motivations beyond just "I wanna be the guy".  It's weird, because it feels like the two parts of the story aren't even from the same author.

Overall, I wouldn't recommend this.  It's just not delivering anything unique.

excelss
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Good novel.

Just like with the author's previous work, "zombie slayer!", I'm hooked from the start.

The pace of the chapters being released is awesome! That way I'm never too far from the next chapter :)

Keep going, you are doing great!

titulusfeles
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Since the new revised chapters the story has become alot more interesting and it is definitely an improvement. Those chapters are gone now anyway so no point in talking about them. The protagonist seems like he will have a much more interesting story to the pinnacle and I hope that the story stays as interesting as it is now.

hi&hello
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Changing for the better (post revision)

this won’t be a great review but I though someone needs to talk about the re-write. The premis looks strong and there looks to be more promos than before. There not much yet so I can’t say much but here are some small criticisms.

the grammars decent (so amazing by RR standards) though the style could use some work. There’s quite a bit of exposition and there some head hoping in the narration that can be confusing. The chapters ar pretty short, personally I prefer waiting for longer chapters but I guess this method is good for quick feedback if that’s what the author is aiming for. 

I haven’t seen much for or against characters yet so I’m giving it a 3. There’s a lot of room for improvement in this re-write and I look forward to it. It’s just to early to say anything conclusive yet as good characters are built over time (and I’m no expert).

anyway if your looking to read something I say do it, the author clearly cares about writing a good story and I like what I’m seeing, that warrants a look in my book.

Tel
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First version of the story was something of a one man set them up and knock them down. Any review older than chapter two is outdated and about that version.

The current version?

Considerably better and more engaging.

There are well defined people, significantly more world building, and while the pacing is slower the MC is doing a lot more. I look forward to seeing where this new take goes.

P.s. the rewrite right from the start betrayed expectations in sort of a wonderful way.

 

ced100
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Novel which deserve to be read !

The actual score of this story does not reflect it's quality. I think the author has made great progress and the re-write as made a big difference in the quality of this story.

That being said, I like the style of this story. The setup of going back in time and exploiting the knowledge you have to beat the odds is pretty inspiring. 

The pace of the story is a bit erratic and I feel like there are not enough details in the story. Like the armor is dark-blue that's it :P You could try to add a bit more information and especially add more action during the fights. So far, I did not really feel engrossed by a fight scene, we need to be able to imagine the fight better. (I know the MC is too strong for the mobs right now but challenging fights are more interesting !)

About grammar, there is really nothing to say, English is not my native language so I don't really see mistakes but the structure of the text is pretty good.

For the characters, I'm going to say the same thing that I said for the story, there is not enough information. The character could be more fleshed out, have traits and emotions that we can identify to or relate to. We should know what the MC is thinking and feeling a bit more so we can understand his actions.

Finally, I actually spoke a lot about the things that are to improve in this story but this story is really good, I have read a lot on RoyalRoadL (and by that I mean a lot) and I feel this story has great potential. If the author grows with this story, it's only going to get better!

 

dima bajadze
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If your focus of interest is LitRPG, you will definitely like the story! 

I personally do, so here ya go. 5 stars in the style score. 

I'm not one of the grammar nazis, hence the score. There were some glaring mistakes here and there, but nothing too annoying.

The story isn't anything unique, but has its own unique touch, nevertheless. It goes rather well if you don't include untimely time skips. 

Let's nuke the character score, cause the way the author portrays him and the way he acts can sometimes be contradicting.

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 The End!

I hope the author doesn't take offense and will improve his faults. This is my genuine and heartfelt feedback.

1. Focus more on character interactions.

2. Think before you write, because sometimes things don't make sense if you carefully think about it. 

3. Keep up the good work. You can always improve and move forward.