The Perks of Immortality

by cjet799

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit High Fantasy Male Lead Reincarnation Strategy Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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After living decades and dying hundreds of times, Kegan has learned that he has finally passed some test that the cruel spirit had given him. Now, Kegan has the ability to gain “perks” that can make his life much easier. He is looking forward to finally having an easy life with the new perks he has earned.


Rules to keep me honest for the perk system:

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I want to avoid one of the pitfalls I see for other LitRPG stories where the game elements barely relate to the story, or offer very little information. If people are skipping over and not reading the perks then I'm doing things wrong. So I promise to try and make the perks interesting, sometimes humorous, informative, and relevant to the story.

Cover art by http://dertypaws.com/

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CakeOrrDeath
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Author is doing a really god job of slowly building the world and how things work. There are no info dumps but you learn a little more each chapter.

Jacksonion Democracy
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 Story is great, Grammar is pretty good, lots of violence and gore (Love it), Meme Review would give it a 10/10

Endless Paving
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What’s this story about? It’s about a competent barbarian character with -8 to intelligence from existential mind trauma.

It’s a GameLit story so my first thoughts were “it’s some sort of game world”, but after a few respawns it’s very clearly some kind of garish nightmare torment.

It does get better though. So is gri dark tires you outa d makes you die inside this isn’t too bad. We haven’t given up on humanity yet in this story.

But that’s all mostly just the style, the true meat comes from the character. If you think an uncivilized musclebrained feral with memory problems is the blandest flat minded personality than Kegan is here to blow your mind. He’s got that feral cunning going for him that lets you know he’s boss even when he’s cooing over the “shiny rocks” the village people have that make better spears than he has. He’s an intelligent idiot, and he will rip out your intestines and eat it if you dare him.

He needed that +5 to wisdom to compensate for his addled brain. He’s badass. He’s even figured out how the Winter bonus level works! You have to prepare beforehand in anticipation of threats! Genius!

Paradoxcloud
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-reviewed at chapter 13

This is one of the best stories that I have read on rrl.

 

There is little in the way of grammar or spelling errors altough you may see some weird sentence structures every once in a while.

The world building is paced perfectly except for one chapter which was comparatively speaking still less of an info dump than some normal chapters of other stories.

The main character has no silly personality quirks and reacts like someone in his situation, though he may come off as flat if you take the story at face value.

The dialogue is well writen.

Mantrazz
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Promising storytelling

Story so far is very good at chapter 6 the author is keeping to his promise of relevant plot points since every thing has a use. It's very good, the perk system is no overwhelming though it seems like it will be, author should find a way to handle that soon, and the conflict is very engaging too. You should read all those who enjoy engaging litrpgs.

CamChow
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The work is pretty average as far as rrl goes. definitely not deserving of being on the top works. made it to chapter 3 and couldnt go any further

story seems poorly thought out with no direction beyond surviving trials that come MC's way. also very nonsense.. in the first chapter he meets goblins, okay cool.  Then the goblins start eating everything including the dead, no description of what they're like, just that they enter a clearing and start eating.  Then they start pooping, no wait, they're giving birth.  Then they eat the babies too. ?? initially going to give this a three, now i'm taking it down to a 2.5 because as I write this out I think how poorly written this is  

style. Author's writing style doesn't give us a good look at what's going on.  very superficial and even the superficial look is pretty poor.  chapter 1 and we're thrown into action already which is fine, but it doesn't really make any sense.  

Grammar.  is fine so far.  

Character.  What character? I don't know any characters in the story.

Taclipoka
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I'd say "droning" - bland description of events

BinLox
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The story is great, the grammar is flawless (at least as far as I can remember), the style is... what even is style? And the main character is pretty darn neat! I. Want. MORE!!!

I'd love to see him bring more and more stuff with him through each life, and perhaps show what happens to his body and home when he dies in one world and ... for lack of a better word, 'joins' another?

chakfor
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I'm enjoying this far more than I thought I would. Pacing is just about right, grammar is solid, and watching the MC function without any preconceived notions is pretty awesome.

 

Keep up the good work! I'm following and looking forward to the next chapter.

kao
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Mindwipe Meets Total Recall

This story has a simple premise and it makes it fun as a result: We don't know if the MC was originally a modern man lost in time or if this is just a poor sap dying to live again in a game simulation.

 

What we do know is as the story progresses, the MC grows in knowledge and power as he dies and learns. 

 

Hopefully in the end, our MC is powerfull enough to stop dying so much. Course...it could be that one day he WILL wish for a perma death...true immortality is not a good thing...