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Fortress City has Super Villains, who have evil lairs, and in them they make super weapons. But when a bioweapon is granted super powers of its own, will Fortress City be able to handle the Super Minion?

 

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Originally written for NaNoWriMo 2018 Royal Road challenge.

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Chaeron
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Overall very enjoyable read, would recommend

The first time for me writing a review, so lets go with simple way:

Style: I'm not really sure what should be put here, but anyway: Style seems to be good without any visible problems.

Story: Story has a interesting original concept and a good flow, though everything might go a bit too fast for my personal liking, but that is of course completely subjective.

Grammar: Didn't spot any grammar mistakes, but I'm not a native speaker so I might miss some less obvious problems.

Character: The characters seem to be well enough fleshed out, the only problem I had was with MC apparently becoming more or less fluent from nothing in the spoken and written language from just a few days of mingling in the crowds. Sure, it could be explained with that mysterious Human.exe influencing things and the MC being some bio-supercomputer, but that still is botheringly fast... Maybe making the 'drones' in the beginning sometimes speak out loud when the MC is able to hear them?

Cyoa11aa
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Not your normal tofu burger.

My favorite book on this site. Top marks in everything. A+

A unique take into the nonhuman genere that seems to ask the audience what really matters to be human. I feel like many would agree with me when I say that this is one of the top 10 stories hands down. 

I hope that this jewel continues to shine and brings the joy I feel reading it to others.

Kikanolo
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Interesting Sci-fi Superhero Blend

Super Minion is an interesting and well-written story that features a sci-fi based take on super heroes.

The premise of the story is that a designed bioweapon escapes the lab it was built in and tries to integrate into society. The story does a number of things very well, with the writing style and characters being the highlights. The main character's perspective is written very well, with it having a detached and highly analytical point of view. It is very clear that the MC is not a human based on the way it is written to think, react, and respond, and this style is maintained very consistently while also developing organically throughout the story. 

The MC has an interesting and balanced powerset, not being OP but also being strong enough to be able to be plot-relevant in a world of powered individuals. This leads on to the next point, the setting. The superhero setting created for this story is very unique and well-done so far. It allows for the exploration of certain aspects of this type of story not normally touched upon, and gives the story many options for the future.

The supporting characters are well-established, and benefit the story as a whole.

The story is well-edited and chapters are quite long, balancing out the irregular releases.

I would strongly recommend this story.

(As of Chapter 32)

k94k9
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I am in no way an experienced reviewer but I just had to do it.

There's an incredible amount of little details that make everything seem so vibrant and alive and make each character, including the side ones, interesting and relatable which is funny seeing as its a non-human protagonist. 

The writing is well done and easily conveys the story and it's fun. Which at the end of the day is the main point I think. It's fun and it's free, why the hell shouldn't I give something like that my stamp of approval and wish the author all the best.

The_Lost_Void
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Amazing story. The grammar is fantastic, and the character development is good too. The only thing keeping this story from being a full 5 stars is that sometimes the MC's naivety can make some confusing situations. Even as bad as that is, I still find it nice how the author is not changing that part of the MC

GodofDeath
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An amazing book which takes you on a journey of what it is like to be an escaped test subject. Sadly the only downside is the slow rate of chapter releases which gets annoying.

Eadbald
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I to am a perfectly normal human, I think rectangles are wonderful.

Truly this is a great story. Thank you Gogglesbear.

James Mandy
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This book is a masterpiece.I felt it has good bits in it. However I felt it couldn't compare with Watership Down as an adventure tale (that is another great book, surprisingly brilliant). My Grandmother ("on my father's side...") once said that I should read the book and put the old, incomplete cartoon into the video player. Intrigued, but didn't really get what was going on (the Black Riders in that cartoon are terrifying - scarier than the movie versions, and cost me some sleep!). later I sometimes considered looking at this book again, but was rather put off the idea due to it's imposing size and the apparent "unfathomability" of the tale in my own ignorance having not read it yet. Nor had my understanding of the cartoon improved. But, somehow in someway, the tale that had not been read just niggled at me from time to time. I met some good friends at 20 years old and they said, "you've not read it yet!? You've got to read it. It's so worth it - but READ IT ALL or you won't get the benefit!" Later that year I bought the one piece, bulky novel and got down to it... It has maps in it, always a good thing and gradually helped my immersion. Gradually, gradually. The first part, the first time, the super minion was kind of slow and for me, was an effort to read, I didn't know the characters, the lay of the land, the lore or anything. It had some tense and joyous moments. It was basically a deeper version of the world found in the Hobbit. But the English and sentence composition was exquisite in many parts. Didn't dig the singing though, for I knew not the tunes or hints! Then after the main character left the lab... Suddenly the book changes tracks! Whoa! It became a massive page turner, though the times I paused reading and was lost in my imagination about what was happening, where and to whom gradually increased in length and frequency. And THIS is what makes it great. You get lost in this world in your own imagination before returning to read the next paragraph... Suddenly the book ends. What an epic and what a fabulously cool ending! Such a good ending, When I read reviews of people complaining about the book, I can see from my own experience that almost all of them didn't get through super minion! LOL. For those who haven't read it yet, heed my old friend's advice, READ IT ALL. It becomes a page turner after the first part. Seriously. This book is awesome. The movies are great (I love them), but they are just like the images you see in the corners of the pages of old children's books. Wonderfully complimentary, but not actually it itself. Read it.