A Hand-Woven Universe

by Lukis_Aurelius

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Non-Human lead Strong Lead Wuxia
Warning This fiction contains:
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What happens to a world of Magic and Dragons when a cultivator bursts into their universe? What about when a cultivator is raised right under their noses?

How do Wizards and High Elves, Dungeons and Dwarves, fare against an unknowing cultivator and the Laws of the Universe?

Epochs ago an Immortal left his inheritance behind on a dying plane of existence. 

Now, at the edge of what was once desolate world, the immortals inheritance is about to make himself known. And his name is Noone.

An original cultivator of his world, unguided, and unrestrained.

Noone is the powerless child of a civilazation locked away at the edge of the world. When tragedy occurs, and his world is turned around, he inherits the Will of The Ancestor. An ancient legendary being who protected the conclave of Tapestry, until the desolate world above would become re-inhabitable.

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IMPORTANT: This is a long-form narrative. If you don't enjoy slower-paced world building then this isnt the novel for you.

NOT: a systems/reincarnation story

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. The Beginning ago
2. Trouble ago
3. Heredity ago
4. Silence and Sea Stones ago
5. Like the Stone, Like the Stream ago
6. Two Fish in a Pond ago
7. Hot Tea ago
8. Blessed Build ago
9. Tapestry Under Siege ago
10. Starting Work ago
11. A Year in the Mines ago
12. A Day of Rest ago
13. A Proper Opportunity (Part 1) ago
14. A Proper Opportunity (Part 2) ago
15. Coming of Age ago
16. A Land Before Time ago
17. Relax, this is only the beginning. ago
18. The Fall ago
19. Danger in the Clouds ago
20. Immediate Disadvantage ago
21. Spoils ago
22. Soup for You ago
23. Trisha ago
24. Oh What a Colorful World ago
25. Inchoate ago
26. Unfathomable ago
27. Rest ago
28. What Stone? ago
29. It is what it is. ago
30. Zoning In ago
31. Tahmel...? ago
32. Take Me to Porose ago
33. Elder Omias ago
34. Smile ago
35. Unwoven ago
36. No matter what... ago
37. Entering the Warehouse ago
38. Brother... ago
39. What was that? ago
40. Eephie ago
41. Whoosh ago
42. The Fall (I) ago
43. The Fall (II) ago
44. The Fall (III) ago
45. Progress ago
46. Three Days ago
47. Out of Body ago
48. Undiscernible Feeling ago
49. Not That Much Worse... ago
50. Okay... What now? ago
51. ago
52. A Strange Dream ago
53. A Sudden Core ago
54. Repaving ago
55. Joined Memory of an Old God ago
56. Emergence ago
57. How Long...? ago
58. Enter Stage West ago
59. An Inciting Letter ago
60. Taking the First Step ago
61. The Burian...? ago
62. A Party of 3 ago
63. Choosing Weapons ago
64. An Odd Pendant and a Paladin's Regret ago
65. An Ancient Tribe ago
66. A New Party ago
67. Stars... ago
68. I'm Home ago
69. True Silence ago
70. Absolute Exhaustion ago
71. Not Alone ago
72. Breakthrough! ago
73. Shockwave ago
74. A Harsh Figure ago
75. A Devil? ago
76. Fight! ago
77. Moonlight Cocoon ago
78. Devil or Demon or... Something Else? ago
79. Chain in the Heart ago
80. Unraveling Cocoon ago
81. Xxxx Xxx Xxxxxxx ago
82. Retrospective ago
83. Raelith. Tobias. Noone. ago
84. To Seek Strength ago
85. Freedom to Speak ago
86. To Lie About One's Age ago
87. Pressure to Advance ago
88. A Silent Attack ago
89. A Lone Tribesman ago
90. First Kill ago
91. A More Dangerous Noone ago
92. Dual War-Axes ago
93. Growth ago
94. Stepping to the Right Path ago
95. Approaching Society ago
96. A Shocking Advance ago
97. Acolytes Reunion ago
98. Sattelite Town ago
99. Temple's Suppression ago
100. Experiencing Ardglass ago
CH.100 Q&A ago
101. 5 Silvers ago
102. Urchin? ago
103. ago
104. Magic Trick ago
105. ago
106. Unfit for the Burian ago
107. Divine Sense ago
108. Oath of Vengeance ago
109. Tenets and Training ago
110. Seeking ago
111. Dragonborn Patrin ago
112. Thank the Gods ago
113. Risk and Reward ago
114. Clothes from Home ago
115. A Divide ago
116. Eephie ago
117. Innocents ago
118. Patience ago
119. Prepare Yourself ago
120. Catch It! ago
121. Training ago
122. No Time ago
123. Suddenly, Direwolves. ago
124. Entering Pinepass ago
125. Pinepass Temple ago
126. Paladin Clayton ago
127. Master Hopborne and Novrada ago
128. Good Job, Kid. ago
129. Quality Food ago
130. When I was one... ago
131. Magic Sense? ago
132. ALAVIVGREHMLA GNUCECAK ago
133. Sarah and Clayton ago
134. I can do that... ago
135. Bandit Camp ago
136. Ten and Eleven. ago
137. They don't stand a chance... ago
138. An Armory ago
139. Enchanted Weapons ago
140. Selling out? ago
141. New Battle-Axe ago
142. 2 liquid 4 fire ago
143. Into the Adventurers Guild ago
144. 'Pile-O-Heads' ago
145. Is it a gnome thing? ago
146. 3-Question Oath ago
147. The pendant? ago
148. Epoch-tribes? ago
149. I miss Liter... ago
150. Steak Au Gratin ago
151. Enormous Power! ago
152. Three Percent. ago
153. Towards Stone-Eye. ago
154. General Armuu ago
155. Approaching the front line ago
156. Show me the body ago
157. Get some perspective, Noone. ago
158. Entering Stone-Eye. ago
159. Deserted City? ago
160. Lifesaving Treasure ago
161. Ambush! ago
162. Drider ago
163. The Dependable Paladin ago
164. SWITCH! ago
165. Cruelty towards one's self. ago
166. Mostly, he felt weak. ago
167. A sudden farewell ago
168. Outnumbered ago
169. Somewhere warm? ago
170. An enevitable explanation ago
171. What comes next? ago
172. An unlikely ally? ago
173. A Possibility of Hope? ago
174. Her ago
175. A Familiar Cast ago
Intermission 1: NEWS ABOUT BOOK 1 & 2 ago
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catalinnr
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Waste of time till a major rewrite / rough draft

