The Power of Formations

by mrezman

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Magic Male Lead School Life Secret Identity Strategy

Emmet Laghaz loved puzzles.

All day, all night, puzzles. Ever since he was a child, Emmet could turn anything into a puzzle.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Emmet Laghaz ago
Chapter 2 - Old man Maury ago
Chapter 3 - Horu-beetle ago
Chapter 4 - Sun Beam ago
Chapter 5 - Progression ago
Chapter 6 - Wolf Pack ago
Chapter 7 - Mana ago
Chapter 8 - Wolfie ago
Chapter 9 - Saber-Toothed Bear ago
Chapter 10 - Saber-Toothed Bear (2) ago
Chapter 11 - Formations ago
Chapter 12 - Setting Off ago
Chapter 13 - Soaring Heights City ago
Chapter 14 - Gemini Academy ago
Chapter 15 - Orientation ago
Chapter 16 - First Day of Classes ago
Chapter 17 - Maisy ago
Chapter 18 - Job ago
Chapter 19 - Trial ago
Chapter 20 - One Week Later ago
Chapter 21 - Literacy Lessons ago
Chapter 22 - Six Months Later ago
Chapter 23 - Hoverboard ago
Chapter 24 - The World ago
Chapter 25 - The End of Year Assessment ago
Chapter 26 - End of the Year ago
Chapter 27 - Harbinger Complexity Class Equivalency ago
Chapter 28 - Advanced Formation ago
Chapter 29 - Locomotive Car ago
Chapter 30 - Tasks ago
Chapter 31 - 'Stinger' ago
Chapter 32 - Rollercoaster ago
Chapter 33 - Tauruk ago
Chapter 34 - Revelation ago
Chapter 35 - Maisytown ago
Chapter 36 - Wings ago
Chapter 37 - Results ago
Chapter 38 - Goodbye ago
Chapter 39 - Silva Creature ago
Chapter 40 - Fruity ago
Chapter 41 - The Sky Wheel ago
Chapter 42 - Maisytown Park ago
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rizenfrmtheashes
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Must Read for CS Grads or Students

This story dives into cool characters, neat (and strong) magic systems, and bases itself off out CS theory and fundamentals to a light degree, making this deeply enjoyable for someone who is going through this now (I caught that P/NP thing half way through, sneaky author).  Pushes all the right buttons for me. 

molenir
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18 chapters in, and I am very much enjoying the story.  It has lots of world-building, without doing infodumps.  It has action, without being overwhelming an non-stop.  It has humor and an interesting MC.  

Still waiting on more information as to how the magic system works, and so much else.  Given that the story is being told from the pov of the MC, and he doesn't know yet either, I imagine we will be learning all these things as he does.   

Overall, this is a well written, entertaining story.

DonutDaddy
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 As of chapter 30 its a great start. Its quite light hearted and cheerful, i blew through all 30 chapters out atm in a hr and a half. If your looking for a lighthearted story this is the best on RRL by far. Just reading it put me in a great mood.

Chawki89
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I don’t get how this has such a high rating and so many followers. It is a pretty boring read. Not to mention we have moments were I picture Morgan Freeman begins to narrate out of no where. All to often the story is narrated like we the readers are idiots. Not to mention there isn’t much rhyme or reason to the magic system. Throw some different colored stones together and get what you want. The action feels like power rangers, aka made for children. Just super corny. I kept trying to read because of the ratings and so many followers but just couldn’t do it. 

P.s. WOLVES DONT BARK! I feel like the wolf written in is more Blues Clues kinda bullshit. Childish. 

Pallakonto
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(after reading CH30) Awesome, relatable characters with a neat take on mystical powers and related technology. Looking forward to the rest!

Winged Thing
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Has charm and a base to build on.

This review is meant as constructive criticism not as bashing, do not take it as such.

Overall: This story is enjoyable but requires a substantial suspension of disbelief because at its core, the world (though interesting) is about as divorced from realism as you can get. Despite this, it is still quite enjoyable which says much for how good this novel has the potential to be should its flaws be polished (and edited) out.

