The Forbidden Class

The Forbidden Class

by Walter

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Hatred. Lust. Power.

There are many reasons why the forbidden classes are chosen. For Katai, a young village Guard, the reason was simple.

Vengeance.

His wife was murdered during a bandit raid. His village was decimated. His life, ruined.

However, some of his people survived. Enough to make him care and keep him sane. Enough to give him a chance at destroying those responsible.  


Schedule

Updates fortnightly. 

Sunday, 1:00pm (UTC/GMT). 

May release bonus chapters from Patreon as well. 


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LitRPG - expect classes and skills and magic. Not a lot of stats/number-crunching though. 

Skill levels and progression inspired by Azarinth Healer

Let me know what you think and feel free to give constructive criticism! (Just be nice about it). 

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obran
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The Forbidden Class not the Forbidden Dance

This is the story of Katai, a young warrior who after the death of his wife by bandits is given access to the Rare class "Blood Mage" which according to a decree by the Empire is a Forbidden Class.  

Why this class is forbidden has not been revealed.  Nor are the powers themselves all that scary or taboo.  After all, this is a world where stabbing someone in the gut with a sword is commonplace, causing lacerations with magic is only one more step removed.  Maybe the class is forbidden due to the classes it evolves into.  We shall see, we shall see.

On the whole, the storytelling is good, the characters are likable, and while the author takes no great steps into the realms of originality, this is the kind of story that Royal Road is great for.  Something that you can just enjoy purely for the sake of enjoying.  

PCarrson77
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This was an interesting read with a few issues before the rewrite but it's gotten much better now. Can't wait to read more of it. I'm interested to see more about the Blood Mage class and the rewrite has a few more plot twists and story development. All in all it is a great story about a young man who takes on a dark class to protect the ones he loves and get revenge on thosewho hurt them.

limwanya
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Litrpg that doesn't suck

Any properly written litrpg story deserves 5 stars from me

Knightfire
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Rewrite makes story worth following

I liked the original version but the rewrite has even out the pacing.  The first seemed to be jumping around a lot.  While I've found other places on the web to read published stories, and have even been willing to read/pay for some of them on patreon, this story has been added to my list of a few stories that keep me coming back to check on Royal Road.  Will be looking forward to new chapters.   Best part of the story is how much you can care for the mc even this early in the story.

uictoriam4
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Very questionable plot elements

Reviewed at: Chapter 17 - Lost and Found

It is an okay read.The characters could be more fleshed out but it is still very acceptable and could have been a decent reading. That is if you ignore the big elephant in the room with this plot. The personality of MC is just not consistent and the author takes takes completely unreasonable decisions just to create some cringy plot twists.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Sorry for the rant,but things happen here that are just completely unreasonable

 

Well, for wasting my time 0.5 stars should be adequate compensation

Althayas
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I loved the first version, but this rewrite has largely ameliorated the story and characterisation of the protagonists. I like the idea the Forbidden Class isn’t a death sentenc for the hero.

DarkAether
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My first rule in RR is to never EVER read a series before they author has released a minimum of 10 chapters...... I broke down and decided to read this series at 8. When it comes to rating this series I am gonna have to list three different catagories that I believe are important to this series.

The first catagory I am going to rate this series on is honestly the potential reaction of the character's themselves, while at this moment the only other character that we have really interacted with besides the mc is Silas the story does a pretty good job of potraying the reaction and social stigma that accepting a forbidden class would bring upon the person who would dare to accept such a class.

The second catagory that I would like to rate this series on is the personality of the mc, by this point I have been with RR for about a year now give or take and one of the thing's that you get to notice is that alot of the time's author's can create character's that are quite honestly bland and boring but with our mc you can actually feel what he is going through in the series and empathize with his issues.

As for my last rating, the first thing that I would like to note is that I am not some raging grammer natzi BUT I do find it annoying when you have to stop a stories flow just to figure out what the author is trying to say but for Walter I find that the grammer and flow of the story is pretty well laid out.

All in all Walter thank's for the work and I can't wait for chapter nine and beyond

LightBringer007
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The Rewrite has improved the pacing. It was a good story before, but it is getting better and better.

The story is intriguing and lets you want to keep on reading.

 

TerrifiedFish
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Falls incredibly short for a story

A shame another potentially entertaining revenge fantasy falls short. I only got through a few chapters before realizing it falls to the video game RPG trend. 

The writing style is fine, but needs work. A total failure of understanding of show don't tell and uncesessary exposition dumps that could be delivered much more naturally. The soonest this stuck out was mostly explaining the obvious: Explaining who the wife was in a big dump, explaining what these warriors were doing, and most insultingly, explaining what "fire and screaming" meant. The book treats me like I can't infer anything and it's frustrating to read. 

The hamfisted RPG elements into the story I've read so far really is the weakest part. Treating any fantasy world as just a video game world with literal XP popups and level up popups and a literal class selection screen ruins it all horribly. It makes me think I'm reading a transcribed lets play of somebody's heavily modded playthrough of any old RPG. Even down to the main hook to the story: A unique class. Instead of discovering it or risking something, the main character simply finds a prompt and chooses "Yes". It's incredibly lazy, contrived, and horribly hurts the story.