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Fortress City has Super Villains, who have evil lairs, and in them they make super weapons. But when a bioweapon is granted super powers of its own will Fortress City be able to handle the Super Minion?

 

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Originally written for NaNoWriMo 2018 Royal Road challenge.

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Eriand
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Definitely A Favorite

I love this story. The writing is very well done and I am really enjoying the story so far. Keep up the great work.

kjoatmon
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Fun read with a different MC

Our protagonist is in no way human... but "he" had human.exe running and trying to make him more like one. This results in a regularly comedic life of a "villain" or minion in a super powered world of mutants. To top it off, it is "odd summer," a time when more people mutate or gain powers and oddness abounds. All of this is pushing the protagonist along in different ways where his basic desire is for an endless supply of sugar and amino acids.

But who else is in this world? Lots of normal people all the way from kids to geezers. Some corportate types of questionable morals which led to our protagonist's "birth." Villains, some of which would cringe at how readily the protagonist kills things. Mutants! The outcasts of society but their numbers grow and they can be pretty decent folk. The cops are a generally decent bunch but underpowered and overworked in this odd land. And finally, the heroes... which range from bloodthirsty mercenaries on the side of "justice" all the way up to superpowered bastions of goodness and might.

What could go wrong when the protagonist falls into a life of crime in a world like that? Read on and see!

Chaeron
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Overall very enjoyable read, would recommend

The first time for me writing a review, so lets go with simple way:

Style: I'm not really sure what should be put here, but anyway: Style seems to be good without any visible problems.

Story: Story has a interesting original concept and a good flow, though everything might go a bit too fast for my personal liking, but that is of course completely subjective.

Grammar: Didn't spot any grammar mistakes, but I'm not a native speaker so I might miss some less obvious problems.

Character: The characters seem to be well enough fleshed out, the only problem I had was with MC apparently becoming more or less fluent from nothing in the spoken and written language from just a few days of mingling in the crowds. Sure, it could be explained with that mysterious Human.exe influencing things and the MC being some bio-supercomputer, but that still is botheringly fast... Maybe making the 'drones' in the beginning sometimes speak out loud when the MC is able to hear them?

James Mandy
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This book is a masterpiece.I felt it has good bits in it. However I felt it couldn't compare with Watership Down as an adventure tale (that is another great book, surprisingly brilliant). My Grandmother ("on my father's side...") once said that I should read the book and put the old, incomplete cartoon into the video player. Intrigued, but didn't really get what was going on (the Black Riders in that cartoon are terrifying - scarier than the movie versions, and cost me some sleep!). later I sometimes considered looking at this book again, but was rather put off the idea due to it's imposing size and the apparent "unfathomability" of the tale in my own ignorance having not read it yet. Nor had my understanding of the cartoon improved. But, somehow in someway, the tale that had not been read just niggled at me from time to time. I met some good friends at 20 years old and they said, "you've not read it yet!? You've got to read it. It's so worth it - but READ IT ALL or you won't get the benefit!" Later that year I bought the one piece, bulky novel and got down to it... It has maps in it, always a good thing and gradually helped my immersion. Gradually, gradually. The first part, the first time, the super minion was kind of slow and for me, was an effort to read, I didn't know the characters, the lay of the land, the lore or anything. It had some tense and joyous moments. It was basically a deeper version of the world found in the Hobbit. But the English and sentence composition was exquisite in many parts. Didn't dig the singing though, for I knew not the tunes or hints! Then after the main character left the lab... Suddenly the book changes tracks! Whoa! It became a massive page turner, though the times I paused reading and was lost in my imagination about what was happening, where and to whom gradually increased in length and frequency. And THIS is what makes it great. You get lost in this world in your own imagination before returning to read the next paragraph... Suddenly the book ends. What an epic and what a fabulously cool ending! Such a good ending, When I read reviews of people complaining about the book, I can see from my own experience that almost all of them didn't get through super minion! LOL. For those who haven't read it yet, heed my old friend's advice, READ IT ALL. It becomes a page turner after the first part. Seriously. This book is awesome. The movies are great (I love them), but they are just like the images you see in the corners of the pages of old children's books. Wonderfully complimentary, but not actually it itself. Read it.