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Fortress City has Super Villains, who have evil lairs, and in them they make super weapons. But when a bioweapon is granted super powers of its own, will Fortress City be able to handle the Super Minion?

 

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Originally written for NaNoWriMo 2018 Royal Road challenge.

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Miles D
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GREAT STORY - ONCE YOU GET OUT INTO THE CITY

I find this both exciting and intriguing, it offers enough to make me think without really stretching my credulity too much. 
I found the first few chapters a bit slow, but still having enough action to hold my interest hard enough to really get into the meat of the story. 
I started reading this morning and at 21.30 I caught up - this speed is rare unless I am enjoying a story.

Miles

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On chapter 24 now and it's been pretty great. The start was a little confusing. I still don't quite understand some of the stuff that was happening, but it was fun. I like the odd perspective, but I'm worried it will soon totally die out. I'd like to see some misunderstandings work back in to keep the alien feel. Anyway I'll be waiting for more.

Koriel
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This story is so good, tofu is the best, everything is the best.  So Good.  Wish I found this story a year from now so I'd be able to binge it.  

Inbetweenaction
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Hello fellow definitely nonsuspicius humans.

After having had it as a five star for a long time, I guess it is time to get back to giving it a proper review before another reread.

 

The style. Very unique style, the politics of this superhero world is very decently though trough  with laws that almost make about as much sense as some that exist in the world today. Evil ish supercorp is building sentient bio weapons for god reasons for evil corps, and cover up its escape for other good reasons(hint: its cash. But the reason for it being so valuable makes sense) , economy makes sense, politics makes about as much sense as politics do. Infrastructure makes surprisingly amount of Even the giant monster ruling the city neighbouring the one in our story takes place in makes sense.

 

Story: escaped superweapon trying to blend into the crowd, and makes friends. After all  who doesn't like the guys from r/totallynotrobots. Although he keeps getting a  sader and sader past among his friends  "did you know sodas came in different flavours?  Mind. Blown." 

 

Grammar : excellent. We all blame weird structure on the mc. 

 

Characters : the characters are excellent. The mc learning to fitt in is a wonderful thing that he does with out anyone thinking aaaaaaanything is off with the weird murderous goffball.

 

The rest of the cast is also solid. Daughters of known villains and students trying to make enough to pay for college all take up henshing for their own in character reasons. 

Only flaw is that there is not enough of it yet. 

 

 

Eriand
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Definitely A Favorite

I love this story. The writing is very well done and I am really enjoying the story so far. Keep up the great work.

kjoatmon
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Fun read with a different MC

Our protagonist is in no way human... but "he" had human.exe running and trying to make him more like one. This results in a regularly comedic life of a "villain" or minion in a super powered world of mutants. To top it off, it is "odd summer," a time when more people mutate or gain powers and oddness abounds. All of this is pushing the protagonist along in different ways where his basic desire is for an endless supply of sugar and amino acids.

But who else is in this world? Lots of normal people all the way from kids to geezers. Some corportate types of questionable morals which led to our protagonist's "birth." Villains, some of which would cringe at how readily the protagonist kills things. Mutants! The outcasts of society but their numbers grow and they can be pretty decent folk. The cops are a generally decent bunch but underpowered and overworked in this odd land. And finally, the heroes... which range from bloodthirsty mercenaries on the side of "justice" all the way up to superpowered bastions of goodness and might.

What could go wrong when the protagonist falls into a life of crime in a world like that? Read on and see!

Isignis
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My favorite, your favorite too if you read it!

This novel is amazing, probably one of the best here in RR.

The story is quite unique even for a “super hero” kinda world, seeing the side of the villains is quite refreshing, even more so by the fact that “villains” are more than just some evil doers whose sole purpose is to be defeated by some hero, here we actually see them in a different way, the way the world interacts with them and that there’s even laws protecting them makes it look almost like a career path.

I love that the mc is a swiftly designed killing machine whose whole drive is to get more tofu burgers, I love his progression through the story and how he analyzes us silly humans and our weird fondness for rectangles.

I fully heartedly recommend this novel, after suffering great loss and grief in my life this novel shenanigans have brought a big smile back on my face.

(keep it going author!!!)

Arixin
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Can't remember how many times I laughed out loud for this one. Similar stories exist, but I love the slightly fresh take on it. A huge plus from me though, is this was well revised and edited. Very few issues, either in pacing or grammar.

 

I have enjoyed it very much up to chapter 30. Only complaint is the last chapter caught me by surprise and I was annoyed because it was in a good part... Though most parts of this are good...

BlackMountain
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Best written story I've read on this website

What a fantastic little story. I have enjoyed every moment of reading it. The main character is delightfully alien, but still human at the same time. The story is interesting, the plot original. Side characters are also usually very memorable. There is occasional humor interspersed into the story, and it's done in a very good way.

 

Overall I love this story and the psychotic little monster that is the main characterl. 5/5

Gitaxis
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Absolutely amazing, one of my favorite superhero type stories. Has a little bit in common with worm but is a more comedic take on the genre.