Dungeon Robotics

by Dragonsunxx

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Romance Sci-fi Cyberpunk Dungeon Female Lead LitRPG Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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Regan was a robotics scientist that inadvertently caused the robot takeover of the world. When his last creation completes a decade long plan to end his own life, he ends up surprised. Creation offers him a second chance to test his wits and cunning in another world. Fate, however, is fickle and Regan ends up as a Dungeon Core... with ALL his memories. Is the world of Murgin ready to face such a dungeon? Let's find out...

Previous chapters will be taken down as books are released on Amazon Kindle due to their agreement. I apologize for the inconvenience. 

 Cover Art was done by L1graphics

Discord Server link: https://discord.gg/wPPB7JC

Official 2020 Release schedule: Monday

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue (Edited 5/22/19) ago
Chapter 1 Part 1 (Edited 5/23/19) ago
Chapter 1 Part 2 (Edited 5/23/19) ago
Chapter 1 Part 3 Edited (5/23/19) ago
Book 1 Available on Amazon! Chapter 2-10.3 pulled! Read for more info ago
Christmas Special ago
Chapter 10 Part 4 ago
Chapter 11 Part 1 ago
Chapter 11 part 2 ago
Chapter 12 Part 1 ago
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Side story: Valentine's Special ago
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Some constructive criticism

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the First arc of dungeon robotics is well done and I don’t really write reviews but due to the problems of the second arc and beyond I want to help you improve as a writer by giving you some criticism from a third persons point of view

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The plot

first off the main problem I have with your second arc is the very factor that way too many things are introduced an example of this is when you introduced the god system or spirts and est. what this ends up doing is slowing down the arc with information or new mechanics that aren’t really needed for the story to progress towards the main focus of an arc and end up make us the reader feel like the progress of the story is slowed and results in us not caring about all these new things. This is called chekhov’s gun; you need to remove everything that has no real relevance to the story. Adding a god like system in the middle of an arc that should be focusing on dealing with necromancy and saving a nearby dungeon just ends up make it us feel like the story isn’t progressing at all and results in us not caring whats so ever about this. You need to ask your self “if I remove this section of the story will it change the story as a whole” every section of a story needs to show some clear progress. A great video about this is the act man’s video on why halo 5’s campaign is so bad it’s a weird video to recommend but watching videos like this that point out mistakes that writers make can really help you get better (note that it’s fine having these small side story as long as it develops a character or adds on to or helps build the world.)

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The characters 

the problem with having multiple povs is the very fact the each character should have a distinct goal and direction that they work towards and each with a different need or desire that they may or not know. In addition each character needs to feel like they are naturally going towards it in a realistic way. The one character that struggles with this is izora. We never really have a clear idea of her goal and her actions in the story ;in fact, she ends up feeling like a doll in the story where she only really shows up in the story to help explain a new system you added in or help build on it. This ends up making her the most boring or dull character to read about because it just feels like she  a mentally ill person who changes personality quickly in order to progress the story or introduce a new problem that won’t factor into the story for a long period of time

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Edit: kinda wanna make this a bit clearer but to sum everything up your story has a clear objective that your character should be working towards but what ends up happening is that something pops up and they get side tract. a few examples is how izora’s mom died and how this major incident should have pushed her to get revenge or pushed her to help her father fix all these problems and in its own way develop izora as a character and possibly create a character that motivates us to never give up instead you made her completely forget that it ever happened and instead of going on a great adventure to discover herself she try’s to prove that our mc is a god to her people. Same can be said about Louella as a character she has a clear goal of wanting to make a city that can bring peace to the kingdoms but as a person she needs to know that not all her problems can be solved by just asking Regan and that she herself needs to be able to stand up for herself and deal with the problems of running a city. Regan in other hands has a clear way to progress the story but in a lot of the later chapters instead of working on it or focusing on it he ends up getting side tracked and it frustrates me due to how often it happens that the pacing of the story slows and returns to its roots with this clear objective that gets delayed over and over again. In a rewrite the quality of this story will grow but currently it sort of feels like a collection of interesting ideas that aren’t developed enough similar to halo 5’s campaign if you fix all these problems you have a pretty solid story where every chapter progress the story in a way instead of a place where a chapter introduces a problem but is pushed back and solved after a long period of time

 

Grimkahn
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Give it a spin, if only to tide you over.

