The Perks of Immortality

by cjet799

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit High Fantasy Male Lead Reincarnation Strategy Strong Lead
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After living decades and dying hundreds of times, Kegan has learned that he has finally passed some test that the cruel spirit had given him. Now, Kegan has the ability to gain “perks” that can make his life much easier. He is looking forward to finally having an easy life with the new perks he has earned.


Rules to keep me honest for the perk system:

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I want to avoid one of the pitfalls I see for other LitRPG stories where the game elements barely relate to the story, or offer very little information. If people are skipping over and not reading the perks then I'm doing things wrong. So I promise to try and make the perks interesting, sometimes humorous, informative, and relevant to the story.

Cover art by http://dertypaws.com/

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CakeOrrDeath
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Author is doing a really god job of slowly building the world and how things work. There are no info dumps but you learn a little more each chapter.

Jacksonion Democracy
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 Story is great, Grammar is pretty good, lots of violence and gore (Love it), Meme Review would give it a 10/10

Endless Paving
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What’s this story about? It’s about a competent barbarian character with -8 to intelligence from existential mind trauma.

It’s a GameLit story so my first thoughts were “it’s some sort of game world”, but after a few respawns it’s very clearly some kind of garish nightmare torment.

It does get better though. So is gri dark tires you outa d makes you die inside this isn’t too bad. We haven’t given up on humanity yet in this story.

But that’s all mostly just the style, the true meat comes from the character. If you think an uncivilized musclebrained feral with memory problems is the blandest flat minded personality than Kegan is here to blow your mind. He’s got that feral cunning going for him that lets you know he’s boss even when he’s cooing over the “shiny rocks” the village people have that make better spears than he has. He’s an intelligent idiot, and he will rip out your intestines and eat it if you dare him.

He needed that +5 to wisdom to compensate for his addled brain. He’s badass. He’s even figured out how the Winter bonus level works! You have to prepare beforehand in anticipation of threats! Genius!

Paradoxcloud
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-reviewed at chapter 13

This is one of the best stories that I have read on rrl.

 

There is little in the way of grammar or spelling errors altough you may see some weird sentence structures every once in a while.

The world building is paced perfectly except for one chapter which was comparatively speaking still less of an info dump than some normal chapters of other stories.

The main character has no silly personality quirks and reacts like someone in his situation, though he may come off as flat if you take the story at face value.

The dialogue is well writen.

Mantrazz
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Promising storytelling

Story so far is very good at chapter 6 the author is keeping to his promise of relevant plot points since every thing has a use. It's very good, the perk system is no overwhelming though it seems like it will be, author should find a way to handle that soon, and the conflict is very engaging too. You should read all those who enjoy engaging litrpgs.

emiliakrout
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Carefully crafted and slowly revealed greatness

An extremely well done plot where everything is slowly, carefully being fleshed out as needed in a rewarding manner.

Zalpha
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I feel sorry for the MC

This is a wonderful story that is very well written. The MC seems to be living in an endless loop. I don't know if it is a VR experience he is trapped in or some sort of Re-Zero/The One (multiple existences of himself) that he keeps getting a restarted at some point by taking the place of another one of himself from a past self. Anyway like Mr.Meeseeks says, "Existence is pain."

 

As Mr. Meeseeks says...

Retrodude653
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So i found this story and read through it as of chapter 16. The main character feels very tabula rasa and i love it! I think i’ve only seen one other story where the maim character was supposed to be a blank slate and it didn’t do it near as good as this story. The story feels like watching a scared child grow into a brave warrior going out to face the world. It almost feels like watching how humans began life and learned how to survive and adapt. Anyways i’m rambling at this point. The story is great give it a read and find out for yourself.

Zimzimbadabim
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I really like this. It's a super simple concept that has the freedom to go almost anywhere. It's a story that can become however many different stories the author wants to tell. Right now it is a fantasy action-adventure, it can change to a mystery or romance or almost anything else. It's a super flexible plot premise. The main character is also  very interesting to follow. 

Character depth and realism is definitely the weak point here, but even that is better than the majority of stories on this website. As a popular reference point, would say character realism it's about as good as Randidly Ghosthound, It's not on the level of Worth the Candle or even Mother of Learning, but it's solidly better than average.

I reccomend.

The Spectator
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The story follows a barbarian stuck in a loop. He's exactly how I imagine one to be. Following his POV with out switching and breaking flow to another. Theres only perks and no status points or levels. Each life he's able to retain his abilities for a price. Learning magic through believable ways. Finger fire from being burned, berserk from his slaughtering, and blood magic by ingesting monster blood. However, he only retained the fire magic. This system he uses is unique based on what little he knows. Striving to understand the world and his ability to loop creates an interesting plot for the lonely barbarian.