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S4M Protoype 0000, or Sam to his friends, is the commander of an elite team of clones, designed to be the perfect soldiers. He and his team have been trapped in an automated training facility, their neural networks perfectly replicated to move them from one body to the next in an endless cycle of training. For five hundred years.
The world above ended long ago, but the advanced technology that keeps them there has only begun to break down, giving Sam and his team a chance to escape the hellish conditions they were born into, and rejoin the world above.
The only question is: what do they find when they reach the surface?
For lovers of sci-fi and fantasy fusions, a supersoldier thrown out of time!
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The story is well-written, no problems with updates BUT I LITERALLY WANT TO KILL EVERYONE IN THIS STORY BESIDES THE MC(S), like they are manipulative ungrateful basturd at best, and brain-washed $hitheads at worst. Everything else is great, but the I hate 99% of the people, and the MC (Sam) is so damned obsessed with the laws and morality (even tho he is repeatedly walked on like a carpet).
The writing in this story is excellent. Great world building, great grammar and great pace.
The problem is the characters. MC is a super soldier who spent 500 years training to protect and police humanity with his two partners. They are best friends for literally 500 years, and he fights one of them on behalf of the killer of the other for no reason. On literally the first 5 minutes after they escape the bunker. He then decides to work with the elf women WHO KILLED HIS 500 YEAR BEST FRIEND. Did I mention that elves are also invaders that stole humanities technology and sent humans back to the dark ages? Yeah. He betrays humanity, his friends, his entire life for this random elf chick who kills his best friend. He also abandoned his other best friend for her.
I just can't get past it, MC actions just don't make sense with his backstory.
This story is well written, with great grammar and decent worldbuilding but I'll be damned if there is even 1 likeable character even including the MC. I think it is just my personal bias but everyone is a huge p.o.s and Ive never read a story were EVERYONE is a piece of garbage, usually a few with most being likeable but here I just hate everyone.
The MC is some kind of cloned super soldier but is willing to let his friend of hundreds of years get killed and then defended the murderer from his other friend of hundreds of year, who just watched her lpver die, instead of doing anything Id expect from a soldier. Then he does the 'right thing' and gets used for blood sport while harboring a need to paint himself the hero to the people he cooperated with and as soon as the person that killed his friend shows up and says sorry everything is hunky doory, nah man thats bs this dude is just a robot without any honor or human emotions with his one dimension being "I wanna help" I thought it was just an early chapter thing but 10 chapters in and this dude is still a dunce, definitely not the badass marine he was desribed to be, even a cop or swat would put down someone that killed their friend that was unarmed because he was carrying a injured teamate this is too much for me.
Really good story... except the characters... I mean wtf? Okay, life is hell and wars and all, but doesn’t that reinforce bonds in at least some cases? All characters lack empathy and try to use the mc as if they were psychopathic asses... it killed me to learn that one of the only characters that seem to be reasonable is just actually better at hiding her bitchness... oh well sad stuff
Liked the idea. And the first couple chapters. But the changing POV bothered me. Give it a shot if bouncing POVs dont bother ya
Nice story. Nice MC.
Alas, theres some tropes thats not being used, such as supersoldier tropes. Thus the 4 stars.
Character development is good. Dont care about the logic of why he could use magic.
Just wish it could be longer and more story of how he combine modern tech with magic.
But its a very nice journey. Too bad its hiatus.
Rather unusual worldbuilding, with the cybernetically augmented clone and the human hating technologically advanced elf joining forces to stop the human raised internet loving dragon. More of a Gamma World/D&D crossover than Shadowrun, if that means anything to you.
Through chapter 19, no grammatical errors at all that I noticed. Lots of action, lots of floating plot threads that could bite our Main Character in the butt. Recommend .
Honestly this story needs more love. Great characters, well paced, Rock solid magic system, comedy in all the right places without being overdone . Seriously good read. Ignore everything after this sentence. ........................................................
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The concept of a supersoldier clone that has his memories transplanted through lives is solid on it's own. Slap an apocalyptic future with elves from another dimension and the coolest dragon villain I ever read about and you got me by the balls.
Now, I could make a tasteful review with separated parts describing the different aspects of the story. But I will just gush about whatever I liked and remember while I write this. Sorry about that.
The protagonist and his pals are really nice while they are there, they make a dynamic that I can see kinda happening. Dunno, supersoldier and shit. Yeah. It's cool, really.
After that we have a whole world that just amazed. Well, the coliseum bit kinda sucked. I did not really like the way shit was portraid there, thought better of the elves. Aside from that it is really amazing to just imagine how the world is while the characters interact with it. There's always a tidbit of info that just shines an idea on your head and shit, I love it.
The main character always has an conflict, be it emotional or a giant fucking dragon-dictator-doctor extraordinaire called Billy. It is as good as a villain as it sounds ridiculous.
I'm still on the afterglow of binge-reading it tbh.
If you read till here, you probably have the patience to read till chapter 7. Heck, read it as a standalone. It introduces the villain that only appears as background or a direct confrotation later on the story. Which only makes it better really, after this chapter you'll know what an awesome thing to expect on the story.
A story that keeps on giving on almost all aspects.
8 Chapters out when writting this, I look forwards for more. Thats the best review I can give at the moment.