Original ONGOING Action Sci-fi Non-Human lead Secret Identity
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Fortress City has Super Villains, who have evil lairs, and in them they make super weapons. But when a bioweapon is granted super powers of its own will Fortress City be able to handle the Super Minion?

 

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Originally written for NaNoWriMo 2018 Royal Road challenge.

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Chaeron
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Overall very enjoyable read, would recommend

The first time for me writing a review, so lets go with simple way:

Style: I'm not really sure what should be put here, but anyway: Style seems to be good without any visible problems.

Story: Story has a interesting original concept and a good flow, though everything might go a bit too fast for my personal liking, but that is of course completely subjective.

Grammar: Didn't spot any grammar mistakes, but I'm not a native speaker so I might miss some less obvious problems.

Character: The characters seem to be well enough fleshed out, the only problem I had was with MC apparently becoming more or less fluent from nothing in the spoken and written language from just a few days of mingling in the crowds. Sure, it could be explained with that mysterious Human.exe influencing things and the MC being some bio-supercomputer, but that still is botheringly fast... Maybe making the 'drones' in the beginning sometimes speak out loud when the MC is able to hear them?

Dargon
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Looking forwards to more

Great story. Kind of tiring having the main character refer to humans as drones all the time, but still one of the best. Looking forwards to more.

disastermaster
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Excellent writing of a nonhuman trying to hide in a 'drone' society 

kaiden333
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One of the most interesting evolution stories I've read. The systematic approach to the analysis of humans was appreciated.

Naril
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Review must have a title

I love vaguely comedic dark superhero stuff like this.

Worldbuilding is always the best part. It's just so interesting.

Tofu is my favorite pychopathic non-human protagonist since Boxxy. 

The only downside to this work is the small chapter count. Hasn't updated since I found and read all current releases, but if it gets regular updates I would personally put it as my favorite ongoing story. 

Yeah-uuh
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Super powers in a world set in the future with a protag starting from actual scratch and on the run. It's a fun time reading.

SaintxMeow
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Better then the cover would usually entail

Very well written, one of the few superhero-esque stories i can read.

mrdaemonsadi
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I have been a long time reader on this site. This story has engaged me in a way I didn't think I could get from here anymore. I avidly await every release.

Cestarian
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Non-human lead done right

Although I'm pretty sure the author's definition of bioweapon is a bit different from the dictionary... The story was quite surprising, I was bored, the description didn't seem very appealing to me but I thought I'd give it a shot, and what do you know...

The story is well written, it's good, the characters are good, the pacing is perfect, I have literally no complaints about anything.

A lab created, bioengineered monster, not awfully dissimilar in concept to a slime, just with a fleshy body rather than being made of jelly, with outstanding shapeshifting capabilities, it's defining feature is it's shapeshifting ability, it's greatest weapon, it's greatest defense, the answer to most of it's problems.

One of these problems is surviving in a post-modern city in a world where superpowers more or less grow on trees (seems like a world not so dissimilar to Worm to be honest) where it will shapeshift into the image of a close approximation of a human to blend in, it's character development is constant, although under the hood it's just a lifeform prioritizing it's own survival, as time passes it learns more and more about humans, and the world it lives in, and it has an actual personality as opposed to just being a slave to instinct like in most stories with non-human protagonists tend to be like, it's instincts are a weapon honed alongside it's intelligence, rather than a crutch holding it back.

True to it's name however, it's mentality is that of a minion, it is reacting to the events that surround it, it rarely takes it's own initiative to do anything major, and this might end up becoming the story's achilles heel, since our protagonist is really more of a side character drifting along through everyone else's story. How long such an approach to narrative can be maintained without becoming bland is a bit questionable (currently I'd say it's working because it's fun to see how this monster is slowly finding his way around in this world, but isn't quite there yet, it's a fun development especially since the world is quite chaotic), at least so far it has been a blast, and it will most likely remain so for a long time as there seems to be an overarching plot holding all the pieces together, but what that plot is has yet to be fully revealed.

lazertheblazer
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You don’t see enough villains these days

i love villain stories and there aren’t a lot of them and this one is good