Problems:

- Dialog is ametur, wooden and almost every conversation in the novel does not feel "real"

- Characters act and speak in ways that are odd, and each tend to have a very bland feel to them.

- World is too idealistic to be real and feels fake as a consequence. The MC is at a school that has intelligence as a pre-requisite for enrolment, the fact that there is no way to test out of being a squire is idiotic and contrived.

- The MC has no agency and doesn't really affect events, instead being thrown around by the plot at whim of the author.

- MC has no sense of self preservation, dignity or worth. He doesn't act in rational ways either outside his problem solving in formations. If he is as smart as he is supposed to be and we are told that he is, it is incredible that he manages to be as dense and blind to the world around him.

- Characters lack their own agendas, goals and motivations.

Benefits

- CHARM. This world has such an amazing amount of promise that it is almost unreal. With a proper editor and a much needed major transfusion of realism, this novel has the possibility of becoming something truly special.

In conclusion, please for the love of god find an editor with a jaded world view, your story will become something truly godlike if you do. This story is something I'd like to see reach its full potential.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Nombie
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Honestly one of my current favorite reads on RL. The MC is well thought-out and relatable. Plenty of World building and Magic explanation without total overload. Finally criticism would be more story in the first semester. That plenty of antics the MC could get up to not knowing how to read.

kboi
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Incredible Contemporary work

this is incredible! it really gets at the essence of postmodern expression. Laghaz as a character is written so well, and its incredible how much of the character is developed on subtext. Great work, looking forward to seeing more in the future.

Deimos
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Good story, One Issue

As of chapter 30, the mc has done a ood few amazing things. And while there is a tag for secret identity, he has received 0 credit for most if not all his work.

He doesnt have some moniker or pen name he hides behind. He doesn't have a secret identity. He just never gets any credit and it goes to someone else. 

Personally I never liked secret identities where people have to pretend to be weka or dumb but I thought I would give this one a chance. 

I was not dissapointed so much as I was upset and annoyed that the character hasn't received any credit for his work and then blows it off like it means nothing. I to a point that all he cares about are puzzles but it's inhuman, just, unnatural to have absolutely 0 reaction that that while still feeling peer pressure and other reactions. 

The mix of no anger but still being scared, sad and shy annoys me. If a character has emotions then they need ALL of them. Not just the ones they need to push the story along. And if he struggles with emotions it needs to be presented more directly.

I know I've said a lot of negatice things towards the story. However I do love it. And my criticism comes from that love. I want to be able to love the story and know its the best it could possibly be. My perspective may not be perfect but its all I can give.

Thank you for reading and please give the book a chance before blowing it off because of my comment or any other.

kjoatmon
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This story has the typical, OP MC and tries to do it in a unique way. While the premise is good, it then starts to open plot holes and almost kills itself. Then, to finish itself off, the mechanics of the writing is poor at best.

Let's look at some holes. The MC is uneducated and worries a great deal about his lack of ability to read, BUT is able to get the titles of problems in a book that uses unfamiliar terms that have nothing to do with farming. He thinks about "abstract" and "constructions" while being a ten year old, uneducated farm boy that is supposedly a migrant worker when they have not moved for ten years and he has the time to fill his room with the things he made before having any exposure tinkering tools, etc. Where did the initial breakthrough come from? Well, seems he had it all on his own without any form of education or even exposure to magical devices in this magical world.

All of this continues to a lack of foundation and continual contradictions. If the MC can't read well, how does he know the chapter tittles in the book when they use words never expressed by a farmer? If the MC was never taught this stuff before, how did he even start making his horde of devices? If the bugs are so massive destructive, why would the farmers even be there? They take on dozens of beetles, each large enough to destroy an entire field of crops, which are supposedly common, but the farms somehow survive?

Then there is the writing... There are lots of repetition mistakes that should be easily avoided by basic editing. It would be like me saying, "The completion of the new device was completed successfully and in an original way." If it is new there is no reason for original and why say both completion and completed? While not a direct quote, there are several issues like that on every page I got to. Add to this improper word use and odd punctuation.

Lots of people say it gets better. Fine. I'll never get there. It is just too bad working through the start.