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Fortress City has Super Villains, who have evil lairs, and in them they make super weapons. But when a bioweapon is granted super powers of its own, will Fortress City be able to handle the Super Minion?

 

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Originally written for NaNoWriMo 2018 Royal Road challenge.

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RootNeg1Reality
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On chapter 24 now and it's been pretty great. The start was a little confusing. I still don't quite understand some of the stuff that was happening, but it was fun. I like the odd perspective, but I'm worried it will soon totally die out. I'd like to see some misunderstandings work back in to keep the alien feel. Anyway I'll be waiting for more.

Koriel
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This story is so good, tofu is the best, everything is the best.  So Good.  Wish I found this story a year from now so I'd be able to binge it.  

Inbetweenaction
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Hello fellow definitely nonsuspicius humans.

After having had it as a five star for a long time, I guess it is time to get back to giving it a proper review before another reread.

 

The style. Very unique style, the politics of this superhero world is very decently though trough  with laws that almost make about as much sense as some that exist in the world today. Evil ish supercorp is building sentient bio weapons for god reasons for evil corps, and cover up its escape for other good reasons(hint: its cash. But the reason for it being so valuable makes sense) , economy makes sense, politics makes about as much sense as politics do. Infrastructure makes surprisingly amount of Even the giant monster ruling the city neighbouring the one in our story takes place in makes sense.

 

Story: escaped superweapon trying to blend into the crowd, and makes friends. After all  who doesn't like the guys from r/totallynotrobots. Although he keeps getting a  sader and sader past among his friends  "did you know sodas came in different flavours?  Mind. Blown." 

 

Grammar : excellent. We all blame weird structure on the mc. 

 

Characters : the characters are excellent. The mc learning to fitt in is a wonderful thing that he does with out anyone thinking aaaaaaanything is off with the weird murderous goffball.

 

The rest of the cast is also solid. Daughters of known villains and students trying to make enough to pay for college all take up henshing for their own in character reasons. 

Only flaw is that there is not enough of it yet. 

 

 

Jarthon
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A brilliant take on the Superhero genera

I don't really know how to express just how good this story is and how much I wan't you to read it. It's wonderful worldbuilding combined with some of the strongest character building on Royal Road, and the tremendous craft of it's author means that it is fully deserving of its place on the best rated charts and I cannot wait to see where Gogglesbear takes us next. Go read it!

Sage Drunk Kitty
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A great read. If you manage to get past the first 5 chapters.

Current Progress: Finished chapter 31.

A somewhat but not really simple, light hearted story about a shapeshifting biomech's journey as a minion and lover of food. His adventures, and the way he slowly grows and develops is certainly entertaining. Keep up the great work, author!

Banks94
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I put this off for so long because I don't love non human leads. You have to do them just right and I think a lot of people fail but this author does it perfectly.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

Tydorius
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I avoided this particular story for the past few months, as it simply did not seem like something I would enjoy. Upon seeing that it had reached number two in popularity last week, I decided to try a chapter or two.

Now I'm at the end of what's currently published, and I wish there was more already written. I'll be following this one and looking forward to future chapters.

The non-human perspective is well done. Things happen that make sense from the character's perspective that demonstrates the author has seriously thought about the disconnect between what the main character is and what a normal person takes for granted.

The other characters are well thought out with more nuanced relationships than you would expect in something like this. While you can somewhat follow the plot and it has a certain level of predictability with some character interractions, other items are vague enough that you're able to be pleasantly kept in suspense.

Will this character trigger? Or will their point of conflict be when/if they find out another character is working for a villain? Or both?

The worldbuilding itself is also quite excellent. The establishment of the city, and the history works well, and because the main character is new to everything you learn along with the main character instead of dealing with a bunch of exposition and explaination in the first few chapters.

Not to mention the complexities of the virus, bacteria, triggering, and how society is built around them during the time in which the story occurs.

I had to repost this, as Google logged me in with the wrong account previously.

Paradoxcloud
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I'm not going to waste words here: it's great.

 

 

 

 

GodofDeath
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An amazing book which takes you on a journey of what it is like to be an escaped test subject. Sadly the only downside is the slow rate of chapter releases which gets annoying.

Nicholas Obviouslyfakelastnamebecauseprivacy
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Pretty good. Not the greatest, but quite fun to read. It has an actual plot and conflict so it's immediately better than 90% of the stuff on this website. No complaints from me, but it didn't really make me go "oh wow that's good". In my opinion a 4 star means "better than normal, everything put together really well, but nothing extra special or above and beyond like Threadbare's unique charm" and that describes the book really well.  It doesn't have a special charm, but it does it's bit, and it does it well. I definitely recommend a read!