Has a good concept and backstory but grammar is a bit down and the writer doesn't seem to write what he knows, and instead glosses over the more technical parts. Which is a deal breaker for me considering the books genre and core concept. Overall is better than most of the crap on this site but poor execution.

Kikanolo
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Interesting Dungeon Core Story

Reviewed at: Chapter 66.2

Edit as of Chapter 65:

Unfortunately, I'm going to have to drop this story for now. The ideas and plot remain interesting, but the poor style, flow, and writing have taken their toll on the story. The main issues as I see them are:

1. Poor handling of POVs in the later chapters

2. Suboptimal use of 1st person style

3. Not practicing 'Show-Don't-Tell'

4. Repetitive sequences/chapters

5. Scattered story focus and occasionally rushed pacing

Overall, I've really enjoyed reading about the concept and ideas behind this story, and hope to be able come back to if it's writing improves.

Edit as of Chapter 54:

I've had to drop my rating of the story in a few categories. The main reason for this is a matter of POVs, the Izora POV in particular. Early on in the story, when the plot was more focused, the three POVs provided unique perspectives that enchanced the story. However now that the plot has developed much more since then, the Izora POV has become a problem. Both the Regan and Louella POVs advance plotlines, but the Izora POV doesn't. It's just kind of there, plodding on without much story relevance, unless it becomes convenient to use it to introduce information or an advancement. This could have been avoided by adjusting the balance of POVs continuously to best suit the story rather than trying to hold to a consistent cycle of the three. 

Additionally, another issue that has come up is that the story hasn't been scaling very well with the stakes. In other words, the stakes and scope of the story have been increasing and expanding for a while now, and I dont feel that the story and style have adapted to match it. This is most prevalent in the Regan POV, which has experienced the most significant escalation of stakes. High-stakes chapters are being written in the same way as low-stakes ones, and while maintaining a style is fine, these two types of chapters should definitely not feel the same, which they do now.

Overall, I'm still enjoying the story, but these issues have been weighing it down  recently, so I hope that the author works on them.

Original Review as of Chapter 30:

This is an enjoyable story with an interesting main character. It has similarities to other 'reborn as a dungeon' stories, but where it is unique and fresh is the way the dungeon fuses magic and technology.

 The writing style is easy to follow, and while there were quite a few grammar issues early on, they have improved recently.

 One thing to keep an eye on might be the number of POVs. While the number so far has been fine (3 main with a few one-off POVs) , if it keeps increasing that could be concerning (4 would be fine, 5 a bit much). Each of the three POVs so far has been well-developed, and the side characters have recieved some depth as well.

I would recommend this story, since the story is good and there is good room for development. 

Iscrej
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A Unique and Intriguing Story Which Needs Some Work

Reviewed at: Chapter 4 Part 2

The concept of this story is rather novel and unique as it takes the old dungeon premise and adds a new spin to it in the form of robots. The characters appear fine with enough backstory and the world building while a tad lackluster isn't the worst I've seen.

The only real issue with this story which nags me is the style and flow. While the grammar is impeccable there is a serious issue with the way characters and scenes are introduced. Namely the story needs to flow better as you read along. One of the main issues preventing this is the lack of usage of "show don't tell" in that the author should focus on describing something such as an emotion like fear instead of just plain out telling them. The author should let us figure out some backstory through the character's thoughts or conversation instead of just giving it out right at the beginning. Info dumps are okay but when the story consists of only them it dulls it down. Personally I would even give trying the 3rd person out instead of the 1st to make the story flow smoother when describing the character's actions and thoughts. Another aspect this story needs to brush up on is interesting bits of detail which distract from monotone. For example instead of "I was extremely tired after building a couple more floors of the dungeon" try "Regan's efforts in constructing the upper layers of the dungeon had exhuasted him with all the various nuances involved. He had never expected to tunnel into another cave system within the mountain and had the cave trolls living within really had to be so hostile?". This may be a bit of an over exaggeration but I believe it gets the point across.

I hope you read this and take it for the helpful criticism as it is and I hope you do continue this story as it is interesting and a great timekiller to read. Cheers and good luck.

Edit: Also there's really no point in stating whose POV it is, let the reader figure out by showing them and not directly telling, directly telling the reader really take saway from the feel of a real story. ALso I won't complain about the status text but isn't there a blue box used on royalroad for this exact purpose...

bat159
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Few are better, Most are not

Reviewed at: Chapter 77.1

This is a new (to me) take on the old Reincarnated Dungeon story. I mean ROBOTS, yeah!!