I would say till chapter 20, it's good and interesting to read , a good 5/5 i would say. Even the next few chapters are tending to be okay-ish (4/5).

But after that it's plain filler with no start and no finish, it's meant to be confusing, to be as vague as possible so the author won;t need to bother explaining anything. (1/5 since grammar is good at least)

Oh, and its not a simple filler meant to add something to the larger plot while not being canon like any side-story or multiple pov like it was since the start.

At first i thought all this vagueness and lack of details was meant to put the mc and the community in the dark about something, but then the author said fuck it and threw any and all foreshadow there ever was in the story and said : " Fuck it, let's kill everyone with unxeplained zombie plague made by the most unforeshadowed villain in the story (he's not even a villain,he's just a plot device that somehow can just up and kill everyone with his book knowledge somehow, like i said, it's so vague and in 70 chapters not explained ,clearly he doesn;t give a fuck about explaining). 

Oh let's powerlevel the mc for no reason and make him half plant after killing and regrowing him in a plant cocoon.

Let's siwtch focus to some unrelated people since everyone else is dead and make them meet the mc after climing back up from the destroyed community.

Before they meet, let's add more bs powerlevel to him by making him absorb the magic bones of the dead people in the town. (at this point the story became a shitier wuxia where mc got forcefully and unxeplained orphaned for plot reason and only he and his soulmate that left before the plague could get to her survived and MARK MY WORD, THEY WILL MEET! after some kind of sect adopted her or forced marriage her to a young master that he will need to beat but since he is so weak everyone will thing he will lose but actually the bs will make him win ).

Chapter 76 is the new low of the story, so yeah,nothing else to say besides:  forsake the shitty plot devices and plotholes and stop covering the reader's eyes more than the mc.

 

Edit: 13/02/2019

So, i just came to see if anything changed ,but it seems is the same plot going forward.

Heh, author actually gave a crap about this review ,who knew? Well, 2 stars imo is draft material with 4+ being something readable on this site. So i changed my 1.5 to 2.

One thing tho, you wrote 90 smth chapters from what you say will be around 600 chapters story. It is not the reader's job to read something that doesn't make sense untill 400 chapters in the story.We don't know how the story will progress, it might suck, only the author knows how the events fit in the "grand scheme".

It's the story's and author's job to keep the reader engaged by making the story coherent,good and fun to read.

There have been a lot of people telling you since the story started going downhill that you need to take a step back and rethink but you kept going with the "grand scheme" that all will make sense later. You can bs someone into reading 50 chapters expecting the plot point started 90 chapters ago to come to a conclusion but you can;t bs someone into reading 400 chapters for the MAIN PLOT to make sense.

The main plot is the foundation of the story ,if it has holes it's bad, if you keep building over it instead of patching them ,then you might find yourself midway with nothing to build on since it toppled into a hiatus.

Nicebagdad
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Cool concept but has some issues.

Its a great concept, and I really do like the idea, but there is something in the way it's been written that kindof throws me off. I regularly get confused because I can't picture the world and when I do try  I start noticing contradictions.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Many of the characters don't seem consistently inhuman that may be by design but that would need require it being consistent  they do act like humans some times and at other times they act like the nonhumans they were portrayed as.

 

I am a stickler for detail and really miss that at times.

