The Power of Formations

by mrezman

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Magic Male Lead School Life Secret Identity Strategy

Emmet Laghaz loved puzzles.

All day, all night, puzzles. Ever since he was a child, Emmet could turn anything into a puzzle.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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rizenfrmtheashes
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Must Read for CS Grads or Students

This story dives into cool characters, neat (and strong) magic systems, and bases itself off out CS theory and fundamentals to a light degree, making this deeply enjoyable for someone who is going through this now (I caught that P/NP thing half way through, sneaky author).  Pushes all the right buttons for me. 

molenir
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18 chapters in, and I am very much enjoying the story.  It has lots of world-building, without doing infodumps.  It has action, without being overwhelming an non-stop.  It has humor and an interesting MC.  

Still waiting on more information as to how the magic system works, and so much else.  Given that the story is being told from the pov of the MC, and he doesn't know yet either, I imagine we will be learning all these things as he does.   

Overall, this is a well written, entertaining story.

DonutDaddy
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 As of chapter 30 its a great start. Its quite light hearted and cheerful, i blew through all 30 chapters out atm in a hr and a half. If your looking for a lighthearted story this is the best on RRL by far. Just reading it put me in a great mood.

djeruknipis
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Glaring Setting Issue: Not Recommended

I just had to put down this fiction after only few chapters due to unsuspendable disbelief. The main point of the story is you can make something powerful by connecting energy dense material in esoteric way. Not much raw material treatment needed, nor deep knowledge about it. Just be perceptive and you'll intuitively know what to connect to what and bam, death-ray.

Not death-ray obviously, but I suspect something like that will appear later.

It's not a faulty setting per se, but author forgot to account its implication. If things like remote combat buff can be assembled by uneducated farm boy, the adult farmers must have something better, either by assembling it themselves or by buying it from others. I can, right away, imagine a better plouging device, anti pest device, non-fertilizer growth improvement device, so on and so forth. With such technology, food price should have been driven low. And to get by, farmer must had a thirst for new wondrous device, to increase their productivity. To set only main character know about such easy powerful device in his whole vilage is dumb.

It is then exacerbated by knowledge that, in only few days travel, there is town that is technologically much more advanced. No travel ban has been imposed, why the knowledge didn't spread? No different language or culture implied, why the tech didn't spread?

Oh, there are other issues than warrant low score, please read other reviewer to get some ideas.

Pallakonto
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(after reading CH30) Awesome, relatable characters with a neat take on mystical powers and related technology. Looking forward to the rest!

Nombie
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Honestly one of my current favorite reads on RL. The MC is well thought-out and relatable. Plenty of World building and Magic explanation without total overload. Finally criticism would be more story in the first semester. That plenty of antics the MC could get up to not knowing how to read.

kboi
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Incredible Contemporary work

this is incredible! it really gets at the essence of postmodern expression. Laghaz as a character is written so well, and its incredible how much of the character is developed on subtext. Great work, looking forward to seeing more in the future.

Deimos
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Good story, One Issue

As of chapter 30, the mc has done a ood few amazing things. And while there is a tag for secret identity, he has received 0 credit for most if not all his work.

He doesnt have some moniker or pen name he hides behind. He doesn't have a secret identity. He just never gets any credit and it goes to someone else. 

Personally I never liked secret identities where people have to pretend to be weka or dumb but I thought I would give this one a chance. 

I was not dissapointed so much as I was upset and annoyed that the character hasn't received any credit for his work and then blows it off like it means nothing. I to a point that all he cares about are puzzles but it's inhuman, just, unnatural to have absolutely 0 reaction that that while still feeling peer pressure and other reactions. 

The mix of no anger but still being scared, sad and shy annoys me. If a character has emotions then they need ALL of them. Not just the ones they need to push the story along. And if he struggles with emotions it needs to be presented more directly.

I know I've said a lot of negatice things towards the story. However I do love it. And my criticism comes from that love. I want to be able to love the story and know its the best it could possibly be. My perspective may not be perfect but its all I can give.

Thank you for reading and please give the book a chance before blowing it off because of my comment or any other.

kranadheer
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Great story so far, looking forward to seeing more in the future

PieCrushYumYum
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Great book man. Its interesting, and although i somthimes just go along with the formation concepts, most of the time they are really interesting. The book isn't slow nor too fast. My final testement to the quality of this book is that it interested me enough to binge all the 30 available in two hours