MC dies after doing bad things to Earth and is given another chance in a new universe, takes advantage and is reincarnated, memory intact, as a dungeon core. This is his story, along with many others. 

This is a very sweeping story that takes place in a relatively short period of time. It covers a lot of growth without getting lost in the detail, while still giving enough spot information to keep the story interesting.

As an example. When creating a boss for a new level, typically the MC instead of going into exacting detail over what exact qualities the boss will have, simply throws manna out with a basic idea of what he wants and lets the system have its’ head. We learn about the new boss at the same time that the MC does. I find this to be refreshing versus the overly detailed charts and analysis that typically happens.

              Yes, it IS a dungeon centric story, however in this case the actual dungeon is a small part of the story. Most is dedicated to the dungeons territory, and it’s growth.

The characters are developing well, and the plot continues to thicken. This is not a rock’em sock’em novel, most fights simply give an overview. The descriptions of the battles are again, an overview and not overly detailed.

Overall, I find this to be an interesting novel, well written to at least the Beta read level. The spelling and grammar are for the most part very good, with few of the homonym problems that many young (experience wise) authors are prone to.

The following is a response to some of the comments from other reviewers I have seen for this story.

  1. Is the book perfect, no, far from it;
  2. Does it drag in places, of course, every story does;
  3. Is this a finished, ready to publish story, not no but HELL NO, most people have no idea of the man hours thar go into the editing and rewrites of a professionally published book. The book may go back and forth between the editor and the writer a dozen times before it is ready to publish. If you want that type of quality, then PAY FOR IT.
  4. Does the author make amateur mistakes in plot, POV and storytelling, yes, again this is written by an author just starting on his journey.
hooseurdaddy
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I love this story, I'm always a fan of the mixing of modern tech and fantasy elements but this author takes the time to really put together a great blending of the elements. The MC is smart but no stick in his old ways and knowledge and he learns from the world around him. There are other POVs that do a great job of exploring the  effects the MC has and adding some dimensions to the world you cant get from the same perspective all the time. 

Also, the most important thing is(while it makes me sad at times) the releases of chapters are spread out enough it feels like the story isnt rushed and the author is taking the time to really build a world here. Too often I read similar-wish stories that start out strong but release so often they quickly back themselves into a corner without noticing and it's good to see this author avoiding that. I wish there was more to read like any other fan here but I'm confident the author will keep telling an amazing tale and I personally will always be looking forward to the next chapter. 

Keep rocking it man, I'm loving it.

callmesteve
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Finally, an original and quality dungeon story!

I quite enjoy this story. There's a lot of cool lore that's still being expanded on, and the MC, while OP, is still challenged and relevant to the plot.

There are some typos, especially in the earlier chapters, but it's not too bad, and it's free.

I look forward to learning more about the setting.

magical heart
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THIS IS A ORIGINAL AND QUALITY DUNGEON STORY!

This is the best dungeon story I have run into and honestly my favorite thing to read on  Royal Roads. The characters the ever-developing plot, the interactions between the characters, and finally the beautiful intriguing, diverse and most of all well-built world in which the characters interact and live is truly amazing. I cannot recommend this story enough to anyone who enjoys dungeon fantasy or fantasy in general or sci-fi. This story is truly the best and I hope everyone who reads this at least gives the story a try. I'm sure you'll enjoy it as much as I do.

Nocain
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Power Fantasy going to far

Reviewed at: Chapter 54.2

 Started good... But became more and more a power Fantasy. I stoped around chapter 54, when torturing prisoners became the Norm. 

Sosseres
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Interesting ideas held back by execution

Reviewed at: Chapter 17 Part 1

The book has an interesting setting and produces novel ideas inside of it.

The problems are more numerous though. A few examples that made me drop it follows below.

  • There is contast spelling and grammar errors.
  • There is no important central progression pushing the story.
  • The various side stories don't really matter and often drag down the tempo.
  • There is no rules to the magic system, thus you cannot predict what it can and cannot do.
  • The experimentation is extremly unrealistic. There were improvements to inventions happening decades after discovering it yet he perfects it in minutes. Especially if he then sets up manufacturing for it, which is the hard part most of the time.