Good job, keep writing you definitely seem to be good at it, just work on certain small details and this could end up being quite a good read. :)

 

Lokan Marsland
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This review is of the story post-edit in 8/21/19. This book has left me nigh speechless so I will keep this short. The characters had feeling. I cared about them and their thoughts. I got nervous when I saw the POV switches early on but I ended up really liking them. I don't think an alternate POV will ever be as good as the protagonists Pov but this is the first time in a long time I have seen a reason to keep them, they feel well put together and bring the suspense that made me literally unable to put the book down. The genre? I don't really know what cultivation stories count as but I've read many of them but few to completion. I feel like the stories themselves get tired and it sucks the joy right out of the read for me. I don't see this happening here, there is no true dragon bloodline, there is no heavenly supreme star killing sutra, there is a fun character who is going through life like a human being might in the given circumstances.

sherzu
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Great start, but went wrong.

I like your story! I don't understand why we needed to read so much chapter about Tobias, Sarah. I don't believe it gave something more to the story. 

The death of the inhabitant don't bother me, however the lack of information on the reason do bother me. It look like they are dead for conveniance. I will stop reading until there is more chatper and i will wait for more clarity. 

In overall it's a good job but i feel like we fell in the clichés of the genre :/ 

Andross Guile
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It's a decent story with ok grammar and style but serious pacing issues. The MC is alright and the world building is wishy washy. 

I'd give this story a solid meh. It tries to be a cultivation story after 60 chapters and kinda fails. I don't need some cultivation xianxia to be happy but the author tried to fuse genres and it didn't quite work. 

It started out as coming of age with beings you can't relate with and the morphed into some quest of revenge... 

Lemme put it this way: you'll read 350 pages until the plot begins and when it starts you get a by the books cultivation story with a not yet OP MC. He meets an OP eccentric wizard and there's some attempt of subterfuge by beings which give this a very weak epic fantasy twist.

 

My advice is: Cut out 70% of the first 500 pages and rewrite the rest. Who cares if the guy can dig a hole for 3 months? The dude climbed up a million km cliff. We know he's tough. Please focus more on character development. Oh, and your grammar needs some serious work.

kazou
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Enthralling world-building and beautiful story

Although this is a "cultivator" type novel, it couldn't be further for any tropes of the genre. The author creates a complex world, starting small and mysterious and slowly revealing answers while showing us a wider world. There were a few chapters that were a bit slow as they marked a transition in the story, thankfully they are over as of the time of this review. I removed half a star for this because I don't agree with a choice the author made in regards to the plot. I realize this is a purely personal point of view and some people in the comments clearly didn't mind the author's decision.

The characters are rich and colorful. Our hero starts off as somewhat of a blank slate and grows through the chapters in a very organic way. I'm not sure exactly how he will end up but up until now, he has integrated his experiences in a realistic way and that comforts me as to the future of this story.

Style-wise, I'm not a big fan of long winded descriptions and yet I didn't skip them because they were simple, to the point and highly evocative, the way the author describes the world and the hero's feelings resonate with me and a couple of scenes even made me pause to visualize and appreciate the feeling the MC should be feeling at that moment.

I removed half as star for grammar because I tend to read this story as soon as it's posted and I saw a couple of issues. Now, don't misunderstand : even just after posting, there are less errors here than in 90% of the good stories here, after they are edited. It just wouldn't be fair to give 5 stars as that would imply the grammar is flawless (it almost is).

TL;DR : Great story, very different from what you can find here usually, good change of pace, can't wait for the next chapter.

fanvaron
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Good, but slow is an understatement

This story is very well write, the worldbuilding is amazing, almost too much so.

The biggest chargrin I have with this story is the lack of a payout, we only get introduced to more and more stuff, more mysteries more interesting concepts.
The problem is those never get solved, the punchline never lands, its just all open ended potential, where the reader sits tight and waits for the resolution that never comes.

I know that this is supposed to be a slow and building story and not an instant gratification, but still there needs to be gratification at some point, otherwise it becomes just frustrating.

The frustation has lessen a lot with the chapters around 100 where the happenings have a more tanglible payout, with the human interactions and the actually understandable (which is important, before that it was just all big ?? what happened and what the change means) progress our mc is making.

So overall I would say the story is good with great potential, but the scope is so big, that few people will have enough patience to wait for the payout.

 

PS. The Wuxia Tag might be technically right, but as the description hints at the world is in no way wuxia, it is only the cultivation system that actuall fits that tag, so for anyone tired of the wuxia tropes (like myself), this is not an issue here.

tenqui
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Slower paced but excellent story.

if you are into immediate gratification from a story than this is not for you.  Instead this is an extremely well written epic that builds over time.  I highly recommend it.  Especially since it is so far along now.  If I had read it when it was only ten or so chapters in I think I probably would have gone insane waiting for updates.  However, enough of the story has been fleshed out at this point to keep me satisfied as I hopefully patiently wait for more.

Cassano
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good start new concept

Really like your story this feels fresh and not like something i have read before

haven't found any grammatical errors, easy to read

hope this gets the amount of readers it deserve in my opinion

Thanks for the chapters  :) 

Inserted
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The novel feels professional and has a nice flow to it, it is quite unique and I have yet to read something similar.

 

The grammar is nice and I don't see many mistakes... so far, the story flows well and isn't to fast or to slow.

 

The character development could be worked on but other than that this novel is a very enjoyable experience.